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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:39am | IP Logged


Part L

 

Khushi: Did you eat anything?

ASR: What?

Khushi: Did you eat anything?

ASR: Why are we talking about this now?

Khushi: Because I want to know. When?

ASR: I said I will take the medicine. Give it to me, I will take it.

Khushi: When?

ASR: I don't know Gloomy. I don't know. Yesterday. Maybe. I don't remember.

Khushi: You haven't had food since yesterday?

ASR: I told you I don't remember. Probably.

Khushi: Let's go inside, eat something.

ASR: So?

Khushi: So?

ASR: You forgive me?

Khushi: Let's not talk about all that right now...

 

Before she could complete her sentence, her phone started ringing...

She looked at it and pressed end.

 

Khushi: Let's go, let's eat.

 

She put the phone aside, on that bench...

 

Her phone rang again. She looked at the phone again...

And paused. He could clearly see the contemplation on her face...

Then she pressed end again.

 

ASR: Who is it?

Khushi: Priya.

ASR: Why aren't you answering?

Khushi: I will talk to her later.

ASR: Why later?

Khushi: It's not a big deal...

ASR: What's going on?

Khushi: Nothing.

 

Tring Tring Tring

 

Pretty irritated by now, she threw the phone inside her bag...

 

Khushi: Oh there is the damn medicine, let me get it first...

While she shoveled in that avalanche of a bag, her speaker went on...

 

Before she could say anything...

They both heard the other end...

Loud and clear...

 

Khushi, are you okay? I haven't had a chance to call you since you left yesterday...why did you leave so early? Everyone was worried...you didn't even stay for the performance...are you alright? You are coming tonight, right? Should I send someone to pick you up? Khushi?

 

She shuffled again in that crammed bag to locate her phone, to stop the voice...

 

Khushi: I will call you back Priya. I can't talk right now. Bye.

 

He had heard whatever he needed to hear by now. He realized what was going on. She was so upset that she didn't even attend the function. Then why did she ask him to drop her off there? Why didn't she ask him to drop her home? Why was she rushing to leave?

 

Because of him.

 

Her soft voice broke his thoughts...

 

 

Khushi: I have to go to the wedding.

ASR: Whose wedding?

Khushi: Our wedding.

ASR: What?

Khushi: Yes, our wedding. We are getting married today. Remember?

ASR: What?

 

She noticed his seriously confused face and she replied in irritation.

 

Khushi: What's wrong with you? Priya's sister's wedding. Her wedding. You are invited too. Remember? You came to the Mehndi. Remember? She just called.

ASR: Oh...yes. Sorry...I just...thought...

Khushi: Thought what? That it was our wedding?

 

And she giggled.

 

The wind played with her hair like guitar strings...

Moving in harmony...

Complimenting her smile...

Or her giggle...

 

ASR: Fine. I forgot. Sorry.

Khushi: I figured...

ASR: When do you have to go?

Khushi: Later...

ASR: Listen, Gloomy, I will eat. And I will also take your medicine. You should go. You will be late.

Khushi: No. I won't be late.

ASR: Let's go, I will drop you.

Khushi: Like you did yesterday?

 

An unexplained painful silence filled the air around them.

While they just stared at each other...

 

Asking.

Replying.

Quietly.

Unspoken justifications.

 

Part M continues...

 



Edited by karmachameleon - 28 January 2014 at 9:09am

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Part M

 

His voice broke the silence...

 

ASR: What's wrong?

Khushi: Nothing is wrong.

 

 

ASR: I am sorry...for...

Khushi: Why are you saying sorry? You just did what I told you to.

ASR: I shouldn't have?

Khushi: I don't know. I don't know anything...you can do whatever you like. Drop me off. Don't talk to me. Don't see me again.

ASR: That's what you want?

Khushi: If that's what I want, you would do that?

ASR: Will that make you happy?

Khushi: Yes.

ASR: Yes.

 

A strange kind of unknown anxiety ran through her veins.

 

Sharp.

Painful.

Unwelcomed.

 

And she started walking...

Away from him...

 

Hiding her face.

Wiping her unreasonable tears.

 

Questioning her unexplainable reaction...

 

A very familiar feeling for her...

Of fear.

Fear of loss.

 

Like she had been feeling all day long...

An undesirable feeling of being alone.

 

Lonely.

In life.

Abandoned.

 

By her loved ones.

One by one.

 

Her mother.

Her father.

 

And now him.

 

Her thoughts came to halt by a touch.

His touch.

 

He stopped her. Observing her confusing behavior. He asked...

 

ASR: Gloomy...

Her back still facing him...

She didn't reply.

She didn't move.

He spoke again...

