ff ~~Rishto ki dor**newpart9th on pg5

hello every 1 here i write a ff some months before i know u all forget that me too not able toupdate  that but know try to update that hope u appericate it n give ur suggestion n ur valuable ideas to improve that  becoz i try to end dis becoz i  dunno want to leave it in middle 

Edited by --neeru-- - 7 years ago

STORY

 STORY start with

Natik found a letter in which his bussiness trip or for bussiness purpose but he hide it

akshara- kya hide kar rahe ho natik maine dekha abhi

natik(shocked)- arr array  akshara ku kuch nahi

akshara -aacha ha natik ji mujse aap jhoot nahi bol sakte to kyo bol rahe ho

akshara natik se vo letter lene ke liye bhagti h natik ki taraf natik catch her n hold her in his arms

akshara -natik  kya he yeh saab

natik -aap meri taraf aa rahe the tho itni beautiful wife ko chodne ka maan kaise kare

akshara- natik aap na batahiye aap kya ha is letter mein

natik (show) bussiness  letter h out of india ka ek saal ka bussiness tour package

 

 

kasara- par natik aap yeh chupa kyo rahe hai

natik - akshara mein nahi jana chata aapko aur family ko chod kar

akshara- but ek saal

natik (in middle) ek saal chahe aur i dunno want ot go there i like to stay in india wid my family

akshara- kot prob nahi  haii mein  dekh lugi

natik- lekin akshara mein nahi ja sakta

akshara -par!!

natik- aur duggu bhi badi class meinaa gaya hai uski studies

akshara- koi nahi vo abhi 6th mein hi ha mein manage karlugu

natik- but i dunno want to go plzz not force mi

akshara- natik

natik- samjo naa mein apni family se alag nahi rahe sakta

akshara- ok natik jasi aapki iccha mein force nahi kar nahi lekin baki sab

natik- mein aaj hi is letter  ko no mein summit kara duga

akshara -ok natik

naik cell phone ringing

natik(on phone) ok i come

natik aacha akshara abhi jana h phone aaya h guptaji ka mein yeh aa kar summit kara duga

choti maa (voice) akshara akshara

akshara- choti aa aati ho

natik - aacha akshara chalta hoo n kiss her on her cheeks

akshara- natik aap

natik- kya bole

ashara- kuch ni jayiyeee

akshara -choti maa apne bulaya

choti maa- ha vo akshara yeh kaam tum bazar se kar dogi

akshara -yeh bhi koi   bolne  ki bhat h  abhi karti hoo

 

after vsome time

  garbage collector(raddiwala)- bhabhi ji kuch raddi deni hai kya?

bhabhi maa n choti maa -ha deni h isliye kai bhar phone kiya

choti maa- late hai kya hisab se

raddiwala- bhabhi maa  sahi tol duga aap laahiye  har bhar dede h

choti maa- thik h mein lati hoo

choti maa- akshara ke bhi room ka le leti hoo

akshara2 (oh! mein bhi) cholo mein de deti ho jo kaam ka hoga dekh lege

bhabhi maa- devyani le aayi kya? akshara ke bhi room se

choti maa- ha bhabhi maa

bhabhi maa- ek bar aur paper dekh lena

choti maa- ji , yeh kaun sa letter hai

bhabhi maa- kya hai isme

choti maa- bussiness letter hai natik ko ek saal ke liyeout of india tour ka offer hai

Raddiwala- bhabhi ji aur h kya

bhabhi maa- abhi tum jayo jitna hogaya utna de do baad mein bulayege

bhabhi maa- par akshara natik ne bataya nahi

chotimaa- aap jannti hai na vo kaisa ha

bahbhi maa- family ko akshara ko sabko chod kar nahi jana chata hoga  janti ho usse but yeh aacha fayada hai

chotimaa- bhat karge unse

bhabhi- mujhe dena ltter

natik come ack(in room)

akshara akshara vo letter kaha hai

 

chotimaa n bhabhi maa- hamare paas hsai

natik-aa aapke pass

both- tumne aur akshara ne humse yeh chupaya but  bhala ho radiwale ka

natik-raddi?

