Posted: 12 years ago
hiya Sharmilee!..you sure are on a roll lady..gosh two UDs hot off the press,great! okkkey..
part:27/28~WOL
Hummh ,actually a pleasant change of taste from the usual D&N. It was bold of you to focus more and that too quite appropriately on Madhu and Baji,the lesser chracters when held in comparison to the main protagonists,but still of signifance especially in the male protagonists life.
27~the opening had a natural ,unaffected,untainted,feel to it ,the complete scenery painted with words reminded me the Canadian wild frontier! the log cabin/wooden house,how interesting well described Daya. So he plans to propose against the waterfall back drop,well nothing short of extra ordinary! after ll it is Dutta proposing to Naku.
~ enjoyed the yearned bonding by Madhu  with her brother Dutta.The ironical situation made the situation more profound as Dutta remained unawre of the true bond between this girl and him. The photo sessins were endearing.
~and unfurled  Madhu's story ,wanted to be a teacher,hmm. the discussion about their fathers was engaging. All the more so as we find out eventually that Madhu due to her new found bonding would continue to withhold from Dutta the important piece of information that their father's were not two different persons but one . How true also in life ,for personal fufillment we may withhold the truth from a person we latch on to,lest we lose the person if the reality is revealed,so we let things carry on as long as they give us what we want ..so well picked on point 👏.  
~Madhu's narration of the echos of fears a child suffers from, in the scenario of an absent father was very moving;the feeling of being the child in the middle of conflicting parents,while they remained un aware ,was very sad. Further more the news to Dutta that apart from her having lived a life of truama as a child ,she now was living through the fear of losing a terminally ill mother. Of course we find out later that all her vulnerability was going to create more of a space in Dutta's heart. So cleverly thought of Daya,and well woven👏.
~right,so a clarification it was Madhu's mum who shunned her dad ,on suspicion of an unfounded illicit clandestine affair with another woman. Clever I wouldn't have thought one! well at least one thing was now clear,her dad was not she a B  afterall .However Madhu now finds her self in a situation in which she may hav to tell her dad about his wife's last stage and therfore prompt a forgiveness session between her parents.And who does she ask for help ?why super man Dutta!
~so one final revelation,Madhu knows where her dad is and she reveals this to Dutta that he is the part owner of the cafe,of which little Naku is also a partner.So here comes,Dutta and Naku's mediation and peace efforts in Madhu's life...all makes sense Daya ,well done⭐️ for this part,enjoyed reading it.xxhammie 
 
part 28~ good start,light hearted,to conter he gravity of the previous part. Baji's insecurity of losing his best friend's love at he altar was very amusing ,his whole chatter of being forgotten by Dutta after Naku becomes his fiance was so typical and Dutta over looking and underplaying Baji's jibes was reminders of the two's  LTL1 days.Thanks for this .
~ baji Madu's interaction was crisp and light .It was a brilliant idea of Madhu to present Dutta and Naku with photos of the marked event .The natural way that Madhu and Baji went to the earmarked spot for the event to snap photos was,well thought of to create a further bonding bewteen these two .so great Daya good thinking👏
~the brief moment of noticing and commenting on each other's attires was short but veryromantic. 
especially her dialouge in Hindi,oh so LTL1.
~the blindfold;the lift; the Ganpati idol; the romantic meal;the table talk ,especially the Madhu issue,while simultaneously you have the futive pair out side getting ready for the after dinner event!  was again well thought through.👏
~and  then the highlight .. the couple out the photos being clicked; the bridge liit up;the petal strewn path; simply beutifully written ,all an expression of Dutta's love for his Naku.⭐️...the fire works the trees twinkling;the ring box;..and Dutta/Mishal,on one knee reciting those beautiful poetic words of sublime love...the fantastic expression of his love was simply excellent👏⭐️...and has to be the highlight of both parts...what a way to the build to the four worded question  "will you marry me?"
👏👏 thank you mate ..very beautiful ..thanks for giving hammie joy ,yet again...please continue xxx hammie
 
