hiya Sharmilee!..you sure are on a roll lady..gosh two UDs hot off the press,great! okkkey..Hammie...loved readin these comments as always ...chalo let me reply :P
part:27/28~WOL
Hummh ,actually a pleasant change of taste from the usual D&N. It was bold of you to focus more and that too quite appropriately on Madhu and Baji,the lesser chracters when held in comparison to the main protagonists,but still of signifance especially in the male protagonists life.it was needed...have a lot of loose ends to tie up ...
27~the opening had a natural ,unaffected,untainted,feel to it ,the complete scenery painted with words reminded me the Canadian wild frontier! the log cabin/wooden house,how interesting well described Daya.thanks but I have never seen such a place here LOL ... So he plans to propose against the waterfall back drop,well nothing short of extra ordinary! after ll it is Dutta proposing to Naku.i know ...damn i wish i cud see this on screen lol ...
~ enjoyed the yearned bonding by Madhu with her brother Dutta.The ironical situation made the situation more profound as Dutta remained unawre of the true bond between this girl and him. The photo sessins were endearing.yes i kind of had worked this part out for later...but i dunno ...now i am just to eager to end this FF so i might just keep all of it simple ...
~and unfurled Madhu's story ,wanted to be a teacher,hmm. the discussion about their fathers was engaging. All the more so as we find out eventually that Madhu due to her new found bonding would continue to withhold from Dutta the important piece of information that their father's were not two different persons but one . How true also in life ,for personal fufillment we may withhold the truth from a person we latch on to,lest we lose the person if the reality is revealed,so we let things carry on as long as they give us what we want ..so well picked on point 👏. thanks hammie...u're spot on with reason i did that...she will want to hold on and therefore will not tell ...
~Madhu's narration of the echos of fears a child suffers from, in the scenario of an absent father was very moving;the feeling of being the child in the middle of conflicting parents,while they remained un aware ,was very sad. Further more the news to Dutta that apart from her having lived a life of truama as a child ,she now was living through the fear of losing a terminally ill mother. Of course we find out later that all her vulnerability was going to create more of a space in Dutta's heart. So cleverly thought of Daya,and well woven👏.again thank you ...hmm i have no idea how the day he will find out will turn out now...i am in middle of deciding...whether to keep it simple and not do all that i planned to do before...hmmm
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~right,so a clarification it was Madhu's mum who shunned her dad ,on suspicion of an unfounded illicit clandestine affair with another woman. Clever I wouldn't have thought one! well at least one thing was now clear,her dad was not she a B afterall .However Madhu now finds her self in a situation in which she may hav to tell her dad about his wife's last stage and therfore prompt a forgiveness session between her parents.And who does she ask for help ?why super man Dutta!
~so one final revelation,Madhu knows where her dad is and she reveals this to Dutta that he is the part owner of the cafe,of which little Naku is also a partner.So here comes,Dutta and Naku's mediation and peace efforts in Madhu's life...all makes sense Daya ,well done⭐️ for this part,enjoyed reading it.xxhammie
yup was trying to bring it all together in some sense
part 28~ good start,light hearted,to conter he gravity of the previous part. Baji's insecurity of losing his best friend's love at he altar was very amusing ,his whole chatter of being forgotten by Dutta after Naku becomes his fiance was so typical and Dutta over looking and underplaying Baji's jibes was reminders of the two's LTL1 days.Thanks for this .
I'm glad you liked this bit ...was actually thinking it was good moment to havee duji bit...
~ baji Madu's interaction was crisp and light .It was a brilliant idea of Madhu to present Dutta and Naku with photos of the marked event .The natural way that Madhu and Baji went to the earmarked spot for the event to snap photos was,well thought of to create a further bonding bewteen these two .so great Daya good thinking👏yup thanks...i figured i need to drive their relationship somewhere ...lol
~the brief moment of noticing and commenting on each other's attires was short but veryromantic.
especially her dialouge in Hindi,oh so LTL1.
~the blindfold;the lift; the Ganpati idol; the romantic meal;the table talk ,especially the Madhu issue,while simultaneously you have the futive pair out side getting ready for the after dinner event! was again well thought through.👏 aww glad you liked...i actually enjoyed writing this scene in general ...but actually coming up with the words...i must say there were moments i was getting quite flustered trying to word all of it...
~and then the highlight .. the couple out the photos being clicked; the bridge liit up;the petal strewn path; simply beutifully written ,all an expression of Dutta's love for his Naku.⭐️...the fire works the trees twinkling;the ring box;..and Dutta/Mishal,on one knee reciting those beautiful poetic words of sublime love...the fantastic expression of his love was simply excellent👏⭐️...and has to be the highlight of both parts...what a way to the build to the four worded question "will you marry me?"
👏👏 thank you mate ..very beautiful ..thanks for giving hammie joy ,yet again...please continue xxx hammie
really glad you enjoyed this part :) and thanks for the wonderful feedback ...will update asap...have not even started it yet though...😕😆 but will soon ...aim is to update both FF same time...will see how well that goes ...