Sapnon Se Bhare Naina

FF :dakshna reunion,versn 2.0 - Page 4

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Posted: 12 years ago
PART 3 :
 
Aku comes to after an hour or so, and asks for daksh.
Daksh, majorly worried because Naina hasnt answered any of his calls, rushes in when called.
D : Akruti...ab kaisa lag raha he?
A : Dada...me theek hu [ she tries to get up, he pushes her down gently ]...Bas ap meri bat suniye...
D : Ha, kaho...tum kya keh rahi thi mujse?
A : Naina...wo ghar chod ke ja rahi he.
D : Kya? Mene usse kaha tha ki-
A : Dada, mene bhi koshish ki thi...Wo rat bhar pack kar rahi thi, aur...
D : [ shocked ] wo mere calls nahi utha rahi he...
Aku is shocked too..."Kahi wo..."
Daksh looks torn between his need to go to her and wanting to be there for Akruti, as only he knows what blow his sister had been dealt with in the morning...
Akruti understands. "Pls dada, me theek hu, ap Naina ko mana lo...roko use..."
D : Akruti...
A : Me sambhal lungi...ap jake ao...
He stands up, undecided still.
"Jao na..." she urges him gently.
 
 
Psycho is pacing outside, fearing the worst. If Aku opens her mouth...
 
She sees Daksh rushing out, and runs behind him.
S : Daksh? [ekdam hi-pitched, typical psycho tone]
He doesnt stop to turn even, and keeps walking.
Sanket sees him and walks up to them.
Snkt : Chintu...?
D : Dada, Akruti ka khyal rakhna, me bas ghar jake ata hu...
Sanket nods; doc calls Sanket and he walks off.
Daksh resumes; psycho yanks him to a stop [ i kno, gussa mujhe bhi aa raha he, but wait a little... ]
S : [shrill tone again] Tum aise nahi jaa sakte Daksh.
D : [dark KP mode] ROK KE DEKHO MUJHE.
S : [as if she cant believ] Tum us Naina ke peeche-
D : [ grabs her arm and gives her a hard shake ] Meri Naina ka naam tak mat lena apni zuban se, warna...Jo mene ghar par diya, uska bacha hua bhi yahi de dunga.
 
Psycho gets the tear-gas ready, expression f shock nd disbelief in place. [ekdam wounded tone me] "Daksh..."

D : Shut up Sonakshi. [tightens the vice like grip; psycho squirms but he doesnt let up] Hospital he, yaha apna tamasha shuru karne ka sochna bhi mat. [murderously low tone] Tumhe andaza bhi nahi hoga ki tumhara kya haal karne ka man he mera abhi.
[oh i kno, wud hav luvd ek aur thappad in this part, but dat wud b so unlik dakshu na...dats y...]
She opens up her mouth again, and he cuts her short.
D : Aur ek bat tum kaan khol kar sun lo. [ leans in, eyes speaking murder ] Me na kabhi tumhara tha, na kabhi rahunga. Mene kisi se pyaar kiya hai, to wo Naina se he. Mujhe rokne ka, datne ka, mujh par rok jamane ka hak bhi sirf, aur sirf Naina ka he. [ pulls back ] Mujhe yaha koi natak nahi chahiye jab tak me lautu. Samjhi tum? Agar akruti ko kuch hua...[ek aur squeeze - ab to us psycho ka arm tomato red hogaya hoga😆]

He turns to leave, jate jate ek aur dialog marta hai Daksh;
he turns one last time. "Ye mat socho ki tum abhi bach gayi...Ayush ko to me chodne wala hu nahi. Uske bad tumhari bari he."
He walks off with that.

Psycho stares into space, paralysed, worried her game is up now...
 
 
                                                                              ... contd...
 
 
 
ps : sry i hav 2 cut it up in2 sooo many parts...i'm puttin it up as i go...
 
 
 
 
Edited by sweetaish - 12 years ago

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Posted: 12 years ago
U made me cry again sweetaish!!!!!!!!😔 ur dialogues and facial expressions are sooo sensitive and mindblowing!!!!!!!
 
BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!🤗 keep rocking girl!!!!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
mysti...thnx swetheart🤗...
tu itne compliments ek sath de deti he ki muje chad jati he😆😆😆ilu meri jaan🤗
 
nd dis one s 4 all my darlins...
 
 
Nikli thi me prequel likhne...
Phir ane lage ideas itne...
Ki I had 2 writ, had 2 writ
Lagvadi thappad left n right,
 
                                               nope, uske age abhi likhungi to tumhe clues mil jayenge😉
 
had fun guys...?
 
loads f smil😊s,
 
aish
 
 
ps : part 3 s on pge 4 btw😊
Edited by sweetaish - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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mysti...thnx swetheart🤗...

tu itne compliments ek sath de deti he ki muje chad jati he😆😆😆ilu meri jaan🤗
 
nd dis one s 4 all my darlins...
 
