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A night in Lonavala (FF)updated 3pt pg 8 - Page 6

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Posted: 15 years ago
i jus have one word for uAWESOME...THNX FOR DA PM N CONT ASAP...dying to read more ar scenes...cant believe its ur first attempt...keep up da gud work πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ ...


luv,
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Posted: 15 years ago
wow this is so good..cant bleive that this is ur first attempt...keep up the good work...can u pls PM me when teh next part is posted pls...
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Posted: 15 years ago

OMG..!!>>wow dear..!!

It was a really nice prediction....I am really really wishing watever u rote wuld b true...!!...lovely...!!...gr8 job dear...!!....fantastic...!!

PLz update it soon...!!..πŸ‘

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πŸ‘.....PLz PM me whenever u update d nxt part...!!...

Edited by ksdbstjodi - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey,
i m so sorry for commenting late but the part was awesome and amazing story plzzzzzzzzz cont asap
luv ya
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Edited by magicgirlankita - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
all i can say...i relli wish it happens 😳 😳
hats off to u for writing it so beautifully πŸ‘
u rock girl!! πŸ˜‰
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Posted: 15 years ago

Hey!!!!!! i cant beleive it was ur first attemmpt it was simply gr8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! πŸ˜›    πŸ˜›

i luved it!!!!!! i just read both the parts and i felt that these were the most HEART-TOUCHING parts...i've ever read 😳


i was lost sumwhere while reading this!!!!!!!😍

i just wish this happens!!!!😍

i cant wait to read more!!!! 😳

u gotta dedicate the next part to me!!!!! lol πŸ˜†


i dunt beleive u wrote this at ur first try!!!!!!!! πŸ‘

it was just toooooooooooooooooooo goooooooooooooddddddddd !!!!!!!!!!!!! 😍   

U ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!! πŸ‘

can u please pm me when u write the next part....! 😳


i would really appreciate it!!!! 😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by: rockin_humz


Hey!!!!!! i cant beleive it was ur first attemmpt it was simply gr8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! πŸ˜›    πŸ˜›

i luved it!!!!!! i just read both the parts and i felt that these were the most HEART-TOUCHING parts...i've ever read 😳


i was lost sumwhere while reading this!!!!!!!😍

i just wish this happens!!!!😍

i cant wait to read more!!!! 😳

u gotta dedicate the next part to me!!!!! lol πŸ˜†


i dunt beleive u wrote this at ur first try!!!!!!!! πŸ‘

it was just toooooooooooooooooooo goooooooooooooddddddddd !!!!!!!!!!!!! 😍   

U ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!! πŸ‘

can u please pm me when u write the next part....! 😳


i would really appreciate it!!!! 😳



Hey thanx a lot
You have no idea how happy i am after reading all these comments
A VERY BIG
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Posted: 15 years ago
Ridz wake up early in the morning,before Armaan gets up.She slips quietly out of the bed so that she doesnt disturb him and saw him sleeping on the sofa with his legs stretching out of it and has wrapped his arms aroud his chest.she sensed chill in the air,she took her sheet from the bed and cover him properly with it. and then while adjusting it near his face she lost in his presence
she keeps admiring him and thinks to herself why did she hurt him so much ,he was the one who loved her without any condition and kind of worshipped her.but now she resolved to herself whatever may come she wont leave him..
never ever..
Ridz could not control herself and raise her hand to touch him on his face.but the second she touched him he opened his eyes wide ..she gets nervous
A..buri baat
R..Kya
A..sote hue ko ghoorna bahut buri baat hai
R..main kaha ghoor....main to...woh tumhe thand lag rahi thi.....isliye
A..to tum mere pass isliye ho taki mujhe thand na lage
R..(didnt know where to hide out of shyness)nahi...main woh
she gets up hurriedly and goes to her bag to take out her clothes
R..main tayyar ho kar aati hun warna naste ke liye late ho jayeege
and before Armaan could say something she locked herself in bathroom