akshara come back

choti maa apne jo samaan magaya tha yehi h na

choti maa- haa

natik- choti maa aur bhabhi maa ko letter ka pata lag gaya h

akshara- kya natik

both- aa choti maa -aur tum ja rahe ho natik

natik- nahi  mein nhi aur mein  pucha tha akshara  aapka bhi ticket hoga kyunki is project aap bhi handle kar rahi hoo

bhabhi maa- chalo aacha hai khae ki prob nahi hogi

natik- aaplogo ko mazak  mein nahi

choti maa- bas tum dono aur duggu naira sab ja rahe hai

akshara- duggu par iuski studies nahi vo nahi bol to natik aap hi chale jayige mein nahi

natik- aapko bhi chalna hoga isliye hi to

bhabhi maa- tum sb ja rahe ho

akshara- dugu ke next month se exam he uski studies

chtoi maa- thik hai duggu baad mein chotiyo mein chala jayega tum to jaho aacha project hai

tum dono aur nair ko le jayo aur koi naa nahi mein raaj baana se bol dugi

akshara n natik -ok bhabhi maa ek saal ki bhat hai isliye maan gaye but abhi duggu ko kuch maat kehna

yeh rishtaa plays in backround

but duggu come from da school - kya nahi kehna chate mujse

akshara- duggu school se aa gaye

duggu- ha maama

duggu(in mind kuch nahi batte bade log)

duggu on phnoe wid yash n aanya di

duggu- aapko logo  ko pata hai bade log kuch chipa rahe hai mujse

both -yeh bade log aaise hi hote hai

yash- aare duggu ho sakta hai nahi hogi batane bali baat

aanaya- chod na duggu chal

 

 

after FIFTEEN days

natik -bhabhi maa aur choti maa letter aa gaya hai  aur pass port bhi kaal niklana hai din mein 12 baje capetown ke liye

akshara- kal  kal to duggu ka first exam kaise mein nahi jahoo baad mein duggu ke sath aa jayo

natik- yeh nahi ho sakta mein khud bhat is bhare mein

choti maa n bhabhi maa- aare tum dono tension maat lo mein saambhal lugi

 

part 3

natik- bhabhi maa aap abhi bhi soch ligiye

akshara- ha bhabhi maa aur choti maa plzz ki nahi thoda loss hi to hoga

chotimaa and bhabhi maa- par ab ticket aa gaye

nk n  ak -cancel kara dete hai hum nahi jana chaate

rajbhana  enter in the room

akshara natik ab yeh ho sakta maine pucha detail  li thi agar trip cancel kari to vo case kar sakte hai aur loss bhi bhahut hoga

natik n ak -chaolo thik ek saal ke baad hum sabke sath vaha phir trip par chalege

 natik and akshara in room

akshara- oh! sorry natik n smiles

natik -akshara ke behind bhata hai aur akshara aage aage n a music playd

and after that catch her n come clse each other n lost in their eyes

 

akshara- natik  yeh kya zaroori hai

natik- kyo akshara aap mere sath time spend karna nahi chahati yaha to kheti ho time nahi aab kaunsa bhabhana

akshara- natik aap phir and hit natik's leg

natik- aahuch kya hai akshara

akshara- kuch nahi dikh nahi raha raat

natik- aapse bahas karna bekar hai

akshara-natik yeh kya kar rahe ho sara mera set kiya hua kharab kar diya

natik- kyo sahi jamaya hai dress upar sari niche

akshara- hathiye aap and she nikal deti hai sabhi things ko

natik- aare yeh kya kiya aap bhi 

akskshara- nikati hai n throw napkin on natik face

natik- aare akshara sambhal kar

akshara (suddenly ) aare duggu ko dekhna kal jab jayege to milega hi nai

natik -ha cholo mil aaye

 

both goes to duggu's room

duggu sleeping

akshara - sorry duugu beta hamhe jana hoga tumhara exam hai nahi to le chalte

natik- ha duggu we both miss  so much kash tum bhi chal pate

akshara-miss u beta n weeping

natik- rohiye maat akshara aa jayega exams ke baat

natik and akshara both kiss him on his forehead n goes

 

