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Behir FF - Starting Over Again Ch 5 upd

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Posted: 04 February 2019 at 1:25pm | IP Logged
Hey all I am back again with a new story and a new concept!! 
This time i am inspired by two movies the Vow and 50 first dates.. But again it will have its own charm.. Hope you all will like it.. 

Index 
Chapter 1 - Page 1
Chapter 2 - Page 3
Chapter 3 - page 7
Chapter 4 - page 11
Chapter 5 - page 16
                                          Starting over again Heart

Chapter 1

Mahir paced around the hospital waiting room with a smile stretched across his face. He could barely contain the emotional cocktail from flooding down the surface of his skin. Mahir had anxiously waited for this day for the past five weeks. He had been impatient at first, but impatience is only good when it is the shortest way to an end; and as the days turned into weeks, patience was otherwise better.

The phone call had come while he was getting ready for work. Mahir got Meera and  Dhruv readyas quickly as one parent is capable of dressing and feeding two children under the age of fourand dropped them off at his parent's house before rushing to the hospital. The doctor had only informed him of a change in Bela's status; he needed more details before he could bring in the children. 


He was startled from his momentary daze as Dr. Rehan entered the waiting room.

"Good morning Mr. Sehgal."

"Is it true? Is she really awake?

"Yes, she is fully conscious."

"Is she okay? Can I see her?" Mahir tried to not sound desperate, but the adjective had been describing all his actions latelydesperately driving, desperately speaking, desperately living... He hadn't heard her sweet voice in over a month. He had kissed her lifeless lips, but it wasn't the same. He yearned for a response, and for that he felt needyperhaps even selfish.

"Well, we are still running a few tests to pinpoint the exact extent of her injury." Mahir only nodded, biting his lower lip. "As of now her physical and speech abilities are intact, but..." the doctor paused, unsure of how to deliver his next sentence, "her cognitive processes are still in question."

Mahir's heart tightened in his chest as the doctor continued to explain the technicality of his wife's condition. Words like hippocampusfrontal lobe, and cognitive apparatus echoed in the distance of his mind. He felt his body tremble and his knees begin give out from under him. Mahir found himself involuntarily leaning against the cold, white wall of the waiting room for support.

...

Five weeks earlier

It was just another Monday, like any other Monday in the Seghal household. Mahir and Bela lay in bed entangled in their sheets, waiting to hear the pitter-patter of small feet entering their bedroom. Mahir always joked about how useless alarms clocks were when you have a four and a two year old around the house. They savored those few minutesthe calm before the storm every morning.

It wasn't long before Mahir and Bela heard their four-year-old daughter coming down the hall. The little girl with tousled, light brown curls came rushing into their bedroom like a lightning bolt. "Mamma! Pappa!" She stopped abruptly, noticing her parents still "asleep." A mischievous grin adorned her face as she tipped-toed closer to the bed. She approached Mahir's bedside, poked him through the sheets, and quickly ducked down, concealing her giggles.

"Bela? Bela? Wake up! Did you just poke me?"Mahir asked incredulously.

"I think you were dreaming, Mahir!" Bela said, watching Meera crawl to her side of the bed. "Let's go back to sleep!" Mahir and Bela shifted around the bed exaggeratedly, pulling the covers tighter around them. Meera waited until they settled before standing up, poking Bela , and ducking down once more. This time Meera could barely keep her giggles from escaping between her fingers.

"Mahir, wake up! I felt someone poke me!"

"Really? I think we have a poking-monster situation here!"

"Oh no!" Bela could barely contain herself, "Not the poking-monster!"

"But you know who is stronger than the poking monster?" Mahir said, locating Meera's small figure curled next to Bela's nightstand. "The tickle-monster!"Mahir pulled her into bed and began tickling her nonstop. Her giggles filled the room, brushing off any sleep still left in them. It wasn't long before Dhruv also stumbled into the room dragging his blanket. His floppy, sleep-tousled hair and the lazy grin he wore on his face was adorable and unmistakably familiar. Bela got out of bed and scooped Dhruv up, bringing him to take part in the tickle-fest currently taking place.

