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Strings of Fate (Completed!) (Page 6)

desigal90 IF-Stunnerz

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Rhia was fuming, her head spinning out of control. She barely managed to drive all the way to her apartment, and slammed the door close behind her. How dare he have the nerve to expect her to make so many sacrifices, without any promises of commitment? Her hand fumbled in her purse for her cell phone while she muttered silent curses towards him. How she hated him. How she loathed him. How she loved him.

With one finally cry of exasperation, she dialed Ritesh's number. It was noon time, and he should be free to talk. She didnt realize how obviously her hands where shaking, and she settled down in a chair to steady her breathing. "Oh plz pick up," she prayed. Everything would be ok once she talked to Ritesh. Hearing his voice would pull her back to reality, and straighten her mind once and for all on this Saagar business. Finally, after what seemed like eons, Ritesh picked up. His voice came out dry and uninterested over the phone.

Ritesh: Hello?

Rhia (desperately): Hi Ritesh.

Ritesh: Hey, wassup sweetie?

Something was wrong. His words seemed hollow. Every time she called him nowadays, he always seemed distracted. Pushing that thought aside, she continued.

Rhia: Ritesh, just talk to me.

Ritesh: Talk to you? Rhia, is everything ok?

Concern finally seemed to filter into his otherwise callous voice.

Rhia: Yeah

She was trembling, and didnt realize when the tears had crept out of her eyes and started flowing down her cheeks in rivlet. Still, she attempted to steady her meak voice and tried to sound normal.

Rhia: Yeah, I'm fine. Tell me, we havent talked in so long. How are you?

Ritesh (irritated): I'm fine Rhia, but really jaan, this isnt the time to call.

Rhia (feeling disheartened): Why? You're off hours right?

Ritesh: Yeah, but an emergency meeting turned up and threw everything off schedule. I'm gonna have to get back to work right now.

She withheld her breath, not knowing what to say. The one time she needed him the most, he was backing away. Before she could stop herself, she hung up the phone and threw it on the couch. She was furious. Furious at Ritesh for being so cold, furious at Saagar for loving her so, and furious at herself, for wanting him with so much desire. Despite herself, her eyes kept glued to the phone. Anytime now, Ritesh would call back and apologize. Everything would be okay. As if on cue, her cell rang and she jumped to receive it.

Rhia (breathlessly): Hello?

The voice on the other line stunned her.

Voice: Rhia? Rhia is that you? Damn it, why arent you picking up my calls?

She shrunk against the walls and pursed her lips. Saagar, sensing her silence, droned on.

Saagar: I know you're angry at me, but plz, give me a chance to explain. You have to talk to me.

Again, she refused to speak.

Saagar (sighing): I knew you wouldnt listen, that's why I'm on my way to your place right now. Just a few blocks away

Rhia (finally whispering): No...

Saagar: I'm coming Rhia, whether you like it or not. I'm not about to lose you this fast.

Rhia: No, dont. Saagar plz.

Saagar: Too late, I'm already driving.

Rhia: Saagar you cant come here. This isnt right! Nothing's right! I cant let this get any farther. We cant get in any deeper.

Saagar (after a pause): We already are. Its too late to turn back. I'm not losing you, you hear me? I'm not...OH SHIIITTTT!!!

Rhia would later remember the rest of the events as a collection of sounds. She first heard him cuss out loud, then a loud screech which seemed to shatter her ears, and finally a crash that jilted her to the core. After that, a few sirens, and then finally, his whisper floating out from underneath the rubble over the phone line, almost inaudible, but distinct. "Rhia...." And all was silent.

umagaurav Senior Member

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Posted: 02 June 2008 at 12:34am | IP Logged
what the hell is going on wid this Ritesh?
continue soon.
desigal90 IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 02 June 2008 at 7:29pm | IP Logged
Doctor (urgently): Good thing ur finally here. We were getting worried. We needed someone to sign the papers. Follow me plz.

Rhia followed the doctor down the hospital corridor wordlessly. She was surprised that her legs were still able to support her since it felt as if her entire body was made up of jelly. The doctor, a man who looked to be in his mid forties with graying hair, had a kind face that was lined with stress. As he walked, he continued to talk swiftly with Rhia, not bothering to check her expressions. Not that it mattered. She was expressionless, emotionless. In fact, she felt numb. The doctor droned on, and she caught bits and pieces of Saagar's injuries. 3 broken ribs, a fractured leg, head trauma...he doesnt have much time... needs to be rushed immediately. And then he was throwing statistics at her. The chances of his survival, the chances of him being paralyzed, the chances of him slipping into a coma, the chances of him never opening those intense eyes again. And still she followed without protest. Doctor Ashok paused by a desk and pushed a stack of papers towards her, then paused.

Doctor Ashok: Who did you say you were again?

