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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:03am | IP Logged
@swansea...aww thx a zillion..glad u liked it Wink

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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:08am | IP Logged

Scene#5A

The cell was ringing constantly...but nobody was answering it....while the caller...kept waitng 4 someone to answer it..the owner of the cel...was busy preparing breakfast...probably for the caller itself...
Well after a few minutes..she came n answered the call...but before could she could just utter a hello....there came a stream of questions frm the other side of the fone...
A:ridhima...phone kyun nahi uthaya?kabse try kar raha hoon?kahan thi tum....pata hai mujhe kitni tension hogayi thi...landline par bh koi phone nahi utharaha...acha suno...raat ko neend theek se aayi ya mere khayalon ne sone nahi diya...
ridhima jawab toh do..are u der?
Anjali:mere pyaare hone waali jiju...agar ap baat karne denge toh hum baat kar sakenge na..
Armaan:anjie tum...tumne ridhima ka phone kyun uthaya
Anjali:cmon armaan...shes my sis...aur waise bhi tumne kyun itni subah subah meri behen ko phone kya...papa ko bata doon
Armaan:bata doon...darta nahi hoon main tumhare papa se...waise bhi ap toh officialy woh meri ho chuki hai...toh main usse subah phone karoon ya aadhi raat mein...koi kuch nahi kar sakta hai
Anjie:well poori tarah nahi...abhi toh bas engagement hui hai...jab tak shaadi nahi hoti tab she's my sis n not ure wife mr armaan malik
Armaan:yeah yeah ms anjali gupta...bas shaadi tak ka hi toh intezaar hai...ohk now act like a real good sali...aur jaake ridhima ko phone do...im missin her yaar
Anjie:kyun armaan..tumhari sali itni borin bhi nahi....cmon...
Armaan:flirting with me haan....see i have no probs...par woh kya hai...agar main tumhare saath flirt karne laga...toh atul mujhe ridhima se shaadi karne layak nahi chodega...so i betta dont flirt with u
Anjie:cmon armaan...atul isnt dat bad
Armaan:oh really...matlab ki atul tumhe acha lagta hai
Anjie slightly blushes n goes:armaaaaan
Armaan:caught u...hehe acha suno...ridhima ko bolo...main abhi aadhe ghante mein waha aaraha hoon...hum saath mein sanjeevani jayenge
Anjie:par tum dono ki aaj chutti hai na..tumne kal hi toh dad se baat ki thi
Armaan:yeah yeh tumhe pata hai mujhe pata hai par ridhima ko nahi pata...usse sochne do ke we're going to sanjeevani
Anjie:u mean ure folling my sis...kahan leke jaoge use
Armaan:dats a surprise...tum bas ridhima ko tayaar rakhna..n usse kuch mat batana...maine ek surprise plan kiya hai
Anjie:dats soo sweet of u armaan....ohks main ridzy ko keh doongi ready ho jaaye
Armaan:ohk saali ji take care
Anjie:bye jeeejuuuu

She cuts the cell n runs shoutin "ridzi ridzi"....n she sees her sister preparing something....shes goes towards her n asks...
Anjie:ridzz...tum yahan kitchen mein kya rahi ho....doctory chod ke cook banna hai
Ridz:nahi di...main toh bas yeh kheer bana rahi thi..
Anjie:subah subah kheer....kiske liye
Ridz:armaan ke liye...kal baaton baaton mein usne mujhe bataya usse kheer bahut pasand hai...aur woh apne bi ki haaton ki kheer bahut miss karta hai...toh maine bi se recipe li..aur uske liye bana rahi hoon
Anjie:awww dats so sweet of u...im sure armaan bahut khush hoga.,.waise bhi woh ghar aaraha hai..toh yahin khila dena usse
Ridz gets all panicky:what ...armaan ghar aaraha hai...par kyun..papa kya kahenge?
Anjie:cmon ridz...u ppl are engaged now...dad se usne baat karli hai...aur woh tumhe lene aarha hai..tum dono saath mein sanjeevani jaoge..aur is liye usne tumse kaha hai aadhe ghante mein ready ho jao
Ridz:aadha ghanta...omg di...main jaati hoon
N she rushes to get ready...she comes bak in 20 mins wearin her normal salwar kurta...n anjie looks at her upside dwn...
Anjie:yeh kya pehna hai ridz
Ridz:kyun di...maine toh apne normal suit pehna hai..acha nahi laga?
Anjie:nahi ridz...cmon tum apne hone wali pati ke saath pehli baar hospital aaogi...cmon wear something nice...lemme see..
Anjie takes out a nice white churidaar...with a dori behind...n a lovely pretty pattern in the front...n gives ridz...
Anjie:yes tum yeh pehnogi...this is perfect for a date
Ridz:date?par di hum toh sanjeevani jaa rahe hai
Anjie:yes yes...i mean this is perfect for ure first drive together
Ridz is a bit confused but goes n get changed...n she looks awesome...n then anjie dresses her hair...leaves them loose...n then she does a lil makeup for ridz...justa  light touch up...something to match with the weather n then puts on a light coloured gloss on her lips...n then goes
Anjie:yes now u look perfect
Ridz:par di...i dont understand...yeh sab kyun
Anjie:arre ridz karna padta hai...dont argue with me...u look greatt..ab chalo armaan aata hi hoga

