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Short Story: The Unheard Cries For Help.

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Posted: 13 May 2015 at 11:05am | IP Logged
The Unheard Cries For Help..
 

P R O L O G U E.

I own three blades. Been stealing pills. Have weathered two serious suicide attempts. I'm pretty much sure I'd be a drug addict. Or an alcoholic. Serve some jail-time. But I'm also sure I'd write bestsellers. All that, if my caprice to endure is much stronger than my urge to die.

It is said, in the online support group for Borderline Personality Disorder and for the depressed that I've recently joined, that we're more than self-mutilators. We're more than the cuts that adorn our bodies. The suicidal tendencies. The monsters we perceive ourselves to be.

We're a bright ray of hope. We're indomitable resilience. We're a beautiful albatross. We're magic. We're healers. We're the strength we possess.

Err, I ain't one of those bullshit. I do not know what I am, exactly. So I want someone to dig deeper in my soul. I'm pretty sure if someone would rummage passionately, he'd find everything in me --- chaos. orientation. damage. passion. insanity. rage.

Because, if I were to speak in crappy philosophical manner, I'm a paradox. A crescendo of misery. A phantom conspiracy. Absolute contradiction. Profusion of possibilities-- in me anything's possible. I'm infinity. I'm my write ups.

But I'm also the cuts that I've inflicted over my arms and thighs. The neurotic thoughts at 2:00 AM. The impulse to die. The invincible demons that I've tamed. The pills I've swallowed and the one's I'd swallow in the future. The misanthropy. The monster who pushes people away. The victim. The victimizer. The hypocrite. The self-mutilator. The black-hearted.

Unlike humans, I'm not in denial of the darkness and turbulence that resides within me. In fact, I celebrate my eccentricity. It defines my essence. Distinguishes me from the rest.

There's this optimistic and erudite girl who goes by the name Sharona, and happens to be my only friend. She said to me once and I quote, "To define is to limit. So when you define your affliction, your passions, your ambitions -- and yourself-- you're bounding yourself within a certain confined boundary. Undermining yourself. Do justice to the cornucopia of indefinable yet astoundingly wondrous things that constitute your essence... Be the fathomless infinity that you are. Don't introduce yourself with a couple of mundane and memorized sentences. -- Welcome those genuinely interested in your world. Open the passageway to the universe that you are. Let 'em explore you themselves. If you want to--but make sure you're scrupulous and strong to bare the consequences if any."

That day I replied her saying, "Yeah right, so that they snatch away my secrets and leave me with perpetual emptiness. So I become one of those monotonous people out there who aren't remotely enigmatic."

But nonetheless, here I am. Welcoming you to the universe that I am. To the land of the Dark Triad.














Author's Note: I'm not endorsing self-mutilation or suicide. Even if I am, no one would indulge in such things because of what I write. They'd if they're going through crap. Apart from that, I just hope you like this. 

Hit like for PMs.



Index.

Chapter One-  Affliction: Page 2.
Chapter Tw0- The Dysfunctional Family- Page 3.



Edited by .enigma - 22 May 2015 at 12:36pm

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Posted: 13 May 2015 at 12:13pm | IP Logged
Suicide is a senitive issue, and your writings are intense, deep!
 
P.S - I'll stalk this thread.Wink

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Posted: 13 May 2015 at 12:27pm | IP Logged
Enigma,

There are biological, genetic and cultural explanations of depression. But when one is depressed, not one of these approaches answer so much as a quarter of their questions. Let us use a broader term in lieu of depression. Let us assume that there exist people who are different. They cannot be caged. For, they are explosive. They cannot be hidden because the intensity with which their distinction shines is immense. When people are different, I have come to observe, words help them infinitely more than any human being ever could.

Your protagonist reminds me of all that and much more. The words she uses to describe herself are paradoxical, just like she is. Her problem exists but it's ambiguous. It's a two-pronged struggle, she has to survive both herself and those who surround her. Naturally, it relieves the reader that here and there, confidantes like Sharona introduce a perspective in her life that she is incapable of reaching because of who she is. A catastrophe. 

I notice in this writeup that the protagonist, like most people, seeks validation but is not willing to alter herself to achieve that. Conflict-ridden as she is, as her life is, she needs but one or two people who have the grey matter to understand her. After words, it's that that helps different people the most, people who get and accept them.

The prologue and title of this short story are in synchrony. The choice of words and the formation of every line are strong. This makes a bold and dark read. Don't be disheartened when people don't come around because most cannot begin to fathom any of this. This is incoherent stuff for more people than you'd like. But believe me when I say this, you and words are going to be very good friends. May you write this and much more.

Thanks for the PM,
K


Edited by thegameison - 13 May 2015 at 12:30pm

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Posted: 13 May 2015 at 9:40pm | IP Logged
brilliant startClap
amazingly penned downEmbarrassed
continue soonishSmile

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Posted: 13 May 2015 at 10:06pm | IP Logged
AMAZING! <3 I just love love love it <3 you've explained depression soo well man! Great job!

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 4:36am | IP Logged
Enigma,

It is absolutely outstanding for you having to write something that is so deep, true and well, something that needs to be known. Suicide is not a solution to anything. However, situations, people and the concluding depression that you are talking about here has a very profound impact.

Your words, the way you have built up your lines, explicitly talk as to how brilliant your skill is. 
The fatal thoughts, words, following actions are quite gripping and something that got me hooked on after the first few lines itself.

Err, I ain't one of those bullshit. I do not know what I am, exactly. So I want someone to dig deeper in my soul. I'm pretty sure if someone would rummage passionately, he'd find everything in me --- chaos. orientation. damage. passion. insanity. rage.

This is my very favourite line from the prologue. It has, somehow left an impact. I feel this is me. A very true description of me. A paradox.

I completely agree with K as not many people would understand the deeper meaning behind all this even if they may, let's say, read your story.

Waiting for more of this story.

reflections. 



 


Edited by reflections. - 14 May 2015 at 4:35am

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 12:59pm | IP Logged
Well Done on this one Enigma !

Most people would be able to relate to such a circumstance at one point or other in their life !
The world is filled with suicidal people, telling other suicidal people that suicide isn't the answer ! 

Such a sensitive topic, and yet you have managed to pen it down so beautifully ! 
Again, well done ! 

xx


Edited by ..Steph.. - 16 May 2015 at 12:09pm

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Such a wonderful writing... lots of info on depression I got to know.. tks.. pl update asap.

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