"Okay," Bela said exhaling audibly, "Who wants to help me make some pancakes?"

Meera waved her hand frantically in the air shouting, "Me, me, me." Dhruv imitated his sister's hand movements, parroting 'me' as well.

"You wanna make pancakes, Dhruv?"

"Pans cakes!" Dhruv replied excitedly.

"Yeah, c'mon buddy," she said lifting him up, "Let's go make a mess," Bela said winking at Mahir.


Mahir got up stretching his long limbs as he made his way to the bathroom. The chilled bathroom air penetrated his skin calling forth all goose bumps. Saving money by shutting off the heat in early spring was definitely not worth it, he mentally noted. When he finished showering he returned to the bedroom and proceeded to dress for work. Mahir hurriedly pulled on his pants, smelling the fresh brewed coffee, before rushing downstairs. He was greeted by a blissful Meera, , with pancake batter smudged across her pink pajamas.

"Pappa I made pancakes!"

"That's great Meera," He lowered his hand for a high-five and Meera gladly slapped it. "They look yummy!"

"Uh-hum..." Meera hummed. Mahir lifted her up, kissing her rosy cheeks, before putting her in her chair next to Dhruv.


Mahir walked up to Bela and wrapped his arms around her waist, planting a kiss on her forehead. "Good morning."

"Good morning sweetie," she said, breathing in his fresh-showered scent. "Breakfast is now served!" Bela carried the plate of oddly shaped pancakes and the syrup to the table. The Seghal clan devoured the plate of pancakes before realizing they were on the verge of being lateyet again.

"Ok," Mahir said placing the dishes in the sink, "Go shower while I get these two dressed."

"Sounds good." Bela said walking towards the bathroom.

Mahir scooped up his children, one in each arm, eliciting a fit of giggles from both as he carried them up the stairs. Bela had already laid out their clothes; Mahir just had to get the kids dressed, which was rarely an easy task. But today it was accomplished without any mishaps, unlike the time Dhruv found it appropriate to keep removing his clothesthe terrible two's.

"Ready?" Bela called from their bedroom.

"Almost," Mahir said entering the bedroom. "Here," he said lifting Dhruv to Bela, "He is all set, I'll get Meera!" Mahir sped down the hallway finding Meera in her underwear distracted with her dolls. "Meera ... c'mon you have to get dressed. You can bring your dolls to grandma's okay?"

"Okay..." Meera said with a sigh. She lifted her arms in the air and Mahir slid the dress over her head. He then situated the sweater over her small arms quickly buttoning itmissing one, or maybe two, buttons.

"Put your shoes on and I will be right back to check on you."

"Uh-hum..." Meera hummed, grabbing a pair of white keds from the closet. Mahir returned to his bedroom, grabbing his suit jacket and his messenger bag before returning to get Meera. He stopped and leaned by the doorframe, listening to his daughter attempt to tie her shoelaces. "The squiwel runs 'round the tree... Jumps in the hole under the tree... And leeeaves." She said pulling both sides of the laces, but for her disappointment it came undone. "Ugh!" She exhaled frustrated. Bela had suggested they stick with the velcro shoes a bit longer, but Mahir insisted on teaching her how to tie shoelaces.

"Here," Mahir said bending down to tie her shoes. "Remember that before the squirrel jumps under, this hand," Mahir said pointing to her right hand, "Holds the tree, okay?"

"Okay... I almost did it daddy!"

"I know sweetie. Now let's go before mom and dad are late for work." Mahir scooped her up and carried her downstairs where Bela waited with Dhruv and two small book bags in hand. Like all Mondays, they took separate cars because Bela had her classes across town. Like all Mondays,  Bela dropped the kids off at Mahir's parent's house in the morning and he picked them up in the evening. But today was not a regular Mondayas Mahir would soon discover.


