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Posted: 25 July 2008 at 12:09pm | IP Logged
nice part....very touchy and emotional.
especialy Shruti-Mom an Shruti-Dev  Convo
 
next Part will be Last part.......wating for Climax of FFSmile
 
 

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Posted: 26 July 2008 at 5:45pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sona.b

nice part....very touchy and emotional.
especialy Shruti-Mom an Shruti-Dev  Convo
 
next Part will be Last part.......wating for Climax of FFSmile
 
 
 
ThanksssTongue
 
yup this part was quiet emotional...not a happy one.but last part would be sad n happy both...sad n happy ending togetherSmile
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Posted: 03 August 2008 at 3:42am | IP Logged
Hi Adeena sorry yaar for late reply. Yes its a nice part dont u think the story is quite a bit incomplete coz u didnt describe how Shruti & Dev met. Kya woh college mein sath parte the, dost the? yeah me too waiting for the climax
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Posted: 05 August 2008 at 5:24pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by ocean_girl

Hi Adeena sorry yaar for late reply. Yes its a nice part dont u think the story is quite a bit incomplete coz u didnt describe how Shruti & Dev met. Kya woh college mein sath parte the, dost the? yeah me too waiting for the climax
 
Thanksss OGTongue
 
n yess i did nt give detail of when n how they met but i mentioned that they were friends...remember where i wrote that now dev has lost even her friendship.i think it is in 3rd part.n i also mentioned college once.it should also be somewhere in 3rd or 4th part.yeah they were college friends...i did nt give detail coz it wasnt included in main concept.hope u understand...
 
n yeah climax part...ll try my best to post soon.just wait a littleSmile


Edited by cool_adeena - 05 August 2008 at 5:27pm
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Posted: 16 August 2008 at 12:43pm | IP Logged
Wating for ClimaxWink
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Posted: 01 September 2008 at 1:14pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sona.b

Wating for ClimaxWink
 
sorry for delay.i was out of town for some days.i ll just update after a littleSmile
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Posted: 04 September 2008 at 2:47pm | IP Logged
okkk guys...here is its last one.....
 
LAST PART
 
Shruti ran outside the room hurriedly to call someone.going downstairs she spotted neil in the lounge.he was probably going towards his room.shruti called him.
 
shruti- neil...neil come here fast.woh dev....
 
neil saw her so much worried n horrified.he came towards her.
 
neil- kya hua?kya hua bhai ko.
 
shruti- neil.uss ne sleeping pills le li hein.he has become unconcious.
 
neil- ohhh God.
 
neil ran towards dev s room.shruti also went behind him.jhilmil heard some voices inside so she came inside n she saw neil holding unconsious dev with the help of a servant.shruti was also there after them.she moved to her.
 
jhilmil- shruti.kya hua?
 
shruti- jhilmil.dev ne sleeping pills le li.u go home.mein neil ke saath ussey le kar hospital jati hoon.
 
jhilmil- lekin....
 
shruti- try to understand yaar.neil akela hai.mujhe uss ke saath jana chahiyey.uss ke ghar waley hospital pohanch jayen ge toh mein aa jaon gi.ok.
 
she said n went outside hurriedly without listening to jhilmil s answer.in the car going towards the hospital,neil informed their parents on phone.
 
as they reached the hospital,dev was immidiately taken to the ICU.while neil n shruti waited in the corridor worriedly.after some time dev s mom,dad n raamya were also there.
 
dad- kaisa hai dev ab??
 
neil- ICU mein hai.doctors have not told anything till now.
 
dev s mom cried.neil consoled her.
 
neil- relax mom.he ll be fine.
 
neil was consoling his mom like a sensible n responsile son.he was not immature like most of the guys are in their teen age.just then rahul was there.he came to take shruti back home.raamya wondered to see him here.he looked at raamya n then went to shruti.
 
rahul- shruti di.chaliyey ghar wapis chalte hein.
 
now raamya understood why rahul was avoiding her n behaving strangely.
 
shruti went to neil.
 
shruti- neil...jaisey hi doctors kuch batayen please mujhe inform kar dena.
 
she said with tears in her eyes.she was really worried.she was being regretted that dev has done this for her.
 
neil- yeah.
 
neil nodded.shruti walked from there then.rahul looked at raamya once again n then went towards the entrance to go from there.
 
