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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 6:19pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Nandalala

 This is for you, Mary:

"Only from the Heart, can you touch the Sky."  

~Rumi

I cannot tell you how humbled I feel at having this OS dedicated to me!  I have no words...I can only say that it is one of the best GIFTS I have ever received!  "Thank you" doesn't even begin to cover it!  You write from the heart, and it won't be long before you touch far more than you do here!Smile

Ah, you started with MY LOVE!!!LOL  My heart fluttered when I read the clickety clack of his Italian made shoes!!!  Absolutely adored Khushi's innocent greeting!  I can relate because even after all these years, I greet my own father in the same way!!!Smile  The Nawab puts his plan into action right away--who better than his Darya to carry it out!


I must say your very first scene of ArHi together has to be my most favorite thus far!  I could ttly imagine the two of them sitting together like that--what a beautiful tableau!  I really liked how open ArHi were with each other...she asks for permission to bring di to the meeting, he retaliates...She continues to make her case!  He can't help but get on the defensive re. Imad's past!  Yet, in the end, he has enough faith in his wife to let her carry out her matchmaking!  I just loved the dialogues in this scene!

So not surprised Khushi "tricked" Anjali into attending the Shareholder's meeting!LOL  I was just amazed at how you kept each of the characters in this scene so distinct.  Khushi surprised Imad as well...Well, she's just one girl with a whole bag of tricks, eh!  Ah, what she won't do for love!  The awkward conversation between Anjali and Imad was so poignant...their uneasiness suggests how much they do care for each other...He couldn't get past the thought that it was an obligation to her, she thought she offended him...We finally saw how exactly Anjali viewed him...heiwas "powerful" and "protective" in her view...and she, the "vulnerable woman...throwing herself at him."

I loved the part with Imad and Evelina.  In light of last week's "mirrored revelations" on the show, I couldn't help but chuckle how Evelina allowed him to reflect back on his past, on all his wrong-doings...to allow him to say he was sorry!  Yet, she reminded him that though she was hurt in the moment, she learned to move on...giving him insight that things do and can change for the better!
Well done in showcasing the angst...now Imad knows what it felt like to be in Evve's shoes!

Oh, my heart tore  while reading the last few paragraphs!  He did not want her to feel guilty for all that had happened.  He was so forlorn at seeing her feel sad!  Her concern for his friendship with the Nawab--which only highlighted how much he meant to her & the Awadh family--so on display!  His apology, her concern...suggesting his feelings were misguided!  And then, in the end, he couldn't contain it!  He told her unequivocally that "this is not some passing fancy."  He'd spoken what's in his heart!  

Wow, it was a bit of an emotional rollercoaster riding with these two, Mary!  But I thoroughly enjoyed it!Big smile  I have read part 2 as well, and will give detailed comments on it within a day or two! Thanks for being patient with me...Well done, my friend!  Just always a pleasure for me to wind down reading your treasured pieces!!


Thank you so much. Just wanted to say, don't feel obligated. Only write if a piece moves you Embarrassed

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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 7:26pm | IP Logged
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS! This story is so different from typical love stories nowadays, with a young girl and guy rather than a single mother and a rich bachelor! And that's exactly why I love this so much!Big smile
I must say, you are really talented to write so beautifully and come up with such beautiful stories.Clap
Please keep up the amazing work, and keep me updatedThumbs Up

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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 8:24pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by AnnieKittWatt

Ola Mary,Big smile
It is an honour for me Embarrassed to accept this wonderful piece of Dedication by you. I was seriously overwhelmed with every emotion. This is the first time, that anyone, anyone here or in my whole life, has dedicated something to '
Me'.
Be it a story, a part of the story, a poem, a song, a paragraph even. Not that I ever expected it from anyone or even those, to whom I've dedicated many of my precious works. Because I believe in Giving and Selflessness and not Taking!
Expectations from my readers, yes, it is one kind of an expectation, because a writer, always wants to know his/her readers' opinion on his/her work, that he/she has given so much time, body and soul to.
I very much wanted to hug you for this gift. But realised that I couldn't, not literally of course. So to make up for it, I would like to hug you virtually. Please accept a BIG BEAR HUG from me! Hug
And I apologise for not commenting sooner. I know that you would be waiting for my comment, since you had dedicated this piece to me. I sincerely apologise for being late. Embarrassed

Back to the update,
The letter broke my heart into two
Broken Heart, when I read Imad's sincere apologies and how he had poured it all in simple yet beautiful vocabulary of his. He, himself, knows that he is an impulsive person and knows that what he did was not right. He is mature enough to recognise his mistake and correct it. But as it is universally said that 'Past is History, so you cannot change it.'

