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Arshi SS: Outside the Lines, Chp 12, Pg 140, link T2 pg 149 (Page 92)

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Posted: 13 March 2014 at 2:07am | IP Logged
I read all the updates of this SS too in one go!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Arnav as a cricketer is really interesting as this is the first time someone portrayed him in this role!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
there is an enigma and mystery surrounding him!!!!!!!!!!!!
Would love to delve into his past!!!!!!!!
he and Khushi are a little more comfortable with each other now...
Both are equally aware of the other!!!!!!!!!
Is there attraction????????????
Will the interview result in something more!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 12:51am | IP Logged
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Hello,

I will try to post the next chapter tomorrow night, but I have a few questions in the meantime. I would really appreciate honest feedback if you guys have time!

1. What do you guys think of the length of the chapters? Are they too short or are they being dragged?

2. Would you guys like more or less descriptions of the cricket games? I know that many of you have expressed that you don't have an interest in cricket while others are true fans. I'm trying to balance out the cricket content, but please let me know what you guys prefer.

3. What do you think of the pace of the story too far?

4. Do you have any suggestions that will help me improve as a writer?

I would really appreciate your feedback! Please feel to respond on this thread, or PM/scrap me.

Also, I have a hard time responding to reader's comments for this story as I don't want to give away the story - is that a problem to readers??

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 12:53am | IP Logged
I have no complaints...loving it all...

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 12:54am | IP Logged
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Mee too Loving It Totally! No complaints :)

being a die hard cricket fanatic, the details do please me. But for the non watchers, i'm sure the end result or the perforamce of Arnav would be interesting, just the way you potray it.Thumbs Up
Rest all up to you.

Edited by aashi12 - 14 March 2014 at 12:55am

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 1:12am | IP Logged
I'm loving the story the balanced amount of cricket with the twist of ASR, the lengths of updates are good as well. Though I think the pace could be little fast. What I mean is they aren't getting any time to know each other better until the last update.

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 5:32am | IP Logged
superb.loved it.continue soon

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 6:00am | IP Logged
Hey..
I love the story ... I think it has the rite combination of cricket n story...but updates can be a bit longer...but I do understand if they can't be increased in length... 
No more complaints from my side...
Waiting for the update

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Posted: 14 March 2014 at 6:08am | IP Logged
Loving the story. No major complaints at all.
As you suggested may be once in a way you can include some description of the cricket match. And one more thing I wanted to know is that Arnav's interaction with other cricketers is something which you have never written. They must be having some good times while practicing or after matches etc, is there a reason why you have not mentioned this.

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