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Posted: 12 years ago

Chapter :1

The two angels rash towards him on hugging his leg n other his waist causing him to disbalnce….a hand took his thing from him…

Nupur: lay mjhy dain…she said with a smile….

To wch he gave him his belonging ..pating her cheeks lovingly…..next he took them  in his arms

Hey dad….we missed u so much

He chuckled

Mayank: aha really….

Prem: hey bro

Mayank: hey prem….ruflling his hairs

Nupur: acha ab tum dodno neechay uthro gay

No….the  trio said in union

Hum dad k sath  mein rahy  gay .nn mayank nooded a firm yes….settling on sofa

Mayank: yes….so wht my angels did in my absence..n raj tumhary tu exams chal rahy thy kasay rahy

Rahaul: dad yeah fail hogaya

Mayank: haaan

Raj: dad yeah jhot bol rah ahi…..i rocked dad…colliding his knuckles with them

Rahaul: tu tum kal tu bool rahy thy k …uff meray khuda…mein phir fail hogaya

Raj: uffu stupid woh tu mein ps khel raha tha..uff…

Mayank: ufff….raj..this isn't the language u shud b using…..n rahul…bhai per nazar rakhty hoo..hai…ap ny kiya kiya school mein

Rahaul: uffu dad ..u want belive….excitedly he turning from his arm sat on his lap…..he giggle on his excitement

Mayank: wht

Rahul: I won the race…n we had a big color day…we played with so many colours..aur mein ny sab ko color lagaya…but mjhy koi bhi nhi laga saka…..he laughed out loud sharing high five

Mayank: ary wah tum tu bulkily dad per gay ho….

Raj: kya dad..itn pehakta hai….aur tumhain priya ny color k pani mein hi push kerdiya tha…aur yeah sar colorful hogya tha

Mayank n raj laughed to wch rahul frown……

Rahaul: us k tu mein dekh lo ga…itni cheating kerti hai….

Mayank: aray tu phir tu woh bulkily mama per gai hai haina……he looked at her…n recived n angry glare from already anger person…..

Rahul: yaa mom is also a cheater…she even lied

Mayank: ahaa….is this way to talk to ur mom

Rahul: dad mom said we all r gona have fun at holi…I u will paka cum but u didn't

A guilt appear on his face

Mayank: thts not ur moms fault..its mine….sorry dear dad wasn't able to find time ….sory..he touched his ear….

Chalo bacha party …go to ur room its high time u go to sleep…..

Nupur: ap kahana kahy gay ya kaha ker aay hain……

Myank: kaha ker aaya hoon…he reached in kitchen n his anger wife closed the light….n went out…

Collect his things from sofa n she went to her room…smiling in guilt he followed her to there room…..

Prem: its hot today n u desrve it

Mayank: acha…its all ur fault…finish ur studies n get on business …so tht I can spend time with my lovly wife yaar

Prem: ohh really…he put his hand on his shoulder…..sum 1 is dyng for it

Maank: tu mar khay gaa….kya chal raha ha

Prem: studies….purly

Mayank: good…n good night

Prem: have  agoood night ….n he rushed leaving a giggling brother

………….

Placing his thngs on bed she was moving out of the room..whn he caught his warist

Mayank: nupur…pls…he pleded….

Nupur: bacho ko dekh ker a rahi hoon …..tum fresh hojaoo……

He left his hand after hearing her plain voice….she left

Raj: mama aj meri turn hai..ap meray sath soo gii….

Mayank: ji nhi aj baba k turn hai….aj mama  baba k pass rahy gi….

Rahaul: ap tu big hoo….ap khudi so jao

Mayank: aray ……mjhy bhi tu daar lag gay ga tu

Raj stood on his bed with his hand on her wwasit….

Raj: acha tu ap out of country hotay ho tu kasay sotay hai…..

Rahaul: ohh budhu…mama raat ko phone per baat kerti thin a….tu dad ko story sunati hogi….

Bth of them cant not hold but laugh out loud…..mayank reach rahul as he was in aww with his innocence..n moreover he got him red handed as she use to talk to him…..

He strted to tickle bth of thm n thy strt to fight with pillow….to wch nupur recived a tight from mayank

Nupur: aah..mayank….she hited him right …n here thy all four were busy in laughing n enjoying there moent together…

Bs…subha skool jan hai na….go to sleep…

Mayank: yes mam is right chalo shbash ….

Bth of thme stod beside ther children make thm sliped into there fairy dreamland…..covering thm n kissing thm ….he left towards the door…n she switched off the light….

 

Mayank: kaha ja rahi hoo

Nupur: prem ko dekh lo zara

He shocked his head in disbelieved

Mayank: han jao…apny baray bety k bhi dekh aao….

She reached him n found him snuggled to a mickey mouse pillow…….she smiled…n cover him with  sheet…caressing his hair …

Myank: wht

Nupur: shh…..chup….

Putting his hand on his mouth ..he left out controlling his laughter

Reaching there room…..he close the door n without wasting any time he grped her n hugged her from back…..

Mayank: im missed u soo much

Nupur: acha really

Mayank: nupur u know I tred…kya kero yeah kam na….

Nupur: mayank I know ur work..but us ki wajah se tum occasion per bhi nhi hoo…..asa acha nhi lagta……

Mayank: im sorry..tumhain bacho se bhi

Nupur: han shukar hai …tumahin un k kayal aay tu

Mayank: un k kayal hai mjhy per…ek yaqeen hota hai k tum un k kayal rkh lo gi….per problem mjhy kuch aur hoti hai …..jab mein yaha nhi hota tu

Nupur: woh kiya ….she asked incently

Mayank : meri biwi k kyal kaun rakhy ga……woh tu rekhy gin hi….