And Anjali keeping it back safely, made me smile.Smile Not because, in every Love story the girl and the boy keep their letters safely away, which marks us knowing that they'll meet soon and take their relationship to the next level or because that is the way every love story should be. But because it is what even
we
do, when it comes to any letter, from any person, who is good in your eyes and know him/her to be so. At least I do it. Embarrassed To be honest, I definitely do that. I somehow like to read all of them again and again, and reminisce those moments Day Dreaming, when I was reading them and remember the particular thoughts I was having while reading them. LOL

Aww...Imad's excitement was so cute and so like it would be in reality. I couldn't help but grin for a whole 10 minutes, after reading that the letter was from HRH Darya of Awadh aka Khushi K. G. S. Raizada.

Ae le!!! Gosh!! The gift was definitely Awesome!!Clap But to be honest, even I was scared to see that pic of that cat!!Shocked Pinch Hilarious, Mary!! ROFL Gosh! 'Fascist looking Cat'!!!
ROFL ROFL :P ROFL!!! And also the 'Laad Governor-y top hat birthmark'!!! ROFLROFL You couldn't have made it funnier!!! ROFLROFLROFL

When I read Abhinav's name, somehow I felt very curious of him. Geek I felt somewhat weird at that time, and after reading that Abhinav was somehow related to the Raizada's since infancy, I started trying to place him in the story the show itself had showed us. Ermm
And BANG!... He was the Bridegroom, who left Anjali at the altar!!! Shocked I covered my mouth just like Khushi does on the show, when I read Anjali and Arnav were standing rooted to the ground on seeing the most unexpected familiar face after all these years.

And Arnav's anger was justified of course, knowing his protective nature, or rather his over-protective Wacko nature for his family and closest friends. And Abhinav's presence did trigger his anger to the limit, having made him angry on Imad too. But his anger on Imad was kinda awkward to me to read. But from a brother's point of view, it somehow makes sense that since his sister had rejected that man, the brother may think that that man may be trying to get back at her. But his judgement was way too fast, since he is not much familiar with Imad on personal terms, thanks to Imad's impulsive action of his confession to Anjali, leaving out their professional relationship.

The atmosphere, later, at the dinner table, was somewhat funny and sad. Abhinav's efforts to make Anjali smile was confusing actually! Confused Was he doing it to bring back the good days and revive the healthy friendship they had? OR was he trying to revive the relationship they supposedly would have if the wedding had taken place?? I don't think it will be the latter, since I somehow feel that he IS married now.
I smiled while reading that Imad was getting goosebumps while hearing snippets of their conversations and feeling the familiarity waves hit him with full force, which somehow he was presuming again. :P LOL

Hahahah...About Nawab's eye interactions, I very much liked it!!! WinkHeheheh...he knows how to control situations, given his age and experience!! :P Tongue Wink
And every other family member and neighbour's glaring and staring at the two - Anjali and Abhinav, was both Serious and Funny, respectively!! :P Uff...The seething glares of Raizadas always melt the enemies to nothing!! Not only Enemies, but Anyone!! :P

Urm...the two disappeared out into the balcony, leaving a hurt Imad to presume again!! :P Gosh!! Silly His impulsive nature does has its disadvantages really!! And you bring it out in the best way possible here!!Wink That's what makes your story all the more lovely and enjoyable. Big smile Every minute thing you include in your story, someway or the other, has a significance sooner or later!! Just like IPKKND does on screen. Star

You really are a Clap Gifted Writer and am very much honoured to accept this dedication from you. I feel like am a part of this special work of yours, which is really overwhelming and touching and exciting!!

Gladly waiting for the next part! Embarrassed Wink Big smile
Hmm...Now that I remember the Major conversation Geek, am yet in the Heating mode!! Stern Smile Hahahah...Wink Not going to ask for an update, since I want you to give your Best and then post it when you're satisfied with it!! Just read Part 3's preview. You're making it exciting all the more!!Dancing

And the quote I used earlier in my comment, it has a continuation. Half of it is from the movie 'Kung Fu Panda' and the rest is mine.

"Past is History, so you cannot change it.
Future is a Mystery, so don't worry about it.
But the Present is a Gift, so make the most of it and live it to the Fullest."

~ Master Oogway and Annie

Annie
Big smile


I just wanted to thank you for your previous comments. Don't feel the need to write a long reply because of it. But loved your comment too hehe. I am a writer who loves to hear from the readers at the end of the day.

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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 9:12pm | IP Logged
Part 3 cant wait for it

The preview just excited me more...

I hope anjali move on and accept imad 

cant wait

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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 10:25pm | IP Logged
Fantastic! In spite of the fact that the main protoganists are not Arhi, you got me hooked...have developed Imad's character well.
 
We are wondering when we'll get to see the twist on the show...and here you give us one...Abhinav...good one!
 