At five o'clock Mahir and Bela parted their ways, kissing good-bye and repeating 'I love yous' before leaving the Seghal company- parking lot. She turned left towards the highway and he turned right towards his parent's house. He picked up the kids, carrying a sleepy Dhruv on his shoulder while clutching Meera's hand towards to car. At home he made dinner grilled cheese, a Monday special. At seven he gave the kids a bath and dressed them for bed. They watched The Lion Kinga Monday classicbefore both drifted off to Hakuna Matata.

Mahir hesitated bringing them upstairs because he knew how much Bela loved tucking them in. So, he waited. He grabbed his phone, seeing the red light flashinga text message from Bela: Be home shortly to tuck my babies in. He smiled, but frowned at the time sentthirty minutes earlier. Traffic is inevitablehe thought. So, he waited. The cheesy song still played in the background, "It means no worries for the rest of your days..." There were no worries and with that thought in mind, he also drifted off to sleep.


Mahir was awakened an hour later by the buzzing of his cell phone still housed in his hand. The person on the other line mumbled something about a collision and the driver in critical condition. The name Bela  Sharma was repeated several times, as well as hospital and head trauma. At that moment everything became blurryuncertain. Mahir remembered vaguely scooping his children from the couch and placing them in their car seats before driving frantically through the streets of Mumbai.

The waiting though, was very vivid in his mind. Thoughts from the abyss of his soul plagued him. The 'what ifs' emptied all the strength he supposed he had. Mahir sat in the small hospital waiting room motionless, inconsolable. Meera was curled into a ball on the adjacent seat, while Dhruv , in his Nemo pajamas, nestled over his chest. Mahir began stroking Meera's curls, sensing the familiar texture under his fingertips, and that was when the tears rolled effortlessly down his cheeks.


It was nearing dawn when Dr. Rehan finally entered the waiting room. The nurses had kept them updated, but everything they said was never certain. Mahir's mother Sumitra had taken the kids home, and his brother, Yuvi, was now at his side. Bela's parents were the first to agglomerate by the door, waiting for promising words. Mahir, numbed by the situation, followed closely behind. The doctor explained that Bela had survivedsurvived a head on collision with a drunk driver, survived a blunt force trauma to the head, and survived a twelve hour surgery that basically placed her back together. She survived with three broken ribs, a punctured lung, a fractured leg, and countless scrapes, cuts, and bruises. The doctor also mentioned something about brain swelling, but Mahir was goneliterally unconsciousafter the word survived escaped the doctor's mouth.


Mahir woke up the next day in a room with white sheets and white walls, an IV on his left arm, and a heart monitor plug on his index finger. Recovery from metal exhaustion was simple, but recuperating from almost losing his everything was going to be a long, arduous process. Luckily how ironicMahir had two small beings that reminded him that he couldn't throw in the towel just yet. Mahir visited her every daymorning and night. He would run his hand through her hair and whisper softly into her ears. Meera tied her shoes today, well almost...Dhruv's still resisting potty-training...They miss you so much... I can't' do it alone... you have to wake up ... I love you so much... Please wake up...

Within the next few weeks Bela's condition had stabilized and her injuries were healing accordingly. Mahir had to re-invent a routine for himself and his children, as well as deal with questionswhere is mommy?or demandsI what mommy!everyday. Dhruv was too small to understand and mostly parroted his sister. But Meera was an entire different ballgame. Simple explanations like 'mommy is sick' didn't cut it. Mahir had to physically bring Meeraagainst his better judgmentto the hospital and have her see Bela engulfed by numerous tubes and wires in the ICU. It was shockinghe knew it. Meera slept with him that entire week.

Mahir knew all that was left to do was hope, pray, implore, and plead for the best.

...

Present

Mahir accompanied the doctor to the ICU. He warned him about Bela's current cognitive state, at which Mahir nodded in agreement, but his heart was pounding too fast for him to understand the reality of her condition. He carefully walked into the room and stood in the corner. Bela looked frail and confused with the uproar of all the hospital personals surrounding her. The bruises on her face had healed nicely and only faint scars were visible. However, her gaze was blankempty. He waited patiently as the doctors finished with the tests before he approached her with love deep in his eyes.

