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Gunjhun FF: Unequivocal Love *updtd part 09*pg 8 (Page 3)

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Posted: 08 May 2011 at 5:52pm | IP Logged
your writing is such that we're compelled to like your fanfic!

Really liked how guddu took care of runjhun. Continue soon!

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Posted: 08 May 2011 at 11:00pm | IP Logged
gr88 prt dear ...
good that guddu felt guilty ...
awwwesum precap ...updt sooon plezzz
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Posted: 08 May 2011 at 11:24pm | IP Logged

HAILA!...Mami's ise kehthe hain plan ka aisi ki thaisi hona...oh my Guddua is so caring...and he wants his dharampatni to win...superb...well my GUDDUA..u'll have to sweat a lil to earn your wifeys trust back...loved it nadeera...update soon sweets

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Posted: 09 May 2011 at 12:49am | IP Logged
Hey it's simply superb yarClapClapClapClapClap...
Really superbHug...
Update soon...

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Posted: 09 May 2011 at 5:32am | IP Logged
great update...mamis plan went in vain...poor souls...
update soon...
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Posted: 09 May 2011 at 3:10pm | IP Logged
very nice story. well written and interesting. update as soon as you can. Thanks for sharing Smile
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Part 5:

 

Runjhun and Guddu finish their dinner. Guddu lies down on the floor. Runjhun asks, " this is not a game, is it?" Guddu asks with smile in return, " Game? Who's playing game?" Runjhun tells him, " why is it always your decision that prevails? First you slapped me, then again you dabbed medicine on the wound, after that, you force me to eat dinner and finally you are telling me to sleep on the bed. I'm sure, if anything happens wrong tomorrow, you will again ask me to sleep on the floor." Guddu replies playfully, " O' Dharampatni!! Thank you very much for your co-operation. Now that you have followed each of my commands so far, follow this one as well. It will not harm you, will it?" Runjhun speaks sternly, " It's not the matter of harm and benefit. I will not sleep on the bed from today." Runjhun gets down from the bed and comes near Guddu and says, " please sleep on the bed and don't make an issue out of it." Guddu looks at her with a witty grin and gets up from the floor. He keeps looking at her and in return she looks at him as well. Runjhun sits down on the floor and they are eyeing each other again. Runjhun breaks the eye contact and lies down. Guddu smiles and takes his pillow from the bed and returns beside Runjhun. He drops his pillow beside Runjhun's. Runjhun opens her eyes and gets scared and speaks in a high voice, " what are you doing here?" Guddu sits down immediately and presses her injured lips with his injured hand lightly and whispers, " Shh... don't talk so loudly" and he continues, " So, you have already decided that you are gonna stay on the floor, right?" Runjhun nods. Guddu sighs in fake, " Then I don't have anything to do. I promised myself as well that I will sleep on the floor and I can't break it either, can I?" Guddu lies down beside Runjhun which leaves Runjhun in a shock. Guddu says sternly this time, " O' Dharampatni! I'm not gonna force you in anything and you know that. All that I want is to take care of yours. But No...alright! that's fine!! If I have to sleep on bed, it's better for me. I don't have any wish to sleep on this stone hard floor." Guddu gets up and attempts to walk. Runjhun grabs his hand and Guddu says, " Drama Queen!"

 

 

Runjhun is sleeping and Guddu is staring at her. Guddu is flowing away with his emotion which is completely unknown to him. Guddu doesn't understand what is happening with him. Suddenly he touches Runjhun's cheeks. Guddu thinks, " Hang on Guddu Sukla!! What are you doing? You are not supposed to touch her. you've just said so!! But...But...she is my wife...yes...I can touch her...I have right on her...she is MY WIFE." Then he touches her lips. He leans his face on Runjhun's injured lips in such a way that there is no gap between his fluffy lips and her swollen lips. Suddenly she opens her eyes but he places his injured hand on her eyes. He strokes his lips against hers. Then he brushes her lips with his tongue. Runjhun is shivering and tries to talk but Guddu doesn't give her any chance and takes her lower lip in him. Runjhun grabs his shoulder forcefully. Suddenly he gets a shock and leaves her lip and uncovers her eyes. He sees that Runjhun is glaring at him with tears in her eyes. Guddu thinks, " This is the second blunder of the night... I've just broken her trust once again. I know that Runjhun is not ready for this and even I don't want it either...well I dunno! What the hell is happening with me?!" He turns his face and tries to get up but Runjhun still clutches his shoulder. She whispers, " Don't stop" and closes her eyes. Guddu places both of his hands on the both side of Runjhun and leans on her.

 

(Next Morning)

 

Runjhun is sleeping on the arm of Guddu and he is hugging his wife dearly. What a night they both have passed!! The night was full of passion, full of raw emotion, full of admiration and a journey to discover each other. The smiles are still on both of their face. Today Guddu wakes up first, " O' Dharampatni!  Wake up! Get me a grand breakfast! Will you?" Runjhun opens her eyes, Guddu teases her, " Still tired?" Runjhun blushes and gets up. Before she leaves the room, she looks back at Guddu who has gone to sleep again."

 

(In the hall)

 

Amma is sitting on the chair, Runjhun is preparing breakfast. All the mamis are making breakfast for them as well. Guddu enters to the hall wearing his Safed kurta and his chain is vanished from his neck as he puts off last night. Amma is very happy to see Guddu's sudden change in attire. Guddu smiles at amma and amma smiles back. He bellows, " O'  WHERE IS MY BREAKFAST...i'M VERY HUNGRY TODAY" Runjhun is very embarrassed and thinks, " how shameless he is!" Runjhun brings breakfast for Guddu and Amma. Guddu says, " why don't you join us as well...what you say Amma?" Amma says, " yea Runjhun, join us... there are enough rotis...you don't have to make else." Runjhun joins them. Guddu says for the very first time, " the food is delicious, hai na Amma!!" Runjhun just shakes her head.