They go dwn...n see armaan on the door...talkin to nani...n he sees ridz....n almost trips n falls...when nani helps him...
Nani:yeh kya beta tum toh abhi se phisalne lage..abhi toh sirf sagayi hui hai
Armaan blushes...he comes in...n says ridz
Armaan:chalein
Anjie laughs:i know armaan tumhe jaane ki jaldi hai but...ridz ne tumhare liye kuch khaas banaya hai pehle woh toh chakh lo
Armaan:really
And there comes shashank...he sees armaan n smiles
Shashank:arre armaan tum aagaye...come lets have breakfast
Armaan goes n touches his feet...shashank blesses him n they sit on the breakfast table....n nani serves all of them breakfast....n then ridz gets the special kheer made 4 armaan....
Anjie:aur yeh tumhari fav kheer...ridz ne khaas tumhare liye banayi hai
Nani:haan armaan beta..isne khud apne haathon se banayi hai...mujhe toh madad karne bhi nahi diya...keh rahi thi ki saari kheer khud banayegi
Shashank:arre waah meri beti...ne kheer banayi hai...main bhi khaonga
Nani:lekin sabse pehle woh jiske liye yeh kheer bani hai
Anjie:aur tumhe kheer apne haathon se khilayegi ridzy...hai na...papa
Shashank:han haan ridhima beta armaan ko kheer khilao
Ridz blushes n takes the kheer bowl...n then takes a spoonfull of kheer...n feeds him....
Anjie:kyun armaan...kaisi bani...kheer
Shashank:batao armaan kaisi banay hai ridhima ne yeh special kheer
Armaan looks at Ridz n then gives her a smile ...a smile which assured her n told her that her kheer was the very best one he had ....n she understood that but he had to tell the others verbally..
Armaan:bahut achi bani hai
Ridz blushes...n then shashank goes saying he's getting late...n while leaving he just says"enjoy the day kids" n leaves...which leaves ridz confused...but others surely understand...
n then armaan goes"chalein"
Anjie:han haan zaroor...chalo
Armaan:what...tum bhi aarahi ho
Anjie:ofcourse after all tum log sanjeevani jaa rahe ho na...cant ul drop me too
Armaan gives her a look...n anjie laughs...
Anjie:ohk ohk baba jao..warna armaan wil kil me...il go in my car...u ppl have fun bye
Armaan:thanks anjie bye
They leave...Armaan goes n opens the door for ridhima...she  just looks at him once...with all her love...n then  gets in...n then armaan takes a deep breath n closes her door,..n goes "god i love her" n he too gets in frm the other door

He sits in the car...n then looks at ridz...n she smiles at him....n then he starts the car...she ons the music....armaan
is lost in her beauty...though it looked like he was lookin in the front n drivng he was actually lookin at ridz frm the
side of his eyes...every now n then...n then he puts his hand on hers .....

