Originally posted by: sonia1000
Guys I wanna ask that if you think that the story is
not good and I m butchering Sid's character than PLZ tell me I'll stop
writing it. As I have told you all that I really don't know anything
about writing, its first time I wrote something, so I m sorry if I have
hurt your feelings. I seriously don't know if the story is good or not. I
asked one of my friend and told her the whole concept and she said it
is good, so I wrote. Again I m saying sorry if unintentionaly I have
hurt any one of you.
@karan_sidmodi...I m sorry that you didn't
liked the concept n its not my frustration, I just thought to write a
story, I never wanted to hurt anyone's feeling.
Hi Sonia,
I have been wanting to comment and hence also reserved my post in this thread
But before I could get down to writing my thoughts about the story I see that
you have posed a question to all us readers here.
Point to be noted I am just putting down my thoughts about character and story here
Story and Characterization - overall the plot of the story is going great till
now. The characterizations have been maintained well by you and kudos on that.
As the story progressed Riddhima due to that one incident of meeting Sid out
the mall got her pining for more time with him and wants to be friends.
It is possible reaction that a person may have. She felt the need for a person
with whom she could spend some time being herself and she is just fulfilling
it. As for Sid agreeing also does not look out of place.
Riddhima's gradual realization about her feeling was also
shown quite naturally. Yes, Riddhima did have feelings for Sid and for it to
re-surface is possible. And as you have shown she does feel it's incorrect but
then goes with the flow of emotions. Riddhima's character is appropriately
caught by you. She wants to be right always hence is always being torn between
the right and wrong. Also she is weak by nature due to which she tends to take
the easy way out. She knows what she feels for Sid is incorrect but goes with
the flow of her feelings cause that is easier for her it brings her comfort.
Further when they do get into an awkward situation, both their defences go up
and are avoiding eachother. Possible behavior.
The way the characters were behaving till now was perfect. Very much in sync
with the actual serial characters
Then comes the instance where Riddhima goes to Sid's house and Riddhima
initiate a physical relationship with Sid.
Riddhima I felt wanted to feel secure. And as Riddhima herself has portrayed
she does feel secure with Sid. Hence here going to his house was not out of the
way.
Secondly when she did ask him to
hold her I feel that was more for the reason of being comforted. The comforting
touch of a person with whom one feels secure works better than just comforting
words.
Then when she questioned Sid about being a bad person and that is why no one loves her
Sid affirmed that he did love her. Sid has always accepted Riddhima for what she was good bad worse whatever and he is just affirming that.
Yes she is a married woman hence he is trying hard to keep his distance. But Riddhima gave into her feelings. Why ... my feeling is that Riddhima always wanted that assurance from Sid that yes she mattered hence in flow of emotions with that assurance also coming her way she confessed and let her emotions take control.
In case of Sid, it was not much different. He wanted Riddhima to be comfortable always with whatever she shared with him. She confessed and initiated the relationship. Considering she was now married to someone else he did try to resist. But for him the turn of emotions were so strong for many reasons -
1. Riddhima's vulnerable state which he cannot handle ever.
2.Riddhima confessing her love for him Some thing he always craved to hear.
3. Riddhima initiating the relationship without any inhibitions which he always wanted.
As many say we are humans and hence he too let his emotions get better of him. They were too strong.
Going forward Riddhima upset with herself cause she blames to have forced Sid into this. She did not force persay but she did initiate which if she did not initiate Sid would not have.
So all in all your story I feel is going perfect in terms of flow characterizations etc So I think you should carry on.
Also one of the most important thing is ... the story is what the writer perceives, envisages and wants to portray hence I think you should tell what you think and we are here to read and read intently 😳
PS ... I completely forgot to mention ... your VM nice ... 😳
Edited by DJ.. - 12 years ago
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