Swaron OS- Repentance - Page 4

Edited by swaron_pk - 10 years ago

Damn i m too late
I m so sorry
Ab maaf b kardo apni angel ko 😳
Coming to ur first OS ever
Good job 👏
I loved it dear ❤️
Loved how they both were sad and regretting their harsh words
N then sharons attack and as always majnu came in time for rescue 😳
Yaaay sharon made a move and came to patch up
Haw sharon kissed swayam ☺️
And then those sweet words of sharon
N swaron hot romance ☺️
Loved it completely
Do write more kashi
Would love to read more of ur work
Love 🤗
TaSha (ur angel)

Originally posted by: --Ta_Sha--

Damn i m too late
I m so sorry
Ab maaf b kardo apni angel ko 😳
Coming to ur first OS ever
Good job 👏
I loved it dear ❤️
Loved how they both were sad and regretting their harsh words
N then sharons attack and as always majnu came in time for rescue 😳
Yaaay sharon made a move and came to patch up
Haw sharon kissed swayam ☺️
And then those sweet words of sharon
N swaron hot romance ☺️
Loved it completely
Do write more kashi
Would love to read more of ur work
Love 🤗
TaSha (ur angel)

Hehehe maaf kar diya angel tujhe..😃. Thank you sooo soo much for your lovely comment I'm really happy that you liked my first work you'll definitely get to read more of my work soon..😃. Love you sister..🤗

Heyya guys just want to thank each and everyone of you all who have liked and commented on my first write up encouraging me and giving me the prod to write more.. I'm really really happy with the response I got on my OS so thank you everybody for writing down such sweet and appraising words for my write up. Thank you again for welcoming me with open arms..🤗.
Love,
Kashmi😊.

kashy di this is AMAZING!!!

Originally posted by: u-me-aur-D3

kashy di this is AMAZING!!!

jab aapne kahan ki you wrote a story i didnt really know what to expect!

but i was awestruck when i read this... you phrased all your sentences so beautifully

everything was filled with such passion and love

sharon's POV ne toh mujhe rula diya.. and swayam's POV was heartbreaking at the end

but the best bit was definitely the patch up at the end

the kisses 😳 and their words... the whole scene was beautiful

i'm so proud of you di... now please please please tell me you're going to write more!!!

Thank you..🤗. I'm glad you liked my write up nugget.. Yesss I'll surely tell you if I'm writing something more..😃.

Oh dam dat last part made me so emotional n am on d verge of crying..
I don't know Wat words to use how do i describe how i feel after reading dis..
It was one brilliant os..
It touched my heart directly..
I can feel the pain n everything dey both r feeling..
D way u have portrayed both of them in dis was simply outstanding..
From d individual scene to d one were sharon breaks down..
I so was wishing ki swayam sees her like dat n wahi hua..
N den d way he took her n ran n hospital sequence superb yaar..
Most brilliant part Der convo at swayam.s place. .
Dil ko chu liya..
Magical..

Originally posted by: Shilpa_SwaRon

Oh dam dat last part made me so emotional n am on d verge of crying..
I don't know Wat words to use how do i describe how i feel after reading dis..
It was one brilliant os..
It touched my heart directly..
I can feel the pain n everything dey both r feeling..
D way u have portrayed both of them in dis was simply outstanding..
From d individual scene to d one were sharon breaks down..
I so was wishing ki swayam sees her like dat n wahi hua..
N den d way he took her n ran n hospital sequence superb yaar..
Most brilliant part Der convo at swayam.s place. .
Dil ko chu liya..
Magical..

I was pretty emotional too when I was writing down sharon's POV and the part where swayam takes sharon to the hospital all broken seeing sharon in such a state actually I was emotional all the way when I wrote this write up this one's very close to my heart..😊.
Your comment made my day shilpa thank you for giving such a beautiful analysis of my own work..😊 🤗.

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On a serious note its really hard to believe that it is ur first work..Kya kahu yar,Pehle chance me hi tumne toh readers ko hila ke rakh diya..😆Trully it was damm Aamazing work..The way u potrayed SwaRon as a characters,their emotions,their individual POV's,their love,their thoughts all of them was perfectly done..The flow of emotions,the intriguation of characters,their alternative POV's was really amazing to read..And that was beautifully n perfectly penned in the way of writing..Very well written..At the ending part,loved the lovely confession,their forgiveness and their promise to remain SwaRon forever..So,it was brilliant work..I just loved it and i really appreciate ur style,ur talent of writng..Well i am not watching D3 from since ages..So its little bit difficult for me to imagine SwaRon in this crucial state..But at the end..I just loved it..Padhne me maja aa gaya..Great work..

So now i am not gonna say boring line again ki do write more becoz i know u will surly do..😆So keep writing..

Thanx for PM and sorry for late..


Prateek

Edited by prateekdave7 - 10 years ago

WOWWW...y haven't i read this before??  I ts superbly awesome be it Sharon's pain her thought process...Swayam's concern...their longing for ech other,,just WOW...your simple words...wow you have ytouched my hear kashmi😊😊 pls keep writing😊😊 ek suggestion hai...make the font bold and cut it into shorter paragraphs...so that when you read it will be easy...its a comment i got when i wrote some story,...just passing to you😊😊 thanks for PM...pls PM me further😊😊😊