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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 12:24pm | IP Logged
@bengali 
FF means fan fiction ... the story u riting is k/a fan fiction 
n ya the starting is gud 

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 12:48pm | IP Logged
Chapter 2: The Subject

"Is Mr. Chopra is in?" asks a man in his mid 30s, all suited in black.
"Yes, do you have an appointment, sir?" says the receptionist lady.

Man:"Oh yes, I do. Tell him Mr. Patil is here."

Recep:"Sure thing sir, he's is waiting for you only."

Mr. Patil enters the room. Its a big office cabin with expensive decorations and a man who is looking at the big glass aquarium, blankly.

Patil: "Enjoying the view, Chopra?"

Chopra turns around. Dhanraj Chopra, a man in his 40s but still look quite mid 30s. Clean shaved and bears that edgy look. Wearing a rim-less glasses he looks suave and enigmatic.

Dhanraj with a grin smile "Fascinating creatures, these fighter fishes are. Fights and kills even its own siblings. No mercy at all. But the best part is they don't kill others if not needed, they just love to be the king of the arena, whether its a sea or an aquarium. Just like me..." the smile increases a bit.

Patil in a shaky fearful tone, "I find the connection amusing." Dhanraj goes to his bar in his room and makes drink.

"I didn't call you here for amusement, Patil. Drink?"

Patil:"Sure, no ice, only wat..."

D: "I know your choices well, Patil..." and he hands the drink to Patil, "...but lets talk about mine. What happened?"

P:"Court granted you a rehab in ICPMF."

D:"ICPMF?? But me no criminal, I am not. You know that Patil."

P: "I know, but court had a different notion on murders. They thought your testimony was not properly balanced."

D:"I didn't murder anyone. I saw it. Just saw it. But they are putting me in some nuts medical facility! Why they didn't hold on Rakesh?"




Edited by bengalscott - 15 September 2011 at 12:49pm

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 12:53pm | IP Logged
new charctr? Nyc. My D always best. Love him. I lv cute villains.
Btw pls cpy d link in d addres bar and pm or msg to d member in this forum
bhartikhushi
jhum
charu
abhi
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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 1:02pm | IP Logged
nice part 
continue soon

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 1:17pm | IP Logged
Continued from previous post...

P: "Don't get impatient. Atleast court sent you for a rehab. Not acquitted you for the murder."

D: "Did I do the murder? Why the acquisition then?"

P: "Anyways, your bail term ends today. The police will be here any moment. Get ready."

Dhanraj looks at Patil. That stone-cold look of Dhanraj just sends chill through Patil's spine.

D:"I once read a mystery fiction that a murderer kills his victim with poisoned ice in their drinks."

Patil bit feared asked "W-What's the connection with your rehab?"

Dhanraj smiled, "You are a very bad lawyer Patil and I am glad you don't have ice with your drinks. Good bye Patil."

Dhanraj leaves the room leaving Patil all in sweats behind as Patil's hand shivering holding the glass of drink.

Continued...

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 1:23pm | IP Logged
wah nyc part
dat lyn chill through patil's spine.
Ths nyc part. Poisnd ice wala cmmt nyc

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 5:47pm | IP Logged
ye mr.P kaun hai???

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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 9:55pm | IP Logged
Heyyy Bengalscott!!!! First of all, a warm welcome to da forum and CGM family... Hug  Hug  hope u have a good time n get a lot of besties here... (that makes u reveal ur real name soon!!!!) LOL lol!!! just kidding haan dude!!!! I so so sooo love ur DP (display pic) re!! Calvin & Hobbes!!!!! Approve they have always been my fav comic characters!!! Dancing
woahhh!!! Radhi talks about us!!!!!! Embarrassed that's really sweet of her... *hugs* to u Radhi... Hug

Coming to ur story - ahaaa... i m glad it's not a simple love story but includes some darkness too!! (mostly simple love stories bore me Dead
wow!! this is da 2nd story of which i m a part!!!!! Party Thanx a ton!! Hug In Aru's story also i m one of the characters!!! (thanx to u as well, Aru Hug) but not able to follow that for a while.. actually I'm extremely busy till mid November so avoid reading any FFs, coz i get addicted to it then!!!!!!!! LOL So i m not sure if i can comment on ur updates regularly D'oh but yaa... as i have already finished reading ur 2 updates, now i cannot stay away from this!! so gonna read this for sure... Embarrassed
All characters sound interesting!!! 
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Chapter 1 - woahhh!! i loved how da story started!!! Clap I loved Radhika's confident attitude... Radhika always wanted to know criminal minds!!!!! no wonder!!!!!! ROFL so u know Radhi quite well, huh!! hehehee!! 
i loved R n C convo a lot!! shows da perfect comfort level!!! loved my 1st dialogue too!!!!!! ROFL that was sooo Charuish!!!!! LOL 

Chapter 2 -  
Dhanraj Chopra - wow!!! loved his persona!!!! Clap A man in 40s but still look quite mid 30s Shocked Radhi ki nikal padi!!!!!! LOL 
I just loved how u used Fighter fishes to tell us about D's attitude towards life!!! Clap Thumbs Up D is gonna b in ICPMF Shocked OMG wat's da story behind this??? cant wait to see!!!! 
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Something about ur writing - ahaa.. Thumbs Up very good piece of writing, dude!! This isn't ur 1st time, is it? I loved ur command over language... perfect placement of words and perfect use of separators like comma, full stop, etc.. that makes it easy for a reader to understand things... Clap Approve

Loved ur story, quite different and interesting as well.. Do update soon... just cant wait to see 1st meeting of R and D!! 


Edited by Charu21 - 15 September 2011 at 9:56pm

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