Armaan:ridhima...aaj tum bahut sundar lag rahi ho
Ridz:thanks...
Armaan:aur woh jo tumne kheer banayi thi....woh...
Ridz blushes and goes:mujhe pata hai bahut achi thi
Armaan:nahi woh itni achi thi...woh toh maine sabke saamne yunhi keh di thi ki achi hai but u see u need to improve with
ure cooking
Ridz gives him an angry look n goes:armaaan....itni hi napasand hai toh agli baar se tumhare liye kuch nahi banaungi...
Armaan:paaka na...thank god main bach gaya...warna roz aisa khana ....khanapadta
Ridz gets all angry n dosent reply to him...n then he goes
Armaan:gussa ho
Ridz:nahi main kyun gusasa hongi...mujhe kya haq hai tumse gussa hone ka...tumhare liye pyaar se kuch banane ka
Armaan:oh really...
he stops the car...n then goes close to ridzz's ear...
Armaan whispers:haq hai...khana banane ka haq hai...khana khilane ka haq hai...aur gussa hone ka bhi...Mrs Ridhima Armaan
Malik...apko poora haq...itni achi kheer banane ka...[ he lifts up her hand]jisse apka yeh deewana apke in pyaare se
 haathon ko chum sake[n he kisses her hand]
Ridz blushes...and hugs him....
Ridz:tum bahut badmaash ho...mujhe toh laga tumhe sach mein kheer nahi pasand aayi
Armaan:...nahi pasand aayi
Ridz:wat?
Arman:mera matlab ki nahi...mujhe kheer bahut pasand aayi
Both of them laugh n armaan starts bak the car

