Gunahon Ka Devta


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Gunahon Ka Devta

FF-"DESIRE"--Part 12"the Prom night"part-2 pg 47 (Page 2)

yoga23priya IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 16 March 2011 at 10:15pm | IP Logged

Hey Jo Hug

WoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooW Embarrassed

loved your's just awesome and Congo Shongo for ur first FF Clap

This is for you Embarrassed

way to go JO ......i will be more glad if i can help you in FF Embarrassed 

please continue to awesome work......

love ya Hug

PS forgive me for commenting late Cry

Edited by yoga23priya - 29 March 2011 at 9:55am

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Cuty16 Goldie

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Posted: 16 March 2011 at 11:16pm | IP Logged
Congo jo for ur ff,i liked reading it i hope the next man on bike was avi only.
I like dis pehle takrar fir pyar and all.
And all the best for ur exam take ur time.

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joliefille Goldie

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Posted: 20 March 2011 at 11:35pm | IP Logged



Part Two - Arpi's first day at College

"Oh no , now I have to go back , I can't attend class like this, quenched n socked in street mud oh God I wish I could find that idiot n his friend n give him a good lesson"

As the moment Arpi decided to return home someone calls her,

"Hey Arpita want a lift"

When Arpi turn around she find her aunts neighbor's girl Manjari, she knows her by her

Visits at her aunt's place.

Arpi-"oh Manjari thanks yaar but I don't think I should go like this, u know 'first impression'"

Manjari- oh girl , come-on in our collage everyday is first day n every impression is first,comeon don't worry boys will love u n welcome u no matter how much u r wet,"

Arpi- "well I was talking about teachers not boys of ur collage"

Manjari-"oops sorry! And why r u calling it my collage, its urs as well, see I m only a week seniors to u there, n everyone welcomed me, belive me u will start loving it soon"

Arpi-"Love again"

Manjari-"hun you said something?"

Arpi-"no, if u insist ok im coming but u have to help me in getting off this mud from my dress,"

Manjari-"ok sweetie, hope u find someone else too for it" she giggles as arpi give her angry looks, Arpi sits on her scooty and they reached collage within five mins.

When they reach collage, Arpi wants to get clean she ask manjari for girls washroom but before she can complete her sentence Manjari herself pull her towards the washroom,

Arpi-"ok ok, thanks for Ur help but u don't need to drag me, I m not in any haste,"

Manjari- baby may b u r not but I m, see there's his bike, it mean they r around here in our department,"

Arpi-"who, about whom u r talking about?"

"Oh girl, u can't understand just wait n watch, a word of precaution for u hold ur breathes because usually girls loose it when they saw him first time, atleast I lost it!"

"Oh girl, u r getting wired"

As they entered the washroom ,Arpi saw a girl in blue short skirts preening in front of mirror although she was looking ready for some party but she was putting more makeup,

Manjari- "hey Simple sweety, how r you?"

Simple-"as always fit n beautiful , he won again today can't face him like lil collage girl,   I have to look like a perfect mach for him "

Manjari-"ok, ok, u r looking perfect hey did u saw them is he with him"

Simple-"no, he was not with him when I saw them, May b he is there now"

Arpi- "hey Manjari, what r u talking about?"

Manjari-"I will explain it later, first go n get clean , by the way meet Simple our classmate n one of my best friends, other one is Shikha she must be in class now, u now perfect student type"

Arpi-(oh then, I think I hav to meet her first otherwise these girls will drive me crazy by there talks n craze for boys)

After few minutes when the trio reach at the first floor Arpi saw a group of boys n girls others were surrounding the one in egg white shirt, black hairs, dark blue jeans, n glairs hanging in its pocket, as he was facing them so she can't see his face, she decided to go for class n leave the girls ,as she turns to leave them ,someone calls from behind,

"Hey Fresher, where r u going? First day haan n u r going without any intro!"

Arpi turned as she want to know whose voice was it because it similar to that Biker.

"Hello sweetie, doesn't u think it's rude to avoid ur seniors like this?"

Arpi want to go without saying any thing as she was getting late for class but she decided to face the matter first-"Hello, I m Arpita Rai new in town n collage both is it enough , now can I leave I m getting late for class."

"o no not at all, you can't leave us like this ,its raining out there ,why don't u sing for us come on, just sing a song boys would u like to suggest any song,"

Someone from behind demands for 'Kanta laga','Munni badnaam',all typical item numbers, but the thing which surprise Arpi was that boy's expressions which were cold at his friend's suggestions he was gazing at her like he was reading her mind,

At the moment Arpi was about to burst someone enters the matter,

"Hey Avi, come-on yaar let the girl go, can't u see she is getting late, we can talk to her later"

"Ok RV if u insist," He said that with a devilish smile  n wink.Arpi got angry on his behavior, she don't like those kind of boys who misbehave with girls,

The other guy who stopped him came close to Arpi,

"hello Mam , I m Ranvijay Singh, sorry for morning,"


RV-"oh, u didn't remembered even u r such nice heart, well that biker who crossed n splashed mud on u was me, so its just way to regret, hope I m forgiven!"

Arpi-"oh it was u, its ok then I m happy to know at least some sincere seniors' r also here, thakns for favor"

As she moves towards the class Manjari joined her running,

"Hey Arpita u r sooo lucky yaar first day  n he talked to you n more on he give u smile oh my god"

Arpi-"Lucky! Who the hell was that idiot?"