 
the night was much horrible.they all could not take even one breath of releif.n at the last part of night,the doctors told them that they are sorry.they could not save him this time.dev was no more with them.
 
 
zindagi mein toh sabhi pyaar kiya kartey hein,
mein toh marr kar bhi meri jaan tumhein chahoon ga.....
 
apne jazbaat mein naghmaat rachaaney ke liyey
mein ne dhadkan ki tarah dil mein basayaa hai tumhein
mein tassawur bhi judaai ka bhala kaisey karoon
mein ne kismat ki lakeeron se churaaya hai tumhein
pyaar ka bann ke nighebaan tumhein chahoon ga,
mein toh marr kar bhi meri jaan tumhein chahoon ga....
 
tum miley ho toh yeh ehsaas hua hai mujh ko
yeh meri umer mohabbat ke liyey thori hai
ek zara sa gham-e-doran ka haq hai jis per
mein ne woh saans bhi tumharey liyey rakh chori hai
tum pe ho jaon ga qurbaan tumhein chahon ga,
mein toh marr kar bhi meri jaan tumhein chahon ga.....
 
zindagi mein toh sabhi pyaar kiya kartey hein
mein toh marr kar bhi meri jaan tumhein chahoon ga
zindagi mein toh sabhi pyaar kiya kartey hein...........
 
 
shruti cried a lot.
 
shruti- jhilmil uss ne meri wajah se.....
 
she said between tears.
 
jhilmil- for God sake shruti.teri wajah se kuch nahi hua hai.stop blamming yourself.jo bhi hua hai woh uss ki khud ki wajah se hua hai.he was just a psycic case.dont even think ke teri wajah se kuch hua hai.stupid.pata nahi kya kya fazool batein sochti rehti ho.
 
jhilmil consoled her a lot.n by her efforts finally shruti started to compose herself again.
 
 
Ritu came inside n she saw akaash getting ready.
 
ritu- hello....kahan ja rahey ho tum?
 
akaash- mein shruti se milne ja raha hoon.
 
ritu- akaash.do u know ke tum abhi bhi poori tarah se theek nahi hue ho.tumhein rest karna chahiyey aur tum....
 
akaash- ek,do,teen....
 
he started counting something on his fingers.
 
ritu- ab yeh kya kar rahey ho?
 
akaash- din gin raha hoon....u know poorey chaar din ho gayey aur shruti mujh se milne nahi aayi.mein ne phone kiya toh bhi theek tarah se baat nahi ki.i think woh kisi baat se preshaan hai.
 
ritu- haan.woh uss ka friend tha naa....dev,he is no more.woh ussi wajah se udaas ho gi.
 
akaash- ohh....lekin yeh kaisey hua?
 
ritu took a deep breath.n then she told him everything.akaash was shocked to hear all this but he did not say anything.
 
ritu- abhi shruti ko kuch waqt lagey ga yeh sab bhulaaney mein.woh kuch time ke baad theek ho jayey gi.
 
 
n after few days,shruti became quiet normal.that day jhilmil reminded her about rahul.
 
jhilmil- hum log uss se baat karne waley thay naa ke woh preshan kyun hai.iss sab mein bhool hi gayey.
 
shruti- yeah.i completely forgot.chalo abhi chal kar baat karte hein naa.
 
they went to rahul s room.he was there sitting on his computer.they asked him so firstly he denied.
 
rahul- mujhe toh kuch nahi hua.mein bilkul theek hoon.
 
jhilmil- ab zyada nakhre mat karo.hum dobara nahi poochen ge.
 
shruti- come on rahul.hum se share nahi karo ge toh kis se karo ge.come on tell us wats the problem.
 
they insisted so rahul told them.n after that he said,
 
rahul- but i guess yeh koi itni bari baat nahi hai.yeh pyaar vyar,girlfriends toh life mein aati jaati rehti hein.
 
jhilmil- haan koi bari baat nahi hai.isiliyey tum har waqt moun latka ke ghoomtey rehtey ho.
 
shruti- rahul u r so stupid.iss mein preshaan honey wali kya baat hai.
 
rahul- lekin jab pappa unn logon ke saath koi proffesional relationship rakhne ke liyey bhi tayaar nahi hein toh woh uss ghar ke saath rishta bananey ke liyey kaise maaney ge?
 