Scene#5B

He drives for a long time....n then stops at a place...
Ridz:armaan yeh hum kahan aagaye ha...hum to sanjeevani jaane wale the na
Armaan:jaane wale the lekin ab nahi jayenge
Ridz:wat....armaan tum pagal ho gaye ho...dr keerti ko pata chala toh....armaan hum suspend ho jayenge
Armaan:arre ridhima...don worry....main apne sasur jee yani ki sanjeevani ke dean se permission le li hai...aaj hum dono
 doctors chutti pe hai...
Ridz:wat..lekin humare patients
Armaan:omg ridhima....sanjeevani mein tum ek akeli doc nahi ho...kya tum ek din apne patients ko chod ke...apni is ek
patient ka khayal nahi rakh sakti
Ridz:acha...toh tum patient ho....
Armaan nods...
Ridz:kyun tumhe kya hua hai...
Armaan:mujhe....[comes close to her]mujhe woh hua hai....jo kisi ko nahi hua...
Ridz heart starts beating fast...she can feel him coming closer to her....she just manages to tel a "kya hua hai"
Armaan:mujhe tumse....pyaar hua hai...[n he kisses her on her cheek]
She was a lil startled with this unexpected kiss she just received....n her immidaite reaction comes out as a blush...n he
goes "oye hoye"
Ridz:armaan...waise ek baat poochon
Armaan starin at her lovingly:poocho
Ridz:tumne chutti yun car mein bethne ke liye li hai
Armaan immidiatley comes bak to his senses n ridz giggles...
Armaan:nah....nahi ridhima...tum bas yahin ruko main 2 min mein aata hooon
Armaan gets dwn n comes bak after 5 mins....n then makes ridz get dwn frm the car...holds her hand...n both of them start
walking...
after reachin a certain point on the road they were walkin..armaan covers ridhima's eyes with his hands...
Ridz:armaan yeh tum kya kar rahe ho
Armaan:arre ridhima tum bas chalti chalo...don ask me any questons ok?
Ridz:par armaan
Armaan:no more questions...
Ridz had no option but to remain silent...armaan takes her to a plce....all she could feel was his tough hand on her eyes n
 the other hand of his in her hand..showin her the path...the path of happness she thot......n her steps matchin with his
steps...n his long legs...coming in contact with hers at times...wen they would accidentally step together
After walkin a lil ahead...she could feel walkin on somethin soft..."maybe dats a carpet" she thot...n just kept walkin
with him...until he made her stand at a place...n slowly removed his hand frm her eyes...she opened her eyes....n wat she
 could see was the place...she longed to see...the place where the sky meets the earth...it was a beach...her fav place....
she loved to be there .....the calm place...wth the waters.a big smile formed on her lips as soon as she was there....
....she just loved it...but wait...hw did he knw...she looked at him...with a questioning look...n as he understood she
loved the place he also understood that...she was surpsied hw did he knw abt this place...n clearin her doubts he
answered..
Armaan:hmmmmmm mujhe kaise pata ke u love this place?...well samjho ki ab main tumhare dil ki har baat jaaanne laga hoon...
aur jab jaan gaya hoon toh manna bhi padega na..[He puts his hand on her shoulders] aur mere pyaar ki har pasand ko poora
karna....itz my duty u knw...[ n he smiles lovingly]
Ridz smiles back...
Armaan:chalein
They run to the water surface...n stand der waitin 4 the waves to come....n there came the first wave...which wasnt a big
 one...ridz held armaan's hand tight...and was enjoyin every moment of her life....n there came the second wave...a very
high one...which kinda frightended ridz n she went close to armaan....Armaan put hs armas around her waist n held her
tight...making her feel secure...she felt loved...felt cared....her whole world was in those arms...n holdin him bak...they
 faced the wave...silenttly promisin each other  to face every difficulty in a smilar way...
Truly enjoyin every moment they were together...they played in those waves..like lil kids....who neva wanted to get bak frm
 ther playin...splashin water at each other when eva the other person looked somewhr else...n running behind each other...
most of the time ridz who was running behind him to catch him for all those flirty lines he spoke for the other gals he saw
on the beach....n he loved it totally....watchn ridz run behnd him...n so everytime he saw a girl...he would pass more
flirty comments so that ridz feels jealous...n he loved the jealous look on her face...made him feel so much more loved by
her...
They spent the entire morning playin n running....n finally wen they were quite tired they decided to retire frm their
lovely job of running n playng with each other...they move to a plce to relax n sit...n armaan n ridz preferred to move at
a place which wasnt much crowded...there they sat...Ridz sat close to armaan...resting her head on his shoulders n armaan
playing with her hair...
Ridz:armaan
Armaan:hmmmm
Ridz looks passsionately at him:armaan...mujhe
Armaan looks bak with the same passion:tumhe
Ridz:mujhe
Armaan:tumhe
Ridz:bahut
Armaan:bahut
Ridz comes close to his ear n whispers:mujhe bahut bhook lagi hai[shouts the last words]
Armaan suddenly moves away n rubs his ears...n ridhima heartily laughs...
Armaan:ridhima...tum abhut naughty ho gayi ho
ridz just smiles....Armaan gives his cutest smiles at her
Ridz:armaaan....mujhe seriously bahut bhook lagi hai
Armaan:oye hoye...meri jaan ko bhook lagi hai...hmmmm lets see....acha bolo tum kya khaogi..
n he starts searching for something in his pocket
Ridz:armaan tum apni pocket mein kya dhoond rahe ho....jao jakar mere liye kuch lekar aao...
Armaan:well...abhi gaya meri jaan...par tab tak tum...[he takes out a choclate frm his pocket] is choclate se kaam chala lo..
.ok[he smiles givin her a sweet kiss on her cheeks]
Ridz gets a smile on her face n she takes the choclate frm  him...Armaan gets up to go...
Ridz:acha suno
he stops...
Ridz:bahut meetha hai
Armaan:par tumne toh ab tak choclate khaayi nahi
Ridz:main choclate ki baat nahi kar rahi thi[ n she blushes...puttin her hand on her cheeks...]
Armaan:oye hoye...[sits dwn] ek aur doon kya
ridz pushes him:nahi abhi ke liye ek hi kaafi hai...tum jaoooo

