Fan Fictions

India-Forums

   
Fan Fictions
Fan Fictions

dil se(updated on pg:25) (Page 5)

ashu20 Groupbie
ashu20
ashu20

Joined: 28 June 2007
Posts: 184

Posted: 09 May 2008 at 4:52am | IP Logged
thanks for the comments
i vll update it today
tc
love
ashu Embarrassed

-Tina- Senior Member
-Tina-
-Tina-

Joined: 14 April 2008
Posts: 605

Posted: 09 May 2008 at 5:11am | IP Logged
read part-4 too kool...lukinn forwardd to more!...but dat partt was kool!...now waitin for raj to enter....it wld be awesme!...waitin for nextt partt

Edited by cool~~gal - 09 May 2008 at 5:11am
RSZR Senior Member
RSZR
RSZR

Joined: 02 May 2008
Posts: 468

Posted: 09 May 2008 at 10:02am | IP Logged
hey ashu pls ud soon na yaar i am eagerly waiting Cry


                       Ranu
sweta2005 IF-Sizzlerz
sweta2005
sweta2005

Joined: 13 November 2005
Posts: 18908

Posted: 09 May 2008 at 10:04am | IP Logged
waiting for da update
ashu20 Groupbie
ashu20
ashu20

Joined: 28 June 2007
Posts: 184

Posted: 10 May 2008 at 3:17am | IP Logged
hii............... friends i am back with update...
part 5
all r ready and waiting for naina to came...

abhi :pooja naina kaha hai abhi tak nahi aye

pooja :vo abhi ready ho rahi hai uss kaha ke vo abhi aayegi

huda :aur sherry bhi nahi aayi

aa :to tu usse lekeaa mai naina ko dekhta hoon...

gunny :ud aap jake dr.s ko bulayege plz..
ali and po strats laughing

ud :jee..je ....yes sir

abhi :ye ladkiyoko tayar hone me itna waqt kyon lagta hai??????????

gunny :iska javab shayad bhawan bhi nahide sakta

ali :puja aap aaj bahot acchi lagrahe hai..

po :thank s i think pehile bar tumne mujhe call kiya hai...(pooja was wearing pink chudi)

then huda comes with sherry and neelu...
sherry was wearing short skirt of black color and white top and neelu was wearing blue gown..

abhi :aap gaye to the ek ko laneke liye par do kahase aa gaye???????

s :sir vo actually neelu mere ready honeme madat karne ke liye jaldi aa gayi the

abhi :waise aap dono acchi lag rahe ho....
by tat time dr.s aur ud waha aate hai

g :hello dr .s

dr.s:aur hum kaise log rahe hai...'

abhi :kya hum log kise compitation mai jaa rahe hai jo aap sab itni tayar hoke aayi ho

huda :sir aaj jo iss compitation mai jetega usse ek spl prize diya jayega..

then all girls stand in line

dr s :aub batayeye humme se kisne aap sabke hosh uda diya hai
by that time aalekh comes there..

g :aalekh naina kaha hai???????

aa :vo aa rahi hai..and he points in her direction
naina is looking like angel wearing white netted saree or lace saree(which is nearly transparent)(the one tat parchi wore to attract milind)usske bal khule hue hai...ussne gale me moti ka har apne gale me pehna hua hai aur apne haath mai bhi ussi ka breslite pehna hua hai....

huda :to guys phoolan ye compitation jete hai aur she is the lucky person jiske saath huda party mai jayega(according to him it is the spl prize)

n :par iam not intrested....

huda :phoolan agar mummiji aaj tughe dekh lete to abhi hamare shadi karva deti

aa :kuch to shram kar...abhi to ye dialague sherry ke samne kaha tha...

abhi :naina aaj aap bahot acchi lag rahe hai...

g :ha naina tum bahot acchi lag rahe ho

aa murmurs :sirse milne ja rahi hai acchi to lagegi na.....( gunny and dr.s hears it and smiles)

abhi :aub chale....aur aap has kyon rahe hai

naina is smiling

abhi :ajj tumhe kush dekh kar bahot accha lag raha hai..

and they all leave for party
after some time they all r in party hall which is dark

huda :yahaan itna andhera kyon hai.........mai managerse poochke aata hoon

tabhi lights on ho jate hai aur sab waha navin aur raj(both are wearing black jeans and raj's shirt is of black color full sleves and navin is shirt is of pink color) ko dekhkar chok jate hai and they all run to them and strat bumbarding questions on them par raj ke aakhen naina ko dood rahe hai...jo kahi nazar nahi aa rahi hai

po :sir aap yaha...i mean aap kaha the aur ye sab kaise,....i mean aap kaise hai...

