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My Perfect Obsession - AbhIya FF;Updt:Pg24PMsLater (Page 7)

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 8:08am | IP Logged
finally anks edited my comment on page 1ROFLROFL

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 8:10am | IP Logged
chapter 1
wow interesting ankss
so piya is not a normal human
that's niceWink
will be waiting for the next part
continue soon and do pm meBig smile
u r amazingClapClap
 

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 8:53am | IP Logged
lovely update
I liked piya's relations
Continue sooon
Can u pleeez pm me?

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 10:19am | IP Logged
RESSS
itna chotu???
   EDITED=:))
finally i can comment now after a long tymLOL
i must say ur concept is totally outstandingClap n panch & siddy r like pia's caretaker...i can imagin panchi n sid as pia's mumma papa typesROFLROFL n pia like fighting moviesShockedLOL
fab chapterBig smile


Edited by 00123trisha - 25 May 2011 at 4:17am

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 11:51am | IP Logged
Originally posted by N_NS

Awesome chapter...!!! AM not sure but does Pia have an ability like Cole in The Sixth Sense??? I mean, can she see ghosts???????
I'll be waiting for the next chapter...
Love,
Nidhi :)

thank you. (: never watched sixth sense, but, yeah, she can see dead people. Smile i'll update ASAP. <3 

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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 11:52am | IP Logged
Originally posted by cuteshrishti

perfect.I luved it

thank you. (:

Originally posted by blossom1234

chapter 1
wow interesting ankss
so piya is not a normal human
that's niceWink
will be waiting for the next part
continue soon and do pm meBig smile
u r amazingClapClap
 

thank you. :D lol, no she's not. i'll update ASAP. finally unreserve toh kiyaa. LOL 
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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 11:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by renuka1997

lovely update
I liked piya's relations
Continue sooon
Can u pleeez pm me?

thank you. :D like the first post to get PMed. Smile
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Posted: 23 May 2011 at 12:25pm | IP Logged
Akanksha,

This was very well done indeed. 
Being of a yellowish tinged heart I tend to stay away from this genre but your brilliantly enticing opening words, the steady flow so that the trepidation slowly builds rather than engulfing all at once, encouraged me to read on, so I did.  Akanksha, you created that perfect eerie ambiance, so that we all wonder, even tread the basement or rather what is in the basement and yet you pause, delay and prolong that final so imaginatively with detailing of characters, that even though I want to rush along to that conclusion, I also deeply desire to drink in every word.  Just excellently and most proficiently done! StarStarStar

I loved the descriptions for past babysitters, just so inventive. Like old Mrs. Mathur, who'd play peek-a-boo with Pia, and Mr. Singhania, who'd ask weird questions, like whether anyone lived on the moon yet, LOL

When something moved, she forgot about not looking, but it was only the hanging man, and all she could see was his hand peeking from behind the furnace.  An excellently crafted sentence, just excellent. @bold, I loved this detail, delaying that end of the sentence and adding to its terror. Wonderful! StarStarStar

That end it going to give me nightmares BUT it was worth it! Just excellent writing!  Clap

Chapter one.

Akanksha, you have this amazing ability to pace your writing at your will.  In the prologue it was slow, wary and that terrible anticipation as you ease us towards an end we don't want to get closer to quickly, but inevitably we find our place there.  Here you begin in a hazy blur of fast random thoughts then, that interjecting '''Pia!'' so that even I startle.  Just excellent writing! StarStarStar

Again, I discern your skill as a writer, from that intricate detailing of characters, He'd probably murmer a vague, ''Yes, I'll see to it when I get back'' and forget all about me when he hung up.contrasting beautifully with laughing till we're out of breath well, I love how you subtly weave in her sorrowful past, just majestically done.  So simple and yet breaking my heart. then there wasn't anyone to run down the stairs with anymore.Clap

My dad flipped apartments like clothes. Since he was away on business most of the time, staying at one place wasn't important. For him, anyway. Again, that skilled writing. This sentence so concise and full of intricate detailing.  More of his character, their tumultuous history and their fragmented relationship, all neatly included in one sentence.  Just exceptional! Clap

Then that wonderful detailing again, He carried a lunch box with a superhero on it. StarStarStar

Akanksha, just awe inspiring stuff, seriously!
Star
Akanksha, sorry for my delay in replying, please add me to your pm list. Embarrassed Love Sabah


Edited by a little faith - 23 May 2011 at 12:26pm

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