A new member with a new story for all

Posted: 12 years ago
Hi to all.

I am BengalScott, a new member in India-Forums. I actually do follow this website often (but not regular) due to a good influence of Radhikarani (she is a well known member in this forum, I believe). Her recent story "Humari Adhoori Kahani" made me think that why not I also pen a story here.

Radhika (or Radhi to many here) told lots of good things of this forum. The friends here are quite awesome and I know some of them as Radhika discussed about all of you several times (I can swear on it). Names like Charu, BhartiKhushi are so common names I have had heard associated with this forum. So just like Radhika, I also like to join this forum.

But believe me, I am not into the TV much except sports and movies. So on demand of Radhi, I did watch CGM on TV and sometimes on YouTube. So don't take any type of trivia questions as I will fail 200% sure.

Coming to the story, it will be not a simple love story. It's dark and full of plot twists which will make the reader think about their beliefs on a particular plot.
The story is a psychological love story. It's different from others, but I think it will take all your likings and approval.

Main characters:

Sooraj Thapar as Dhanraj Chopra (I like him as Dhananand, so its just a try)

Radhikarani as Dr. Radhika Sharma (she once said that she would love a story where she will be a character)

Manish Wadwa as Superintendent Dr. Suhel Seth (I love that man, no-nonsense guy)

Charu as Charulata Sen, friend of Radhika (Radhika insisted that Charu must be there, so as Bharti)

BhartiKhushi as Dr. Bharti Singh (another doctor)

So the story will begin shortly. Title of the story "Paradise Lost"

BTW I will add new characters as the story goes on. Its up to you people to decide who will suit better in those characters. Just suggest me and also reply is a must.

Thank you.😊

Story Index (Updated up to page 24)

Chapter 1: The Choice (Page 1)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898

Chapter 2: The Subject (Page 2)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=2

Chapter 3: Welcome, Subject (Page 4)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=4

Chapter 4: First Contact (Page 5-6)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=5

Chapter 5: Evaluation (Page 7)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=7

Chapter 6: Lust in Peace (Page 7 & 10)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/46857405


Chapter 7: My Bloody Friend (Page 10)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/47146308

Chapter 8: Stand By Me (Page 11, 13 and 14)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/47212103


Chapter 9: Second Contact (Page 16, 18 ,19, 21)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=16

Chapter 10: Eclipse (Page 23 & 24)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/1784898?pn=23


Edited by bengalscott - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
PARADISE LOST
Chapter One: The Choice

"This is it!" Radhika makes her mind. She took her time to decide. "After all its just about gaining experience", she told herself. But other things runs through her mind. "What if, Dad says no...", paused her once again, "forget it Radhi, life is too short to take an easy decision so long, go with it!" She leaves her room.

Radhika just so confused. Completing Masters in Psychology from Georgia University was no matter of joke. Georgia is one of the best in England. But after she returned home, she saw and understood that her parents still have other things to tell. Dad thinks of some good Phd. and then professor job, marriage will also come her way. Mom has only marriage plans in her mind. "Gosh! When they will understand?" laments Radhika.
But she knows that this is not what she wants. She wants to work with people who need help. Autism, OCD (Obsessive Compulsive Disorder) and hundreds on phobias are there present in common world. She knows the pain, as her cousin, Vivek was dyslexic. She knows it now. She never knew then. So just help.

Radhika finally goes to her father. "Dad...", she calls.

Dad: "hmm, what?", replying while going through his stocks and shares lists on PC.

R:"I am applying for a job"

D:"Good enough", but his mind still on the PC screen.

R:"Its the ICPMF."

Radhika's dad got still for a second. He then looks at his daughter. "What did you say? Did I hear ICPMF?"

R:"You got it right."

Dad left his seat, stood up and came near to Radhi, with a disbelief in his face.

D:"I presume that you are absolutely sane because a rare case of insanity will speak like that."

R:"But Dad..."

D:"What? What do you want to prove? You got your degree, you went out of India and I felt that will do some good for you. I never felt that this will make you an idiot. Only stupid can think of that and I have a stubborn belief that you are not stupid. So let me keep it that way."

R:"I have decided, I am applying there."

D:"Oh really? Is that so? So why you came here? Just to say bye bye? Go to hell. If you want my permission, my answer is no."

R:"You don't need to get hyper. Such brouhaha is not required. But I am going, dad. Its a challenge I must take."

Radhika left the room. She had decided, so she will go. Her application for the job of Psychologist and Therapist at ICPMF was posted on that same day.

