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JUNOON (my take... PART 2-updated

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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 2:11pm | IP Logged
Okay Guys I am going to continue the story of KDMHMD after today's epi that is 5-14-08 Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed hope you all like my work please leave your comments after reading my FF
This is the first part (sad yet intense Embarrassed )

After the jail scene with the call girl....

PREM: (shocked after listening to what that girl told him)     Chalo is baat par to ab koi shak nahi raha ke Heer aur mera koi toh rishta hai....
Yeh duniya chahe hamare rishte ko jo bhi naam de magar main janta hoon ke heer aur mere beech ek ankahi ansuni kashish hai jo hamein ek dosre ke liye mar mitne ka JUNOON aur takat deti hai.....
Main Hamesha yeh sonchta tha Heer ki main tumhara dard kaise kam karoon.... Magar tum hamesha mujhse door chale jati thi aur... aaj.... aaj to tumne dard sehne ki hi seema par kar di.. apne dard ko bhula kar doosre dard ko khushi khushi apna liya.....Tum mein yeh kaunsi sehensheelata hain??? kis mitti ki bani ho tum?????
   now he is walking on the road and reaches a park...He sees some couples sitting there and he smiles slightly.... He starts imagining himself and heer both in black clothes....Prem in a black casual T-Shirt/pant and Heer in a black and silver bordered sareee...

suddenly something goes in Prem's eyes and tears come out of his eyes...

PREM: (Wiping his years with a shocked expression) Mai.... Mai... yeh kaise bhul gaya ke tum kisi aur ki amanat ho aur main kisi aur ka... smiling again and taking something out of his eyes.... Yeh tinke ko bhi hamara sath gawara nahi.......
He looks up in the sky and shouts Kyun?.... Kyun woh harbaar haar kar bhi jeet jati hain... Kyun? uska dard mujhe tadpata hai....Kyun? woh meri nahi ho sakti......

He cries hi heart out...

Bas! Ab aur nahi mai uske dard ko nasoor banne nahi doonga woh kya samajhti hain sab ka ghum apne sar lelegi nahi.... ab uske dukhon ko mujhse ho kar guzarna hoga... Main uski woh dhal banoonga jo chahe khud tooth jaye magar pattoon(leaves) ko bikharne nahi dega...

Prem again looks up in the sky... with a fierce look

Main Prem Juneja aap se wada karta hoon aaj se uske saare dukh mere aur mere saare sukh uske...
    
                        PART 2
HEER: (walking towards the car with Manmeet)
     Mai ghar kaise jaon...sab log ghar par kya kahenge?

MANMEET: Kya hua heer? kya sonchrahi ho?
HEER: Nahi kuch nahi.... Thank You aap ne meri zamanat....
MANMEET: Nahi Yeh to Mera Farz tha... tum ghabrao nahi ghar par sabko mai samjhadoonga..

They drive off to the mansion...Manmeet gets a call and he leaves .. The Juneja family is sitting very tensed discussing about the hotel business when Heer enters...

PREET: (With a disgusted look) Ab kya yahaan hamein aur sharminda karne aai ho?

LALIT: Heer beta yeh kyun kiya tumne?
HEER: Nahi main to sirf...

D.J.: Main kya karamjali.... DJ ne aaj tak kisi ke samne aise bheek nahi mangi jaise aaj tere liye inspector ke aage hath jod kar teri waqalat kar rahi thi main...

Holding heer's hand tightly...

D.J: Kyun kisi aur ki ghalati apne sar par le li? Mahaan banna chahti hai? to ja na... ja kar kisi politician ke ghar mein jaa... yahan kyun mujhe aur mere logon ko badnaam kar rahi hai???
dragging heer to the door while holding heer's hand tightly and scratching her hand with her long nails... Heer crying and pleading her all the way..

D.J: Chalija yahaan se (she pushes her outside the door, heer is about to fall when Prem comes and grabs her.)

PREM: YEH KYA BADTAMEEZI HAI? Ek aurat hokar ap ek ladki ko adhi raat se ghar se nikal rahen hai? Kaisi aurat hain aap?
Aap janti bhi hain sachai kya hain? janti hai? he shouts at D.J
Prem grabs heer's hand and takes her inside...

LALIT: Prem beta kaun si sachai ki baat karraha hai tu?

PREM: wahi sachai bauji jo aap logon ne heer ki ankhon mein nahi dekhi..Aap logon ko kya laga Heer aisa kuch kar sakti hain?...boliye bauji....maa tum... aur chachaji aap?...
Bauji jis tarah maine yeh hotel apne naam karli thi taki aap logon ko jail na jaana pade usi tarah Heer ne bhi hamare ghar ki izzat bachane ke liye... hamein bachane ke liye apni izzat gira li...neelam kar li...
Are hamein to is ladki ka shukriyaada karna chahiye aur aap log.....chi aise sonch liya

ASH: Prem tum nahi jante yeh ladki apni chikni chupdi baaton se sabko behlaleti hai tum jante nahi kitni giri hui lad...

PREM: SHUT UP ASHLESHA!!! NOT A SINGLE WORD FROM YOUR MOUTH.. agar tumne heer ke baare mein ek lafz bhi aur kaha toh main... bhool jaonga ki hamara koi rishta bhi hai....

every one leaves...
Heer goes running outside..
HEER: (on the terrace) Bhagwaan yeh aap mujhe aisi saza kyun derahe hain... maine to sirf kisi ko bachana chaha.. maine soncha ke mere zindagi mein toh sirf gham hi gham hain agar kisi ki madad karloon to apna nahi to kisi aur ka dard kam kar sakti hoon... magar yeh bhi aap mujhe nahi karne de rahein... Kyun bhagwaan?
she cries and kneels down on the floor.... (Prem comes from behind..)

Edited by dollyandpinky - 14 May 2008 at 7:07pm

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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 2:16pm | IP Logged
Clap Beautifully written Clap I want it to happen Clap
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 2:17pm | IP Logged
Keep writing....this will keep me busy till 2morrow!
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 2:25pm | IP Logged
yaar tumhari toh jawad nahi
you rock girl love the prediction ,i relly hope hope this happens atleast any one part of your story that would be great
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dollyandpinky Senior Member
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:17pm | IP Logged
@ Shifali, Shabo 24, and Kkavy Thankz for ur support.... Smile This will keep me going....
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:38pm | IP Logged
u should be a writer yaaar. I like ur writing style....it's very romantic and i enjoyed reading
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:41pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by isha1022

u should be a writer yaaar. I like ur writing style....it's very romantic and i enjoyed reading

Hey
Thankz for ur compliment...... Smile
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Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:55pm | IP Logged
yeh plz do continue... dat was some very intense emotional writing.... revising ryt now n dis can kip me company LOL LOL
this was nice yaar Clap Clap Clap

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