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The Udayveer Chronicles| NEW UPDATE|PART 26 PAGE 137 (Page 53)

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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 7:04pm | IP Logged
Aw such an adorable part! Loved Manveer's date. It's so cute to see Manyata slowly falling in love with Uday, they share such a beautiful bond! Once again I love how you're portraying their characters and describing their feelings! Amazing job, I'm left wanting to read more Big smile

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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 7:29pm | IP Logged
Big smileTongueEmbarrassedHAYE HAYE HAYE
Reeeha your going to kill me one day!
Your update was fully like a awsomely fatastic moive, they way you wrote it was just so perfect, like alwaysss..
IT WAS AMAZING
enough said, it was beaitufl
Pleaseee continue soon
and Thank you soo much for the PMBig smile

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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 7:31pm | IP Logged
Hmmm what do I love about this update?  The fact that they both know that there is love between them.  It's just a feeling, but it's there!  And I loved how Udhay was able to show Manyata the other side of him.  The side she needed to see to fall for him.  AND not to mention he was the first name she thought of when she was scared.  This update was wonderful Reeha!  I can't help but wish it was longer, but you know I'll wait patiently until the next one! Big smile

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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 7:52pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by reeha...k

Originally posted by Anhdara13

I am in love with this part. with the way Manyata sees her walls crumbling around Uday, and with Uday's other side, his soft side. Such a lovely update.

Just a few comments - there are a couple of grammatical and spelling errors here and there that might detract or confuse people. I had to read some of the sentences a few times to understand it. Also, initial conversations - I think you forgot to change some Uday's to Manyata! Haha. So it was as though Uday was having a conversation with himself. 

But storywise this is FANTASTIC and I cannot wait for more.

LOL I do that EVERY Time actually, I just amened them fasterLOL They're fixed now, thankfullyErmm and I think I got most of the errors, but honestly I don't want to read it another time, so if you see a big one, let me know and I'll fix it. Thank you Anhdara, I always look forward to your feedbackSmile


aww. haha, me too! what i do is make someone read through for me - you should find a beta-reader. (I'll volunteer if it means getting to read the chapters in advance, I'm all for it! WinkLOL)

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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 7:58pm | IP Logged
loved it Reeha amazing update!
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Posted: 07 February 2012 at 10:23pm | IP Logged
it was [no prizes for what i'm going to say] LOL amazing! Big smile
okay..so i know that word might be annoying..but that's all I can ever say after reading your updates...LOL

The DHABA and the BIKE RIDE totally did it for me. I think I was floating when I read them, Day DreamingLOL

the wait was WORTH it!!! WinkLOLBig smile

p.s. royal chronicles is a totally unique idea..checking it out! Big smile

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Posted: 08 February 2012 at 12:17am | IP Logged
i loved it..it was simply beautiful..yeh upodate padhkarr poori tarah se mazaa aagaya..from the start of the update to the end i was like this is so sweeettt...Uday & Manyata's day out on the bike, the little things they did, the talks they shared, their eyes conveying the unsaid emotions, the aura of happiness surrounding the two of them...it was simply beautiful... wonderfully written...very sweettt...please do continue soon...waiting for the next update eagerly...Smile

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Posted: 08 February 2012 at 12:18am | IP Logged
nice part..
i really love seeing the prince as Uday simply and not UdayVeer...
it was awesome...
both of them at the dhaaba and then the movie part...
amazing...
and the first bit...lol...that was so funny...
she mistook that person for a thug and was asking help from UV when he was that person only...hehe...
continue soon...

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