ff-new avtaar {part-19, page-35} - Page 7

Posted: 12 years ago
oo this was a lovely update!! i read the whole thing in one go! good storyline, looking forward to reading more of it ! 
I like Jigar's character in this, he needs to be a strong man that does not take Crap nonsense from his wife all the time! so good to see rashi suffer, after what she's done with gopi, but i hope she changes better soon! 
Keep writing dear!

-Pooja
Posted: 12 years ago
Part-7, Page-9

ahem is standing with his collegues and drinking. they are laughing and talking.

lights are off.. music start {a song from race}
light focus on boys start dacing

All I Seee' {boys start dancing hip-hop dance}
In Hersszzz Touch

Wats D Fun ? Ah Ah
Do U Know Wht I Mean It Isz ?
Mmm
Sup Sup
Ooo
Can I Get Ya
Ooo
Can I Touch Ya
Ooo
Can I Get Ya
Ooo
Can I Touch Ya


{gopi is in western dress, she is in white top, round shape top 
but her shoulder can be seen and black mini skirt with long 
open hair}

{gopi turns and start dancing her waving steps,ahem is 
shocked to see gopi like this, all girls are standing here}

Zara Zara Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me

Ah Zara Zara .. Ooo Ooo Ooo

Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara
Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara
Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me
Ah Zara Zara
Ooo Ooo Ooo


(Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein {gopi sings and looks at ahem}
Beqkaar Hum
Dum Da Dum Da Dum
Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum ) '.. 2

Zara Zara Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me

Ah Zara Zara .. Ooo Ooo Ooo

Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara
Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara
Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me
Ah Zara Zara
Ooo Ooo Ooo

(I Love The Way You Touchin Me, Feeling Me {girls chorus}
Boy Im Gonna Be Rebelling
Boy My Little Secrets Gonna Let You Know
That Wen You Put Your Arms Around Me
I Love The Way You Surround Me
Oh Boy I M Gonna Loose Control ) '.. 2

Tere Hi Tera Hi Intezaar Hai {gopi comes to ahem and pulls her collar}
Mujhe To Bas Tujhse Pyaar Hai
Tera Hi Tera Abb Khumaar Hai {ahem hold her waist}
Khud Pe Na Mere Ikhtiyaar Hai ) '' 2

(Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum
Dum Da Dum Da Dum
Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum ) '.. 2 
{ahem hold her hand, gopi dance}

Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara {gopi leaves ahem and again dance with girls}
Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara
Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me
Ah Zara Zara
Ooo Ooo Ooo

Once Time Touch Me Like This {boys dance}
I Like What You Want
What You Give Its A Risk
Two Time Touch Me Like This
Together Wanna Fasa D Style The Way Tat A Lover
Three Time Touch Me By Far
Gets Over Here Comes The Crazy With Me In My Car
Its One Time Touch Me Like This
I Know Wat You Want, Wat You Can, Wat You Say.. My Lover


(Yeh Dard-E-Dil To Ho Na Agar
Sataye Abb Dooriyon Ka Gum 
{gopi dance with a boy by coming close 2 hm}
Behek Jaye Na Yeh Kadam
Hai Tujhe Meri Jaan Ki Kasam ) '.. 2

Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum 
{ahem is becoming jealous and tempt to get her}
Dum Da Dum Da Dum
Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum

(Touch Me Touch Me Touch Me
Ah Zara Zara {ahem stops waiter and takes drink}
Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me
Ah Zara Zara
Hold Me Hold Me Hold Me
Ah Zara Zara
Ooo Ooo Ooo) '.. 2 {ahem is drinking and seeing gopi}

(Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum
Dum Da Dum Da Dum
Bin Tere Sanam Is Jahan Mein
Beqkaar Hum) '' 3