What I look forward to is more awareness between Imad and Anjali...just like Arhi. Some romantic An(jali)-(I)mad momentsSmile

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Posted: 18 April 2012 at 11:30pm | IP Logged
My take on Part 2:

Mary, I really enjoyed Part 2 a lot!  Stylistically, it was a bit different for you...I loved that the chapter started with Imad's letter to Anjali...He was so honest about his feelings...Such a gentleman!  I really, really liked how Anjali reflected on his words...and then compared them to Shyam's--whose very "flowery" words had such malicious intent behind them!  And her slow realization, that yes, Anisha needed a better role model!  You showcased this beautifully!  Another letter, another ray of hope for Imad...but alas it was only an invite for dinner!

The lil kitten & her sweet, sweet mistress...ABSOLUTELY ADORED this scene!  OMG...How cute is that kitten!  With the little birthmark...top hat, alright!  And Arnav's reaction was just darling!  I could ttly hear Khushi giggling at her gift & the gifted!!!LOL Awww...she got him at an animal shelter--a girl after my own heart!  

I imagined Abhinav to be a much older gentleman when I first read his introduction...He was quite a revelation for him...More on this in a bit...

Ah, the scene between Khushi-Anjalo-Anisha!  Your description of Khushi holding Anisha was just beautiful...And Anjali sharing Arnav's kitten story was so touching!  Khushi knows her love so well...and all that his heart is capable of showing!  Fabulous!  Oh, and that kitten following Arnav like his tail...HOW CUTE!!!

Loved your picture of the grand dining room at Awadh Palace...My parents recently dined at the dining room in at Falaknuma Palace in Hyderabad...Very similar to your picture in the story!  Again, we saw Anjali warm up to the idea of having Imad there...Cut to the dinner...Ah, Abhinav's entry...and his connection to all the families there...but most importantly, to the Raizadas...I was just amazed at how calm Anjali was...she was the only unfazed by him being there...To be honest, I think Abhinav should have come clean to Imad about his past with Anjali specifically...ah, but then again, we wouldn't have a twist in our story, would we!!??LOL  Anjali took the opportunity to talk to Abhinav probably to bury the past once & for all...I guess we'll have to wait for that reveal...
I really felt bad for Imad in this entire scene...he is was so broken up to begin with and then he seemed to dig a deeper hole--a sink hole in his opinion--by bringing Abhinav there! I absolutely loved his  "presumptions" dialogue...it was so poignant...and his affection and love for Anisha was just so, so endearing!  

Oh, I CAN'T WAIT for Part 3!!!!  O RE PIYA...RAIN DANCE PARTY, ARHI INTIMACY, ANISHA-ANJALI-IMAD!!!  I am SO THERE!!!!Big smile  Little concerned about my LOVE & the peace bit...Disapprove

P.S. Just saw your note about the stigma attached to single women with children.  What we see in India is that widowed and divorced mothers typically have good familial support.  The family tends to rally around daughters who are raising children on their own.  Divorce has become more common place, and in the bigger cities, we do see re-marriage openly discussed, particularly if the woman is still very young.  What you have shown here with Anjali is in keeping with what I have seen in my circle of friends in India.  Yes, there is a lot of questioning about oneself, but most of the women who I know are working, confident, and sometimes really don't care if they have a man in their life or not...Parental advice on the need for a mate, particularly as time progresses, is what compels them to maybe consider re-marriage.  Of course, Anjali's disability is a factor in her opinion of how "eligible" bachelors may look at her!  But, I think you've touched on this subject in a very, very sensitive manner...I can totally see it happening like you've penned it!



Edited by Nandalala - 18 April 2012 at 11:38pm

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Posted: 19 April 2012 at 1:44am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Nandalala


P.S. Just saw your note about the stigma attached to single women with children.  What we see in India is that widowed and divorced mothers typically have good familial support.  The family tends to rally around daughters who are raising children on their own.  Divorce has become more common place, and in the bigger cities, we do see re-marriage openly discussed, particularly if the woman is still very young.  What you have shown here with Anjali is in keeping with what I have seen in my circle of friends in India.  Yes, there is a lot of questioning about oneself, but most of the women who I know are working, confident, and sometimes really don't care if they have a man in their life or not...Parental advice on the need for a mate, particularly as time progresses, is what compels them to maybe consider re-marriage.  Of course, Anjali's disability is a factor in her opinion of how "eligible" bachelors may look at her!  But, I think you've touched on this subject in a very, very sensitive manner...I can totally see it happening like you've penned it!



