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Fate-Mate Thread 13 Chapter 37 (Page 26)

ipkknd_gbdfan Senior Member
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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:25pm | IP Logged
First of all, I am super happy that you are back!
Now, for my opinion of this chapter, please keep in mind that I love your writing, but I'm being honest here...

Ch 37 was good, but it didn't make me "feel" stuff...I mean, you described the emotions, but not in your usual manner...I don't have any specifics, but your previous chapters had me jumping with joy, or laughing, or rolling my eyes at Arshi's banters, etc. but this chapter didn't have that same effect on me. 

Before, when you mentioned stuff about Khushi's dad and all the time they spent together, I got sad and even cried a little bit...but now, when you described how everyone was leaving Khushi alone, it didn't have that effect on me - I was merely a reader.

I also felt that some of the emotions you described were repetitive and cliched...which is usually not the case in your writing...

I'm sorry for my incoherent thoughts, but I don't know what exactly I dislike...I just don't feel that this chapter was up to your standards. It was a good chapter, but something was missing - it didn't seem like YOU wrote it...

Also, I don't mean to hurt your feelings or degrade you as a writer...but if you do feel that, please forgive me.



Edited by ipkknd_gbdfan - 28 January 2014 at 8:35pm

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:29pm | IP Logged
such a wonderful update aftr a long time...loved d way uve described der emotions n thoughts beautifully...asr has fallen hard 4 her...wish khushi realizes it soon...

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:36pm | IP Logged
It was wonderful KM...thanks for d update

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:45pm | IP Logged
An amazing update... worth the wait... loved it 

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:46pm | IP Logged
omg omg really u updated FM am

awesome di... khushi went to his house to check on him...poor manny i was laughing at his condition poor him...
i love the talks they had...she was concerned about him and his health...
and to the top arnav welcomed his feelings for her yayDancing
thanks for pm...
love u love u love u for updating

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:49pm | IP Logged
After a very very long tym...getting updates frm u... Thanx for giving us tis wonderful update. Loved it absolutely. Finally, Arnav realised his feelings for Khushi..waiting for more and more updates frm nw onwards.

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 9:00pm | IP Logged
Awesome...mindblowing...superb...beautiful...great...lovely...emotional and a very long update...thanku dr for giving such a beautiful update...

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 9:09pm | IP Logged
Hey welcome back, I just want to say that thank u for continuing to write again, I can't tell u how much I love this ff, and I am soo happy to see that u r writing again, and the update was wonderful, hope to see more updates :)

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