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Arshi SS: Outside the Lines, Chp 12, Pg 140, link T2 pg 149 (Page 83)

vandana.sagar IF-Stunnerz
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Posted: 16 February 2014 at 10:39pm | IP Logged
Yes my team won...
A very nice update with everything coming along perfectly far from the grounds it was nice to see a different side to them and their interaction . The entire conversation and incident with Khushi weighing heavily on his mind and conscious , clearly not a bad or mean person even he could not justify his outburst and that affected his game and once he was able to relax and get if off his chest,the guilt making way for his ability to concentrate on the game ...I liked that you did not make them win, but atleast they were playing good cricket and his game upto par. 

It was a nice insight into their lives and aspirations, their emotions and their similarities, both wanted to make something of themselves and both determined...they are both similar in a lot of ways .

I liked how he wants her to join them and the way he smartly challenges her knowing it might make her join them. 

I trust her to take the correct decision when the time comes one which will not slow her to compromise her morals ...

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Posted: 17 February 2014 at 1:02am | IP Logged

Superb update...equations are changing between them...interesting...Khushi is accepting things from her boss but doing it on her own way...glad that Arnav realized his mistake and apologized her...So Khushi started effecting him...oh...I love it...I loved the way you described everything...very well written...please update soon.

 

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Posted: 17 February 2014 at 11:34am | IP Logged
superb update, loved it

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Posted: 18 February 2014 at 6:35am | IP Logged
Aami, sorry for such a late comment but as always tied up with AD!! This time I really want to praise your writing girl!! Such brilliant flow of the story, the natural progression and the awesome detailing... everything is spot on. I feel like I am watching the story instead of reading it...

The whole post match chaos, them moving to a different city, the coach's speech, Arnav's reflection of his performance, Aman's friendship and concern about ASR's performance was beautifully written... and on the other hand, Khushi's attachment to the city, her accepting her bosses offer and wondering about how she is going to execute her plan... everything exceptionally described.

And then their meeting at the park, Khushi's hesitance in making the first move and Arnav's guilt was a perfect combination to break the ice. The kids played their part and I can imagine Khushi's surprise to see Arnav in a completely different light. Their conversation, his apology was awesome... and I am glad that things look better for him on the professional front too!!

Waiting to see what happens when she faces him in the dressing room!! Embarrassed 


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Liya123 Senior Member
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Posted: 18 February 2014 at 8:34am | IP Logged
Wonderful update.
Aww orphan kids are soo adorable and cute. Loved there games. Glad that Arnav apologized to kushi for his misbehavior. 
Now kushi started to affects Arnav mood too. He didn't performed well on the first game because hedid felt guilty that he was rude with kushi, but the next one, he played awesome

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Posted: 18 February 2014 at 1:16pm | IP Logged
So sorry for my late comments, I apologise for the delay... Fabulous chapters and loved the way you write such intricate details with so much of finesse, loved it... Whether it was description of forts or Arnav's reactions or actions to Khushi, everything was written brilliantly... I am loving this story and cant wait to read more ClapClapClap    

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Posted: 19 February 2014 at 1:27am | IP Logged
awesome
sorry for late comment
so finaly arnav tell khushi that he is sorry
waiting for more arshi moments
thnx for pm

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Posted: 19 February 2014 at 3:27am | IP Logged
Great update! So Arnav did mange to apologise for his comments. It's good to see that he hasn't got problems apologising. I'm just dreading khushi delving more into him and then getting information about him for her boss. Arnav does seem very sincere.
Do contine soon

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