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-HEAVEN- IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 9:46am | IP Logged
i m putting alarm at 2 am here...cant wait till morning Ouch..

its 2am here;)

Oh no!!!...pranab is falling for khushi...thats really badOuch now plzzz dont let arnav think that pranb is better for khushi than him...i ll cry :'(

Tagore + arhi = romance..BAS!!!
the update was sooo beautiful...ll read again in morning :)

Edited by -HEAVEN- - 13 September 2013 at 1:53pm

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vandana.sagar IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 9:57am | IP Logged

Jenny, this was brilliant...

I don't know where to start and what to say in fear of not doing justice to this chapter, it was perfectly perfect...

Loved how he realises that this child bride of his is such an enigma. Loved his realisation of his feelings for her and beautifully your wrote them ...right from childhood lies in the state of your mind and not in numbers to 'Yes, He liked this child, he liked this child a lot and he was looking forward to loving the woman, whose glimpses he caught in her from time to time. 
He was willing to wait for the woman in her to slowly awaken. It was just a matter of time.' 

Jenny this had got to be your best writing so have got the nuances, the characters, the feelings and emotions, balancing it with the right degree of reality, the setting everything spot on...
I loved how he is sensitive to her and her feelings, realising his his every word and action has such an impact on her and her happiness had somewhere down the line become important to him too! 

I loved how he has noticed so much about her, her way of dissecting every topic till she was satisfied with the responses...I loved the scene in the library, it was so visual and so beautifully written ...Khushi with her innocence, blunt and frank at that age where she says what she feels and what comes to her mind, not weighing her words, making everything she says honest and heartfelt even though she may not understand the implication of what she says, but there are enough for him to realise the kind of person she will be growing up, her ability to to arouse these feeling in him and his eagerness to wait for her says so much about them as people...I for one cannot wait to see what is in store for them...

I loved the Pranab angle ...I thought it might happen, given their proximity, if Aranb can start developing feelings for her despite his initial reluctance then Pranab who has the advantage of age and her constant company could not help harbouring feelings for her too...
I am so looking forward to what is in store...I can sense it's going to be brilliant ! 

Edited by vandana.sagar - 15 September 2013 at 8:57pm

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sincereme IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 10:19am | IP Logged


I love the pace of the story...

Khushi is adorable and Arnab is slowly falling for khushi...  Love to see that he is looking forward to lead a life with his child bride and waiting for her to become a woman... There moments are beautiful...

Kahani mein twist... Pranab too is falling for khushi... But doesn't he know that she is his brother's wife?? 

Waiting to see what will happen next...

continue soon...


Edited by sincereme - 14 September 2013 at 2:29am

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Anupama. IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 10:49am | IP Logged

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I super loved that. The conversation they had in the bedroom and in the library brought a smile on my face. And the thought process, the realizations that became clear to Arnav were so sensible. M so happy that he figured it out . He took time and it came to him just as naturally. I do wish that he spends more time with her. I observed that it was the only thing that had let him think sanely, made him take considerate decisions and gave him hopes for a future. Those few lines in the library scene just won my heart.

Him playing out the song from the 'toy' for her for really sweet. I LOVED THAT SCENE.

Since, you are my friend, I'd take the chance to be honest with you about the Pranab part. Had it been any other writer, I wouldnt have mentioned it.
Its not anything much. just that my heart had dipped when I read it and I had sulked for a few minutes. :(
Later, it occured that it was but natural to occur considering it didnt surprise me. Pranab had been spending time playing, studying or just chilling around with her. An adolescent heart is obvious to get attracted.
We are emotionally attached to Arnav Khushi and I get happy to see them as forever together.
And as it pains me to think, so il put it this way that had it been any other beings, wouldnt it have been natural to think that the child bride got attracted to same aged brother in law?

But its Khushi we are talking about and Arnav. I have seen the attachment, emotional, that they have. The concern and fondness. So I think, m still at peace.

The new twist is gripping to say. It holds so many possibilities. And either way the story proceeds out of those possibilities, it 'l break one s' heart. Such an emotional its going to be ahead and Jen, I trust you completely with it.

Edited by Anupama. - 17 September 2013 at 3:42am

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hi50 IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 11:22am | IP Logged
Superb update...Smile
Ohh... No... Pranab is falling for Khushi...LOLLOL..
That reminds me of a JEALOUS Arnav of course...Wink

Edited by hi50 - 13 September 2013 at 12:39pm

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Aparamegha IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 11:28am | IP Logged
"Ki Jani Kishero Lagi Prano Kore Hai hai {My absent heart does not know why  It's absolutely borne away"

It seems like both Arnab and Pranab are falling for Khushi

Arnab is waiting eagrely for his child bride to become a woman in the real sense and young Pranab is already mesmerised by the woman that Khushi is growing up into...

Another fab update..although it felt a bit short...

Please update soon...

Edited by Aparamegha - 13 September 2013 at 12:57pm

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Kishmish IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 11:53am | IP Logged
Waiting ... Day Dreaming
Loved the Khushi-Arnab moments ... 
he treats her with such gentleness ... 
and Khushi so wants to please him ... 

Trust you to bring in the biggest twist ... by making Pranab fall in love with khushi  Shocked
now what ??? hope Arnab sees his brothers budding feelings and does something 
about it ... 

Thanks Jenny ... 

Edited by Kishmish - 14 September 2013 at 2:32am

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cute_sarun IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 13 September 2013 at 12:08pm | IP Logged
Please update. Soon. Dear

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