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Hello Friends.
i didn't want to start writing again, but my hands itched terribly to pour out what was building inside. But still i knew i had grown out of the phase where i could write for endless hours, so i made a deal and settled on this poem.Its inspired by real life. And truly i'm no poet, so i placed all the built up feelings into simple words, words that made sense to me.
I was always told a poem didn't have to rhyme but what it had to do was, depict the turmoil inside. So i did, hence i would appriciate it if you would leave your veiws on this little piece of mines.
The Cradle...
far away, she watched them in her arms, for she had never been there..
the whispers told her, she envied them, but her heart subsided the volume
smiling, they laughed and clinged on tightly, her heart twisted in awe
thoses eyes smothered them with love, and she just sat there quitely gazing at them
far away in the whispers of wants, and needs never belonging..
she felt her soul wander off and join them, in the happiness
the place she knew was hers, needed to be hers, but it never could
for the cradle that rocked them, never held her
for the smiles that adorned their face, never wore on hers
hope was always there but the light never shone on her
she only wished to be held, by the same cradle that held them
And one day it would, she was sure...
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Okay if it was bad, you could tell me seriously i 'd love honesty. Rather i admire it so please just tell me...if you could understand what i was trying to portray here.
Take care :))
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