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Originally posted by: Hamlet53hi daya😛...finally read it! as per usual an interesting read with,plot unfolding...
Hammie 🤗 aja...
part24,WOL:~interesting recap of Adahi,Madhu,friendship as Ahdhi calls it... also Madhu's accident and her recuperation...also Ahdh's natural curiosity and threfore questionng of Madhu's relationship with both Dutta and his mate Baji...that's the kind of closeness friends require some times to nurture further bonding... well written in a casul style ,without making it to cumbersome👏...interesting cross questioning,about finer details of a relationship e.g...Madu's exact depth of relationship with Dutta and Baji,her true identity...particularly in terms of linkage with Dutta..looming question..was he her brother? was she distancing her self from Baji ,on account of Dutta??...these are the fine bits that put meat on the plot skeleton..so good going Daya!
yeah now madhu has someone to talk to about everything she feels regarding the situation and not have to bottle it all up...and Aadhi and Madhu's friendship will be highlighted often...thank you for the last line...I'm glad you thought soo 😳~ Daya ,some endearing things between Dutta and his Nakku never change,or cease to amuse.Her fussing over him to eat his breakfast sandwiches,and him scoring a one up by offering her a bite to eat first.😛
omg that is exactly why i put that in the middle...remembered LTL1 and her talks about eating toh snuck in a similar scene 😆~ interesting how people's unwitting behaviour [Madhu not answering her phone]can play on people's emotion's Baji's discomfort!
so much too...sometimes you don't realize that someone is worried about you and here you are not caring to let them know ...decrease that worry...but in this case she is on the line with the whole Baaji thing...~good old Nakku jumping to the rescue,problem solving!~enjoyed in a calm ,quiet soothing way the romantic part ,between Dutta and Nakku..the tactile and the emotional bonding ..with the hoops of nakku telling her family about him,and him being approved by them,dangling in mid air!...immediate family involvment..that which is of great significance between two people who are thinking about marriage!
actually i loved writing this bit...really did..and am glad you liked it too.. 😳~well trust you to stop where you did Daya! ..
LOL yup so this has been the biggest comment so far...that I stopped here 😆
ok methinks it's her dad who has turned up at her door step ...
and you will know whether ur right or not with next update ..whenever that isthanks for the update ,and pm enjoyed reading it...noo there are no errors in the script ..done no proof reading...you show offf😆oh hammie...lol u noe as soon as I wrote the proof reading bit I knew u would make a comment 😛 yes it's not a habit to re-read...but I know i make mistakes ...I find them often when I look over scenes after i posted it 😆😆...xxxlove sharmilee from hammie thank you for your wonderful comments...much appreciated..love you lots...phir milenge chalte chalte 😃
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