Originally posted by Castle-BeckettRes. I have a lot to say on this one, and I'm going to be quoting a lot, analyzing a lot so be prepared for that. Also, the comment won't be edited until you finish the chapter.
Second, I'll just say this for now - Its been the best thing you've EVER written, AEIP and LOL put together.
And now forget LOL, I like AEIP more :P
"Armaan was undoubtedly, already a part of the popular gang at the college. Popularity came naturally to him, some because of his looks and some because of his jovial happy go lucky nature. It was a fact that Armaan Mallik had never needed to look out for or strive for popularity; he became one just by being the person he was."
Stop making me fantasize man, such guys don't bloody exist.
"His friends had even decided to go and recheck his medical entrance tests on which he had scored so high, just to check whether he really was intelligent and fit to be a doctor, because the number of confusions and blunders about love he carried with him, was too much for a normal human being to carry."
Such a goof!
A cute goof at that <3
"One fine day, in the library, while listening to Riddhima chattering away to immense glory with the librarian, who for a change was smiling, it suddenly struck his thick-skulled brain. He realized that her talk, her blabbering, her laughter was something he could hear for life, something he wanted to hear his entire life. And that ultimate day, Armaan Mallik, the player of hearts, became a pawn in the game of love."
This was one part of the chapter I adored.. Just the fact that the realization came so simply, without any kind of drama, without any kind of lightening striking him, it got to me.. It was just so real, I could actually feel what he must've felt, because in real life, we barely ever need hugely humongous signals to realize that we have feelings for someone.. It just happens naturally, the whole falling in love and then realizing it..
That's why I loved these few lines <3 And oh, I loved the metaphor at the end, 'pawn in the game of love..'
"Mills and Boons may have talked about love, operas may have shown love, and films may have dramatized love but what Riddhima felt was nothing of that sort."
So true! I'm not a very huge fan of Mills & Boons, but yea, those lines are true.. I mean, of course, my 'love' limits to a cute guy I perhaps met in a party But yea, I know for a fact, that love is something much more deeper than shows, books and songs can ever portray.. Its beyond all those things, and I have very visual examples in front of me - my parents and my newly engaged sister
"There were no violins in the background when she saw Armaan, she may not have blushed crimson when he held her hand numerous times but the bliss she felt in her heart and the feeling when her heart and soul came in peace with each other was something she knew could be some emotion out of the world. An emotion called "Love"."
And these my friend, were the best lines in the entire update! It was definitely euphemistic.. And also paradoxical, strangely complicated, although it was written in the most simplest form! Like I said, love is an emotion with a lot of depth (what do I know, I've just heard ), but yea, all these things like wind blowing and all of that doesn't actually happen.. And that's exactly what these lines told me, that love isn't filmy, but something way beyond that! It can't be hunky-dory all the time, it can't have rains, background music (violins by the way - nice touch!), and dancing, its something that you feel inside.. I do talk like a lovestruck person don't I? Eh, who cares, maybe I am, maybe I'm not
Coming to why I felt this has been your best work till now, is because this chapter didn't have anything extraordinary as such, like you said.. But that's what appealed to me, the simplicity behind it.. And I loved how the transition was shown from the first meeting to how they fell in love, it was perfection to the T <3
And according to me, extraordinary writing doesn't need to have use of exquisite vocabulary, or quotes, proverbs, and figures of speech, although of course, they make the read more appealing definitely, but if the reader can read between the lines of what you've written, your writing is a success in itself.. And I for one, did read between the lines.. This chapter had the feeling of a fairy-tale, everything happy, everything bright and radiant, but at the same time, it was real and simple, so it wasn't something difficult to imagine.. Also, we all know people who fall in love this way, so the reality quotient was maintained..
So that's why this chapter really got to me, and for me, this has been a highlight of LOL and AEIP put together!
I kept my end of the challenge