Armaan was smiling to himself, he was so happy that finally they were back
more happy that all this while she also loved him, though her approach was different
but it was all for love.and that was what that mattered to him.
he said softly to himself " i love you Riddhima" and gets a cute dimple in his cheeks

Ridz comes out after a while and tells him to take shower
R..sab wait kar rahe honge Armaan tum jaldi se naha lo
A..abhi mera mood nahi hai
R..Armaan zid mat karo
A..Riddhima tum zid mat karo,ab apni purani aadatein chor do
R..ARmaan jao warna
A...warna kya ,kya kar logi
he comes close to her she was looking like a dew drop just out of bath,
her hair all wet and falling on her face, he gets butterflies in his stomach
when he ses her in wet hair. he could not control himself and touch her face and then
runs his index finger from the corner of her eyes to her lips and touch her there
Ridz goes all weak in her knees but she now no longer wants to fight her desires
she looks into his eyes and he also got lost into hers.
Suddenly bhua knocks the door
bhua..Riddhima beta jaldi tayyar ho jao
they both drift out of the dream world...
Ridz pushes Armaan into the bathroom
R.. tum jao main tumhare kapde nikalti hoon
She starts searching his bag and take out his clothes and she saw something and gives a wicked smile

R..Armaan jaldi karo, kitna time lagate ho
Armaan coming out in a towel
A..Ab itna to lagta hi hai
Ridz seeing him towel moves her back towards him
R..tumhare kapde nikal diye hai jaldi se pehan lo
Armaan starts wearing Gurmeet dressup and suddenly goes
A..mera baki saman kaha hai
R.. kaon sa saman
A..Riddhima mujhe pareshan mat karo, kaha hai
R.. kya ...kaha hai ( smiling naughty)
A..hmmmmm woh ..santare kaha hai
R..( starts laughing iuncontrollable) kon se santare
A..R i d d h i m a (gusse se)
A..bata do kaha rakhe hai
R..maine kha liye (starts laughing)
A...(bangs his hand on his bag)
R..kyo kya tumne khane the (starts giggling)
Armaan now knows how to teach her a lesson
he holds her from her wrist ,press it a lttle tight, and bend it a little
R..ouch
A..to tum nahi doogi
R..tumhare pass bhi to meri koi cheez hai tum mujhe de do main tumhe de deti hoon
A..mere pass..mere pass kuch nahi hai....maine tumhari koi cheez nahi li
R..shooch lo
A..(puzzled) haan riddhima mere pass tumhara kuch nahi hai
R...haai tumhare bag main hai
A..(confused) kya hai
R..mera kada
A..(smiling the way which highlights his dimples prominently) oye hoye
A..bade haq se
R..haan haq se..
A..kya..... main ya kada
R...(mischievously) Kada
A.. main nahi
R..nahi
Now Armaan holds her with more pressure and pulls her towards him
A..main ya kada......
R.. (quiet... looking lovingly at him)
A..bolo main ya kada
Ridz looks down and smiles
A..bolo Riddhima
R..(gently looks up) tumhare pyaar ki nishni kada
Armaan takes her to his bag holding her hand and gets the kada out of the bag
He takes it into his hands and looks at it fondly
he then opens the hook and put it into her arm ,Ridz keeps her hand over his
and they both look at each other.their eyes promised to be together for the rest of their lives
they both have tears in their eyes which are trying
to escape from their sorrows forever .
Armaan opens his arms and Ridz slides into them
R..I love you Armaan
A..I love you too Riddhima
A..meri zindagi ko phir se itna sunder banane ki liye thankyou
And ridz kissed him on his bare chest in return ....


Silent readers pls you can also say somethingπŸ˜‰
Edited by zzoombie - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
oye hoye... os ridz is also getting naughty like armi awww... tooo gud its nice to see them back like that together πŸ˜ƒ

update soon 😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
hmmmmmmmm very sweet
thanx for the pm
cont.soon