 

ASR: Gloomy. What's wrong?

 

And he noticed the motion of her other arm...

And realized she was wiping her wet eyes...

 

He spoke...

 

ASR: Gloomy...what's wrong?

 

She turned around to see his face...

With her hazy eyelids...

And a guilty mind...

With a heavy heart...

 

Khushi: Maybe it is my fault.

ASR: What's your fault?

Khushi: Everything...

ASR: What are you talking about?

Khushi: Nothing. You won't understand.

ASR: What?

Khushi: Nothing. I can't explain...and...you won't understand...

 

She stopped her tear before it threatened to spill, with a synthetic smile...

Trying to cover her fear, her grief, her sorrow, her insecurities...

With that plastered smile...

 

He noticed her ruffled self...

Lost.

Her eyes speaking...

Her lips sealed.

 

Part N continues...

 



Edited by karmachameleon - 28 January 2014 at 9:09am

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Part N

 

He had seen her sad before, several times...

Usually for her family...

Her mother...

Her father...

 

She had cried for them...

Many times before...

 

But this was something else.

Something different.

Something unusual.

 

She looked different. She seemed different.

Breaking inside, but trying to hold her externally.

 

But why? Why from him? She had always shared her grief with him...

Why not today? Why not now?

 

He waited for a while, then asked...

ASR: Are you...

 

He stopped.

Hesitated...

He wasn't sure if he should ask her that...

He continued talking...

But asking her something else...

 

ASR: Are you getting late for the wedding?

Khushi: Why? You want me to leave?

ASR: No, but I don't you to be late...

Khushi: Are you telling me to leave?

ASR: No, I just thought if you have to...

 

She looked away and said...

Khushi: Fine. I will leave.

 

 

ASR: I am not asking you to leave...

Khushi: I am getting late...

ASR: Are you still upset?

Khushi: No...

ASR: Still mad at me?

Khushi: No...

ASR: Because of yesterday?

Khushi: No...

 

.

 

Her no accompanied by a tear...

It was apparent what her no meant...

Clearly, yes.

 

Her eyes continued drenching...

And there it was. All out on her face.

 

Dripping eyes...

Wet face...

Shaky body...

 

But why?

 

He just looked at her trembling self.

Breaking in front of him.

Second after second.

 

She interrupted...

Almost in a whisper...

 

Khushi: And I thought you said you will never leave me...like everyone else...?

 

Was she questioning him?

Accusing him?

Or something else?

 

Yes, that's what he had told her once...

On that rainy night...

 

He did remember it...

Clearly.

 

Her words were full of agony...

 

Pain.

Hurt.

Tears.

 

She looked frail.

Disheveled.

Confused.

Chaotic.

 

 

The only sound in the air was her sniffling...

The only sight was her breaking...

Silently...

 

Because of him?

That didn't matter anymore...

 

 

He tried holding himself back...

He tried to keep distance...

 

But he refused to...

He moved closer...

 

Just inches away...

 

And pulled her to him...

In an embrace...

 

Tight.

Close.

 

She was so close to him...

 

She felt so fragile...

 

Like a porcelain doll.

Delicate.

 

He had a sudden feeling of protecting her...

From everyone.

 

Even from herself...

Her grief.

 

His embrace got tighter...

 

 

His fingers tangled in her hair...

His lips roamed near her ear...

 

And he whispered...

 

ASR: Shhh...

 

That's all he said and he held her there...

 

Close to him...

Within his arms...

 

Shielding her.

From all her pain.

All her tears.

All her sorrow...



Part O continues...



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Part O

 

She was so close to him...

He could hear her heart beat...

 

Drumming...

Rhythmic...

 

Just like her voice...

When she sang...

 

He remembered the time when she asked him not to tell anyone about her singing...

And he didn't.

He wouldn't.

 

He would never do anything to hurt her.

That's how it was.

Always.

 

And then he asked himself why...

The same question she had always asked him...

 

 

How was it possible that she could control his feelings so much...

 

If she was upset, he was upset.

If she was happy, he was happy.

 

He could never see her sad...

Never in tears...

 

Since yesterday, he wasn't feeling well, because she was upset.

And now, everything felt right, because she was there to see him.

 

How his feelings didn't matter anymore.

What mattered was - her.

 

Only her.

This one girl, who was now within his arms.

So close, so real, so right.

 

This girl.

 

Who controlled his thoughts so much.

Who controlled his feelings so much.

Who controlled his actions so much.

 

He wanted to keep her there, in his arms...

Not knowing why...

 

But that felt right.

Her so close to him.

 

He didn't know when all this happened...

Her taking over his personal territory...

 

But it had happened.

 

She was there.