   
Edited by Hamlet53 - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
hey champ i have edited my comments for 3parts 😛
 
 
loved it😳
Edited by chithoo - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
lovely updates dear

so first update for dutta and madhu lovely

second one for tasha superb

amazing preparations

way of proposing great

love it

thanks for pm

Posted: 12 years ago

Hi Daya, liked the double updates on the same page nd that's a miracle considering sometime back u were struggling to update regularly.😊  That is exactly what prompted me to comment. Yeah im myself been guillty of not commenting for the past 3 UDs .  So, read all of them at one go nd here im😳.

Dutta nd Madhu sharing a grt bond but dutta still unaware of the truth of their relation,  Hope Dutta will understand when he finds her truth.  Madhu's past was painful to say the least😲. She is caught up with so much bechari, good! her relaton with baji gettting back on track, liked how she made up with him. Luvd the meetin of Dutta with naku's parents, it was too good.. Baji teasing dutta b4 the proposal was cute.  The proposal was mindblowing, it was a masterstroke!👍🏼  especially naku's kiss just when he is about to say 'ILU', atlast! naku gets her reason to break the self imposed rule.  Madhu instrumental in the preparations shows how much she cares for dutta. But donno how the papparazzi act of madhu nd baji will be received by DN.

Thank u Daya, will wait for the next one. 
Posted: 12 years ago

@Suhana: thanks for wonderful comments...glad you liked it ...yup i needed to build on that relationship for many reasons so took the chance to do so...and yup second one all for tasha only ...heehee...need to make some progress with this FF...would like to wrap it up...thanks for reading & commenting..and yeah will work on updating FF's


@sona89: thanks for commenting hun...glad to hear u liked it...will try to update asap :)


@minakshi: thanks for reading and commenting...means alot...glad u liked their bonding...was trying to tie up loose ends...hmm will try to put focus on moving this FF to end...and as for madhu & baaji invading in privacy lol i will take care of that :p


@Missy: thanks missy...for ur comments after long time :P love reading it...yup she finally kissed him LOL ...i know that was highlight for you heehee..will try to update soon ...take care...will chat soon ...


@meriyaar: thanks for commenting...aww its ok..i know busy life ...lol i am in same boat...i res everywhere but take a while to de-res with uni and work...glad that you liked it


@Viji & Hammie...will reply in its own post for you both after :P


@Ranju: thanks for commenting ranju ...glad you liked it :)


@brvr: OMG *pinches self...rubs eyes...blinks rapidly letting reality sink in* LOL wow ur back :P  heehee it was the double update that got you here eh ...good good...lol i am trying to finish this FF so am trying to put focus into this one...so i guess that day just ended up focusing too much and as a result got u two updates :P glad you liked all the bits...hmm i  thought the first kiss to be appropriate here ...and the paparazzi will be taken care of no worries i have other plans for them heehee

Edited by daya0628 - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by chithoo


res 😛
 
me back again😃 your 24x7 radio without off switch😉😉😳
yippie me all happy and jumping around in joy 😛
 
will read all and comment😳
mhm
 
OMG champ i am speechless😳, yes it is ironic isn't it your 24x7 is on mute😆😆
OMG i did wonders... i have found the mute button 😲
 
starting from the 26 epi which i missed editing b cos of fever i loved loved the dad and damaad bonding and fell in love with the dad😳 yup me forgot D for once😃i have spl focus on father in this FF for special reason which u know 😉😛. Loved the way Adi and Ganpat bullied Nakku and yet their love for her shone thro the way they approved Dutta's love for her. Ganpat was quick to judge his would-be-damaad and felt pride in his little angel's choice😛.yup having fun yet they love a lot na .
 