ICPMF. Institute of Correctional Psychology Medical Facility at Bunder, near Manali at Himachal Pradesh, is a well known and highly reputed centre of mental patients. Some of the inmates are criminals (that's why its Correctional) who indulge themselves in various criminal activity comes here when the court of law declares them insane. So act to come here and some really are. Radhika's dad knows all so he showed his anger. But Radhika always wanted to know criminal mind.

 "They are very interesting subjects, Charu," says Radhika to Charu or Charulata Sen, best friend of Radhika. Radhika now in a Cafe Coffee Day shop in Mumbai with Charu.

Charu: "yeah, those criminal minds are really good subjects for sure. I wonder what happen to other subjects like History, Geo..."

R: "Shut up Charu! Don't joke. I literally fought with my parents for this. This is going for one month now."

C: "But ICPMF is like Oh My God! Why Radhi? Why on earth that one? There are several other place you can put your psycho."

R: "Psycho?? Now this is it. Charu one more joke and I'll leave."

C:"Chillax Radhi! Just sip that vanilla cream ice mocha of yours, you'll be fine. By the way, when's the interview?

R:"Next month. I received the call letter yesterday. 16th of next month at Manali, ICPMF has head office there."

C:"Oh, tussi na jao!' Ha ha ha, just kidding!"

R:"I am sure that you need a psychologist, you joker!" smiled Radhika.

C:"Oh really? Thats good, atleast try my mind first before trying those criminals!"

They laughed out together. Manali is waiting for Radhika.

To Be Continued.
Edited by bengalscott - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
wow so long update. Wl read it. Wait
btw charu n bharti. I guess bhargu wl kill me by hearing ths.
So bhargu, peihu, indu, abhi, ritu, spardha, aru, polly, are all gd frnds of mine.. Who stl exits. Sory if i miss any name. Hope all of thm join u sn. I hv 2 msg d link to thm.
Posted: 12 years ago
dr. Suhel seth? Omg! U mke urself dat non-sense psycho coloumist?
Posted: 12 years ago
ye actually kaunsi story hai? i mean is this a radhi-dhanu ff??
Posted: 12 years ago
thnx for adding me as a character but plz make it correct its bharti not bharati 
i dnt like ppl spell my name wrng 

nice concept 
Posted: 12 years ago
wah radhi-dhannu. Ye words sunne k liye taras rahi thi. I mean i lve whn people say radhi-dhanu 2gthr.
Ok bharti ask her to change d spln.
Posted: 12 years ago
@Bharti yup its a fault and has been rectified.

@All
How's the starting of the story?

@Jhum What's ff? I am new to this forum so you must give me some time to get involved with these lingos.
Posted: 12 years ago
@bengali 
FF means fan fiction ... the story u riting is k/a fan fiction 
n ya the starting is gud 
Posted: 12 years ago
Chapter 2: The Subject

"Is Mr. Chopra is in?" asks a man in his mid 30s, all suited in black.
"Yes, do you have an appointment, sir?" says the receptionist lady.

Man:"Oh yes, I do. Tell him Mr. Patil is here."

Recep:"Sure thing sir, he's is waiting for you only."

Mr. Patil enters the room. Its a big office cabin with expensive decorations and a man who is looking at the big glass aquarium, blankly.

Patil: "Enjoying the view, Chopra?"

Chopra turns around. Dhanraj Chopra, a man in his 40s but still look quite mid 30s. Clean shaved and bears that edgy look. Wearing a rim-less glasses he looks suave and enigmatic.

Dhanraj with a grin smile "Fascinating creatures, these fighter fishes are. Fights and kills even its own siblings. No mercy at all. But the best part is they don't kill others if not needed, they just love to be the king of the arena, whether its a sea or an aquarium. Just like me..." the smile increases a bit.

Patil in a shaky fearful tone, "I find the connection amusing." Dhanraj goes to his bar in his room and makes drink.

"I didn't call you here for amusement, Patil. Drink?"

Patil:"Sure, no ice, only wat..."

D: "I know your choices well, Patil..." and he hands the drink to Patil, "...but lets talk about mine. What happened?"

P:"Court granted you a rehab in ICPMF."

D:"ICPMF?? But me no criminal, I am not. You know that Patil."

P: "I know, but court had a different notion on murders. They thought your testimony was not properly balanced."

D:"I didn't murder anyone. I saw it. Just saw it. But they are putting me in some nuts medical facility! Why they didn't hold on Rakesh?"


Edited by bengalscott - 12 years ago

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