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The Bride With A Doll..Thread#2/ Completed Arshi SS (Page 113)

vandana.sagar IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:09am | IP Logged
Your don't surprise me anymore, your brilliance in writing I have come to expect and what does surprise me is that you live up to those high expectations consistently...there is never a chapter I don't like or anything that I would have wanted to change!

I love how your give us an insight about the circumstances of their weddings, at that age what more could it mean but the physical discomfort that one faced and vague memories and recollections of people, place and things...

Clearly no emotions or feelings, so I understand totally his not feeling a sense of loss at his wife's death, she is that only in name . So no emotional attachment of any kind is absolutely normal.
I do feel bad for the child who loses her life and I understand how the elders feel that she is lucky to have died a "suhaagan" but I am with Arnab, death is not lucky with or without the red and white bangles.A loss of life is always sad and unfortunate.

Arnab is sensitive compassionate and passionate and I love that about him, I am ecstatic that he is thinking about Khushi and her happiness and planning to take her with him, when he moves.I love that he has more than a physical attraction towards her, the emotional one playing as important a role, the fact that is willing to wait for her to grow up says a lot about the man you have portrayed.
I love how she cannot wait to complete her hanky for him and that it takes priority for her more so than flying a kite but also realise that Pranab is now eager to spend more time with her and her dismissing him so easily now and probably will do so more and more as now she is understanding the implications of a physical relationship and is getting more aware about it. 
I love how they both are thinking about the other even when they are away from each other. 
I loved her imagining how he admires her work, appreciation and acknowledgement and attention so crucial ...and that he gives it to her makes her happy and even misses him when he is not around.
And of course the MIL who dismisses it and calls her for another lesson in training her to be a good "ginni" a housewife/lady of the house , this is how it worked those days, this was the MIL's responsibility to train the young child bride the customs and rituals that learn.
Loved how she falls asleep waiting for Arnab to come, listening for his footsteps, those that she has come to identify and find solace in.
I loved his assumption that her being there is another ploy and therefore understand his anger but am glad that seeing her reaction- the fear and of course the hanky that he soften his stance and the rabba vey moment...coiling his hand around her waist was sensuous! 
Am totally loving it and before I go on and on , going to stop here and just say it was absolutely mindblowing! See one words could have been enough!

Edited by vandana.sagar - 18 September 2013 at 11:57pm

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Aparamegha IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:13am | IP Logged
" ami tomaro songe bedhechhi amaro pran shurer badhone" ( My heart is secured with yours my love in a musical garland"

New sensations, new emotions marking the beginning of a new dawn in their relationship..Just a little peck on the cheek has created such ripples of new feelings in Khushi's see the affect that he has on his innocent wife has evoked a different cravings in Arnav's can definitely hear the music of love making its way towards their life

I was worried that Arnav might abandon Khushi in order to live the life he wants..but the way he thought about finishing his studies and get a decent job so that he can find a comfortable house for Khushi put my mind at rest...

What a beautiful update..have already read it three times...

Edited by Aparamegha - 18 September 2013 at 3:09pm

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Anupama. IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:25am | IP Logged

i am really really stunned. You have written it with so much sensibility. The relationship , just not coz of the age difference but respective ages too, is difficult to write about. You have handled it with so much care and sensitivity!
That bedroom scene was really endearing as much as the knitted handkerchief. :)

Edited by Anupama. - 26 September 2013 at 8:01am
Anarocksick IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:25am | IP Logged
Jenny...I'm still in awe of the way you're writing this story. You have obviously read so much of that period, and know so much about the lifestyle, people there, that whatever you write, I want to believe. I know there are things in the story which are not exactly applicable or even accepted in the present day, but considering the time period the story is set in coupled with your beautiful writing, it makes total sense and a very pleasant read. 
This chapter was lovely. Loved how how you gave a little about Khushi's sister. I feel for her poor soul. She married so young. Died so young. Barely got to see her childhood. 
I feel a little bad for Pranab too. He's falling for Khushi and doesn't even know it. And it's heartbreaking to even think of his poor wife... who obviously is still quite young to understand anything. I just hope things go smoothly for them. 

Khushi lives for Arnav, I've realized. Her everything starts and ends at Arnav. She wants to do everything for him. And it's very important for her to get his approval. Loved how she made him a handkerchief with an 'A' written on it, and the way Arnavr received it was ever more cute. The kiss was so lovely and sweet! And I loved how you stopped it at the kiss. It's just not the time to take it to the next level now. She's so still so young.. so much time it took for her to realize her giddy feelings. Very, very sweet scene.

I'm pleasantly surprised to learn that Arnav is taking Khushi with him Smile

Edited by Anarocksick - 22 September 2013 at 4:35am
kushiarnav1 IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:28am | IP Logged
very very nice update...

you beautifully described those days...soo much innocence and purity  in ARHI moments ,each and every line u wrote about them...i do not have words left...her wait, his thank u kissWinkWinkWinkTongueTongueTongueTongueTongue...very very touchy...

so pranab is also married, he is getting attracted to kushi,at his age it common i guess...

u r update is one thing and  our fellow readers and (writters )will  give the detailed review..i will wait for them also ...

Aqua Sandhya, Meera, Vgedin, kondhili,vandana sagar,disha,( i like u r pictures yaar in each nd every story) EXPELLIARMUS,Eccentrica, Rasgulla_sp...
no wonder u guys all of them become amazing writters...iam not offending any one sorry if iam miss any body,  these are the people will take first spots right  detailed review thats how i know. them..SmileSmileSmileSmileSmileSmileSmile...

thank u for giving us nice update...


Edited by kushiarnav1 - 18 September 2013 at 11:04am

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Careless_Artist Goldie

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:33am | IP Logged
Wonderful Update!! First gift for Arnab from Khushi and their first kiss means cheek kiss.. It was a bliss to read you writings you know.. I never thought that Khushi is Arnab's second Child wife.. Khushi lost her everyone... Feeling sad for the poor soul... But now she has her Arnab babuu with her.. And after the kiss Khushi's explanation about her increasing heart beat was funny and cute.. Pranab was attracted by Khushi's charm.. Don't know what will the result of all this.. Waiting for next..

Edited by RockDiya21 - 18 September 2013 at 12:49pm

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dieforasr IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:40am | IP Logged
I read it in one breath...I loved the ARSHI moment..I guess u have done a lot of research on bengali novels,culture as well as movies.hat's off to you...ClapClapClapClap

Edited by dieforasr - 18 September 2013 at 10:36am

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-HEAVEN- IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 18 September 2013 at 9:48am | IP Logged
arre wah!!! updat jaldi aa jao!

Haila!!! forgot that i resed here!! n my short memory!!!Confused

commented on pg136Embarrassed
loved the update:)

Edited by -HEAVEN- - 18 September 2013 at 12:08pm

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