Loved the lake scene and imagined nakku with her papa as a child resting happily on his lap and for her to have the same level of comfort and assurance in D's lap was sweet☺️. u r in dreamland i know...picturing urself in D's lap ...Then D carries his sleeping beauty in his arms and tucks her in her bed😳 awie my dad used to always say i slept like the "peanut princess"😆😆. aww peanut princess 😆
 
part 27 : wow bro-sis bonding😛, it comes so naturally to them😳, love it that D feels the same without even knowing😛, he feels it in himself to care for and protect her😍.yup it come's naturally...
 
So he takes her to the woodhouse 😍 and plans for the "Big Day"😳. Oh madhu never misses an opportunity to click😆 i want to see all those pics, especially those of D in the woodhouse, not to miss the 5 shots of bro-sis😆😆. Loved the way he teased her and spoiled her plans but in the process made the shots more realistic. i am sure she will love them this way😳. yup ...these 5 shots i would say are the best :P ...realistic ones of them being just them heehee and more memories attached to it ...
 
Oh u had to throw such a sad story inbetween of madhu's mom and her prayashchit😭 so the poor man was "not guilty" in this case. wonder how D would react when he knows madhu is really his sis😕  even i wonder 😕mmm knowing D i guess he will love her more rightfully😳 so no worries madhu dear jsut "tell him"😛. i love the way he respected her decision over her relationship with baaji, but still did not fail to mention the fact that his friend was hurting b cos of her😳 haaye haaye kinna pyar karta hai baaji ko😃.his first love hai na 🤣 or maybe he prefers Baaji with Madhu rather than Aadhi 🤣 Again before leaving the woodhouse he senses her discomfort and manages to get her to confide in him her darkest secret. I love the way you have allowed these two characters to develop a bonding, it does happen in life, there is always a connection between two people who care. So D now knows that the cafe owner is madhu's dad par when will he know he is his dad too😆😆😆. err i have to bring all these little bits together now...lol not sure what imma do :S
 
part - 28 🥳 my favourite  awwie 😍 i know i know...kept u in mind all the way 😉
thanks champ for such a romantic proposal☺️ koi kasar nahi choda tumne😳. no prob 😛
oh ho starting from DuJi love 🤣 to the final on his knee with the ring was just PERRRFECT😳☺️❤️ yup i had to break off the relationship btwn Duji so Dutta can decide officially btwn the two 😆😆
loved the way baaji was teasing him and why do u make D roll his eyes so much ☺️ bachi ko maar dalogi kya😡 he shrugs😳, he crosses his arms over his chest❤️, rolls his eyes ☺️and angles his head😍...haaye mai mar jawan😳.see because he is just too darn cute doing such things 😆😳
 
okie coming back, the lil imp comes to baaji only bcos she wants pics of her bro's big day...and the poor dude falls for her charms and escorts her😆.ROFL i know totally used him there but not to worry next update they will have a track for themselves ...well u might actually not want that ...lol i will have to split the screen space 😆 love the dress u have given nakku, simple yet best suited for the occassion😳. love D's outfit too😳. God but why is nakku so dumb, anyone in their sane mind would have known what D was upto...par i don't blame her u do lose yr sanity when u see him😳.exactly u won't be thinking straight in his presence ...plus she needs to live up to that 'tubelight' rep she has  so she goes thro the entire plan thinking it is a special fun date😃 then she gets the remote, thaank heavens she didn't think he got her some V game🤣🤣oh my lord viji ROFL... tubelight vahini😆 mmm nice planning with lights and petals and bless my heart the monkey on the tree didn't fall and spoil the moment for the two😆 while trying to take pics. i thought about it 😆 but didnt do it heehee but she is spunky😛.yes she defo is ...
OMG the proposal was beautiful and nakku actually sealed the deal☺️ D must be on cloud 9.🤣lol oh love the way u put that...sealed the deal heehee she indeed did ...and u r laughing???if u were in her spot i can just picture his expressions seeing u ROFL
 