 
Nikli thi me prequel likhne...
Phir ane lage ideas itne...
Ki I had 2 writ, had 2 writ
Lagvadi thappad left n right,
 
                                               nope, uske age abhi likhungi to tumhe clues mil jayenge😉
 
had fun guys...?
 
loads f smil😊s,

 
aish
 
 
ps : part 3 s on pge 4 btw😊


Wow too good Babes... 😃 waiting for the next round of jhappads... 
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Posted: 12 years ago
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PART 3 :
 
Aku comes to after an hour or so, and asks for daksh.
Daksh, majorly worried because Naina hasnt answered any of his calls, rushes in when called.
D : Akruti...ab kaisa lag raha he?
A : Dada...me theek hu [ she tries to get up, he pushes her down gently ]...Bas ap meri bat suniye...
D : Ha, kaho...tum kya keh rahi thi mujse?
A : Naina...wo ghar chod ke ja rahi he.
D : Kya? Mene usse kaha tha ki-
A : Dada, mene bhi koshish ki thi...Wo rat bhar pack kar rahi thi, aur...
D : [ shocked ] wo mere calls nahi utha rahi he...
Aku is shocked too..."Kahi wo..."
Daksh looks torn between his need to go to her and wanting to be there for Akruti, as only he knows what blow his sister had been dealt with in the morning...
Akruti understands. "Pls dada, me theek hu, ap Naina ko mana lo...roko use..."
D : Akruti...
A : Me sambhal lungi...ap jake ao...
He stands up, undecided still.
"Jao na..." she urges him gently.
 
 
Psycho is pacing outside, fearing the worst. If Aku opens her mouth...
 
She sees Daksh rushing out, and runs behind him.
S : Daksh? [ekdam hi-pitched, typical psycho tone]
He doesnt stop to turn even, and keeps walking.
Sanket sees him and walks up to them.
Snkt : Chintu...?
D : Dada, Akruti ka khyal rakhna, me bas ghar jake ata hu...
Sanket nods; doc calls Sanket and he walks off.
Daksh resumes; psycho yanks him to a stop [ i kno, gussa mujhe bhi aa raha he, but wait a little... ]
S : [shrill tone again] Tum aise nahi jaa sakte Daksh.
D : [dark KP mode] ROK KE DEKHO MUJHE.

🤣 Loved this dialogue..taliya taliya👏
S : [as if she cant believ] Tum us Naina ke peeche-
D : [ grabs her arm and gives her a hard shake ] Meri Naina ka naam tak mat lena apni zuban se, warna...Jo mene ghar par diya, uska bacha hua bhi yahi de dunga.

👏👏..loved it...
 
Psycho gets the tear-gas ready, expression f shock nd disbelief in place. [ekdam wounded tone me] "Daksh..."

D : Shut up Sonakshi. [tightens the vice like grip; psycho squirms but he doesnt let up] Hospital he, yaha apna tamasha shuru karne ka sochna bhi mat. [murderously low tone] Tumhe andaza bhi nahi hoga ki tumhara kya haal karne ka man he mera abhi. 

Iss diialogue pe tho do teen whistles ( seeti) bajane mann kar raha hian..but  I cnt

[oh i kno, wud hav luvd ek aur thappad in this part, but dat wud b so unlik dakshu na...dats y...]
She opens up her mouth again, and he cuts her short.
D : Aur ek bat tum kaan khol kar sun lo. [ leans in, eyes speaking murder ] Me na kabhi tumhara tha, na kabhi rahunga. Mene kisi se pyaar kiya hai, to wo Naina se he. Mujhe rokne ka, datne ka, mujh par rok jamane ka hak bhi sirf, aur sirf Naina ka he. [ pulls back ] Mujhe yaha koi natak nahi chahiye jab tak me lautu. Samjhi tum? Agar akruti ko kuch hua...[ek aur squeeze - ab to us psycho ka arm tomato red hogaya hoga😆]

Wah mere sher..I cam imagine dakshu saying this..🤣kp style..mazzaa gaya..iss dialogue pe tho cahr ..paanch seetiya ho jaaye😉

He turns to leave, jate jate ek aur dialog marta hai Daksh;
he turns one last time. "Ye mat socho ki tum abhi bach gayi...Ayush ko to me chodne wala hu nahi. Uske bad tumhari bari he."
He walks off with that.

Psycho stares into space, paralysed, worried her game is up now...
 
 
                                                                              ... contd..
 
 
 
ps : sry i hav 2 cut it up in2 sooo many parts...i'm puttin it up as i go...



