It was good considering that it's your first time. But you can't bring everything in one chapter sid and krissane break up and siyalis' cofession
If you have a lot going on within one chapter it makes less interesting to read and you only mentioned about the good part so I think you'd get more readers if you spice thing up a little bit.
Take this as a friendly advice.
I speak from 3 years of experience
Good luck
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