Now my dear Avantika ji... last comment pe aapne likha tha ki essay records main humara koi muqaabla nahi kar sakte... haha... lagta hai iss baar uss record main main phirse lagi hui hoon!
Do Do chapters ek saath!
Haila!
Chalo Drama band aur main likhna shuru karti hoon... suno... I mean padho...
STATUTORY WARNING : The author of this comment has a tendency to go overboard in her comments and she for a certain fact forgets that this isn't her story update nor her usual essays that she has to write above 100 words... she also has a tendency to do loud thinking at times and has a beautiful tendency to deviate... after this warning agar aage ka comment padhna chaho toh padlo... par Ram hi bachaye aapko! *wink*
I was right about the bangles!! *egyptian dance* Haye... bangles has been a soft spot for this rough girl like me too who doesn't believe in romance nor like the conventional "girly" stuff... aka me! But then bangles... they have a different essence altogether... *sniff*
Arjun drageed her wrist towards himself... that was just an "aww" moment... what caught me was the fact that he found her warmth... her presence soothing for him... that was written so beautifully...
Their snowman... *sigh - happy waala* true... in life there are these few moments which can themselves contain a lifetime in it... I guess it's the snowman moment for them... err correction... mela too... bar woh baad main likhungi!
Hmm... Arjun's past... well me still waiting as to what could ever happen to him... and his family... something makes me feel he's been betrayed...
And I think I have told you that how much I love Ayesha and Arjun's equation... I also love the way you sketched out the slight smirk of Sameer! It was beautifully written... even in those few words you highlighted Ayesha and Sameer's relationship wonderfully... his low tone... forgive and move on... so... Avantika ji... now that Sameer knows... I mean we know that he knows... perhaps via Sameer we could get to know a bit more about Arjun's past...
And moreover... was Sam a spectator of the situation? Or a part of it? Even if he was... probably he was on Arjun's side... his equation with Sam reflects so... and yeah... one more thing... Sam is his best buddy indeed... yet I feel a chasm between the best friends... have I missed out on something... or there is something to be revealed?
Wow Ayesha a gardener!... That was a surprising element added to her character! However... one thing that I loved the most in her character is that you have retained her raw nature in spite of having added various elements to her...
And I loved the way you narrated the growth of their relationship... and yeah... let me tell you one thing... I don't know whether you did this on purpose or it was coincidence... the narration of them perhaps being in love...side by side with them tending the garden was beautifully placed... as every relation is like a flower plant... it has to be nourished and cherished and let time take it's own sweet course of time... and then the flower blooms... and exactly like that the moment comes when the relationship blooms too...
Well Sakshi should know... by now that anything ever planned is barely executed by the witches of time... anything unplanned - that is what is destined for you! Aha... the moment with Arjun... marvelous... the hug... the closeness of their bodies *me dreamy* Girl really... I don't know what jaribooti juice you IF writers drink! Kyunki for a girl like me... and being "dreamy" and liking romance... hehe... my friends would die with a stroke! 🤣
Yep... so questioning herself... questioning the options that life had forced in front of her... if life has given him to you Miss. Sakshi Anand... stop questioning... he is there to like stay on... for just like... erm... forever... :)
And yeah... Unnamed Relationship! Boy am I so happy that you actually wrote that! Either our frequencies match... or... yeah... our frequencies just match! *high five*
*grinning*
Now the mela!
Fantastic, fantabulous, dreamy, gorgeous, beautiful, heart0stopping, breathtaking... aah... just too good!
That's true re...mela in the cities have lost it's own originality... the flavor of it... sigh... and the fact is that... I haven't been one to... yet... this mela... the one that you have written is my first... perhaps I went... barely recall anything... umm... just vague memories of a little tiny girl with two bobbing fountains on her head on the ferris wheel - yep... I was a cutie with two tomato cheeks... though now it's all dried off *smile* and here stands a short yet lanky female thanking you for showing her the most beautiful fair ever... that's it... after that miles away from my hometown *sigh* and miles away from this folklore *sigh*
Well for Arjun... anyways now he is the reason of her smiles... the reasons for the warmth of her cheeks... the reason for her soft gasps... the reason for her conflicting mind... the reason for the unknown rhythm of her heart... and the reason for her jealousy... *wink*
Par agar yeh sb baat abhi samaj main aa jaye toh aadhi kahani yaha pe khatam hoti hai na! hihi...
It was beautiful... from the pottery to bangle to malpua... ymm my favorites... though I only prefer of only a few ppl's handmade malpua... :)
Wow... the realization was quick! It rand the last part really went as a blur before me! Phew... guess I'll have to read it quite a few more times!
ALl in all... fantastic updates dear!
~ Shree
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