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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 11:23am | IP Logged
first of all u r a awesome writer and the pace ur goin is perfect, i just admire the way u describe the characters and how they feel u should change the way u write. its ur choice wther u want to add intimate scenes. 

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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 11:48am | IP Logged
Response to the note

1. I think the pace is going finee... it did get a bit slow for a while but with Armaan's confrontation with his parents about his career, and Riddhima & Armaan moving in together - things are going at a good pacee i think!


2. I do think it'd be good to introduce more intimacy between AR now, especially as they're living together... the FF is about them being friends and lovers, but at the moment they still seem very mcuh stuck in the friends phase which is natural but I think it'd become unrealistic to accept them as a couple if there's not an increase in intimacy << esp now they live together, there's a lot of scope with that


3. I think you've always been a good writer :) You keep the youthful feel alive in your writing and make the events seem real enough for me haha so I definitely appreciate your writing :) do wish you'd update a lil more often thoughh


4. I LOVE LOVE LOVE the living together track but like I said before it does have a lot of scope and I hope it reaches its potential, whcih I'm sure it will :)


5. I want there to be more Armaan-Riddhima moments (cute scenes, intimate scenes), to see how theyre getting on living together... to see their relationship continue to develop..for Riddhima to show that she loves Armaan just as much as he loves her..etc


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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 12:00pm | IP Logged
heyya
awww sooo cute installment and anyone would have asked her out...
she actually noticed his dimples???if i would have been in her place  even at that time i would have thought about armaan's dimples...Day Dreaming
saw the note heres-
f are my answer
first-i am toh satisfied wid the speed but thoda speedup kar do a little bit maybe waise not uterly necesary...Smile
second-well i would like intimate sencesEmbarrassed but if u are not comfertable then its ok cos u aleady give us nice senes...Wink
third-yaaa ofcourse it has improved a lot...
fourth-i am loving the track dear but thoda spiceup kar dooo...
fifth-yaa 1 question-i dont get the aakash thingErmm like i got the krish thingy but i dont get the whole existance of the aakash guy in the stoy i mean whos he and why are armaan and riddhime talking about him????Ermm
 
plsss complete the parttt sooon...
lots of luv
sakshi

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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 12:04pm | IP Logged
Ok, so first, apologies for the disappearing act since there were no comments from me on the last 2 parts!
Travelling on work + additional workload + deadlines + an absolutely haywire couple of weeks = still catching up on updates + comments pending!!
Thats my sad story!

Now, coming to the last 2 parts:
Fantastic updates as always!
I loved this new side to Riddhima that you showed with regards to the Krish story! I simply loved seeing how deeply she felt when it came to her sibling!! We havent seen this side of hers earlier!! It was really intense!
Armaan as usual was a sweetheart in the way he handled her! Just love how well they understand and read each other!

I also think I probably understand the reasons for Riddhima not wanting to get engaged, a little better now! I think, alongwith Armaan, I too needed to know all that she revealed with regards to her dreams of passing on her diaries to her daughter!!! LOL


And the last instalment -- was awesome too!
I guess Riddhima will land that job, and that will be the Uh-Oh in that chapter -- how Armaan will react  to Riddhima working with Will who asked her out!!
The bit where she analyzes what she would have felt, had Armaan not been there, was very realistic!!! And the fact, that she felt AT HOME, as always in Armaan's arms, after that introspection,  just makes you go AWWW!!!! Shho Shweeet!!!

Cant say this enough -- Love the way the story is moving along!!
And cant wait for the next update!


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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 12:08pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sakshilovesAR

heyya
awww sooo cute installment and anyone would have asked her out...
she actually noticed his dimples???if i would have been in her place  even at that time i would have thought about armaan's dimples...Day Dreaming
saw the note heres-
f are my answer
first-i am toh satisfied wid the speed but thoda speedup kar do a little bit maybe waise not uterly necesary...Smile
second-well i would like intimate sencesEmbarrassed but if u are not comfertable then its ok cos u aleady give us nice senes...Wink
third-yaaa ofcourse it has improved a lot...
fourth-i am loving the track dear but thoda spiceup kar dooo...
fifth-yaa 1 question-i dont get the aakash thingErmm like i got the krish thingy but i dont get the whole existance of the aakash guy in the stoy i mean whos he and why are armaan and riddhime talking about him????Ermm
 
plsss complete the parttt sooon...
lots of luv
sakshi


For that, I would say you go back to the first few chapters of the story! In the beginning, Armaan had found the picture of a guy under Riddhima's pillow. He knew Aakash was her ex, who she'd just broken up with before she came to Cali, and who'd cheated on her. So he assumed that the guy in the picture was Armaan, and due to the reasons mentioned in the earlier chapter, Riddhima didn't bother correcting his assumptions! But obviously, it wasn't Aakash in the picture, it was Krish who was Riddhima's brother, who'd died due to cancer. 

Hope this solved your doubt!