Rhia stared at him dumbly, then finally managed to find her voice after a few seconds.

Rhia: I'm Rhia Sh...(pauses, then begins determined) I'm Rhia Malhotra.

The doctor's eyes softened with compassion.

Doctor Ashok: I'm so glad you were able to make it here on time Mrs. Malhotra. I wont lie to you. Your husband's had a...terrible accident. But we're going to try our best (squeezes her hands)

Again, she nodded and watched the doctor flutter away from her and into the Emergency Room, leaving behind shattered hopes and an overwhelming fear. She looked down at the paperwork in her hands and strained her eyes. She felt as if she was trapped in a nightmare she couldnt escape from, and yet she couldnt feel a thing. She wanted to cry, but her tears refused to obey. In a daze, she signed the necessary papers and then walked, jilted to a bench at the side. She sat down slowly and then brought her knees up to her chest almost as if in defense. She tried to recollect how she got in the hospital in the first place, but couldnt remember all the details. All she remembered was getting a call back on her cell, looking at Saagar's number flashing on teh screen in disbelief, and then listening to a stranger's voice. He had narrated how "this man" had gotten into an accident and all the details of which hospital they were taking him to. "I called because your number seems to be the last number in the phone's history ma'am. I'm really sorry about this. The ambulance is already here."
And before she knew it, she had run down in her slippers without a jacket into the cold night breeze with her car keys clutched in her hand like a lifeline. She was jolted out of her memories by a hand on her shoulder followed by a gentle voice.

Voice: Are you ok Mrs. Malhotra?

She looked up to see a nurse gazing at her with concern filled eyes. She shook her head in a no, and was embraced in the nurse's arms, and finally, the first tear crept out from behind the barrier and flowed down her cheek, followed by a strangled sob, and then a torrent of tears that burst out without control.

Nurse (rocking her gently): Dont lose hope. God is very kind, and the doctors are working hard to save your husband.

She looked up past the ceiling, and uttered a silent prayer in her mind. "God...if there is a god...then you cant do this. You cant take him from me like this. Not yet, not when we had just found each other. Not now, not ever."

And in this confused state of mind, she drifted off into a restless sleep in which she dreamt of Saagar's hand slipping away from hers, and him disappearing into an immense darkness.
umagaurav Senior Member

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Posted: 02 June 2008 at 11:43pm | IP Logged
poor Saagar.
ttimpy Senior Member

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Posted: 03 June 2008 at 2:34am | IP Logged
gr8 gal...dont know ur name but its terrific....and tell u what.......the image of saagar in my mind is definitely Saif..........................i dont know why but i am imagining him as in Race but the gal is not Kareena.....i dont know why...she's still faceless.....

but the story is very reallly binds you.........
pl.PM if possible.

desigal90 IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 03 June 2008 at 2:36pm | IP Logged
Thank you!
Next update:

After many agonizing hours, the surgery was finally completed. The doctors emerged from the ER with exhausted faces and sighs. Rhia didnt need to approach them. She saw Dr. Ashok walking towards her, expressionless. He stopped before her, sighed deeply, and conveyed the situation to her. He hated this part of his job.

Dr. Ashok: The surgery was a success, but we're still not sure of anything right now Mrs. Malhotra. Lets pray that he regains conscience before tomorrow.

With an encouraging smile, he was off, leaving Rhia to fend off her own fears. The impact this accident had made on her was phenomenal. Never had she realized the extent to which she loved him. Only now, when she was almost losing him, did she realize with painstaking clarity, that her life would never be the same without him. Another array of hours crept by, and she found herself looking through the glass window into Saagar's room. He was barely recognizable. The IVs and bandages masked the flawless face of the man that had wowed her from the instant she set eyes on him. And yet, she had never felt these torrent of feelings stirring before either. As a nurse walked by, she called her out.

Rhia: Excuse it ok if I go inside?

The nurse looked around uncomfortably, and then after a quick consultation with the nearest doctor, gave her approval. Rhia pushed the door open and tiptoed towards Saagar's bed, almost as if she was afraid of waking him up. He looked so frail, lying down amidst the white sheets, that she was almost afraid to touch him. Hesitantly, she reached out and touched his cheek, expecting him to flinch. But he didnt respond. His eyes remained tightly closed.

Rhia (whispering): Hey Saagar, wake up sweetheart. (she lowered herself onto her knees) Look, you've been sleeping for so long now, its time to get up.

Again, she reached out and touched his cheek, and then moved to his forehead.

Rhia (whispering): Saagar, you cant do this to me. I cant believe you'd be this selfish, to just walk from life when things got complicated. These doctors (pointing to door) tell me that unless you wake up...(trails away, and then takes a deep breath) but I know they're wrong. I know how competent you are, and how you prefer to deal with problems head on, rather than running away. Come on, just wake up.

