Safar- FINALLY UPDTD-pt 17-pg 51-

Hi guys,

I'm planning to write a fanfic...which is called Safar-pyaar aur dosti ka

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Charectars

Dharam: A charming young prince who sticks to the rules and fulfils the criteria of a prince very well😳.(Vikrant)

Veer: The rule-breaker and the cool dude😎. The guy with immense skill.(Rajat)

Rajkumari Sneha (op. Dharam): The perfect princess.Very beautiful and never causes trouble. Modern day goody-goody two shoes😆(Siya)

Rajkumari Sandhya (op.Veer): Probably the only princess of that time who got to do everything a prince could do. She can't be bothered to waste her time sewing or beautifying herself when she could climb up trees, swordfight, fight with her cousin (Sneha)😆 and loads more.(Mughda)

Aryavardhan: The king of Aryanagar. A good king, who is fair. (same as serial)

Nivriti: The sister of Aryavardhan. A sweet and kind person. A good aunt for DharamVeer.😃 (same as serial)

Jaivardhan: A very jealous person. He's jealous of everything and everyone! His dream was to become the king of Aryanagar, but that position was given to his younger brother, Aryavardhan.😒

Agni: Not a bad person at heart.😉 But being in his father's shadow has made his mind slowly turn into evil.😈 (same as serial)

Sumeshwar: Rajkumari Sandhya's father. An excellent king and father.👏(Old Jaichand from PRC)

Sneha's parents: They are a nice set of parents.👍🏼 But Sneha's mother has a grudge against Aryavraths.😲 (same as serial)

Vikram: He is Sandhya's brother, and is very protective about his sister.⭐️ A very nice person, but has habits that will create interesting situations later on.❓ (Old Sanjham from PRC)

Karan: A very annoying person😉. Not very pleasant company. Veer's rival at the gurukul. (same as serial)

Anthara: A stuck up-good for nothing princess😳. Sandhya's rival at her gurukul. (same as serial)

Maharaj Bhimdev: A rival of Maharaj Sumeshwar, who strangely likes Sandhya.

Arjun: Sandhya's younger brother. A kabab-mein-haddi😆 (unintentionally). Is adored by both Sandhya and Sneha.😳

Tasha: A daku who works for Maharaj Bhimdev.🤢

Bahadur: Sandhya's horse. Sandhya has had him since she was six.😲 A very loyal horse, and like his name, is very brave.👏

 

Toofan: Veer's horse. He rides like the wind😉 and is capable to take care of himself.

 

Aandhi: Dharam's horse. He also rides fast,👍🏼 and is very well taken care of by Dharam.👏

 

Maharani Sadhna: She is Aryavardhan, Jaivardhan and Nivriti's mausi. She is very old-fashioned and believes that the oldest is the best. 😕When Aryavardhan got the throne, she was disappointed, and now, she strongly supports all of Jaivardhan's plans.

Table of Contents

Chapter 1- page 2-On the way to Sumaina (with pics)

Chapter 2-page 4-Dharam's first encounter (with pics)

Chapter 3-page 6-They start for the fair (with pics) 

Chapter 4-page 9-Finally at the fair (with pics)

I added new charectars because as my story is developing, I am getting new ideas, with new charectars in mind. So as the story moves on, I will add more and more charectars.

Edited by AY_candy_luver - 14 years ago

hey ur plot line looks good, pls proceed and write, i think after u put up the first chap everyone will have more feedback and suggestions to give 😊

Would love another FF, please do continue 😉

so far so gud...plz continue... 😳

yes dear..
plz continue with ur fan fic 😳
we willl wait for it 👏
dear..
ur story looks great. 😳 .might be better than current track 😕

👏 plz continure with ure fanfic

plz continue/start 😆 it looks great! 😃

Okay guys, time for my first chapter, please read, and crticise...be as brutal as possible 😆

So, here we go:

                    Chapter 1
DharamVeer had been travelling for hours. Their father had told them to go to Sumaina, and give a letter to the king (who was a very good friend of their father). After delivering the letter, DharamVeer would make their way to a fair...which they had eagerly waited to go to.

Veer: Aur kitni door hai?
Dharam: Pata nahi...pitaj ne to kaha thai-
Veer (interrupting Dharam) Pitaji to ye bhi kehte hain ki mujhe ek din pyaar hoga.
Dharam: (Smiling) Theekh hai, raste meing koi milega to puch lenge.

Veer spotted a boy wrapped in black riding on a horse. The only body part visible were the boy's eyes.

Veer: Dharam, woh dekho (points to boy) shayad ye humari madat kar sake.
Dharm. Chalo puchte hain.

The two ride toward the boy.
Dharam: Suniye bhaiya, yeh um...kya tha naam...um...
Veer: Sumaina ka rajmahal kis taraf hai?
Boy: Tum vahaan kyon ja rahe ho.
Dharam: Vo hume....
Veer: Jitna pucha hai, utna hi batao. Humara vakt mat barbad karo.

The boy raised his eyes in anger? Surprise? Amusement?

Boy: (Coldly) Itni jaldi hai to ek naksha lana chahiye tha. (Muttering to himself) Pata nahi kaha kaha se bandar aajate hain...
Veer: Kuch kaha?
Boy: Nahi. Chalo, mein tumhe Rajmahal tak chod deti hoon.
Dharam: Shukriya (elboying Veer and whispering) shukriya kaho Veer.
Veer: (Ignoring Dharam) Ab chale, pura din to nahi hai humare paas...

The trio rode silently. Finally they reached the palace gates. The guards at the gate bowed respectfully. The three entered the palace. The boy jumped down from his horse, whispered something in his horse's ear and purposefully started walking towards the palace door.

Boy: (Turning around) Ab vaha hi khade rahoge ki ander aoge.
Dharam: Chalo Veer.
Dharam got off his horse. Veer followed Dharam, and together they made their way towards the palace door.

The moment the three entered the palace, a lady came rushing with a gold plate. The boy took off his turban, and DharamVeer were shocked. Because they had mistaken the person standing in front of them. The person wasn't a boy, but a girl.

Sevak: 'Maharaj darbar mein hain, voh aapka intezar kar rahe hain'.

DharamVeer stared at each other, terrified... 


Sorry...it's really short, and well, it's pretty much rubbish..but I think it'll get better. I'll probably update on Monday.

Edited by rajatnmughda4ev - 15 years ago

👏 👏 👏
how nice! first chapter mein hi ek opp ko present kya 👏 😛

Thanks 4 replying😃