shruti- tum uss ki fikar mat karo.uncle se mein baat kar loon gi.woh zaroor maan jayen ge.unn logon se rishta bananey mein koi problem nahi honi chahiyey,woh bohat achey log hein,neil aur raamya bohat achey hein aur.......dev bhi bura nahi tha....tum preshan mat ho.ok.
 
rahul- u know u r best sister of the world.i love u.
 
shruti- i love u too.
 
jhilmil- haan aur mein toh faltoo mein mil gayi hui hoon naa tum logon ko.
 
jhilmil said irritatingly.
 
rahul- thats right.
 
jhilmil- what?
 
jhilmil hit him with pillow.
 
rahul- shruti di ab aap aur akaash bhai mil ke inn ke liyey bhi koi stupid sa larka dhoond do,meri jaan choot jayey inn se.
 
rahul said n ran before jhilmil could hit him again.
 
shruti- larka toh iss ne already pasand kar liya hai...u love bhatti.hai naa??
 
she asked so jhilmil got embarrased.
 
jhilmil- shut up yaar.
 
rahul- shruti di.sab log aap ki shaadi ki date fix karne waley hein.kya khyaal hai jhilmil di ki shaadi bhi aap ke saath hi naa karwa den.
 
jhilmil- tum dono....ab maar khao ge mujh se.
 
shruti n rahul laughed but jhilmil became quiet serious.
 
shruti- kya hua?
 
jhilmil- shruti.kuch din baad teri shaadi ho jayey gi....hum log kaisey rahen ge terey bina.
 
shruti also became sad so rahul said,
 
rahul- dont worry jhilmil di.aap ki bhi shaadi kara den ge aur phir iss ghar mein mein akela rahoon ga...khushi se.
 
jhilmil- acha.ruko zara tum...tumhein mein khush karti hoon ab.
 
jhilmil ran after him in the whole room.n shruti smiled looking at them.
 
 
then the days passed n even the wedding ceremonies started.that was sangeet night.(okk guys now thats the last scene of this fanfic...just romance...hold on ur seats n read at ur own riskLOL)
 
Shruti just got ready to go downstairs to join in her sangeet ceremony.she was just about to open the door when someone pulled her hand from behind.she got whirled n saw akaash standing there smiling at her.
 
shruti- God...akaash tum kabhi nahi sudhar saktey naa.
 
akaash- nahi.
 
he grinned.shruti was about to say something when he intrrupted her n said again,
 
akaash- aur iss se pehley ke tum mujh se swaal per swaal karna shuroo kar do mein khud hi bata doon ke mein apni princess ko bohat miss kar raha tha aur yeh shaadi se pehley na milne wali baat mujhe bilkul stupid lagti hai toh mein yahan aa gaya aur aaj bhi mein pipe se charr kar balcony se hi aaya hoon...thank God ke mein time per pohanch gaya.agar thora sa bhi late ho jata toh tum neechey function mein chali jati....aur haan iss baar mein pipe se girra nahi aur mujhe chot bhi nahi lagi.
 
shruti- haan.pipe charrney mein bohat expert ho gayey ho naa.
 
akaash- haan bilkul.bohat baar charr chuka hoon naa.
 
akaash winked at her.he was looking very happy n he actually was so much happy that now after some time his love ll enter in his life n his princess ll be with him for life afterwards.
 
shruti- ohh really?
 
akaash- not really actually.mein jhoot bol raha tha.waisey bohat si larkiyan bechaari toh wait karti reh gayi ke mein unn ke liyey aisa kuch karoon lekin mein ne tumhaarey elava kisi aur ke liyey pipe se gir ker chot nahi lagwai.
 
shruti- lekin mujhe kaisey pata ke tum pehley jhoot bol rahey thay ya ab jhoot bol rahey ho.
 
akaash- acha.ek toh mein itni mushkil se sab se chup ker tum se milne aata hoon aur tum aisi batein ker rahi ho.
 
shruti- haan bilkul.
 
akaash- waisey princess u r looking so beautiful.kitna acha hota naa agar aaj hi hamari shaadi hoti toh mein abhi tumhein apne saath le ja sakta.
 
shruti- lekin mr. romeo aaj hamari shaadi nahi hai....chalo ab mera haath choro.
 
she tried to free her wrist which akaash was still holding.but akaash held it tightly.
 
akaash- kyun?
 
shruti- kyunke mujhe neechey function mein jana hai.
 
