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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 4:38am | IP Logged
Originally posted by belle_moi

Hey Girl/boy,
now, when i meant the story is not moving forward, i was not discouraging you. You are the best writer we've got at this place. I was seeing it from a very literary point. The way you have woven your story is beautiful, its soft. And nice. And i think you have a great potential. But you need to horn your skills if you are taking this business seriously. Kay? I hope i am not offending you. Okay, ya, you have presented us with certain changes, but nothing that took our breathe away, or let me make it more personal, my breathe away has happened. Isnt that what you read Sheldon or Deavor or king, or any other great writer for the say, for? That surprise element is missing. Let me warn you again, i'm being very critical, this is the best ff we have here. But it cant be the greatest love story of the world. That is what I meant, and I really enjoy reading your ff:)
Love.

P.S- I'm a little cynical, so its not just with you but everyone. CHILL!  


Okay, here, I would just like you to know, that yes, I'm extremely thankful that you're being so honest and everything, but you needn't be so blunt! I took your earlier comment in the right spirit, and I'm having this discussion with other readers to know their feedback as well! I wouldn't have done that if I would have taken your comment in the wrong sense! So, don't worry, I'm pretty chilled out already! 

And I would also like you to know, that being honest is one thing, but I do put in A LOT of effort in writing this story. Its my baby, and obviously I've put in all my heart and soul in it. Yes, one day, I do dream of doing big in writing, but at the same time, I'm still learning, I'm still new to this. I'm trying my level best. 

Well, none of my updates took your 'breath' away, well, I'm sorry it hasn't happened, but I will try my best to do it anyway!

And I really appreciate your honesty, and I know weren't meaning to be rude or anything, but you still do need to draw a line when it comes to this. I never took your comment in the wrong sense, so you really didn't need to be so blunt about it! I'm open to criticism, but in good faith! But thanks anyway for the compliments as well! Smile

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:05am | IP Logged
1) Yes I'm Really Happy With The Pace In The Story
Its Going Simply Great All The Twits and Turns Everything Is Great 

2) Well You Know They Are Living Together and a Little Bit of Close Scenes Would Be Good I Mean Not To Much and Yeah If your Not Comfortable With Writing them Then Thats OK But If You Wanna Give a Try Then It Would Be Really Nice Tongue

3) Your Writing Skills I Think Have Improved and I've Told You Before Too That You Just Write So Well Each and Every Emotion You Describe It So Well That I Can Actually Feel It  So You Know You Rock Girl Wink

4) Track Is Interesting Really Interesting Or Else People Won't Bug You To Update Soon LOL

5) Ok Yeah Scenes Yup I'll Like It More If There Was a Bit More Comedy Romantic Cute Scenes More Of Armaan and Rhea Relationship Would Be Really Cute Like You Know Armaan Being Protective Bout Rhea and Andrea and Sid Too I Mean I Think There Small Small Talks To Each Other Would Be Cute

Yeah, Thats All For Now I'm Tired Typing All This ROFL
 One More Thing Your Really Cute 


Take Care Hug
Afia


Edited by Wish_Al - 03 June 2011 at 2:15am

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:30am | IP Logged
I'm sorry if thats how you felt. That was not my intention, but if I write well(I mean, if I do. Friends say so) its because of the criticism i have received. Only criticism. I can be all sweet if you want me too, but i was just trying to make you realize the loop holes. You have enough people praising you here dont you? That should tell you that you write well but unless anyone criticizes you wont improve na? I just wanted you to be better, and I know you are learning. but you wont learn unless you know where to work on. Even now when my dad reads stuff I have written he rarely compliments, and in my school I was given a special award for writing. And I owe it all to him, because I have a mentor who is satisfied with nothing short of best. If you wanna be the best, look for criticism. I have said so many times that you write well, havent I? I was not being blunt, I'm sorry yet again. And I know you have put in an effort to write the ff, and i dont want that effort to go waste, that is why I'm pointing out the mistakes. I want the next one to be better, it was a friend's advice. Sorry if you felt bad. And if it offended you I'm never gonna write such comments again.
Love.
Antara:)

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by belle_moi

I'm sorry if thats how you felt. That was not my intention, but if I write well(I mean, if I do. Friends say so) its because of the criticism i have received. Only criticism. I can be all sweet if you want me too, but i was just trying to make you realize the loop holes. You have enough people praising you here dont you? That should tell you that you write well but unless anyone criticizes you wont improve na? I just wanted you to be better, and I know you are learning. but you wont learn unless you know where to work on. Even now when my dad reads stuff I have written he rarely compliments, and in my school I was given a special award for writing. And I owe it all to him, because I have a mentor who is satisfied with nothing short of best. If you wanna be the best, look for criticism. I have said so many times that you write well, havent I? I was not being blunt, I'm sorry yet again. And I know you have put in an effort to write the ff, and i dont want that effort to go waste, that is why I'm pointing out the mistakes. I want the next one to be better, it was a friend's advice. Sorry if you felt bad. And if it offended you I'm never gonna write such comments again.
Love.
Antara:)

I do know that, and I know you said it all in good faith! And that's exactly why I had that discussion the first place! And yes, I love being praised for my efforts, but I'm not sour to criticism either! I take it in my stride to work on the mistakes, but they need to be put in better words! That's all I was trying to say! Criticism is one thing, but even criticism needs to be explained well! 

Its okay, I didn't get offended, and please don't stop giving your comments or feedback! I was just saying that I prefer even tasteless things in sugar-coated stuff, so I can work in a better manner! That's just who I am! 

I just wanted you to know that I am trying, so please do not undermine my efforts! Smile

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:40am | IP Logged
See ,(if thats what you are aiming for)for a simple love story ur ff is excellent=)

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:42am | IP Logged
By "simple" I mean, cute, nice and something that makes you smile.

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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 5:42am | IP Logged
Originally posted by belle_moi

See ,(if thats what you are aiming for)for a simple love story ur ff is excellent=)

I am aiming at my story touching people's hearts! Its a little disappointing for me to know that it hasn't touched your's yet, and I will try my best to do it! Embarrassed
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Posted: 02 June 2011 at 6:53am | IP Logged

Hey dear...Hug

Questionnaire..Embarrassed...hmmm...

here goes my answers..Smile

1-I just Love the way story is going...not so fast ,not so slow...The way u showing AR relationship as frnds as lovers is awesome...ClapClap
Loved it to the core...Smile
 
2-ahem ahem moments concerned...well...yes I wud love to read that...nd also cute and Romantic scenes between AR...do write something intimate,,...I am sure u gonna rock that part also...Smile
 
3-ur writing skills...superb awesome
 
4.The current track is quite interesting...no need to changed it dear...but dnt make dat editor comes b/w AR plshhhTongue
 
5.I wud love to see more bonding and emotional moments between Armaan and reha...nd ya relationship of SID and AndreaBig smile

installment was awesome as always...awww armaan is rocking yar ...Love the way Armaan pacify panic Riddhima...
try to complete the part soon...TongueWink
thanks for the PM...
take care...
 




Lots of Love
jannat




Edited by jannat4ever - 02 June 2011 at 7:05am

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