So here it is :
First part : hmmm loved the way maan and geet were
affecting each other ^^ 😳
You have created a great situation : maan was thinking that she was angry because of her separation with Arjun and geet was thinking that he was doing her favor because of her bro… but inside somewhere they both knew it was their proximity that created so much tension… 😳 well done… Adding their thoughts for readers was a gud idea ! 👏
Seconde part : Seems like maan planned everything, and
may b planned it long ago ! ⭐️ Loved geet and and maan convo about that model…
u know it's typically the situation : you despratly wants to know
something, you are irritated with what you hear and you blurt out everything
that is deep inside you and then you realise what u just said and say :
OMG ^^ 🤣 it happens so oftenly with me… 😆 i was like hahahah i would have done the
same !!! Oh and forgot to mention love maan's possessivness ! One more
thing 😆 : OH god what was maan thinkin in the limosine ! Loved your
idea bdw : maan reciting alphabet hahaha that was really funny and original
loved it ! 😆
Third part : Awww maan geet and yash are so cute together, so yash konws abt maan's feeling about geet… gud, at least it won't fall on the same gissa pita hua bro becoming wall between 2 lovers ! 😳
Fourth part : geet maan yash and that nayantara convo OMG, i was like yeah yeah she indirectly insulted maan's choice ( not only the gown but the one who was wearin it as well 😉 ) now maan wil definatly throw her out! loved it ! And geet understanding french and finally loosing her sanity hahahah ( bdw i had one question, i often see in ffs that knowing french is well-seen , why ? actually as i am french i dnt have other point view than mine ^^ ) I really like the way geet is down to earth, more than that, lots of person would recognize themself here… whenever she does something : i am like OMG i would have done the same hahaha Then the convo between geet and his bro was good ! I really enjoyed it ! Fantastic part, it was dynamic and pleasing !
Part five ( pfffiou ! ) : Oh god loved maan's
monologue ! Loved how he didn't hsitate before saying all this to her !
( here you clearly made the difference between a bro and a friend of your bro, one will hesitate saying this stuff, like yash did in the previous part while the other will have no shame 🤣 🤣 ) And one line again that made me think i can see myself in geet was
when you talked abt her heartbeast speed ^^…Damn yaar, just imagine someone u love from ages just tells you that he found u irresistible and wanted u in his bed 🤣 😈... in fact if i was on geet's place i would have fainted ! 😳 Ohh they are engaged, what a lovly twist !
Maan geets and yash convo are really well written i must say ! 👏
Ok I know today the analyse is a bit baseless, but i was
reading and commenting back to back , i didn't had time to think abt the story
in general…. Sorry abt that… 😕
Concerning the critics : What can i say ??? Not
much in fact… everthing is perfect…. for now ! 😛 Story is dynamic, conversations are really interesting,
twists are developed really well and on time… keep it up girl !v Oh and yeah am waiting for yash's girl, want him bsy before maan n geet actually starts dating each other 😛 😉
Ok that's it for now ! pfiouu... how do u write such lenghty updts, here am tired writing this piece which is am sure not even quarter of ur regular updt ! Hats off to u ! 👏
Zubi ! 😊
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