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Kaira FF- 14 updated (Page 2)

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Posted: 29 October 2018 at 10:57pm | IP Logged


This is so interesting!
You've added grey shades to Kartik's character, which just incites mixed feelings.. he is no perfect guy which i think is what has made him so intriguing in a twisted sort of way
The background you added to Guru Ma's part was great.. And I liked how what she said in the end.. "She will leave you.. And that's what will make you hate her"

Also... one more thing that I am liking is.. how you are portraying Naira as an enigma.. To be honest, when I first started watching YRKKH, I loved how they showed Naira as not this stereotypical girl.. you know.. She is witty and unpredictable and just like.. a breath of fresh.. And I feel like that this essence of Naira has been brought out well in your story

Please update soon! 

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Posted: 30 October 2018 at 12:01am | IP Logged
I'm reminded me of Edward Cullen of Twilight LOL
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Posted: 31 October 2018 at 2:16pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by .Meitantei.


This is so interesting!
You've added grey shades to Kartik's character, which just incites mixed feelings.. he is no perfect guy which i think is what has made him so intriguing in a twisted sort of way
The background you added to Guru Ma's part was great.. And I liked how what she said in the end.. "She will leave you.. And that's what will make you hate her"

Also... one more thing that I am liking is.. how you are portraying Naira as an enigma.. To be honest, when I first started watching YRKKH, I loved how they showed Naira as not this stereotypical girl.. you know.. She is witty and unpredictable and just like.. a breath of fresh.. And I feel like that this essence of Naira has been brought out well in your story

Please update soon! 


Thank u for reading it
LOL
I love reading how u feel about the chaptersSmile
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Posted: 31 October 2018 at 2:22pm | IP Logged

4

All, of the plans I seem to make fail, and I don't see you running into my arms any time soon. With your mind still on your issues with your mother. It has been two months and I have been a perfect angel to your family, but you are still barely polite with me. I need to end your beef with your mother for you to even acknowledge my existence properly and value my presence in your life. Your dance exam is soon, and you have been practising so much that you have become extremely careless. You leave your bedroom windows wide open for the world to see. I stand across the street from your house. Dressed in your favourite colour, since Naksh mention you love white I have bought over a dozen shirts in white. But wearing white is a bit attention grabbing so I tone it down with a black hoodie over it. We match each other, you are wearing white as well, you usually wear white to dance. My phone rings again its Dadi, I reject the call and watch you as you dance. Dadi phones again and I accept the call.

"Kittu where are you, no messages, nothing how can you just disappear like that? She cries out. Dadi was always protective of me growing up.

"Manish has said you stopped using your cards even! She continued, "What has happened are you ok?

"I am fine I reply, you pick up your white rabbit and hug it to your chest. You love that rabbit every night you keep it close to your chest and sleep night after night. It is past twelve at night and you should be resting your legs. Not over working like this, you are stubborn when you put your mind to something, you must have it. But I am more stubborn when I decide I want something, I ensure I get it.

"Where are you?

"Dadi I am busy, I have to go I say hoping that by hearing my voice this would stop her calls for a few weeks.

"Kittu please come home She begged, in whimpering voice. Dadi doesn't understand our relationship. She has no idea how much you need me, she chose her son, she should stick to her choice. You are my choice and I will stick with you. I hang up and put my phone away. You kiss your rabbit as you put him down and pull your hair tie loose. You unzip the back of your salwar kameez. Any one could see you like this! You stop midway leaving the zip opened at the back and a slit of your pale skin is visible. Whatever it is distracts you and you prance around your room, looking for something. You rub your neck and look out the window. You cannot see me. I know that, but you look straight at me. And my heart thunders in my chest. Your waist length black hair is all pushed onto one side of your shoulder, the silky curtain caressed your pale cheek. You shake your head and close the windows. Drawing the curtains.

My phone buzzes.

You texted Phungi.

Phungi I feel like someone is watching me-N

Phungi bless her soul replies to you a minute later.

You are probably just tired from dancing, and are imagining things- P

You are right, my legs are cramping. I would love a massage right about now -N

I would love to massage you, push that little slit you had wider and kneed your bare shoulders, and hear you sigh in happiness...

The road is not the best place to bask in x rated dreams of you. I need some sleep. My mind needs rest, but I cannot sleep. Without seeing you before I sleep.

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I don't want her to come to my dance show- N

She is your mother, Naira don't speak like that -P

Look I don't need her to win, I worked hard enough for all of this on my own. I will pass on my own-N

Goodluck Naira-P

Phungi never told you the things you needed to hear. She coddled you. Gayu was sending me texts about how nervous she was for her show. I left them unread on my phone. How I wished there was some way in real life t just ignore people so blatantly and get away with it.

The day goes on uneventful. I keep wondering at several points what will make you patch up with your mother? A near death experience? Possibly I guess I will try one of those in the future.

I allow Gayu to bore me to death until your mother arrives, and I am allowed to leave. I am impatient to see you.

Today is your big day. I ask around and they tell me you are taking photos for a photoshoot. You are nervous. You don't like the attention of it all, when the flash light goes off, you flinch startled. Your nervousness is confusing I have never seen you nervous.

I watch you, do the various poses, there is a long list of girls behind you and you outshine all of them. Red looks lovely on you, and I dream of being with you.

It is only when you are directly in front of me I blink and talk to you.

You try to chase me.