raj :cool down cadet ghai pehle aap ye bataeye apna ring tone kaise badal gaya...aap hum normal logoki tarah baat kar rahi hai

po :smiles...sir aapko dekh kar asse lag raha hai jaise diwalike sare offers abhi aa gaye ho..

ali :aap kaha the aur aap ke haath ko kya hua...(they then see navin whom they have not noticed )aur aap naina ke bhai hai na....

na :haan aur aap zaroor ali hai rt haan par aapko kaise pata..

na :well raj tum sab ke bareme itna bol ta tha ke mujhe lagta hai mai tum sab ko janta hoon..

huda :arre humme bhi phoolan se aapke bare mai itna suna hai ke humme bhi aap ajnabi nahi lag rahe hai

ud :yeh bro u r right..

na :aap huda aur ud hai rt..

po :haan u r absolutely right.

navin turns to pooja

na :to aap pooja hai jinka connection life time ke liye ali ke saath jud gaya hai.

po just smiles and ali also blushes.

aa :to aap ko apun sab ke bare mai pata hai..

na : haan aalekh tum sab ne mere aur naina ke liye itna kuch kiya hai ...thanks
(with tears in his eyes)

aa :aap naina se mile

na :nahi kaha hai vo

aa :vo vaha bahar khadi hai aur ro rahi hai

na :hey guys i take ur leave now..

he says bye to every one and goes to naina
all r eager to know raj's story after tat accident and haw navin came here
gunny narrates the story to cadets..and

g :aur aapke sir abhi bhi puri tareh se fit nahi hai to plz aap ke sawal javab round yahi khatam kijiye.

r :aap sab yaha party karne aaye haina to plz dj se jake kahiye ke koi rocking song bajaye and u guys enjoy ur self...

huda :jee sir mai abhi jata hu.
and dj plays song (pehle nazar mai kaisa jjadoo kar diya from race)
and our pairs are as follows
huda-sherry
neelu-aalekh
dr.s-ud
ali-pooja
and they al others r clapping..
navin jo naina ko dhood raha hai vo abhi ko dekh kar waha jata hai aur raj aur gunny bhi waha aate hai.

abhi :kya baat hai tum akele yahan kya kar rahae ho...aur humse mile bhi nahi..

abhi :kaise milu...raj ke iss halatke vajeh kahina kahi mai he hoon...and tears r filled in his eyes
raj peche se aakar kehta hai
r:isski saza to tumhe milegi...

abhi :(hugs him and says)humme apki har baat manzoor hai

raj : jayada kuch nahi vahi karna hoga jo pichali bar kiya tha...(with a naughty smile)

navin and gunny (both smiles) :yani phir se ye towol par ghoomega..........

abhi :kya..............plz yaar.........mai abhi vice princi hoon..........

raj :saza tai ho chuke hai.....aur waise bhi bakare ko poochke thode he halal karte hai..

gunny :to kab hai aap ka ye program...uss din ladkiyo ki to khair nahi.......
all r laughing...

na :mere aane ka intazar karna...

abhi :par aap ja kaha rahe hai

na :vo ma aur baba ke pass...

raj :par ye prog to kal he hai.....

gunny :par na tu to aaj ja raha hai na..u r going to miss this fun...

raj in navin's ears murmurs:tu fikar mat kar iska repeat telecast tu dekh sakta hai maine ud se baat karle hai.

gunny :aub aap dono ke bechme ye kya khichadi pak rahe hai..

raj :kuch nahi mai pooch raha tha ke ye naina se mila ya nahi..

na :nahi mai usse milne ja raha hoon tum (gunny) mujhe bus stand chodne aa rahe ho na.
g :tum naina se baat karlo mai vahe aata ho aur naina bahar benchpe bathi hai.

na :ok abhi....all the best..i am going to miss a loads of fun..
bye...
navin naina ko dekhta hai jo aasmn ki taraf dekh rahe hai aur apne khayalo me khoi hue hai...

na :arre gudiya tum akele yahan kya kar rahe hoon

n dont say any thing.navin knows tat naina is angry

na :mere gudiya aaj kitni badi hogayi hai aaj.....(before he could say anything she turns to him and hugs him and start crying)

n :kyon bhaiya aap itne din mujhse door rahe aap ko ek bar bhi apni gudiya ki yaad nahi aayi...