Manjari-"what u don't feel anything, oh god r u girl or rock believe me if he smiled at simple or any other girl we need to take them for oxygen, he is the hottest guy of collage,Avdhesh Singh Thakur, dream of all girls "

Arpi-"all girls's what about u? If I m not wrong u were asking about someone else,"

Manjari-"oh he is Chulbul, my boyfriend.Avdhesh's best friend, so I can talk to him any time n he knows me to.

Arpi-"oh god u r only a week old and u have a boyfriend?"

"So what here, everyone has, look if u want to b known as normal girl search for Ur one"

"Oh plz I m not interested in all these waste of time, I m here for studies n will do it only"

Someone was hearing Arpi's view of love, she interrupts her,

"Oh my god, too realistic n career oriented u remind me of someone"

Manjari-"hey Shikha wat r u doing here girl I thought u were in class!"

Shikha-" well, that's where I was, but N.P mam(Smriti Irani-Tulsi) called off for the day so we can hav talk but first we hav to see her at her chamber, she want to talk us"

At N.P's chamber,

Arpi-"where is Manjari? Shikha have u seen her?"


Simple-"come-on Shikha we know where is she at this time, with Chulbul it's their tea time"

N.PMam-"hello girls how r u? So a new face in class, would u like to introduce urself?"

That's what Arpi don't want, especially when her newly found enemy Avdhesh was standing in front of the door.


Arpi-"yes mam, I m Arpita Rai,I m here for studies, I left my town,my family,my childhood friends  for it so I will give my best in it,I like to read novels, listening to music, animals  "


N.P-"that's enough , so u r quite confident about what u want to be, nice well I called u all to make a special announcement that very soon there will be a fresher's party, u can ask further details about it from Avdhesh,'Avdhesh come in boy'"

As avdhesh enter the room all girls give him dreamy look except two Arpita n Shikha,

After few moments both girls were out there in garden when Arpi saw Manjari sitting under a tree n crying, most surprising thing was she was sitting with Avdhesh.

When Arpi looked at that direction Avdhesh calls her by hand gesture, she felt annoyed by his gesture but both proceed for Manjari,

Avdhesh-"freshers, r u friends?"

Shikha-"yes, what happence with Manjari? Why is she crying?"

Arpita-"what happened Manjari?is everything ok?"

Manjari-"no, nothing is ok, I had fight with Chulbul, n he says I m not the one he wished for, he broke my heart."

Avdhesh can't stop his laughter n burst with it.

Arpi got angry on it,-"oh god Manjari hav u lost ur senses, can't u realize what r u saying n in front of whom? Everyone can't understand ur feelings"

She sits beside Manjari '"look I don't want to hurt u but that's the truth, it happens its not love its just infatuation, n it faded away with time,u hav to move on u can't cry whole life for such childish act,belive me after few days u r going to laugh at it"

("look I don't want to hurt u but that's the truth, it happens its not love its just infatuation, n it faded away with time,u hav to move on u can't cry whole life for such childish act,belive me after few days u r going to laugh at it")

As these words coming out from Arpita's lips Avdhesh's mind's start making a picture of girl saying same thing in much rude way,n a pain struck him badly those words feel like hot lade in his ears, which he can't tolerate anymore, suddenly he shouts "stop ur nonsense" n he leaves them n moves toward his bike putting his glares on.


sorry but i don't know how to update it so i m using post reply, hope u like it, thanks for ur comments, n will wait for more n plz no chappalsWink

Edited by joliefille - 11 April 2011 at 7:39am

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Posted: 20 March 2011 at 11:46pm | IP Logged
Me... first to comment...


Ur first AvIta FF...


I hope you are studying well for your exams...

Dont forget to send me a PM when you update next ok...

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yoga23priya IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 21 March 2011 at 2:34am | IP Logged

Hey Jo Hug HugHug

Wow it's really interesting to know how Avi will make Arpi  fall in love or vice versa LOL

Awesome Graphic #21Awesome Graphic #21

I Really liked when Avi was Angry.....Day Dreaming

here is a lots hugs of from me...........


love you HugHug

Edited by yoga23priya - 02 April 2011 at 12:49pm

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-Prashu- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 21 March 2011 at 7:51am | IP Logged
Heyyyyy Jo...HugHug
Avi got angryOuchOuchOuch 
Arpi is really uninterested in love...huh!!!
I wld love to see competition between them and love tooo sometime in futureWinkWink
Waiting fr Next PartEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

Edited by prash_t - 24 March 2011 at 3:32am

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joliefille Goldie

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Posted: 24 March 2011 at 2:32am | IP Logged
Hi everyone thanks for likeing it,Embarrassed
N as my exams r postponed so now i can  compleate it .
i m not soo good writer like u all ,
but try to make it as good as i can hope u will like it.Wink

Edited by joliefille - 24 March 2011 at 2:35am

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Cuty16 Goldie

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Posted: 24 March 2011 at 9:19am | IP Logged
Thanks dear for the next part,

reading the last part i thought arpi is a bit shy as she hate to do her intro and dont want her teacher to recognise her but after dis part i think she is a confident girl and straightforword i like these type girls.

Congo dear b'coz of ur exam postpond so u can do the updates faster.
U write realy well.

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