Ariya FF:"Deception,Intrigue..."#2 *Author's Note* Pg50 - Page 21

Author's NoteEdited by Amri174 - 10 years ago

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wow
awesome part
love it👍🏼


Edited by khemanisarita - 10 years ago

again you rocked dear.Edited by ll_megha_ll - 10 years ago

hey dear
thnx 4 updating today and the pm
it was really a sad and full of emotional part
shree has really broken out to tha deepest core of his heart
they way shree collepsed really was hard to imagine
its hard to see calm and a brilliant officer in this stage
the shock has deeply hurted him
the feelings of bretraying a friend by beautifully shown
cant see this situatuion of our gadget freak
loved the line"But overriding his happiness was the sense of betrayal that was stinging every part of his body."
both rathore and chotu r equally shocked as shree is
the lines shree spoke rooted yhem to their places
loved and heartouching lines"Ri...Riya...You know, Rath...Rathore Sir, Ch...Chottu...She is ...not...de... She is...ali..NOT DEAD!!! SHE IS ALIVE!!! She...she...pla...played us. SHE TRICKED US!!!"
the way he said this line made my heart ache
the way u showed rathore expression and mind feeling by making him turn with a pale face
omg rathore crying ...cant handel this dear
chotu is reallty rooted to the ground
this lines chotu said"How...how could she do this to us?" clearly shows how much betrayed he felt
three of them were bound with a tread called riya
now three of him r suffering from emotional ill health
thnx 4 such an emtional part
hatsoff dear
salute 2 u 4 this great part
hey plz dear dont discontinue plzzz
i love ur work plz dont to that
continue soon
thnx once again
will be waiting eagerly 4 nextg update
plz post it soon
Edited by sharmaayushi - 10 years ago

res...need to catch up on  chapters...will unres in a while

Looks like Dhamki Queen is back in action!!!!Edited by Leki - 10 years ago

Awesome chapter...👏

Comment on part-6A

Fascinating update dr.

Arjun n Riya's POVs were amazingly written.

Yayyy comletely dedicated to Ariya.

You very well described each n every emotion n thought which were going through their heart n mind when they saw eachother.

World seemed to be stopped for both of them at that very moment when they were in eachother arms.

His heart always knw that he loved her so much but his mind denied this fact everytime but at that time his heart overpower his mind.

Wow the way Arjun described her inner turmoil was too adorable.

OMG Till Arjun got the meaning of her last gestur, she ran away from their.

How much hard they both tried to control their heart but couldn't do it coz thy belonged to eachother.

Awww Riya was drooling over him!!!!!

Wow She forgot everything n its quite obvious ashe's world for her.

I hope after this encounter he accepted his feelings for her.

Loved it to the core.

Thanks for such a wonderful piece of work.

 

For vry vry vryyy... late comments.

Edited by Aks13 - 10 years ago

Mind blowing n a heart touching update dr.

Wow Riya's one lie turned their world upside down.

I never expected that Shree ever behave like that as he is a easy going person but If he was so much shattered by knowing this fact then we can only imagine the extent of pain n agony that other three r going through.

Its justified to some extent as if someone so close to your heart broke your trust thn you will feel an unimaginable pain that will break u compltly.

All this showed that the depth of relation they shared with her is way much stronger thn anyone can think.

Loved all their POVs dr, especially of Shree.

Hats off to u!!!!!!!

Thanks for pm dr.

Continue as soon as possible.

So so Sorry again for vry vry late comments.

Edited by Aks13 - 10 years ago