Nupur: han han…buhat kyayal hai …she broke chain of his hand n went to ly on bed……

Mayank: nupur dekho meray betay k bhi pata hai k tm se baat kiya bagari mjhy neend nhi aati…he climb up to bed…aur jab naraz hoti hai tu bulkul nhi…..lyinng down he turn her towarde him …moving his hand in her hairs…….im sorry …I miss u too….asa nhi mjhy tum sab door rehn acha lagta hai….bs ab prem pahr lay tu meri responsibility kam hojay gi…magar woh mickey mouse k sath lay ker sota hai…she laughed

Nupur: tu….chota hai woh..acha…aur buhat zemedar hai woh acha

Mayank: bulkil..mickey mouse k tarha

Nupur: mayank ….us k mazak maat uraoo

Mayank: acha baba…ma k bora laga ..sorry mom

She chukeld…

Nupur: han…meray bety ko kuch nhi kahna

Mayank: he lean to kiss her on her forehead….thnks …for cuming in my life…

Nupur: she move fwd n kiss on his cheek….thnks for giving me so much

Myankk: kya baaat hai..…..

 

Turing around she huged him tight…..as tigh as possible

Nupur: kuch dino k lyan tum kahin nhi jao gay….promse…

Myank: he chuckled…ok madam..atleast 3 mths tak mein kahin nhi jarah..no out country

Nupur: sach ..but even no late work hmm……she broke n looked in his eyes

Kissing her forhead ….he asure her….

Mayank: n where is my good night kiss

Nupur: nhi milay gi….tumhari saza….

Mayank: koi baat nhi I'll do the honors by myself….aur wasy bhi mein aur bhi buaht kuch soch raha tha….he said mischievously ….leaning close ot her…..

 

Edited by drfizaahmed - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
😆res
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hey fizaaa wht a ss u have started and wht a update...👏👏
 
lovd bhabhi dewar relationshp...and prem nupur ka teesra beta...😆😆 gr888 yar...to see bhabhi love towards dewar is just the sweetest thg...
 
sharma's family tu sach mai buhat mazey ki hai...😃 yeh story padhnai mai abhi se buhat maza aarah ahai .agay tu aur aayei ga...aur kids tu really adorable...😊
 
thanks for such a lovely update...🤗🤗
 
u know mjhey waisey bhi reality series ziya pasand hai...😊
 
gr8 piece of work...👏👏👏
 
love ya...
Edited by drmaha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
really nice hope nothing worst happen
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Posted: 12 years ago
HAYEEE

KITNA LOVELY FAMILY HAI ...

KISIKI NAZAR NA LAGE
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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMG Cascade what a beautiful update ...
GOSH the kids r so cute----- they r just angel-itna masoom ki main kya bolu...
loved them loads...
hahaahaha loved mayu and kids ki nautanki-------raj and rahul r too smart yaar
hehehehehe ye mayank bhi na- he was acting like kids. Oh GOD it was d most cutes part of this update... i just loved it so much

Raj: mama aj meri turn hai..ap meray sath soo gii….

Mayank: ji nhi aj baba k turn hai….aj mama  baba k pass rahy gi….

Rahaul: ap tu big hoo….ap khudi so jao

Mayank: aray ……mjhy bhi tu daar lag gay ga tu

Raj stood on his bed with his hand on her wwasit….

Raj: acha tu ap out of country hotay ho tu kasay sotay hai…..

Rahaul: ohh budhu…mama raat ko phone per baat kerti thin a….tu dad ko story sunati hogi….


Oh GOD it was d most cutest part of this update... i just loved it so much...

haye ye kids bilkul mayur pe gaye hai...oley oley mera raj and rahul


loved nups caring attitude towards prem...

Prem is so lucky yaar- use maa ki roop main ek bhabi mili...

loved mayur scene as usual...

brilliant update sweetu

fulltoosh fantastic

a perfect and happy family...

i enjoyed d whole update

keep it up dear

and try to update next part soon

love ya

take care





Edited by -Faria- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
that sweeet part sis
mayur n the kids were adorable
last part mayur moments was 😍
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Posted: 12 years ago
@Fiza
 
beautiful update
 
do continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
awww...loved it fiza...
brilliant...
continue soon...
 
 
thanks for the PM
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Amazing update with beautiful moments of a most adorable family...Nupur is truly an ideal wife...mother n SIL...same goes with Mayank too...these Sharma kids r too cute to handle...loved the way Mayank behaved as a kid  with his angels...ufff ho yeh Sharma bacche bhi na samajhte hi nahi its Papa's turn babies😆...unko bhi darr lagta hai but the point is Mummy se🤣...Mayur moments r sweet as usual...!!!

Wait i didn't skip Nupur n Prem part...infact its the very first time im more focussed on this duo rather than Mayur here... y i feel their mother n son like relation is gonna take a drastic turn...!!!

Fiza aisa kyun feel horaha hai ki Mayank ka kiya wada toot jayega jo usne Nupur se kiya that he is not gonna leave...why i feel that he is actually gonna leave and that to soon...aisa kyun lagraha hai ki kismat koi bhayanak aur dardnak mod lene wali hai...i hope u get it what i want to say n what i feel...well yeh next update hi batayega ki mera darr sahi hai ya nahi...update jaldi karna...please...!!!
Edited by valiyah27 - 12 years ago
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A beautiful start, they all look like a big happy family. They may not have every relation in their life, but they seem happy with what they have... & Mayank such a great dad, even while being so busy he spo loving and caring towards his children and brother... & a very loving husband... Lovely start Fiza, can't wait for the rest of the stroy to unfold...

-Laiba