Aish..loved it..dakshu ke dialogues aur tappad..wah wah..,👏 what an idea sirji..👏.
Edited by lucky.m - 12 years ago
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Wow too good Babes... 😃 waiting for the next round of jhappads... 

 
thnx jaan🤗...nd jhappads tho😆😆😆...i kno dear...pehle tho bas do kheech ke lagvane the mujhe, den i'd focus on ayi's emo atyachar n all nd a bhaari emo reunioun f dakshna lik my last one😛...ab lag raha he thappad kuch kam pad gaye😉...i'm tryin 2 fit the right ones in yar...thoda time lagega😊😊 bt i'm njoyin evry minut f t😆😆😆
Edited by sweetaish - 12 years ago
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mysti...thnx swetheart🤗...

tu itne compliments ek sath de deti he ki muje chad jati he😆😆😆ilu meri jaan🤗
 
nd dis one s 4 all my darlins...
 
 
Nikli thi me prequel likhne...
Phir ane lage ideas itne...
Ki I had 2 writ, had 2 writ
Lagvadi thappad left n right,
 
                                               nope, uske age abhi likhungi to tumhe clues mil jayenge😉
 
had fun guys...?
 
loads f smil😊s,
 
aish
 
 
ps : part 3 s on pge 4 btw😊



Poetry...hmmm..🤗..mazaa aagaya..kya kavitha likhi aapne👏 huzoor..wah wah😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
lucky thanku🤗...dos dialogs wer my fav parts 2de vaise😆...glad u lik 'em...
age thoda atak gaya he, so wil put up jitna hua he utna...rest comin😉
 
 
 
ps : seeti...kya yar..yaha tak sunayi di muje😆😆thnku again🤗
Edited by sweetaish - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Cant wait for the rest aish!!😆 
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PART 4 :
 
P-zoo:
Daksh ka car screeches to a halt in front. Ayi hurries out.
A : Chintu...Akruti kaisi he?
D : [blank tone] Wo theek he.
He walks in purposefully; Ayi follows him in.
Lekin wo rukta nahi he, goes straight upto Naina's room.
 
Bechara is in for a shock.
Na hi Naina he waha, aur na hi uski cheeze...
D : [ soflty ] Naina...
He rushes down the stairs. Ayi stops him mid-way.
A : Chintu, tu-
D : Abhi nahi Ayi.
 
He storms off to her office. Yes, the office is bare too. Everything has been boxed up; no address labels lekin.
[ She's gettin d packers-movers guys to do dat.clues nahi chodna chahti na, idiot. ]
 
Daksh is livid now, and back in the front room.
 
Ayi looks up from d sofa, with an I-was-right expression, busy convincing herself ki she's indeed right [next idiot].
D : [killer look] Ayi. Naina kaha he.
A : Wo chali gayi.
Daksh stares back with an oh-really expression. Baba [ sad ] looks up now.
B : Beta, uski dopeher ki train thi, nikal chuki hogi...
D : [shocked] Kya?!!

 

 
[hospital]
 
 
Psycho recovers from her paralysis, whips out her cell. [u kno wo kisko ph karegi..😡]
S : Vahini..
R : Ha Sonakshi..
S : Daksh ghar aya?
R : Ha shayad...Gadi ki awaz suni thi mene.[ happily ] Naina chali gayi...
S : [ mega excited ] Sach...? Wo uska phn nahi utha rahi thi, to muje laga tha ki wo ja chuki hogi...
R : Ha, jaise hi tum log nikle, wo neeche ayi-baba se bat karne ai thi, aur phir nikal gayi...Waha kya ho raha he?
S : [ worried ] Pata nahi vahini. Akruti ko ab tak hosh nahi aya he. [ i kno, but dats wat dey told her...wait karo. ]
R : [ confused ] Par sanket ka to ph tha ki wo theek he, bas kamzor he...
S : use ab tak hosh nahi aya he.[ irritated ] Mujhe usse kya matlab...me wo nahi keh rahi thi...Me to ye keh rahi thi ki usne muje ayush se phn pe bat karte dekh liya...
R : [ worried ]Kya...?Akruti ne sun liya?
S : Ha, aur daksh ne bhi...Ab kya kare?
R : [ mildly shocked ] Kya? Kitna?
[ iske liye bhi rakha he mene ek...trust me. ]
S : [ more irritated ] Kaafi kuch. Daksh aya kya? PAta nahi wo kya karne wala he abhi...
R : Sonakshi, tu Akruti ko dekh, Daksh ko me dekhti hu. Ayi waise bhi gusse me he. Muje Ayi se bat karni he bas, wo uski nahi sunegi.
S : [ not convincd ] Theek he.
She cuts the call and sits on one f d chairs with a set expression.
 
 
                                                                 ... contd ...
 
 
ps : overdose of psycho...? pls remembr certain characters r only here 4 d slaps😉.rest is under construction...
 
 
 
 
Edited by sweetaish - 12 years ago