Complicated Love(MN,RM,SG)part5-pg15 - Page 2

Posted: 13 years ago
nice concept😳.........continue dear....😊
Posted: 13 years ago
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i loved the ch!
Posted: 13 years ago

Thanx for your comments.

Here is my update.

A girl was on her way back from a good jog at a nearby park. She was wearing a black sweat suit and had her hair tied into a pony tail. She was heading home with her ears and mind in the song that was playing on her i-pod. She started singing along with it.   

Dhoom Dhoom just take my life.

Dhoom dhoom just break my heart.

Dhoom Dhoom just tear apart.

A lele tu meri jaan.

*CRASH*

The next thing she knew she was lying on the road. Every part of her body was hurting. She could hear a heavy vehicle 's honking and guessed that that was the vehicle that hit her since she saw a blur vision of a man shouting at the driver but in vain. She could see the man rushing up to her and then everything went black.

He immediately took her to Sanjeevini.

 

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3 and a half hours later??????????..

 

In another part of the same huge city, Mumbai there was a street race which was to start any second. Amidst the competitors there was a guy dressed in a yellow jacket. All the girls were cheering for him. They were squealing and drooling over him. He looked at them and smiled. The race started and the handsome hunk was already way ahead of the others.

 

Meanwhile a girl was walking by the race track mumbling to herself.

"ye VIPs bhi na.pata nahi apne aap ko itna bada kyon samajhkar rakha hai. Unke wajah se mujhe is raste se jani hogi."😡

 

At that moment our handsome dude zoomed past her but he did notice her and stopped. The girl was already very annoyed and this put off the spark.

Girl: excuse me. Dekhkar nahi gadi chala sakta hai kya.

The guy retraces his tracks and parks the bike infront of her.

Girl(contd.): tum sare ladke ek jaise hote hai. Kisi bhi ladki ko thang??.

(she was speechless as he removed his helmet to revealing his totally killer looks.)😳

Guy:kya hua babes. Chup kya ho gayi?I know ki may itna hot hoon ki koi bhi ladki mujhe dekhkar aisa hi react karegi.

Girl: (suddenly comes back to her senses) dekho zyaada smart banne ki koshish mat kar. Pehle thang karte ho aur  ab line mar rahe ho. Sharm nahi aati.

(at that moment another race competitor passes by)

Guys:look babes. Mere paas waqt nahi hai. Dekho ab tumhare wajah mujhe koi overtake kiya hai. Rahul Grewal ko koi nahi hara sakta. See you later senorita.

(he winks at her and leaves)😉

Girl:that's Muskaan to you.(shouts to rahul.)

Girl: (to herself) ab main dekhti hoon kit u kaise bachegi.(she took her cellphone out and dialed a number)???..hello..police station?..

 

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15 minutes later???????

 

At a temple a girl had finished her prayers and was collecting the Prasad from the purohit.

Purohit: kaisi ho beti aur ghar pe sab khuch theek to hai na.

Girl: ji.

She closes her eyes and prays: bhagwan mere paas sab khuch hai. Main apne aap ke liye khuch nahi chahti hoon. Bas ek hi ichha hai ki di ki zindagi main aisa koi aye jo use apne sare problems se door kara de. Jo mere di se pyaar kare aur use hamesha khush rakhe.

 

Little did she know that god fulfilled her wishes even before she asked for it.😊

 

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Meanwhile...

 

Rahul won the race and all the girls crowded around him. Soon everyone left. Rahul was checking if the money he got for winning was of the right amount. Just then a police jeep stopped in front of him and took him to the police station.😕

 

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15 minutes later????????

Sanjeevini

 

The girl started to stir in her bed and when she opened her eyes she found the docter looking at her with concern.

Doc:how are you feeling.

Girl:better.

The docter gives some instructions to the nurse.

Doc: I think I will let your friend in.

The nurse and the doc leaves.

Girl: (thinks)how did muskaan know.

She then notices a young handsome guy enter the room.

Guy: tum theek to ho.

Girl: ji.aur aap?

Guy: introduction baad mein.ab mujhe tere ma-papa ko inform karna hoga.

Girl: mere ma-papa nahi hai.😭

Guy: oh. Sorry..theekh hai tu jis ghar main rahati ho uska number kya hai.

Girl: koi fiada nahi hai.😭

Guy:just tell.

She tells him the number. He was about to leave when he turns back and..

Guy: tumhara naam kya hai.

Girl: ji Nupur..Nupur Bhushan.

 

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PRECAP:

First day at Sanjeevini.

Mayur and RM meet again.

Samrat's entry.

Rahul-Sam meet.

 

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Well here is my first part.

Comment please.

If you liked it please press the 'Like' button.

-Lekha.😊

 

Edited by Lekha.Mayur4eva - 13 years ago
Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome start...
Pls continue soon..
Pls add me to your pm list...
Posted: 13 years ago

hey lekha first of all congo on ur ff

plz add me to the pm list
 
CS:
luved the character sketch, u described the characters really well, and seems like they all have a secret. waiting eagerly for what it is, hope it doesnt get revealed too soon though😉
lol still cant imagine that mayank can be dangerous, and rahul lol the flirt
feel really sad for nupur, but really sweet how muski is there to tc of her and also gunjan
luving all the couples already frm the CS even before reading the part lolz
 
part1:
gosh girl totally luved it how u showed athe 2 couples intro and gunjan.
aww bichari nupur ka accident hogaya but thank god mayank was their to help her.
and RM hehe rahul the flirt lolz😆 luved their convo/more like tang keeching
haww muski ne rahul ko police ke hawale kardiya, lolz that girl can do anything
and gunjan simple and innocent luved her intro toooo.
waiting for next part
precap sounds good
they meet again lolz cant wait what dhamaka RM will bring😆
cont sooon and dont forget to pm me
 
 
luv
pari
Edited by pari_smile - 13 years ago
Posted: 13 years ago
nice part yaar....loved it...
Posted: 13 years ago
mindblowing FF. love it soo much
Posted: 13 years ago
Originally posted by pari_smile


hey lekha first of all congo on ur ff

plz add me to the pm list
 
CS:
luved the character sketch, u described the characters really well, and seems like they all have a secret. waiting eagerly for what it is, hope it doesnt get revealed too soon though😉
lol still cant imagine that mayank can be dangerous, and rahul lol the flirt
feel really sad for nupur, but really sweet how muski is there to tc of her and also gunjan
luving all the couples already frm the CS even before reading the part lolz
 
part1:
gosh girl totally luved it how u showed athe 2 couples intro and gunjan.
aww bichari nupur ka accident hogaya but thank god mayank was their to help her.
and RM hehe rahul the flirt lolz😆 luved their convo/more like tang keeching
haww muski ne rahul ko police ke hawale kardiya, lolz that girl can do anything
and gunjan simple and innocent luved her intro toooo.
waiting for next part
precap sounds good
they meet again lolz cant wait what dhamaka RM will bring😆
cont sooon and dont forget to pm me
 
 
luv
pari
 
glad you liked it pari.
i so wanted atleast one RM fan to read this ff.
i am trying to not let the RM magic fade away.
Posted: 13 years ago
Hi dear
nice FF
loved it so much
plz add me to ur pm list
take care

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