She closed her eyes in frustration, and pressed her fingers to her temples. She could already feel a killer headache coming on, but she pushed all her pains aside. With renewed determination, she rested her head on his pillow, facing his bruised right cheek and held his hand.

Rhia (forcefully whispering): 6 months are not enough. Its only been six months since we met, can you believe it? It felt as if I'd known you forever, but its only been six months. Six months are NOT enough to know you. Six months are not enough to laugh with you, to cry with you. Six months are nothing. I want to spend the rest of my life with you sweetheart...I love you Saagar.

And that's when she felt it. His hand, which had been lying immobile in hers, twitched. Rhia froze. She wasnt sure if what she felt was real or just her desperate imagination, so she waited.

Rhia: Saagar?

This time the movement was unmistakable. His fingers brushed the back of her hand and, feeling a rush of exhilaration, she sat up. She was breathing hard, feeling her own hand tremble with excitement.

Rhia: Come on Saagar, I felt it last time. But I want you to do this again sweetheart. Come on, do something. Saagar brush my hand again (she applied pressue to his hand with hers to guide him), come on. You can do it.

And after a few seconds, she saw his hand curling slowly, but surely, around hers. With a yelp of excitement she pressed the button the call a doctor. Dr Ashok rushed inside with urgency.

Dr. Ashok (panicked): What happened, is everything ok?

Rhia (speaking fast): He moved! Look, look at his hand, look how he's holding mine. Do you see?

The doctor's eyes widened for a moment before he regained composure. Walking to the other side, he spoke to Saagar firmly.

Dr. Ashok: Mr. Malhotra, do you hear me?

Silence at first, and rhia tightened her hand around his.

Dr. Ashok: Mr. Malhotra can you hear me? If you can hear what I'm saying, can you respond?

This time, in addition to squeezing Rhia's hand, Saagar's eyes fluttered as well.

Dr. Ashok: I think he's coming around! Mr. Malhotra, I need you to open your eyes. Can you do that for me?

His lips parted, and he moaned in response, but it was the most welcoming sound to Rhia's ears. She bit her lip to keep her emotions in check.

Rhia: Come on Saagar, open your eyes. We're all here with you.

Another moan, and his eyes opened halfway, and then shut back again. With more additional encouragement from both Rhia and the doctor, Saagar gave a deep sigh, and then after a few prolonged moments, opened his eyes slowly...focusing them right onto Rhia. She gasped. She couldnt help it, because she would have never thought that after his close call with death, the first object he would focus would be her.

Dr. Ashok, unaware of the connection before him, continued to babble on excitedly.

Dr. Ashok: Very good Mr. Malhotra, very good! Excellent!

Rhia (almost inaudible): Oh Saagar...

He opened his mouth, attempting to speak, but failing to do so. He looked at the doctor frustrated with his lack of vocal skills, and the doctor calmed him down.

Dr. Ashok: Its ok, its going to take a few tries. Keep trying.

Finally, he was able to muster out the first word, rough, raspy, but very much obvious.

Saagar: R..r..ia...

She smiled, feeling her vision blurring due to the influx tears. The doctor, witnessing the personal moment, smiled once, reminded Rhia to call him if she needed anything, and left the couple to enjoy the moment.

Rhia: You've been very lazy Saagar. (smiling)

Saagar: I..I..I'm s..soorryy ab..b..bout..what I s..said...earlier.

He was regaining control of his voice rapidly.

Rhia: Shhh (places finger on his lips), dont talk. You need to rest.

Saagar: I've been resting. I need to talk now.

Rhia (smiled at first, and then became serious): You scared me there for a second. You wouldnt wake up. I didnt know what to do.

Saagar: I know, I'm sorry. But I heard what you said, about wanting to spend the rest of your life with me. How could I not wake up? It was an offer I couldnt refuse

He grinned, but the pain it caused was visible in his eyes. She laughed, feeling absurd that she could even in such a terrible situation, but she couldnt help it. She bent down and kissed his forehead. When she straightened up, she saw him staring at her intensely.

Rhia: What's wrong?

Saagar: I was just wondering...where have you been my entire life?

Rhia (quietly): Finding my way through I guess. Just getting through life.

Saagar : Really?(after a moment) I've been lost.

This time, she couldnt control herself. She broke down and pressed his hand to her face. He felt horribly helpless, and tried to pacify her, but it was no use. For the first time since the accident, Rhia realized what a helpless position she was in. She had forgotten the dilemma they had faced together almost a day ago. And now, it wasnt as easy to say good bye to Saagar like she had that time. Because, she realized with dread, she was desperately and madly in love with him.
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Posted: 04 June 2008 at 4:59am | IP Logged
I liked the way U picturised the scene Saagar coming to senses when he heard Rhia's voice
desigal90 IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 04 June 2008 at 3:27pm | IP Logged
Thanks Smile

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