Three hurt souls under one roof! Beautiful!
I'm so glad you posted this. You conveyed their conflicting emotions beautifully. I can see it will be a painful time for both of them when Khushi discovers Lavanya and Arnav are broken up because she will be a loyal friend. Very well written. 😊 Please do continue to write.
wonderfully potrayed the feelings of arnav,khushi n la...superb OS👍🏼
I enjoyed reading it.⭐️👏Hmmm, something from Arnav's perspective, very interesting.👏
Thanks.😉
Originally posted by: -TomNJerry-
emotionally beautiful ... the turning point in the lives of the 3 of them
very well written ... i wish if we get to see something like this ... pain laced with solace
Originally posted by: preethi12345
wel portyed emtins..
I loved how her friend became his friend too in the end!
Originally posted by: mollycoddle
simply beautiful;
Originally posted by: ..Jojo..
you.are.a.genius!
Need I say more? Every emotion, every move, every feeling expressed so beautifully, I have never read anything like this Zee! You NEED to write more on ArHi! No kidding, your writing has the power to make me feel the emotions! I seriously missed reading your work! Keep writing. I would definitely love to read more <33
Originally posted by: aashizin
when i saw ur pm abt OS i was so happy and eager to read 😳woww what a OS u penned down it awesomely 👏i love the way u started it and ended superb it direct touched to heart i always love to read ur awesome work keep writing more 🤗
Amazing emotions, portrayed beautifully. He is alone, whilst they are one..they can share their pain, but he can't. Well written, great! 👏
Originally posted by: KriYa_life
lovely OS dear...
Originally posted by: Richie-Rich
You were hesitant about posting this? You kidding, right?!
Brilliant OS.
It made me smile. It made me frown. Everything was depicted so beautifully.
...But this line alone was enough to make me fall in love with your OS...
(She faded away into the seeming darkness hoping to shield herself from his eyes, the side of his lips twitched to form a smirk, how silly of her didn't she know she carried with herself a light of her own.)
Continue writing please :)
Originally posted by: NaDzGirl
loved it but wish you wrote more darlz cuz it's pretty short. nevertheless i enjoyed this broken angels story & feel like singing arash's 'broken angel' for them
very very very well writtenreally really really nice os
YOU WROTE!!!!!
i was like when i saw your OS page.hehehe.. i'm so glad those creative juices are still flowing!anyways, on with my review.well, it was an angst OS, but not the types that leave with thinking, "OH HECK. THIS WORLD IS A SAD PLACE!" LOL. i dislike those types... makes me feel as if there was no Hope in Pandora's Box (that box being the literary work). yours did. and i'm glad it did. if reader's (who are also human) like anything, that is the feeling of feeling something good. because, all of us are in the pursuit of happiness (or any good feeling that ends up being related with happiness), and this OS left a little bit of happiness in me. i saw a glimmer of hope; a sparkle of a bright new day, bright new opportunity; a tiny spark that did leave me feel elated! SO YES. I LOVED THIS OS.i loved how you intertwined unhappiness of broken hearts with the happiness of some hope, because these angels, still remain as pure, even if bits of them are not intact. at least, they did not become fallen angels. that would be full-on angst man! LOL.and as for my dearest ASR, i love it when he feels hopeless, guilty and all broken, and then in some manner when he'd be expressing his guilt, upon reading between the lines, you see how much he wants to be healed. there is a nuance, and not everyone would be able to catch. but i guess, it's the way you write. your words speak.LOVE YA YOU SEXY MOMMA!love,Teddy Bear.EDIT -i hope the emoticons made your day!
this is so beautifully written. and the sadness behind the smiles are purely written to perfection. thanks for the pm
xxx
Originally posted by: barunroxx7
Hi ZJ !!
Very well written.You should write more 😳
Originally posted by: dbr_kmichi
wonderful os..😊
Originally posted by: moon_mine
well written!!!!
loved it!!!!
Originally posted by: bmtdluver
Nice os. Its really different from what is commonly written
Originally posted by: tina_1234
awesome os
Originally posted by: Priya_128
Hey Zee,
That was very well written, 3 different people...one incident, diffferent set of feelings stemming from a similar kind of hurt.very nicely captured. Do keep writing more of...as u put it...drabbles :D
Its beautiful!
its really nice
really good.liked it so much.brilliant piece of work
Originally posted by: littlemoi
that was superb and very well written!! i loved it!!
Originally posted by: arhi-fan
U wonderfully potrayed their feelings. Pls do countinue.
Originally posted by: anjaani07
Aww glad u posted this, really well written, u captured the moment brilliantly!
Originally posted by: angelic shaz
dat was beautifulll
Originally posted by: anita_21492
wow this was jut beautiful
thanks a ton for the pm
Originally posted by: rbarretto
I ENJOYED IT...
Originally posted by: meenaluma
awesome os
zee i loved it 👍🏼
well portrayed emotions 👏
Originally posted by: FebruaryFlower
A fab OS Zara!
Very touching and emotional.Loved it.Thanks for the PM hun.⭐️
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