akaash- aur agar mein nahi jaaney doon toh?
 
akaash said with naughty smile.
 
shruti- toh.....toh mein khud hi haath chura ker bhaag jaon gi.
 
she said n pushed him back at once n ran towards the door.akaash was not ready for this so he fell down on the bed placed behind.but he was quick to get up n ran after her.
 
akaash- hey...
 
she just reached the door when akaash held the edge of her duppatta from behind.
 
shruti- akaash.....
 
akaash- itni asaani se nahi bhaagney doon ga.
 
shruti- akaash.leave it naa.
 
akaash- what yaar...thori derr ruk jao naa....please.
 
shruti- okk ab tum itni minnatein ker rahey ho toh thori derr ruk jati hoon.
 
shruti said coming towards him.
 
akaash- acha.ek baar shaadi ho janey do phir dekhtey hein kon kis ki minnatein karta hai.
 
he said playing with the edge of  her duppatta.
 
shruti- uss mein dekhna kya hai.minnatein toh tumhein hi karni paren gi meri aur woh bhi saari zindagi.
 
akaash- we ll see.
 
shruti- so u r blackmailing me?
 
akaash- aisa hi samajh lo.
 
akaash said putting his both arms on her shoulders.
 
shruti- soch lo....kahin mein ne shaadi karne ka apna irada badal diya toh rotey reh jao ge.
 
shruti said removing his arms from her shoulders.
 
akaash- arey yaar mein toh mazaak kar raha tha lekin tum toh sach mein mujhe blackmail karne lagi ho.agar tum ne apna irada badal diya toh zara socho mera kya ho ga.tumhaarey bina mein toh ji hi nahi paon ga.....
 
shruti- akaash....
 
shruti stopped him at once.
 
shruti- never say that again.
 
akaash- sach keh raha hoon.isiliyey tum mujhe kabhi chor ker mat jana warna.....
 
shruti- akaash.mein tumhein chor ker kabhi nahi jaon gi.ab yeh stupid batein bandd karo.
 
akaash has become serious now.he said coming closer to her,
 
akaash- u know shruti jab aap kisi ko apney dil ki feelings bilkul honestly nahi batatey toh uss relation mein misunderstanding ke chanes aa jatey hein.being honest is very necessary.n i dont want even a little misunderstaniding between us.thats why i want to tell u honestly that i love u soo much.mein tum se bohat pyaar karta hoon shruti...itna pyaar ke kabhi kabhi mein khud uss pyaar ko define nahi ker paata hoon.mein sirf itna jaanta hoon ke meri zindagi mein agar tum ho toh sab kuch hai...saari khushian,saarey rang hein aur agar tum nahi ho toh kuch bhi nahi hai.
 
his eyes got twinkling as one or two small tears approached them.he stopped with his head down looking at the floor.
 
shruti- akaash....i know that.come on now stop being so emotional....silly.
 
shruti said trying to cheer him up.they have always been emotional support for each other like in the hospital when shruti became emotional then akaash had cheered her up.
 
akaash looked at her n smiled.then he said,
 
akaash- arey haan...mein toh bhool hi gaya mein tumharey liyey kuch le ker aaya tha.
 
shruti- kya?
 
akaash- one minute.
 
his hand reached into his pocket and he took out a beautiful,delicate white gold payal(means ankletLOL)from his pocket.
 
shruti- wow...thats my favourite payal.
 
shruti exclaimed as she looked at her favourite payal in his hand which she had lost once in a function.
 
shruti- lekin yeh tumhein kahan mili?
 
akaash smiled at this.
 
akaash- well...u remember jhilmil s birthday party when we had danced together.so there...when i walked back from the dance floor i felt something jingling on my foot.i looked down at my foot n there was it dandling from my shoe.so i bent down n picked it up.
 
shruti- acha.aur mujhe wapis kyun nahi di?
 
akaash smiled mischeiviously.
 
akaash- haan pehley mein ne socha tha ke tumhein wapis de doon lekin phir.....
 
shruti- phir kya?
 
akaash- well....phir mein ne socha ke jab tak meri princess khud merey paas nahi aa jati tab tak mein uss ki payal se hi kaam chala loon.
 
shruti- akaash... u r just an idiot.u know this is my favourite pair of payals.i felt so bad when i lost one.
 
