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Pieces of my Heart-poem

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Posted: 10 May 2008 at 3:21pm | IP Logged

Hey everyone, I'm Aaliyah. I'm new to this section. This is a poem that i wrote a few days back. Please leave honest comments. I really want to know if u all like this.

    

Pieces of My Heart

 

I did what I didn't want to do

I shattered my heart and broke up with you

I know what I did wasn't right

Taking you away from my sight

 

I left the country to run away from the pain

Still I realized there was nothing left to gain

I lost you, my most valuable treasure

Because of resistance, confusion and insecurity

And for that let pain overrule

Let death come close and envelope me

 

I saw your words on the screen

Telling me I shattered my heart

I told you I took the pieces and spread them apart

You said you'll be my glue

No, I said, I can never stick with you

 

        I can never put those pieces back together

Though I yearn to everyday

Living without you is torture

And from this pitiful existence I wish to take myself away

Away

Away

So, what do you all think?

~Aaliyah~



Edited by indigal07 - 10 May 2008 at 6:41pm

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Posted: 11 May 2008 at 2:39pm | IP Logged
thats very nice Embarrassed Embarrassed keep it up Clap
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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 7:55pm | IP Logged
Thanks so much! Big smile I owe it all to my friend!! she gave me all the ideas and i just put them together..so we're like co-authors of the poem! LOL
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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 7:57pm | IP Logged
cool ! thats the same with my friend ! we write stuff together ! and pretty soon, im gonna post everything she rights here ! her stuff is pretty good Wink
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Posted: 13 May 2008 at 2:06pm | IP Logged
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Very well written....a bit touchy though.. Embarrassed
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Posted: 13 May 2008 at 9:37pm | IP Logged

Originally posted by *Nishi*

cool ! thats the same with my friend ! we write stuff together ! and pretty soon, im gonna post everything she rights here ! her stuff is pretty good Wink

cool! nice similarity...Smile

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Posted: 13 May 2008 at 9:38pm | IP Logged

Originally posted by Saara COMB

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Very well written....a bit touchy though.. Embarrassed

thanks! yea i tend to write touchy things at times...EmbarrassedLOL

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Posted: 15 May 2008 at 7:17am | IP Logged
It was really nice.. and a shattered emotions could be seen.. I wish the poem be more long to understnad it more deeply.. but anyways.. it was a good one to read ... u should keep writing such poems it will give the thoughts a form.. Big smile

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