Reigning his mind.

His heart?

 

And he wasn't alarmed anymore.

He wasn't terrified with this awareness anymore.

He wasn't worried about releasing his long protected guards.

 

For her.

For Gloomy.

For this girl.

 

 

The girl who made him smile...

The girl who made him feel...

The girl who made him want...

 

The girl who made him...Him.

 

The girl who changed him.

For the better.

 

This girl.

Gloomy.

 

 

He held her closer, closed his eyes and couldn't help but think...

 

Is she the girl?

Maybe. What? No.

 

She couldn't be.

It wasn't possible.

 

Why not?

It could be possible.

 

No.

 

He couldn't...

He wouldn't...

 

NO.

Yes.

 

Yes?

YES.

 

Who was he fooling?

 

He had avoided it too long.

Refrained himself from getting close to her.

 

This close.

 

He didn't want to do it anymore.

He couldn't do it anymore...

 

He didn't want to run anymore...

No.

 

From his feelings...

From whatever that feeling was...

 

He wanted to welcome these new emotions...

 

He would.

He could.

 

He should.

Yes, he should.

 

He will.

 

As he realized...

Or admitted...

 

Seizing that moment...

 

 

Finally.

 

 

While holding her...

He smiled...

 

 

 

Yes, she was the girl...

 

 

 

 

 

Muskuraaye toh...Muskuraane Ke... Karz Utaarne Honge
Muskuraauun Kabhii...Toh Lagta Hai

Jaise Honthon Pe Karz Rakhaa Hai...

 

 

 

To be continued...

 

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:44am | IP Logged
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Girgit,

After 320 agonizing days - finally an update from you!
 
Six Thousand Two Hundred and Ninety Five words!
Thank you for putting in so much time & energy for your readers. In spite of having two children and an extremely hectic schedule, don't know how you did it! Thank you!
 
This reminds me of the time when you, karmachameleon, mentioned my name on your thread for the very first time and, that too, right before the update! I was absolutely thrilled!!! In retrospect, counting the words on that update of IASW300R has definitely done me a lot of good! LOL
 
Coming back to the update. I already know I won't end up telling you anything new. You know how much I love your stories and your writing abilities. And everything I feel has already been said. Nevertheless, here I am with my humble opinion.
 
Chapter 37 was beautifully crafted - starting with loneliness and alienation and beautifully transitioning to love and hope.
 
As I read through the update, I just couldn't help but think (like always LOL) about how talented a writer you are! You have conveyed each moment, feeling and emotion so flawlessly. Karma, you were able to make your readers feel the emotions - the heartfelt angst, the fear and above all, the love :)
 
"Am I going to lose him too?
Is this all my fault?
Is he going to leave me too?
Just like everyone else?"
 
Feelings so real... I felt them too!
 
"Yes, she was the girl..."
 
I loved the way you portrayed Arnav's realization. It took 37 chapters for Tsunami to realize his love for Gloomy and each of the previous chapters built on the next to get the story to this stage. It was all so real! Nothing happens magically - Everything happens in the due course of time.  Your stories are fresh and genuine, and so are the characters.
 
What I loved the most about the chapter was the conversation between Gloomy & Tsunami. I could read it again and again and again and not get tired of it. Karmachameleon, you make an addict out of your readers! Reading the entire conversation was a roller-coaster ride - from one emotion to the other, my heart was beating super fast in anticipation of what would come next! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
 
A superb update with a brilliant ending! I am SO glad he has realized that she is the one!

Please give the world a chance to experience this brilliant ride! About time you got published! Like you know already, the wings already exist all you need to do is fly!

Love,

 
 
PS: Can't wait until the day you transition from reading forum comments to reading Amazon reviews!



Edited by ananya123 - 06 February 2014 at 10:27pm

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:45am | IP Logged
waiting..waiting...

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:45am | IP Logged
wow wow wow...
seriously brilliant job...
after last chapter i was thinking how much tym arshi will take to sort out this blunder...
but finally ..it ws grate...
amazing chapter...
both arnav nd khushi did their best nd finally a hug...i loved this...nd here in this tym arnav finally know his feeling for her...what he feels for her ...this is pure love...brilliant...
but still khushi is confused...
this story is very different... getting this update after one year wait...but still this is like worth waiting...
kc awesome update...
nd sorry for late comment...i forget to unres it...sorry


Edited by chetna19 - 25 February 2014 at 9:40am

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:52am | IP Logged
YAY !! :D
I feel overwhelmed after reading the update ...
Going for another read of the chapter !
Thank You so much for writing this story Smile 

Will edit in some time.


Edited by RainyDays - 28 January 2014 at 10:31am

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