"How much longer will you try and avoid me for, you have to got to realize that I am not going anywhere, and you can't stop me from being here or entering anyone's life The words are out of my mouth before I can control them. You blink completely confused and ask me what I am talking about and then answer your own question. You threaten to kill me again, and I laugh. How much more do you want to kill me? I die everyday thousands of deaths holding a smile onto my face at your family just to impress you. My cheeks hurt. Naksh is a regular old cock blocker. He shows up and pulls me away from you. I am sweet and polite to him. I promised your mother I would hold off your performance until she got here. She gave me orders not to do anything illegal. I guess black mailing the dragon after what she did to you Naira as being fair. Justice is being handed out.

I see the old dragon and excuse myself. She is standing near the music station where all the CD's are.

"Hello I greet her, she looks at me. And then looks away disinterested.

"You again, now what else do you want?

"I want you to push Naira's performance, her mother is late... The dragon looks at me bored.

"What number is she? She asks, I relay the number.

She picks one of the cds and uses her claw like nails and scratches it.

"This will give you enough time I trust She says to me in business like tone.

"Kartik Goenka She says, I still at the name, how does she know who I am?

"Does your father know, that you are working under contract at the Singhania's company?

"Why you want his number to tell him? I ask her, she smiles at me.

"There is a lot I dug up about you, I wonder how Naira will feel knowing you watch her every day from outside her window, when she cannot even stand being in your company. Or how the press would have a field day knowing the heir to the Goenka billions spends his days stalking a girl... Unease flows into my veins. But then it quickly vanishes.

I dressed down always when I went to see you. I know that nobody has photos of me because, I ensure my posture is always inconspicuous. I never do anything half way.

I straighten my shoulders.

"Touche, I know you are sleeping with one of students and you know my secret now what? I say, she smiles.

"One slip up and she fails, I tolerate many things but someone telling me how I should judge my students in their favour. I will not tolerate it. Naira will be competing fairly, and if her CD doesn't play then I guess that means she is disqualified She says to me and walks out. I rub my chin and stare at the CD. My fists clench at my sides, and I walk outside, and they are about to start I trip on an extension cord and the lights go off.  

The announcer declares that all dances will begin later than expected, I am relieved that gives me enough time to get another CD, but Naksh runs straight into me and tells me something that scares the living daylights out of me.

"Naira is missing He says panicked together we begin looking, and I use my phone to covertly track yours and lead Naksh in that direction. We find you and you are with Chandu. I thought I after I sent him to jail he would never show up again. He hugs you and cries against you pitifully.

Naksh is on the opposite end of the corridor and I phone the police. I tell them where Chandu is and hang up. I watch as he begs you to hide him. And you allow him to cry all over you.

It is not long before the cops take him away. You let him go. He blames you, and I want to really kick the shit out of him but I hold back. Your CD dear god what am I going to do, they call you inside. And Naksh forces me with him to watch from the stage. It is too late. I can't do anything. For you. I couldn't reunite you with your mother, nor could I hold off your performance before your mother came, and I screwed up your chances of passing.

You don't dance, as the music goes on. No, you cry. Tears pour down your cheeks, and I hate seeing you like this. There is nothing more I want to do than strangle the shit out of dragon.

Your mother walks in late, and the technician says there is a problem with the CD, your mother asks, dragon if she can sing. And she begins to sing. Your dance is beautiful, it is soulful, it is everything I expected it to be and more.

When you do the final move, you crumple onto the floor and begin to cry. I don't understand what on earth is happening. Even the dragon stands up with everyone else and begins to clap. They love it. Your mother is crying, and she goes to you. You apologize to her and you cry, mumbling something about understanding her now. And I watch in confusion as the Dragon herself declares you the first.

Everyone leaves happy. Again, you have done everything you wanted without my help. Everything could have been ruined and there is only one person to blame for this.  

I wait until the dragon is alone.

"I don't understand... I start off.

"I take my profession seriously more so than everything else, Naira danced well I stare at her and she stares at me dead panned back.

"I wonder how long before the press finds out, and your Naira has a restraining order on you? Will daddy cover up that just like he covered up your past? I walk closer to her hiding what is in my hand behind me.

"What are you going to do? She asked me, turning around and zipping her bag. I made a mistake with her. I hit her over the head with an old microphone as hard as possible. Her blood slowly trickles over the carpet. She knows too much. Nobody can know too much. If they do, then they could take you away from me. Before we even became a we.

And I will not allow that.

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Posted: 01 November 2018 at 3:35am | IP Logged
Omg Kartik Shocked LOL Interesting take on kaira & I'm enjoying reading this,continue Pls Wink

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Posted: 01 November 2018 at 7:48am | IP Logged
The story is taking dark twists
Its so gripping! 
Please update soon, i am not kidding when i say that i really look forward to your updates.. 
Thank you so much for writing this 

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Posted: 01 November 2018 at 8:08am | IP Logged
Originally posted by pooja123ar

Omg Kartik Shocked LOL Interesting take on kaira & I'm enjoying reading this,continue Pls Wink

Thank you for reading itSmile

I will write more when i have time

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Posted: 01 November 2018 at 8:09am | IP Logged
Originally posted by .Meitantei.

The story is taking dark twists
Its so gripping! 
Please update soon, i am not kidding when i say that i really look forward to your updates.. 
Thank you so much for writing this 

I am enjoying writing this i sit and watch the old episodes and think hmm what can i do to make kartik evil hereLOL
its really fun writing this 
i am glad you are enjoying
thanks for reading it

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