Pyaar Kii Ye Ek Kahaani

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Posted: 13 years ago
Gr8 Characters.. Mish-Piya r sister brilliant.. Do Continue soon..n add me 2 ur pm list..

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Posted: 13 years ago
Nice Start.
Glad another FF has been started.Pm me its link so I can add it in the fanfiction list.
And I like the character sketch how you made Piya and Misha sisters.
And Shaurya and Panchi brothers.Really cute.
Are Abhay & Sid brothers?πŸ˜•πŸ˜†I hope not.πŸ˜†It should be Abhiya only.πŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 13 years ago
it looks really nice...u should continue..😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
Heya sweetheart nice idea :) continue soon :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
well i m not happy with the response i got.. i know dis show has gott mannny fans
anywayzz....for dose who commented and liked - a bigggg thnx πŸ€—πŸ˜†
m updating the first part today!
plzz oforgive me if u dont like it!
n i hope dat u will like it!πŸ˜ŠπŸ˜†
feeel freeee to commentπŸ˜›
 
 
PART ONE:  NEW BEGINING

*tring* *tring*...*tring* *tring*

The alarm is ringing constantly.. its 5 a.m ...two girls r sleeping on d bed ...d room is verrry smalll...n some packed bags r lying on d floor....

1 gal: chalo yyyaar uth jao....

2 gal: sone do na ...itnee jaldi kyu..

1 gal: bhul gayi kya....aaj hume dehradun jjane he...thoda to jaldi uthna hi padega...chalo ab uth jao...

2 gal:huh!...dehradun ke liye bus to dopeher ki he na!!...abhise kyu!!

1 gal: (thinks of something) misha dii!!....utho na!

misha: (sits up immedietely) piya!!..mene tumse kitnii barr kaha he mujhe dii mat bulaya karo....ajeeeb lagta he!!

piya: hehe...yahin ek tarika he tumhe uthane ka! chalo ab jaldi se naha lo...me nashta banane jati hu!

misha: thik he meri maa!

This was d everyday schedule of misha and piya...both used to live a verry normal n sweet life...everyday piya used to cook for dem n den dey would have their breakfast and den go to college ...after coming back home...both used to spend some time with each other discussing the happenenigs of college...den again misha used to help piya for making dinner and den both used to watch tv...n go to sleep!..

but today something was different...dey were goin to dehradun! to tk admission in new college...dey had got d permission ..

(in dehradun)

1 gal: bhaaiiiyaaaaaa!! aap hamesha itna ghussa kyu rehte ho ye din pe!

"dekh mene tujhe pehle hi bola he panchi..mujhse ye sawal mat kar...mujhe iske bareme bolna pasand nahi!

panchi: par....

"par var kuch nahi ..me ja raha hu college mein...kal se college shuru hone wala he

panchi: ( really angry) ha ha..jao sirf naaam hi shaurya he....batane se darte ho mujhe !!

shaurya: panchi!!...i m tired of this argument..once i tell you i dont want to answer this y cant you understand it

panchi: bhaiyya...m sorry mene rudely baat ki apse..par aap hi bolo..kya me jaanna nahi chahungi..ajj hamare parents ke death anniversary he ...tum kyu is din ghusse me hote ho????

shaurya: aisa....aisa kuch nahi he!

panchi: thik mat batana he to mat bolo...me apse baat nahi karne wali hu ...

shaurya was reallly surprised to c d usuallly quiet and polite panchi talk so rudely

"tumhe achanak se kya hua he"?

*no answer*

"bolo bhi panchi"

*still no answer*

shaurya is reallly tensed....he cant c his sis soo quite and sad...finaallly he decides to tell her d thing which he had been hiding from yearsss!!

"achhha thik he me tumhe aaj raat ko ghar pe aane ke baad bataunga"

"pakkkka??"

"ha baba ekdam pakka....ab jau??"

pachi hugs her bro and says she also needs to go to office

shaurya in his mind

"ab me kya bataunga panchi ko...kaise bataunga k uske parents ne ek ..."

"jaane de shaurya ab vo bhi badi ho gayi he..usse bhi janne ka haq he uske parents ki harkat ko"

saying this he goes...

(other side misha and piya are ready with der bags )

misha: ahh! atlast ho gaya! chalo ab

piya: i m soo excited misha ..me bohot excited hu....par bura bhi lag raha he...ye sheher chodke jaane me....yaha k doston ko chodke jaane me

misha: bas ho gaya rona dhona piya..mujhe bhi bura lagta he..par "new life is waiting for us "

piya; right.. our new life is going to start!...

misha: dehradun...here we come!!

~~btw- jus hav a look @ d name of d FF i gave it just now~~
Edited by Sanugr8fan - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
hei sanika,
really good..i felt it good..watever others may feel..but i think many wud not hav noticed this to be an FF..include FF in the title..then many of them will stop by..its really nice..cute sisters..n siblings (panchi-shaurya)..loved their initial part..but update was short..u better give us lengthy update gal..

b4 reading the update i was thinking looks like a new title..thought of looking..same time i received ur pm..so i recognised..
Edited by RB81 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Amazing Update.
Aww don't get Sad , I am also FF writer so understand when I get low response.But then in initial days , you'll face such things.
So tell me what do you prefer more.
20 People commenting on your FF just saying 'Nice Update!!' OR 5 People commenting on your FF and giving full analysis for the FF?
Do change the title of it to FF so then people's attention can be caught.
And usually I don't read FF's but this FF seems interesting.

Okay now me commenting.πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
The Update was written in Simple words which made it seem so original.Sometimes , writing too Hi-Fi just does not suit and the piece of writing becomes artificial.But your update was very Simple and that's the thing which I liked the most about your writing.
Then , about Misha-Piya , I liked the scene alot where Piya calls Misha , Misha Di , after hearing that I was shocked.πŸ˜²πŸ˜†πŸ˜†Imagine Piya calling Misha , Misha Di in Pkyek.πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
The sisterly bond seems very sweet and fascinating.In pkyek they are just awesome but in your FF the bond of Piya-Misha seem more strong.
Then Shaurya-Panchi scene.
So awesome there is a proper character for Shaurya unlike in Pkyek.πŸ€”
I also liked the brother-sister bond of Shaurya-Panchi.
Panchi is just too sweet with her brother.
And as a FF Writer myself let me advice you , put the suspense in your FF , don't reveal it so soon as it will attract more readers.
Likewise , I want to know about Panchi's parents , so don't tell it so soon warna all suspense will be gone.

That's all.Update Soon Sis.πŸ˜ƒ
Edited by Princezz22 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
gr88888888 fab workkkkk
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Posted: 13 years ago
Very nice work yaar....great update...πŸ‘πŸ‘
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Posted: 13 years ago
Nice part.. Misha is Piya's Di.. How sweet.. M not sure abt wat Shaurya is hiding from panchi bt watever it is.. hope he tells her soon.. Continue soon.. N u didnt disturb.. Pm me as n when u update d next part.. Thanx for d pm..lol..