Hello Nandalala,
Kudos to you for bringing out this subject in your reply.Clap
Even I read the footnote and was compelled to think it that way too, though Mary has clearly touched it and handled it sensitively like a responsible person, dealing with sensitive subjects and bringing light to it, through her work.
Yes, in India too in present times, are very much confident and don't think much about what others think or will say about them being a divorcee. They are very much bound by their own lives and responsibility that it it doesn't matter to them at all. And like you said, they really do not care if they have a man in their life or not. Daughters have full family support, when they are raising children single-handedly, making it easier for them too, to fight off the gossips and stand tall in this male dominant world. But now, regarding this world as a 'Male dominant world' will be wrong too I guess, because every where we can see women overpowering the men and rising to Fame in many, many fields across the globe.
Even for men, single fathers too handle this subject sensitively and raise their children very well. And the subject of remarriage is also handled in the same way, but also dealt openly now in India, mostly in urban areas, because in rural areas, I guess, there still is a tag of 'taboo' to it.
You may have also come across a show in one of the leading channels, that is handling the topic of remarriage and dealing with the possibilities of making the second marriage work, where the couple are marrying just for the sake of their children. And the show will soon be digging up the possibilities of the two finding a 'Life partner' in each other, when they tread familiar path again but together.
I have already commented earlier about Anjali's thoughts about herself. How she thinks of herself and how she sees herself in her own eyes! She says to herself to be strong and courageous for her daughter and a better mother than she could ever be for her little one, and then, when it comes to Imad, she lowers herself in her own eyes, and doubts if she is fit for Love or not!
At one time, she chides herself to be the Strong Woman, leaving out physical appearance, and in the next minute, it all breaks down in front of Imad, making her helpless and vulnerable and doubting her own decisions.
Maybe here Mary is trying to bring in Imad, so Anjali stops wallowing in self-pity and stops doubting her strength and all. That handicap was the immediate reason for her broken wedding and Marriage too, she thinks so. Her physical appearance, she thinks, makes her vulnerable and she also brings it out in her own actions and words. Like the day Imad confessed his feelings to her in the rehearsal room, making Anjali pour out those vicious thoughts again, and stuffing words into Imad's mouth, when even for a milli-second he had never thought of it like that.
*sigh* Well, we just have to wait and watch for what comes next!

Annie
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Posted: 19 April 2012 at 2:16am | IP Logged
Originally posted by AnnieKittWatt

Originally posted by Nandalala


P.S. Just saw your note about the stigma attached to single women with children.  What we see in India is that widowed and divorced mothers typically have good familial support.  The family tends to rally around daughters who are raising children on their own.  Divorce has become more common place, and in the bigger cities, we do see re-marriage openly discussed, particularly if the woman is still very young.  What you have shown here with Anjali is in keeping with what I have seen in my circle of friends in India.  Yes, there is a lot of questioning about oneself, but most of the women who I know are working, confident, and sometimes really don't care if they have a man in their life or not...Parental advice on the need for a mate, particularly as time progresses, is what compels them to maybe consider re-marriage.  Of course, Anjali's disability is a factor in her opinion of how "eligible" bachelors may look at her!  But, I think you've touched on this subject in a very, very sensitive manner...I can totally see it happening like you've penned it!



At one time, she chides herself to be the Strong Woman, leaving out physical appearance, and in the next minute, it all breaks down in front of Imad, making her helpless and vulnerable and doubting her own decisions.
Maybe here Mary is trying to bring in Imad, so Anjali stops wallowing in self-pity and stops doubting her strength and all. That handicap was the immediate reason for her broken wedding and Marriage too, she thinks so. Her physical appearance, she thinks, makes her vulnerable and she also brings it out in her own actions and words. Like the day Imad confessed his feelings to her in the rehearsal room, making Anjali pour out those vicious thoughts again, and stuffing words into Imad's mouth, when even for a milli-second he had never thought of it like that.
*sigh* Well, we just have to wait and watch for what comes next!

Annie
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Hey Annie,
         Great thoughts. Being a feminist, I agree that a woman does not need anyone (be it a man or woman) in her life to be happy and independent and it is great that more people have the courage to be single parents these days rather than stay with for instance, cheating partner. Anjali's case however is a bit different. The way I see it, she comes from the traditional roots and Naniji's old-world ideas. She is caught between the two as she is now trying to be strong for her daughter. But her demeaning words about herself does not really come from tradition, it comes from self-image. A handicap, regardless of gender has psychological effects. She is shown in the show for being grateful that Shyam married her, so I had to keep that in her character and thoughts. Otherwise it would not be true to the character and I would be writing about a feminist character of my own imagination. On the other hand, she is trying to be strong for her daughter but these insecurities and being rejected by two men she loved is having and effect on her and her vulnerability comes out when one more man comes in professing love. She expresses doubts. Feminists too are women is image issues these days and they too have body issues even without handicaps, so for Anjali who is becoming more strong it is more normal. On the other hand, she's not independent. She does not have a job, she depends on her trust fund or her brother's income, if she was self-employed like Khushi, she would probably have a stronger voice. This has been my thought process. I hope it explains to you how I am looking at her issue. Please don't see it as defensive, I am just explaining.

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