na :arre gudiya chup ho ja varna tera saara makeup chala jayega aur sab darrke bhag jayenge...

and navin runs from there...naina who wanna run behind him and beat him........cant do so as she is wearing saree...seeing her he just smiles and come back
(hey girls i hope u can understand her problem)

n :aap se ek baat poocho...

na :haan

n :aapko kabhi mere yaad nahi aayi...

na :mujhe kabhi aasa laga he nahi ke tu mujhse door hai...

na :pehle 3 saal to mai comma mai tha...aur jab mujhe hosh aaya to gunny tere pass tha jo tere hal pal ki khabar mujhe deta tha...

n and na r sittin on bench now and gunny comes there

g :na humme aub nikalna chahiye..

n :bhaya aap kahi ja rahe hai

na :haan vo mai ma baba ke pass ja raha hoon..

n :par humari acchese baat bhi nahi hui..

na :mai jald he wapas aa jauga..

n :i really going to miss u..aur sir aap bhi ja rahe hai..

g :haan.

na :naina vo raj ki tabiyat abhi bhi theak nahi hai to usse time pe davayi dedena vo kabhi time pe nahi leta..aur naina plz take care of him..aur ye hai usski davayi ki list yani kaunsi davayi kab deni hai ye sab iss list me hai plz tum usse apne samne khaneke liye kehna kyonki vo baad me kha luga kehke tal deta hai...so naina he is ur responsibility now

g :aap ko ye sab batane ki zarurat nahi ,naina apne sir ka khayal humse behtar rakhegi...kyon naina..

n :just smiles

and they leave..

raj aur abhi baat kar rahe hai aur raj bar bar idhar udhar dekh raha hai..

abhi :aap jisse dhoond rahe hai vo aa gayi hai...(abhi points to door from where naina is comming)
raj see her aur uss ka moo kule ka khulla reh gaya hai..
naina aaj bilkul alag lag rahe hai itni khoobsurat lag rahi haivo lafazo me bayan nahi kar sakta...

abhi :aap apna moo band karenge....

raj :haan haan tumne kuch kaha chuhan

abhi :kuch nahi..

naina ko apni taraf aate hue dekh kar vo bahot khush ho jata hai..

abhi : hum aub chalte hai

raj just nods and all other in party are dancing....and the song changes..

laamha lamha duri yun pighalti hai
jaane kis aag me ye shab nam jalti hai
...........................

raj is seeing her and naina is comming towards him..
they both r eye locked...r are just a step away from each other......
vo naina ki aakhome va dard....vo taklif dekh sakta hai jisse vo in dino gujare hai..
vo usse bahot kuch kehna chata hai bahot kuch poochna chata hai par vo kaha se shuru kare kya kahe usse pata nahi chal raha hai..
aur apni naina ke bhi yahi halat hai..
vo raj ki taraf dekh rahe hai jo bahot kamzor lag raha hai.....
naina want to break the silence want to hug him.....there r many emotions flooding in her heart and
raj :naina..ahh .singh.......
she start crying tears were flooding from her eyes by hearing her name.vo yeah sunne ke liye kuch bhi kar sakte the..
she was about to say something but the light went off............................................
........................................................
so friends hope u liked the update..as raj is back...aur light jane ke baad kya hua ye aap sochke batayiye ........i am waitin for ur comment...
plz do comment..
love
ashu

The following 3 member(s) liked the above post:

rajveernainalovMilleegargHimu_arsha

ashu20 Groupbie
ashu20
ashu20

Joined: 28 June 2007
Posts: 184

Posted: 10 May 2008 at 3:21am | IP Logged
hey frds here is next part of ff...so hum kaha the
part6

lights chali jati hai aurrrrrrrrrr Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed jab lights wapas aati hai to naina waha nahi hai.. Confused
and abhi comes there and say raj humme aub chalna chahiye..
and they r back to kma
par ye kya gates band hai...and suriji is standing infront of gate fuming in anger
h gets out of car

h :ye kya suriji aap yaha iss waqt...

s :ooooye khotiya tu pehle ye bata...jab khana chahiye to suriji ki yaad aati hai...jab

bc ke daatse bachna hai tab ssuriji ki yaad aati hai par jab party kar ni hoo tab

surijiki yaad nahi aayi??????????

abhi :humme alise kaha tha ke aapko batade

ali :mai aur ud bhai aaye the mess me par

ud:par orderlyne kaha ke aap bahar gaye hai to

s : to kya tu paach min ruck nahi sakta tha...

r :sorry suriji ye party mujh par udhar rahi...