Armaan goes to get something for her....he comes bak with a bhel....n sees ridz making a house with the mud there...n she
was totally enjoyin it...she was smilin lookin at the parts she completed n then thinkin hw tomake the other parts...he
 stood there n adored her that way.....thanking god for giving her to him...she was the most beautiful part of him...n his
life...
He stood there for a few minutes lost in her...thinkin abt all their wonderful memories...ridz came n snapped in front of
him...
Ridz:armaan...kahan kho gaye
Armaan comes bak to reality...puts her arms around her shoulders n says"ab tumhare siwamain aur kahan kho sakta hoon"
Ridz smiles:bahut ho gayi tumhari baatein...ab batao mere liye kya laaye ho...
Armaan removes his arms...n showed ridz the bhel he brought for her..."tan tan tan...armaan special bhel ...sirf tumhare liye...yeh main apne haathon se tumhare liye leke aaya hoon"
Ridz giggles at his expressions...
Armaan:ab sirf hansti hi rahogi ya khaogi bhi...
Ridz:kaise kahon mere haathon mein toh mitti lagi hai
Armaan:hmmmm dats a very big problem....ab kya karein[acts as if hes thinkin]
Ridz:ek idea hai
Armaan:kya
Ridz:haath toh mere kharab hai..tumhare haath toh bilkul saaf hai...tumhi mujhe khilado na
Armaan:dats a good idea...wow dr ridhima...aptoh bahut smartho gayi hai..mere saath rehte rehte
Ridz:armaaaaan...plzzz khilao na  plzz im hungry..
Armaan makes her sit n starts feeding her....when he puts the first bite in her mouth she purposely bites his finger..
Armaan:owwww....ridhimaa..
Ridz acts innocent:oh im so sorry armaan
The next bite she eats normally n then again after a few bites...she bites his finger again...
Armaan:this is it...ridhima...lagta hai tum aaj bahut mood mein ho
Ridz giggles...but gets up to run..as she knew he wouldnt leave her at any cost...she kept runnin...n armaan was followin her...finally at one pt of time..he was very close to her n almost caught her...but she managed to escape...he kept runnin behind her until he caught her...he held her by her waist n lifted her frm the ground n give her a quick round..n then both of them fwllrolling on the ground...panting heavily...armaan on top of ridz...
They go into an eye lock...they get lost into each others eyes...ridhima did not knw the world around her except for armaan...she was lost in his eyes..and Armaan who was a lil more alert...knew that if they remain the same pose 4 more time...they would certainly be seen by many more ppl there...n so he immidiately got up...leavin behind an embarrased ridz...n before anyone would come up to them...they quckly went to a more lonely place...whr there were only a handful of pppl..
Having finished with their eatin ....ridz decided to build another sand castle...n forced armaan to join her in her child like actions....n armaan havin no other choice started helpin her with her castle...wen they finally finished it...ridz startin naming the rooms...
Ridz[pointing to the lowest room]:armaan yeh hoga mumma papa ka room[armi's mom dad] aur yeh[pointing to the second lower room]aur yeh humara guest room hoga...[ n then she points to the room in the top most floor] aur yeh room hoga...[ n she suddenly stops n blushes]
Armaan[holding her hand that pointed the room]:aur yeh room hoga humara...jahan sirf tum aur main honge...aur...[comes closer to her ear] aur...humara pyaar
Ridz blushes even harder...
Armaan:waise ridhima...tum dekhna...jab humari shaadi hogi na toh hum bikul aise hi ghar mein rahenge...main tumhare liye is duniya ka sabse sundar ghar banaonga..aur hum sab us ghar mein hansi khushi rahenge...tum main papa aur mumma...aur phir...
Ridz looks at him lovingly:aur phir
Armaan:aur phir humara ek pyaara sa baby hogaa...par ek hi hoga haan...main nahi chahta ki tum itne pain se guzro...ek baby bahut hoga...
Ridz smiles at his concern 4 her:aur woh ek cute sa ladka hoga
Armaan:nahi...woh meri cute si princess hogi
Ridz:nahi armaan ladki hoga
Armaan:ridhima...maine kaha na ladki
Ridz:armaan ladka
Ridz:nahi ridhima ladkii
Armaan:ladka
Ridz:ladki
Armaan:ladka
Ridz:ladki
they keep shoutin on top of their voices....n they suddenly start laughing...laughin realisin of their stupid talk a while ago...they laugh n laugh until their eyes have tears n their stomach aches...n wen they couldnt laugh more...they just stop
Armaan:hansti raho...tum hasnte hue aur bhi achi lagti ho
Ridz:tum bhi jab hanste ho toh itne bure nahi lagte...u actually look good
Armaan:oh really..dat was soo sweet..thank u so much ridhima jee
Ridz smiles very pleasantly...ure most welcome...
She looks at her watch n shouts "omg armaan"
Armaan is startled by the shout"kya hua ridhima"
Ridz:armaan itz so late...chalo ghar chalte hai..papa wait kar rahe honge
Armaan rests on her lap:nah no ways...pehle bolo ke u love me
Ridz:haan u love me
Armaan:nahi nahi bolo i love u
Ridz:haan armaan mujhe pata hai u love me
Armaan:ridhimaaaaa....
He gets all angry n gets up says very abruptly:acha chalo...chalein...hum late ho rahe hai
Ridz gets up ...holds his hand...n interlocks her fingers with his n says:i love u armaan...main tumse bahut bahut bahut pyaar karti hoon..
Armaan gets a widee smile on his lips..n he looks at ridz with all his love...ridz blushes n then goes"ab toh keh diya na..ab chalein
Armaan:ab toh bilkul jaane ka mann nahi kar raha
Ridz:armaaaaaan...chaloooo[n she literally drags him with her]
they go...sit in the car...but armaan dosent drive
Ridz:armaan kya hua chalo na
Armaan looks at her very sadly n says:ridhima soch lo...kya tum sach mein jaana chahti ho...
Ridz in the same sad tone:actually...nahi..[but gets all hyper] par humein jaana hoga...toh chaloooooooooooo
After much force frm ridz..he starts driving...they reach ridhima's house...Ridhima dosent wanna get dwn..armaan dosent wanna let her go...both are silent for some time n then ridz spks up..
Ridhima:armaan...
Armaan:hmmm
Ridz:aaj ka din bahut acha tha...main yeh din kabhi nahi bhool sakti...u made it really spl for me...thanku so much
Armaan moves close to her n both their heads touch..both have their eyes close... both are silently enjoyin the moment..when suddenly ridzy's fone rings n disturbs them...ridz is startled n picks up the phone
Ridz:hello
Anjali:sorry to disturb u..lekin papa aagaye hai aur tumhare baare mein pooch rahe the...tum kab aarahi ho ridz
Ridz sounding very sad:di main aa chuki hoon...bas andar aa hi rahi hoon
Anjali:ridz...tum itni majboori mein kyun bol rahi ho...bas kuch hi dino ki baat hai...phir tum aur tumhara armaan...humesha saath rehna...
Ridz blushes at the thought..armaan is enjoyin her sudden change of reaction...
Anjie:acha armaan se bolo...ab saari rat bahar mat guzarna..please tum jaldi andaar aajao
Ridz:okay di...main bas aarahi hoon
She cuts the call...n faces armaan
Ridz:armaan mujhe jaana hoga...[n she gets dwn]
armaan gets dwn..n walks with her till the garden outside the door
Armaan:acha suno
Ridz:haan bolo
Armaan:white colour tumhe bahut suit karta hai...isse zyada pehna karo
Ridz blushes...she walks a lil forward...n then she turns n waves at armaan...armaan smiles n waves bak...n then she walks a lil more further n then she again turns n comes running to himmn hugs him tightly...
Armaan hugs her bak...
Armaan:itni betaabi ridhima..bas kuch hi dino ki baat hai...phir main tumhe kabhi apne se door jaane nahi doonga
Ridz seprates n looks at him ....
Armaan:aur phir main tum...aur humara woh top floor wala kamra...
Ridz blushes n hits him on the chest playfully:acha ab main jaa rahi hoon...bye
Armaan kisses her on the forhead:bye...apna khayal rakhna...good nite...
Ridz leaves...armaan sees her go...n then he too leaves...