Also, if you can tell me, what exactly you want me to speed up, then I'll definitely work on it! And also 'spice it up' in what sense, because yes, I do have a lot that you guys will think is intense! Wink
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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 12:23pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Castle-Beckett

Originally posted by sakshilovesAR

heyya
awww sooo cute installment and anyone would have asked her out...
she actually noticed his dimples???if i would have been in her place  even at that time i would have thought about armaan's dimples...Day Dreaming
saw the note heres-
f are my answer
first-i am toh satisfied wid the speed but thoda speedup kar do a little bit maybe waise not uterly necesary...Smile
second-well i would like intimate sencesEmbarrassed but if u are not comfertable then its ok cos u aleady give us nice senes...Wink
third-yaaa ofcourse it has improved a lot...
fourth-i am loving the track dear but thoda spiceup kar dooo...
fifth-yaa 1 question-i dont get the aakash thingErmm like i got the krish thingy but i dont get the whole existance of the aakash guy in the stoy i mean whos he and why are armaan and riddhime talking about him????Ermm
 
plsss complete the parttt sooon...
lots of luv
sakshi


For that, I would say you go back to the first few chapters of the story! In the beginning, Armaan had found the picture of a guy under Riddhima's pillow. He knew Aakash was her ex, who she'd just broken up with before she came to Cali, and who'd cheated on her. So he assumed that the guy in the picture was Armaan, and due to the reasons mentioned in the earlier chapter, Riddhima didn't bother correcting his assumptions! But obviously, it wasn't Aakash in the picture, it was Krish who was Riddhima's brother, who'd died due to cancer. 

Hope this solved your doubt!

Also, if you can tell me, what exactly you want me to speed up, then I'll definitely work on it! And also 'spice it up' in what sense, because yes, I do have a lot that you guys will think is intense! Wink
I think you mean Akash..!!! lolxx

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Posted: 01 June 2011 at 12:33pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Castle-Beckett

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Okay!

So, I want to know something from you guys! Its time I had a Readers' Opinion Session with you guys! LOL

Frankly, I need to know a few things!

First, are you happy with the pace at which this story's unfolding? In my defense, I have shown a lot of changes in their lives in the past 5 chapters! The whole relationship evolved, from best friends to lovers and now to room-mates! And Armaan's career, the whole Krish issue! 
But if you guys feel the pace is slow, let me know! Wink
I personally feel, that the story is moving at the right pace! If anything, I am with you when you stated that a whole lot has happened in the last 5 chapters.
Absolutely no need to rush through anything! I, for one, would love to see a typical day in the life of Armaan-Riddhima now.

Second, what are you guys expecting now...In more clear terms, do you guys want me to put in any kind of umm...Intimate, for a better choice of word, scenes between the two? They will come obviously, but I'm not sure if I write them well, so I won't be giving it in much detail! but if you guys want me to, well, I'll try! I'm just going to admit this, that I'm not very comfortable writing those! I don't mind reading, but writing in itself becomes a task! I will give it my best shot however, because that is an aspect I have to concentrate on in this story...!
They are living together, so I would think, getting more intimate comes with the territory! For sure, they need to get a little beyond just the kissing stage!! LOL I dont think I would want them going all the way though, so soon!!!  
And I would love to read their awkwardness/reactions for everytime, when they feel they crossed a certain line or did something new!!!! Wink  reminds me of how Riddhima burst out laughing when they first made out!! That was just so cute and so natural!
So yes, give it a shot, I am sure with your style, you will be able to do justice to writing such sequences too!


Third, my writing skills! Have they improved/reproved, are you guys liking it or not?! The reason I'm asking is, I'm not doubting my writing skills, that just happens when I'm in for any of my mood swings, but I need to know how it is anyway! Its very subjective, some may like, some mightn't, and I need to know both aspects! I want to improve!
I have always been a big fan of your writing skills right from the first chapter. I wouldnt change a thing!


Fourth, is this track interesting? I need to know, because if it isn't, I won't change the track, but I will definitely try and spice it up a little! So let me know this as well!
This track is interesting and a pretty natural progression! Just because they are in a relationship, doesnt mean others wont ask them out (especially considering how casual relationships are considered in the USA)
But what I would like to see here, is not the usual misunderstanding etc, Instead, would like this track or any such track to be something that strengthens what they have versus driving them apart!
So dont give us tears already!! They just got together, for heavens sake!!!


Lastly, if there is any particular thing you want to know, want me to clear out, any doubts, any confusions, let me know please! If there is something you'll want me to cover in this story, then let me know, if you'll want more comedy, or romance, or more cute scenes, or more of any other character, let me know! Like one of you'll asked me to show more of the Armaan-Rhea relationship, yes, I am going to, for those who want happy stories for Andrea-Sid, yes I will think of something for them as well, anything else you'll want me to show, PLEASE do let me know!
Hands down, more romance! More cute scenes! Especially becos they are living together. That progression from Best Friends to GF/BF needs to be shown! 
Anything centered around Armaan-Riddhima. The others can come in bits and pieces, but not have entire chapters dedicated to them! My opinion!

*Phew* that's one helluva questionaire, and mind you, I need answers to all 5 questions! Elaborately! Lol! LOL

Please, please, please do let me know! I know you guys comment, but many a times, some aspects, like the ones I've mentioned, are forgotten, and I really want to know this, so as to improve! So I'm just going to ask myself, so you guys can answer properly! Embarrassed

Do let me know! And along with your answers, do NOT forget to comment on the installment! And do unreserve your posts! Thanks! x 

P.S. Please have a look at the disclaimer on Page 1! Embarrassed

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