 

 

Suddenly three workers of Pandey Niwas come to Amma and complain, " our scissors are missing. Amma, how can we work without our scissors?" Guddu keeps eating his breakfast. But the three mamis suddenly become very uncomfortable. They are just eyeing each other. At that very moment Bantu Pandey enters with a huge smile into the hall holding three scissors in his hand and says, " Billo Rani! Look what have I found! These three scissors were kept under your stake of Sarees. So I brought these here. On top of it, these are not ours as well. Haven't I done right Billo Rani!" Billo replies in a very uncomfortable voice, " Tau Bantu ji! If these were under the stake of the Sarees, let these be right there! What's the problem in that? And what are you doing here? Go! Go to the room and get ready for the store!" one of the workers cuts off the conversation by pointing at the scissors, " These are our scissors Amma!" Billo tries to defend, "  Tau! How can this be yours? There isn't anyone's name written on these, is it?" the lady replied, " that's why I put that red ribbon on that scissor. That one with red ribbon is definitely mine!" All the three mamis stare at that lady.

 

 

This  incident amuses Guddu. He thinks, " So, these days, the Pandeys are stealing things from their own workers! Very good. As if stealing money from me was not enough! Bunch of shameless! All of them." And he turns back at Billo who clutches the scissors. Guddu gets up and goes near to billo and teases, " O' Jewellery Box!! Let me see the scissors. Why are you scared? Just want to see whether these scissors are of gold or not." He snatches those scossors and sees a blue string is dangling from one of these. Guddu stares at the string and recognises it to be from his Jeans which was cut into pieces. Smiles from guddu's face vanishes with a jiffy and tells Billo through gritted teeth, " So, you were behind the cutting mission of my clothes?" He suddenly yells, " Saali Billo, I'M NOT GONNA SPARE YOU!! I'M GONNA ABLAZE YOUR WHOLE STORE RIGHT NOW AND TURN HIM INTO A FIRE BALL #pointing at Bantu# NOW WATCH AND SEE".  He attempts to go out from Pandey Niwas but runjhun runs after him and grabs his hand and says, " Don't get angry please. First listen what she has to say. And why would she cut your clothes into pieces?" Guddu snapped, " Are you blind or what? Can't you see this bloody string is dangling from the scissor? And still you want to talk? Just watch how I torn apart each dress of the store!" after saying this he casts a furious look on three mamis. Billo speaks in a frightened voice, " Tau Guddu Shukla! It was Mitho jiji's  plan. She and Kalsanwali cut your shirts and pants into pieces." She added, " I just cut one or two just because you cut my sarees,  remember?" Mitho replies, " aye –haye Billo! Why are you telling lies in this very morning! Etc etc etc." Guddu bellowed, " I'M NOT GONNA SPARE YOU!!! YOU THREE WILL HAVE TO PAY FOR THIS!" Runjhun grabs his hand even tightly and requests, " Listen to me please... come with me just for a minute."

 

 

(In the room)

 

Guddu is sitting on the bed looking away. This time his face is an angry one. Runjhun is standing in front of him. Runjhun looks at him and comes closer. She puts her hand into his long hair. Guddu shakes his head and says, " get your hand away from my head... I'm not in a mood of joke" Runjhun doesn't do accordingly but says, " I'm not in a mood of joke either. Look at me." Guddu looks at her and sees her bruises once again very closely and says through his gritted teeth, " I'm not gonna leave them. For their act I raised my hand on you. They will have to pay for this." Runjhun sighs and for my condition, you are the responsible one. But did I react?" Guddu cuts her, " Why should you? You the the greatest Runjhun Anand Ji.  If you react who would preach me then?" Runjhun says with frustration, " why there is so much anger in you. Your anger outbursted last night...that was logical but how can you react angrily again on the same fact? Think about it!" Guddu Snapped, " thinking is not my job...its your job and you are doing perfectly well. Go ahead." He goes on, " let me preach you today regarding your problem. Do you know what is your biggest problem? You praise those persons who torture you like anything... and ..." Runjhun smiles and cut off his speech, " Right you are, that's why I always say, you are a person with a golden heart!" Guddu says sternly, " O' are you trying to compare me with your bloody mama and mamis?" Runjhun smiles sweetly, " Never! My enemy would not do that either. And why should I compare them with you? Do they care for me?" Guddu ays like an immature baby, " Oh! So that was just caring? Nothing more?" Runjhun breaks into laughter. Guddu asks irritably, " what's so funny?  Chalo  you better keep smiling, I'm going to the mobile centre." Guddu walks out of the room and pats at the back of his own head and laughs.

 

 

 

Pre cap:

 

Guddu is packing his bag and tells Runjhun that "30 days" is up.. so he is going to leave pandey niwas and he gives a large gift to Runjhun. 

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Posted: 10 May 2011 at 1:25pm | IP Logged
Awsome Nadeera...and Guddu is truly shameless...the romantic scene was superb...but what i liked most was Rhunjhun's last dialogue "oh so that was just care"..plastered a big grin on my face...
but the precap looks a lil bit scary...loved it update soon sweets..love yaSmile

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