Loved it champ and thank you from the bottom of my heart😛 hugs🤗
no problem that u stopped i couldn't have handled more, am breathless😆😆😆
haha yeah will continue soon ...i hope...😛
 
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by Hamlet53


hiya Sharmilee!..you sure are on a roll lady..gosh two UDs hot off the press,great! okkkey..Hammie...loved readin these comments as always ...chalo let me reply :P 
part:27/28~WOL
Hummh ,actually a pleasant change of taste from the usual D&N. It was bold of you to focus more and that too quite appropriately on Madhu and Baji,the lesser chracters when held in comparison to the main protagonists,but still of signifance especially in the male protagonists life.it was needed...have a lot of loose ends to tie up ...
27~the opening had a natural ,unaffected,untainted,feel to it ,the complete scenery painted with words reminded me the Canadian wild frontier! the log cabin/wooden house,how interesting well described Daya.thanks but I have never seen such a place here LOL ... So he plans to propose against the waterfall back drop,well nothing short of extra ordinary! after ll it is Dutta proposing to Naku.i know ...damn i wish i cud see this on screen lol ...
~ enjoyed the yearned bonding by Madhu  with her brother Dutta.The ironical situation made the situation more profound as Dutta remained unawre of the true bond between this girl and him. The photo sessins were endearing.yes i kind of had worked this part out for later...but i dunno ...now i am just to eager to end this FF so i might just keep all of it simple ...
~and unfurled  Madhu's story ,wanted to be a teacher,hmm. the discussion about their fathers was engaging. All the more so as we find out eventually that Madhu due to her new found bonding would continue to withhold from Dutta the important piece of information that their father's were not two different persons but one . How true also in life ,for personal fufillment we may withhold the truth from a person we latch on to,lest we lose the person if the reality is revealed,so we let things carry on as long as they give us what we want ..so well picked on point 👏.  thanks hammie...u're spot on with reason i did that...she will want to hold on and therefore will not tell ...
~Madhu's narration of the echos of fears a child suffers from, in the scenario of an absent father was very moving;the feeling of being the child in the middle of conflicting parents,while they remained un aware ,was very sad. Further more the news to Dutta that apart from her having lived a life of truama as a child ,she now was living through the fear of losing a terminally ill mother. Of course we find out later that all her vulnerability was going to create more of a space in Dutta's heart. So cleverly thought of Daya,and well woven👏.again thank you ...hmm i have no idea how the day he will find out will turn  out now...i am in middle of deciding...whether to keep it simple and not do all that i planned to do before...hmmm
-_-
~right,so a clarification it was Madhu's mum who shunned her dad ,on suspicion of an unfounded illicit clandestine affair with another woman. Clever I wouldn't have thought one! well at least one thing was now clear,her dad was not she a B  afterall .However Madhu now finds her self in a situation in which she may hav to tell her dad about his wife's last stage and therfore prompt a forgiveness session between her parents.And who does she ask for help ?why super man Dutta!
~so one final revelation,Madhu knows where her dad is and she reveals this to Dutta that he is the part owner of the cafe,of which little Naku is also a partner.So here comes,Dutta and Naku's mediation and peace efforts in Madhu's life...all makes sense Daya ,well done⭐️ for this part,enjoyed reading it.xxhammie
yup was trying to bring it all together in some sense
 