In the evenin..ridz n armaan standin at their balconies...n remembering the day...both of them look at their engagement rings...both of them think of the castle...n blush..
Armaan:i love her..i love u loads ridhima
Ridz:i love u armaan...

Both give a big smile...n go to the sleep with pleasant dreams of their future

Ive posted both scene 5A n B...just to maintain the flow..Wink

Scene#5A is posted in maroon...n the black thing is the cintuation that is scene#5B...

hope i lived upto expectations guys.....do comment if u find it worth...

thx,

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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:20am | IP Logged

Wow Komal!
Awesum scenes! very realistic n very cute!

Keep it up!

Marisha
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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:25am | IP Logged
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the cutest thing i ever evr read Embarrassed
superb mindblowing fantastic excellent...im outa words LOL
awesum komal Clap
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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:27am | IP Logged
awwwwwwwwwwwww komal i just read all your parts they are adorable!!!!! Embarrassed

you are just sooo talented, you're amazing at writing!!! Clap
keep rocking with your parts!!!!! Embarrassed Embarrassed
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Posted: 17 May 2008 at 7:28am | IP Logged
@marisha...thx a ton...glad to knw u liked my work
@natasha...awww natasha.....thx a zillion....ure comment shw me that u realyy really likd it...thx...im so glad u liked it Embarrassed
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@mannyz...heya...thats so sweet of u...thx a zillion...glad u liked it... Embarrassed   Embarrassed

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