 

next day duggu wake up

akshara -aaj mein tayaar kar deti hoo

duggu- mamma aap hamesha khete ho aona kaam khud  kiya karo aab aaj kyo

 

akshara- kabhi kabhi maama dil karta hai beta

duggu (in mind) aaisa kaha ja rahe hai muche nahi batata maine puchuga bhi nahi aur aane par baat bhi nahi karooga jane to huu

natik -duggu maine tumhare shoes polish kar diye hai

duggu- papa aapne

natik- ha dekho kitne ache se

akshara- ha 3-4 bhar polish karti in par

natik in tearly eyes akshara

akshara- ok beta n hug her

 

on the breakfast table

duggu -sabhi meri pasand kka hai choclate milk 

akshara- ha beta

mahharaji -duggu aapna tiffin le lo

bhabhi maa chotimaa ,rajbhana n all r so happy n alos sad too

 

duggu open his tiffin n saw of his favourite dish

bhabhi maa n choti maa -yeh sab akshara ne banaya hai

natik- aaj mein tumhare chod aata hoo

duggu- ok bye

akshara(in tears) byee beta

at 11'clock

bhabhi maa n choti maa -sab tayari aab nikhlana chahyie sahar mein bahut traffic hai aj

akshara- maan nahi kara raha

natik- abhi bhi kuch ho sakta ho

rajbhana- aare ek saal ki bhat hai ghar ke bahar bhi socha

maheswari too come there n rajshree

akshara- good luck of journery n ug her in tera

rajshree- sabhal kara jana mein yeh tiffin pack kar diya hai isme aachar hai aur isme kuch swwets n inme dry fruit aur isme

vishwambhar- baas bass beta tum dona aache se jana n good luk

akshara- ha maa n hugs again her

 

akshara n natik touch all elders feet n hugs naman n karishman

a sad song plays yeh rishata kya khelata hai

 

both r go n all r tears eyes

 

their flight go to capetownnn

 

after sometime- duggu come from the school

mamaam maamaa

bhabhi maa n choti mmaa - duggu aa gaya

bhabhi maa- laala mein teri dress change kar deti hoo

choti maa- maine kaha lagati ho naksh

duggu- maama kaha hai

bhabhi maa- vo aati hogi abhi

duggu- no i want maama n goes in his roon

choti maa n bhabhi maa - kaise se smjaye ise

exam tak bhat hai phir bata dege n phir thode din bha yeh bhi chala chayegs

 

duggu- naira naira

in room naira nahi hai mummy papa use le gaye  muhe nahi exam tak wait nahi kar sakte

duggu suddenly saw a letter -

akshara

 duggu beta sorry abhi jana pata urgent tha nahi to wait kar sakte the  

sorry mamma ko

duggu become emotional

and he come down

bhabhi la chan kar do dress

choti maa- kaha laga diya hai la mein khila doo

 

nakash sad but ok

 

natik akshara at cape town finally hum  yaha aa gaye

akshara - ghar phone lagana hai

natik- aap na ghar ko nagi bhulegi

akshaara- u again natik

phone ring

all r come there n pick the phone

bhabhi maa- akshara

akshara- aapko kaise pta chala  in tears

chotimaa- bhabhi maa phone ko speaker par dalo

 bhabhimaa-hha pata kaise ni hoga tum hi hoge miss uboth

natik n akshara- hum bhi

 

all- kaise ho

nk n ak -aap sab bolege to kaisesunughi mein

sabtik hai abhi phuje hi hai

duggu come here

all r on phone

naman -duggu champ muuma papa ka phone aaya hai aa  jaho

duggu- mujhe nahi karni kaha to unse

chotimaa -naraz hai samaj jayega

naik n akshara- ha choti maa thode din ki bhat  aa jayega ya phir ek hi saal ki bhat hum aa jayege uski study kyo karab kare

natik- ha uska saal karab hoga ek hi saal hi bhat hai

 

 

 

 