akaash- dont worry.mein ne issey bohat pyaar se,bohat sambhaal ker rakha tha.
 
saying this akaash sat down on his feet taking the anklet in his hand.
 
shruti- kya ker rahey ho?
 
akaash- give me ur foot princess.
 
shruti- its ok akaash.mein khud pehen loon gi.
 
akaash- i said give me ur foot.
 
shruti- oho akaash.tum kabhi kisi ki baat nahi suntey ho.
 
akaash- please give me ur foot m'am.
 
he kept on repeating n repeating.at last shruti raised her foot a little.akaash helped her to put her foot on his thigh.he raised her lehnga a little n took off her sandal gently.his fingers brushed ever so lightly on her foot sending shivers down her spine as he slowly weared the beautiful anklet in her delicate foot.he was now in a state of trance.he remained sitting there still even after wearing the anklet in her foot.
 
shruti- akaash.
 
shruti called him as she herself tried to control her even faster heart beat.akaash slowly moved his hands back from her foot.shruti removed her foot back from his thigh n was about to step into her sandal when her foot got tripped on her lehnga.she could not maintain her balance n fell down into akaash s arms.n they both remained looking into each other s eyes for a while.unaware of everything else they were lost in each other.shruti first came back to her senses.
 
shruti- akaash.
 
she called him who was still looking at her in a trance like state.
 
akaash- u know princess iss waqt mera dil kya cha raha hai.
 
he said slowly as if whispering.
 
shruti- kya?
 
she finally mustered the courage to ask.
 
akaash- mera dil cha raha hai ke waqt bas yahin ruk jayey aur mein yunhi tumhein dekhta rahoon....hamesha....
 
he was saying still lost in her eyes.
 
shruti- akaash.....
 
she tried to get up when akaash stopped her,
 
akaash- hey stop.
 
her lehnga was still tripped in between her foot fingers.if she would get up,she could have tripped on it again.akaash slowly removed it from her foot n then looked at her smiling.
 
akaash- now u can get up.
 
fixing her hand on his shoulder,shruti slowly got up.akaash also stood up now.
 
shruti- akaash...sab log neechey mera wait ker rahey hon ge.tumhein ab jana chahiyey.
 
akaash- tum toh uss waqt se mujhe bhagaaney ke chakar mein hi ho.u know tumhari jagah koi aur larki hoti naa toh....
 
shruti- okk toh phir jao naa unhi doosri larkiyon ke paas.
 
akaash gave out a sigh n said,
 
akaash- nahi ja sakta naa.
 
shruti- kyun?
 
akaash- kyunke meri life mein ek bohat pyaari beautiful si princess hai jo mujhe kisi aur ke paas jaaney hi nahi deti.mein kahin aur jaaney ke liyey bhi chalta hoon toh bhi merey kadam ussi ki taraf chal partey hein.
 
shruti- really...?kon hai woh?
 
shruti thought of teasing him a little.akaash did not say anything.he smiled n moved towards her.getting closer to her,he kissed her lovingly n then whispered in her ear.his lips slowly brushed on her ear saying,
 
akaash- shaid mujhe bataney ki zaroorat nahi hai.
 
then he slowly moved back.shruti opened her closed eyes.
 
shruti- lekin mujhe sunana hai.
 
akaash- who can it be except u princess.
 
akaash said giving a little jerk to her earring with his finger tip.
 
akaash- u know something princess...i m the luckiest guy in the whole world to get u.
 
he was saying with a twinkle in his eyes.
 
shruti- i love u akaash.
 
shruti just hugged him.in the whole world there was no better place for her than his arms.resting her head on his chest she thought that a beautiful life full of love,care n happiness is waiting for her ahead.
 
                                                                   love is a journey for two
                                                                    step by step,me n you
                                                                  the future we can not see
                                                                 let the love lead the way for
                                                                             you n me...........
 
 


Edited by cool_adeena - 05 September 2008 at 1:31pm
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Posted: 04 September 2008 at 6:06pm | IP Logged
okk guys i ve finished it finally.please guys i request to all of u whoever read it,please comment for one final time.please for once tell that how do u like it.how was it.if u guys give a detailed review then it ll be great.so please try to give detail review that which part u liked most or which part i ve not written well.it ll help me improve my writing.please guys its a request that all of u comment for once,final time n ur final review n if u give detailed review then it ll be great.thank uTongue

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