Manveer FF: |Choomantar| PMlist & Ch.4 (Pg9) Jan 4 - Page 8

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IF-Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

awesome part...loved the manveer conversation...didnt want jay to find out...i hope uday does some damage control...update soon...pm me

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Troll Master Gogo!

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IF-Rockerz

Posted: 12 years ago

Ohhh! Raaz khul gaya... Drat! You made UV keep the escapade a hush hush matter. Hey! At least you kicked Akash out of the city 😆

I loved the Uday-Unnati part. Sibling love and teasing <3

Laughed at the bistar part. Soo true! :P

And the ladt UV-M conversation. Bang on retorts! Salute to Manyata 😆

Looking forward to the next update!

TC.

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Payal

@-iPayal-

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

Mais - I know huh, ab kya hoga?🤣 I just cant help but put in some Rajwada masala in there! Pleaj update ur FF, pleaj☺️ BTW, i just love your Swaron siggy!! :P

shrarti - Sorry about that hun, ill update as much as i can fomr now on New years made me really lazy😆

adventure_gurl - thankyou so much!

KriyaReyansh and Angel- Lolz whats a story without chudails, J had to know😉😆

thejazzgal - thankyou!! :)

tvlover92 - That was a crappy raaz though, darn my creativity, i couldnt think of anything else😆 i think Uday and M's bed are having a secret affair🤣

Edited by -iPayal- - 12 years ago

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-scarlett-

@-scarlett-

IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

Uh-oh! Eehhh! J is so evil...but i m gonna love what you have in store...I feel bad for UV...poor thing but Unnati is soo cute!
Awesome updte...i just want more of ur work haha but thnks for the pm

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_SuMmEr_LoVe_

@_SuMmEr_LoVe_

IF-Rockerz

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

omgosh :D

your such a fabulous writer , I've never come across an FF as good as your's. I am all in praises. The way you pin down Uday is just Haaayyye :) There is always a scene or a line in every updates that leaves me cracking/smiling or thinking of even after m done reading .

Do add me to you Pm list please :)

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salekh1

@salekh1

Senior Member

Posted: 12 years ago

It was SOWWW cute

loooveed uday's diagloges..

and awesomely written

please do continue soon

Please PM me also..

Thnk youuu😃

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minizz

@minizz

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

This chapter was really good.got to see a slightly different side of Uday.oh no J ko patha chal gaya

ab kya hoga?lovely update.enjoyed it a lot😃

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crazysandhir

@crazysandhir

Goldie

Posted: 12 years ago

Its SIMPLY SUPERB 👏 n thnanks for d pm 🤗

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moksha89

@moksha89

IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 12 years ago

how did i not come across your FF before? i just read the first part & it's so good! I like how you've set up the story & made Manyata's character a little more smart! 😆 Loved how Uday is hating the guards ..& for some reason this line cracked me up " "Jaan-e-man, kaha aa rahi ho?" said one of them getting out of the jeep." reminds me of Shammi Kapoor going "badan pe sitare, lapate hui.. oh jaan-e-tamana..kahan ja rahe ho?" 😆

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moksha89

@moksha89

IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 12 years ago

"Manyata turned around to see HIM. Oh no! not him again. Uday walked towards them with the jeep's headlights shining on him like a spotlight. His hands in his pocket, a smooth walk and a calm smile on his face.(A solid hero waali entry)"

so good! i love how you have Udayveer's hottness and intellligence in full form while Manyata is persistent as ever. Off to part 3 😉

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