 

next part

at the capetown

 

there mountain ans scenery shown

Natik- kitni  aachi air blow ho rahi hai

akshara- ha natik but duggu aur family ki yaad aa rahi hai

                    kash vo bhi hamare saath hota

natik- ha akshara but uski  exam na hote to  vo bhi aa jata

Akshara- ha, vo  to sahi hai ek saal ki uski padai distrub hoti hai phir ek saal bhat to jana hi hai vapas

natik- kyo kar rahe ho akshara

akshara- natik phone laga rahi ho ghar par

natik - abhi to sabhi se bhat kari thi

akshara- duggu se ho jaye ek bar

natik-ok

phone bell ringing in ss house

bhabhi doing some work

girja dekh na

choti maa -girja kahi bahar gai hai mein aati hoo

suddenly duggu come in pick da phone

akshara- hello

duggu- about to put (rakhna)the phone

akshara- kaun duggu

duggu- maama ka phone hai n want to goes

choti maa comes and said

duggu tumhari maama ka phone unse bhat kar lo nahi to mein bhat nahi karugi tumse

dugu- hello mama

akshara- duggu beta naraz ho mujse but beta kya karti sorry bhand mein ja sakte to aapko le jate beta

duggu- maama zaroogi tha k ya

akshara- ka beta naira choti thi isliye use le gayi nahi to use bhi chod jati

duggu- sachi

akshara-muchi

duggu- maa sorry  aap jaldi aa jao ab

akshara- ha beta exam katam hoge to tumhare le jayugi

duggu- ok maama  tears n become happy

akshara- acha aab nazaz to nahi ho na mama

duggu- nahi mumma lekin jaldi se mere exam katam ho gaye

duggu become happy n exited n goes to his room

bhabhimaa - kaha ja raha lala

duggu-study karne taki jaldi se eh exam over ho jaye aur mein mama papa naira ke pass chaoo

duggu- abhi to 2 week aur hai

 

choti maa- to bhabhi maa  bhat karne se hamesha dil halka hota hai aur galat phemii dur hoti hai

 

Natik - ho  gai bhat akshara khush hai duugu

akshara- haa tabhi cell riging

akshara- ha maa

natik- inke to mphone hi chalo rahe pata nahi jo banglow diya hai company ne usme kab chalega

kis side hai location dekhta hoo

akshara- maa kaise ho

rajshri -thik hi hoo itni der se phone laga rahi ho lag h ini raha

akshara- maa mein duggu se bhat karrahi thi narazki door ho gai uski mein bhahut kush hoo

rajshree- samjati hoo maa ka dil ke  ek saal tak kaise rahogui tere bina

akshara- maa hamara maan kyo banaya

rajshri -taki sabho sambhal se majbood banke

akshara- rakhti hoo maa natik bhula rahe hai

akshara- natik kya hua maa se bhat kar rahi thi

natik-yahi bhat karni hai phele company ne jo buglow diya hai dekh le

akshara- chaliye

at the buglow

natik- finally mil gaya kitne phone aur location dekhi

akshara- naye desh mein time to lagegna na hum buglow ka nam singhaniya sadan rakhe

natik- apki j oiccha vaise se bhi yeh ek saal tak hamare pass hai mein formalities puri karke n key lekar aata hoo

manager-comes

after some formatities he gives the keys

akshara- wow buglow kitni aachi location sea aur mountain ke bhich mein  kitna aach hai scencery

natik (in romatic mood) aur hum dono yaha akle aur koi nahi

akshara- natik- romatic bhand mein hogiye luggage jamane mein madad kiyjye

 

next part - natik  jalyofy  akshara to create a acting to flirt with a girl

 

 i konw it written in good but i want to write it

can i write next part here 

Reserved

 its my old ff but stop in middle but now want to end my  ff becoz i not like it  leave in middle its all about what i think or my views on capetown and after leap track 

next part 5

after two weeks their is snow fall in da capetown 













Edited by --neeru-- - 7 years ago

HOPE U ALL like dis its not good n i am not a good writer n plzz feel dis ya not good but feel emotions hope u like aur i write more or not plzz tell

nice story naksh emotions are described very well
pls wrote next part