part 28~ good start,light hearted,to conter he gravity of the previous part. Baji's insecurity of losing his best friend's love at he altar was very amusing ,his whole chatter of being forgotten by Dutta after Naku becomes his fiance was so typical and Dutta over looking and underplaying Baji's jibes was reminders of the two's  LTL1 days.Thanks for this .
I'm glad you liked this bit ...was actually thinking it was good moment to havee duji bit...
~ baji Madu's interaction was crisp and light .It was a brilliant idea of Madhu to present Dutta and Naku with photos of the marked event .The natural way that Madhu and Baji went to the earmarked spot for the event to snap photos was,well thought of to create a further bonding bewteen these two .so great Daya good thinking👏yup thanks...i figured i need to drive their relationship somewhere ...lol
~the brief moment of noticing and commenting on each other's attires was short but veryromantic. 
especially her dialouge in Hindi,oh so LTL1.
~the blindfold;the lift; the Ganpati idol; the romantic meal;the table talk ,especially the Madhu issue,while simultaneously you have the futive pair out side getting ready for the after dinner event!  was again well thought through.👏 aww glad you liked...i actually enjoyed writing this scene in general ...but actually coming up with the words...i must say there were moments i was getting quite flustered trying to word all of it...
~and  then the highlight .. the couple out the photos being clicked; the bridge liit up;the petal strewn path; simply beutifully written ,all an expression of Dutta's love for his Naku.⭐️...the fire works the trees twinkling;the ring box;..and Dutta/Mishal,on one knee reciting those beautiful poetic words of sublime love...the fantastic expression of his love was simply excellent👏⭐️...and has to be the highlight of both parts...what a way to the build to the four worded question  "will you marry me?"
👏👏 thank you mate ..very beautiful ..thanks for giving hammie joy ,yet again...please continue xxx hammie
really glad you enjoyed this part :)  and thanks for the wonderful feedback ...will update asap...have not even started it yet though...😕😆 but will soon ...aim is to update both FF same time...will see how well that goes ...
 
   
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by daya0628


oh champTongue i was looking for a while for yr response and finally when u did i missed itConfusedOuch...all yr faultEmbarrassed u send me to la la land with D Embarrassedand then expect me to be in the right sense😆😆😆😆
yup u did wonders re...the first one to find the mute button...shshhh don't tell yr jijuAngry
awwie dad and daughter love for me nah champ...thank u 🤗 love u ...muahTongue
next update madhu shares screen space with D and IAngryAngryAngry okie maybe a little not equal😆😆
u got it right champ again😉 i am not at all the romanticConfused i laugh at all the wrong moments and the magic is goneROFL yeah i wonder too how D would react to that😆
okie now me tapping feet Zuby styleEmbarrassed when is the next updateTongue
miss u champ😭
Edited by chithoo - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by chithoo



oh champ😛 i was looking for a while for yr response and finally when u did i missed it😕...well i was waiting for u to push like button lol and re-reply as well haha and u finally did 😆😆
all yr fault😳 u send me to la la land with D 😳and then expect me to be in the right sense😆 yes i know i can do wonders with u...from making u mute to making u lose ur senses (<- i guarantee there would be some argument from srush about this bit) 😆 yup u did wonders re...the first one to find the mute button...shshhh don't tell yr jiju😡 this secret is safe with me...but we have discussed it on public forum 😆😆 awwie dad and daughter love for me nah champ...thank u 🤗 love u ...muah😛 yup and u know i too would love to write it...😃 i am excited to write that small part...because i know it would be to most meaningful bit for both of us 😃 next update madhu shares screen space with D and I😡😡😡 okie maybe a little not equal😆😆 ROFL ...yup i need to get a move on with her story...because thats the only one that needs a conclude and thats it ..i will end the FF with her story ... u got it right champ again😉 i am not at all the romantic😕 i laugh at all the wrong moments and the magic is gone🤣 yeah i wonder too how D would react to that😆 hahaha magic of the moment goes kaput 😆😆 okie now me tapping feet Zuby style😳 when is the next update😛 miss u champ😭
errr ummm i am not sure wen update will be...i need to write it still 😛 i was working on NTL but now will focus on WOL and then UNI work 😆 ...I MISS U too wait let me show u my face again 😛

 
Posted: 12 years ago
awwwie😛 spark hugs champ tight🤗...love u too😳...srush thenga😡 Edited by chithoo - 12 years ago

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