{gopi is tempting ahem, ahem comes and hold gopi 
hand and take her toroom}
gopi: please sir leave me...what are you doing?
ahem:you only said na inside touch me touch me so i am touching {ahem looks at her with naughty smile}gopi: that was a dance to impress our clients.ahem: oh really i dont think so...gopi: as you wish...
gopi tries to leave. she reaches at door, 
ahem hold her hand &pushes her on bed, goopi sees ahem in shock}
gopi: dont come close to me..
ahem opens her coat and throw away...gopi looks at coat and thenahem..ahem opens his buttons of shirt...first button then second button.. gopi looks scared...ahem come close to gopi and lay on her.gopi is looking at ahem {ahh my god both of them looking so hot}.
ahem: now say i am so close to you, dont you want that i should comeclose to you...
gopi: no i dont want this...
ahem kisses on her neck, gopi close her eyes{rem that song "main yaha hoon" from "veer-zaara" when srk picks preety zinta in his lap and 
take her to bed and kisses her, preity holds him}
ahem: looks up {gopi eyes are closed}

 ahem caress his hand on gopi face gopi {opens her eyes}: why you left me ahem ji. you knowi cant live without you,

ahem {looks at gopi smiles}

gopi: {in tears}: i love you i never loved someone so much,i will never make  you apart from me, we will live always and happy {ahem looks  at gopi} i love you.

ahem: and i love you 

gopi closes her eyes and ahem kisses on her neck. ahem opensher top button, Gopi hesitates first then she also gives in whenshe feels his touch.. ahem kisses on her forehead and she closesher eyes. ahem gives a naught look at took the opportunity whileher eyes are closes, he kisses on her lips and she opened her eyesin shock! he smiles and she blushes... ahem again kisses gopi and this time she gives in! she hold the back of his head and pulles him towards her.

Slighty goes in to her face, he kisses her nose, eyes, cheeks forehead

and then finds his way to her lips which was light pink! His kiss was 

full of  passion and love! gopi response his kiss with love as well!


Puts her in the middle of the bed!
Then ahem holds gopi close and starts caressing her and she moans a
little ! He closes his eyes with her voice ecoing in his head!
she moans in his ears! gopi finally grip her hand to his and they
become one!

Scene shift

MM House:
kokila is very that ahem didnt came house yesterday. she makes call toahem he didnt pick up her call..
Scene shift:

The sun rises and brings a new day, gopi is  sleeping on ahem's
chest and their clothes is on the floor!

ahem opens his eyes, he looks at gopi. he saw time in watch, gopi who is 

sleepimg so relaxed, ahem was wearing his shirt and he was looking gopi

from mirror. ahem turns and come to gopi... 

he kisses on her forehead and takes her cellphone and 

leaves from there...

after some time gopi wakes up she saw here and there but could not find

ahem anywhere... so here the end of chapter dear 












Edited by pihu_rocks - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago

oh my sizzling hot hope the tv ahem be the same

loved it😳

Posted: 12 years ago
πŸ‘πŸΌ good update... hope u put such scenes for rashi and jigar too in future plz...
Posted: 12 years ago
dat was such a nyc update

i hope dis actually happens in da show
plzzz update sooon
Posted: 12 years ago
omg you just gave GoHam their first intimate scene, jake-neil has been crying for intimate details of suhaag raat, well you have given it to him...lolz.
Posted: 12 years ago
I wonder why Aham has taken her cell phone? Please update soon to let me know why.
Posted: 12 years ago
sorry for late comment
dear
ur damn good writer
rashi deserve that
all parts




Edited by simi91 - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by Nafisa_blossoms


Your last update you were really hard on Rashi, some might think it's bullying, but she's a sort of personality that needs a strong man, and this Jigar is telling how to jump and how high, so it's working, good update. πŸ‘πŸΌ


thanks dear for the lovely comment and ya you are right jigar has to be little bit hard on rashi because rashi has no respect for others not even his own husband... we can't say bullying yar as i have mentioned that jigar is also upset doing this kind of behaviour with rashi...
Edited by pihu_rocks - 12 years ago

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