"I've missed you so much!" He said reaching for her hand, which she rapidly retracted.

"Do I know you?" she replied.




Edited by sarahgul - 15 March 2019 at 11:51am

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Posted: 04 February 2019 at 1:42pm | IP Logged
Sarah it's too good. Working on something right now. So I will give a proper review tomorrow. But at first glance? It made me smile, it made me laugh, it made me cry!!! 

More to come in a few hours. 

So I am BACK!! And so are you. With a BRAND new story. 

First things THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL BEGINNING. I LOVED IT. 

Okay now onto the review. 

Mahir's state of mind was aptly described in the first few paragraphs. His struggle to manage the kids, himself in the absence of his wife was touching. His excitement to finally meet his wife was almost palpable. 

The scene with the kids was so beautiful. Mahir and Bella pretending to be asleep and then catching hold of Meera was just so cute. And Dhruv!! How cute and adorable he is!! You gave us Meera and Dhruv!! I love you for that. Hug


OMG!! Bella is such a cool mom, Let's go make a mess!! Cry I wish someone said that to me. 


One point. Central heating is not common in Mumbai and neither is it required. The lowest temperatures here is 16 in worst cases. And that rarely happens. Spring is a non existent concept here. It goes from chilled to hot in matter of days, There is so such thing as transition. Like till a couple of days ago we were sleeping without fans and last night was hot enough to sleep without a blanket with fan on. So that is something that doesn't go with the city. 

The family bonding scenes, Mahir helping Bella with the kids, his bonding with Meera and Dhruv was just adorable. I could imagine the family, Mahir helping his daughter while Bella waited with their son. That scene set the right tone for the next events. You established really well the way they both were dependent on each other for the morning chores. How it was teamwork that made the family function properly. These cheerful scenes were actually quite painful to read because this routine got disrupted. I could imagine the pain he must have gone through when he woke up one morning and Bella was in hospital, unconscious and he had to take care of himself and  the kids. 


The pain that he went through afterwards, the agony was so perfectly described that I cried while reading it. Especially the part where he told her that he couldn't do it alone. Family is team work. No one should have to do it alone and here was Mahir all alone with two babies demanding what he could not give them. Him bringing Meera to the hospital was so painful. 


And then the last line

Do I know you?


Was so so so painful... 


I know everything will get sorted out. Even if she doesn't regain her memories, she will make new ones with them but I can't imagine what the kids will go through when their mother doesn't recognize them. I can't imagine what Bella will go through. 


This is a great beginning. Keep it up!! Thumbs Up


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This was so beautiful written!
Loved the entire family scene in between
Can't wait to read more!

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Hi buddy Hug

You are back with another story. It's time to celebrate that Party.

But also you wrote a new story and you didn't even tell me Angry. Imagine the balcony GIF here!

This is amazing! I knew you could come up with another story. You are a great writer Clap

This chapter had so many emotions. I don't even know what to say. You have left me speechless.

I don't know where to start. But I will mention some of the highlights.

Behir have children and they're named Meera and Dhruv Cry.

Behir are suffering already and it's only the first chapter Sleepy. Their beautiful daily routine has been interrupted Broken Heart.

Oh Mahir! He's in so much pain. The children are so young. How will they feel when they realize their mother doesn't remember them?

I felt every emotion that you wanted to show and all the details work perfectly with this.

This time you have set the story in Mumbai. I will miss your descriptions of Italy and your Italian!

Thank you for writing another story. Make this story longer than the last one. Oh and I have commented quickly on your story this time. Update SOON LOL

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Sarah this is amazing...i could see Mahir in the scene where he said he couldn't do it alone and Bella needed to come back
 
It's beautiful.

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Finally a new ff to readWink
Its too good to readClap...all types of emotions-happySmile ,sadCry...cant wit to read the next chapter

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Great story. Great start. Inspired by the vow and 50 first dates. Does it mean that Bella might never recover her memories? Please continue soon.

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Loved it. The Vow is my favorite movie! 

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