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SURROGATE RELATIONS # 4, PART 33 ON 13/10 (Page 32)

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Posted: 20 September 2011 at 10:03pm | IP Logged
Hey,

After re reading your FF, I went on an emotional ride and penned down a poem for ur FF.

The Imperfect Wife! (Geet's POV)

My life has been filled with an abyss of darkness so deep
That night herself loses her way to the emergence of dawn
My days remain burdened under the dark pool of sorrows
And my nights strive under the blanket of my fears and my terrorizing dreams

I come from a past from which there is no return
I do not know who I am or where I belong
Since I have no identity of my own 
Whatever I had was taken away from me
I have lost my heart, my body and my soul
I live in shame so deeply engraved that there is no indication of light
Because my body is tainted and ruined and can be never repaired

I have become small, as small as the smallest particle of an atom
As hollow, as the deepest hollow of a drum
My pain is as terrorizing as the life imagined in hell
Therefore, my each day is spent living in despair

I made the mistake of falling in love with you
Knowing you belong to someone else
You showed me with your utmost care and concern 
And I just could not stop myself from feeling for you.
I think about you day and night
I want to be held, touch, caressed and protected by you
Because you make me feel like a human again
You make me feel that I belong in this world
And that I am a woman who can be cared, loved and cherished

Yet, I am scared, scared to come close to you
Because I am not capable of loving you 
Because I know that I cannot make you happy 
I can never fulfill your desires if I become your wife
How can I take away your life, your dreams and your happiness?
When you are the best thing that ever happened to me
I love you more than what my heart desires
And therefore, I do not want to you make this mistake
For asking me to be by your side
When I know that all I can be is The Imperfect Wife!



Edited by Water. - 20 September 2011 at 11:14pm

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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 12:47am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Water.

Hey,

After re reading your FF, I went on an emotional ride and penned down a poem for ur FF.

The Imperfect Wife! (Geet's POV)

My life has been filled with an abyss of darkness so deep
That night herself loses her way to the emergence of dawn
My days remain burdened under the dark pool of sorrows
And my nights strive under the blanket of my fears and my terrorizing dreams

I come from a past from which there is no return
I do not know who I am or where I belong
Since I have no identity of my own 
Whatever I had was taken away from me
I have lost my heart, my body and my soul
I live in shame so deeply engraved that there is no indication of light
Because my body is tainted and ruined and can be never repaired

I have become small, as small as the smallest particle of an atom
As hollow, as the deepest hollow of a drum
My pain is as terrorizing as the life imagined in hell
Therefore, my each day is spent living in despair

I made the mistake of falling in love with you
Knowing you belong to someone else
You showed me with your utmost care and concern 
And I just could not stop myself from feeling for you.
I think about you day and night
I want to be held, touch, caressed and protected by you
Because you make me feel like a human again
You make me feel that I belong in this world
And that I am a woman who can be cared, loved and cherished

Yet, I am scared, scared to come close to you
Because I am not capable of loving you 
Because I know that I cannot make you happy 
I can never fulfill your desires if I become your wife
How can I take away your life, your dreams and your happiness?
When you are the best thing that ever happened to me
I love you more than what my heart desires
And therefore, I do not want to you make this mistake
For asking me to be by your side
When I know that all I can be is The Imperfect Wife!



yes

you finally wrote a poem for my FF
wow!! feel my heart bursting with gratitude...you have expressed geet's feelings so well...
thank u so much for gracing my FF with your poemMorph
can i use this in the story, if i manage to develop  a suitable situation?



Edited by bangalores - 21 September 2011 at 12:52am

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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 12:53am | IP Logged
Hey,

U r so generous with ur comments...I am overwhelmed. Thank you.

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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 1:23am | IP Logged


   Awesome update...I loved the way geet explained herself...I pity her..I loved maan...how he tried to convince her

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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 2:40am | IP Logged



how r u doing/

atlast i m here to comment lil. early

part 28 is



&



really great part.

Beautiful the way u described the feelings and pain for geet suffering.




"Don't be so kind...leave me alone...I can't bear to see the regret in your eyes,"

Even after a year if I am unable to instill enough trust in you to share yourself with me, then we will think about separation as the last resort."

oh no not this condition. what if her insecurities still there?

He needed to talk to Sameera, she deserved to hear about the marriage from him. He took his phone to make the calls.

he should do that though i m happy for the marriage of maaneet, i don't want other girl to suffer for that.

i hope sameera will not create any problem for mannet marriage.

well, beautiful, painfully written. Clap













Edited by harshdb - 21 September 2011 at 2:43am

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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 4:23am | IP Logged
hey...Beautiful update
very well written...
loved the way u described  geet's feeling...
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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 5:47am | IP Logged
wow.. what a love...Blushing

we all die for such an understanding hubbyDay Dreaming
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Posted: 21 September 2011 at 5:48am | IP Logged
@water,

always in love with ur writing,... lovely poemHug

banglores,

just to mention, u really have a great pen.. i am loving ur writing style


Edited by sulb - 21 September 2011 at 5:50am

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