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zen girl Senior Member
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Posted: 09 May 2008 at 5:08am | IP Logged

Ok, so this is my first ever fanfic, and it's about Rahul and Muskaan from dmg

 

Just bear in mind that I am not from India, and have never actually learnt Hindi, just the stuff from movies and serials!

Enjoy!

 

Part 1

~

 

15 years ago…

 

'yeh kya Muskaan?'

'ha muskaaaaaaaaaaaan yeh kya?'

The older boys sneer as they pull one of her curls-

 

'STOP IT! Stop teasing her!'

A cute little boy with anger raging in his eyes comes charging towards the two bullies, and hits the bigger one square in the jaw, while the other runs off…

 

The little boy comes slowly towards Muskaan, as if afraid he might scare her if he came any faster

'Muskaan…tum theek to ho na Muskaan?'

'me..Mein theek hoon Rahul'

She says this even as a small tear escapes her large auburn eyes

'Rahul' she sighs, and couldn't hold it in any longer…she launches herself into his arms,

'Ro mat Muskaan, smile….always smile' saying this he hugs her tighter as her sobs cease, and a small smile appears on her face

~

Present day

Her eyes filled with tears as memories of her past…their past, came into her mind. That was the first time Muskaan saw Rahul as something other than the obnoxious boy her parents made her be nice to at get togethers and picnics. That was the day Muskaan saw something different.

She saw her hero. 

 

The taxi lunged forward. Traffic.

What else could go wrong?

~

He had to find her…

Where is she? Where is she????

It was his engagement, one of the most important days of his life and she chooses now to be angry with him?

'Muskaan….where are you'

Saying this he bolts towards the door…..

~~~~~~~~

 

 pls feel free to critisize

i know that it wasnt that gr8Confused

pls leave comments aswellWink



Edited by zen girl - 24 May 2008 at 2:36am

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Posted: 11 May 2008 at 9:25am | IP Logged
i love it! Embarrassed rahul muskaan are one of my fav couples Embarrassed great job!
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Posted: 11 May 2008 at 9:54am | IP Logged
Nice start! Do continue! Big smile
zen girl Senior Member
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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 12:40am | IP Logged
Part 2

Hey man where are you running off to?

Come on Atul, MOVE!

What's going on rahul?
You ok?

Nahi yaar
I have to go find muskii!

What yaar you can't go now!
It's your engagement today!

I don't care Atul! Now move!
I never wanted to get engaged to Ridhima alright!
It was just a ploy to get armaan mad
But now I've stuffed everything up with muskaan!

By now rahul is near tears (awwwwwwwwwwwwww)

But rahul yaar…
Didn't you and muskaan always fight back in college days?
….
And school days
….
And kg days as well now to mention it, when have you two not fought?

Yeah Atul, - he smiles fondly, thinking of his memories, their memories (aww)
But this time… I don't know…..something feels different
I mean when we used to fight, we were always happy doing it you know? But now she just seems so… sad
Yaad hai na, hamesha hasti thi, baak baak karti thi….

So what wrong now yaar? What's so different?



…..
I think I'm in love with her….!



there it is
part 2 of this story!

leave comments and tell me what you think okiez

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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 4:52am | IP Logged
Hi zen ,. i loved the parts and enjoyed readin them.. it was short and sweet.. Big smile and could understnad the story as well in these little parts.. keep on ur good work.... Clap even i am feelgin like pulling Muskaan's cruls and Rahul with anger comign and pampering Muskan... LOL Embarrassed
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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 5:51pm | IP Logged
Too much suspense yaar! LOL Embarrassed Make the chapters a bit longer please :P Embarrassed
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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 7:55pm | IP Logged
Your hindi is pretty good for someone whose only learned it through serials Clap

Parts are good and I liked the couple, different for a change Embarrassed

Just make sure you make it clear who is saying what Embarrassed

Not really a regular commenter, but do continue Smile
zen girl Senior Member
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Posted: 13 May 2008 at 1:44am | IP Logged
hey thanx for all your lovely comments
heres part 3!

Rahul stared at the beautiful girl sitting on the swing of his childhood playground.
She looked breathtaking…her curls covering her face, and her duppata dancing in the soft breeze
~
Muskaan
~
She heard his voice breath her name
She looked up slowly, afraid she was imagining it
~
Rahul?
~
Her tears glistened in the moonlight
He couldn't bear to see her in pain
The fact he may be the cause made him hate himself
~
Rahul, what are you doing here?
It's your engagement tonight!
Her eyes brimmed with fresh tears, remembering the reason for all this confusion, this sadness…
~
There was one thing that Rahul could not handle and that was Muskaan crying
Seeing her tears, he closed the remaining space between them and clasped her hand in his, and caressed her cheek with his other free hand…
Rahul…
Tum kya kar rahe ho?
What about ridhima? Your engagement?
~
Muskaan,
Na koi ridhima, na koi armaan
Just you and me
And one truth in this web of lies we both had a hand in creating
~
Which is? - Muskaan tried to say this as normal as possible, given her heart was beating were so loud she was sure that Rahul could hear
~
The truth is….
I love you
~
Saying this, Rahul leaned in and kissed Muskaan, the love of his life,
In a sweet slow kiss, that communicated his immense love for her   
~

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