s now see raj who is in car

ooye puttar tu par ...veah sab kaise aur tum logone mujhe bataya nahi..

s :to pooja:tu to ek call kar sakti thi na

p:mujhe bhi ye sms abhi mila...

s :aaj mai bahot kush hoon bahot..aaj mai do nahi char glass lassi piyunga..kisiko

chahiye kya...lassi......

r :to jab aap navin ko dekhenge to aap kitne glass lassi piyenge???????

s:kya (tears in his eyes)
tu sach keh raha hai kaha hai navin...yeh sab sapna to nahi hai...par ye sab kaise
kaha hai vo mai usse milna chata hoon..

abhi :vo apne ghar gaye hai gunny ke saath ..aapke liye ye tofa bheja hai..

s :par ye sab kaise..

aa :apun andar aake bataye ga to chalega..

s : ooye aajao aaj tum kuch bhi karo sab maff....
and suriji leaves will all cadets and abhi bits good nighth to raj and leaves..
raj jo aalekh ko jate hue dekh ta hai and call him

r :vo apne cadet singh ko dekha hai vo humare saath vapas kyon nahi aayi..

aa :vo pehle he aage the vo apke kamreko saaf karvana tha na issi kiye....

r :ok thanks aalekh

aa :aap naina se mile..

r :nahi vo..

aa :sir miligiye..aub jyada deer mat kijiye

r :aa kya hua tha naina thek to haina...kya tum mujhe bataoge...vo bahot chup

chupse the aaj party mai bhi....

aa :aapke janeke baad naina ne jaise jeena he chod diya tha...aur uss din aap ki

accident ke baad..vo royi he nahi ..ussne bahot dinoke tak khana bhi chod diya tha

phir ek din..he told him how abhi forced her to cry ..and how she suffered in detention

center...and how lalla torchered her mentally..

rajs eyes were filled with tears she suffered her much more than he imagined

aa :sir aub apun chalta hai

r :thanks cadet aap sab ne jo mere liye kiya hai koi aur nahi kar sakta

aa :aur humne ye sab aapse he sekha hai

raj smiles and leaves
raj apne room ki taraf jaa raha hai..he was expecting naina in he room as aa told

him tat she is arranging his room.but it was latched.he enters the room and close the

door..and opens his shirt(hey girls i know u can imagine him ................)
and throw it on chair and there are bandageson his sholder and chest....and he is

having a pain his sholder and even in his leg..
there was a knock on door and raj say"its open get in"
r turns and was shocked to see naina..he picks his shirt up and was abt to wear

n :wo actually apka bandage karna tha

r: mai kar lunga...(he was tryin to wear his shirt)

n :aap ne apni manmani kar li aub aap chup chap baithea...

raj surprised by the way she is talking to him she is treating him as a child and he

loved it.......but she stopped talking

r :tum mujhse kuch kehna chati the..

naina chup hai...kuch nahi keh rahi

r :naina aaj tum bahot acchi lag rahi ho......

naina's eyes r filled with tears

and before he could say anything else she hugs him
raj ke dhadhan jaise ek palke liye ruk gayi hai usse pata nahi chal raha ke vo kya kare
then just place his hand around her and.......(u can guess!!!!!!!!!!)
and after some time they both get apart naina was just about to move away from

there par ussa saree palo raj ke watch mai phas jata hai naina usse nikalne ke

kashish kar rahe hai aur raj usse dekh raha hai........he is enjoying each and every

second.....vo chata hai ke aqt yahe ruk jaye....naina ko lagta hai ke raj usse dekh raha

hai and she gets self conscious and looks up..aur dono phir apni he duniya me kho

jate hai...ek hava ka zonka aata hai...aur unhe phirse disturb kar ta hai....
naina apna saare rajke watchse nikalne ki koshish kar rahe hai aur raj usse isshara

karta hai ke vo koshish karega aur vo nikal deta hai
naina is looking down and she is nervous aur usse lag raha hai raj ke iss halat ke

zimmedar vo khud hai

r :cadet aap kuch kehna chati thi

n :vo sir actually....mai vo apko......vo....thanks sir apne mere liye aur bhai ke liye jo

kuch bhi kiya....

r :vaise dekha jai to mujhe aap logoko thanks kehna chaheye...tum logone mere carreer

mera khoya hua samman, meri zindagi mujhe lotadi..

n :nahi sir mai janti hoon aaj aapki ye lalat mere vajehse hue hai...maine aap par

bharosa nahi kiya saari galti mere hai (she was crying)

r :nahi naina tumlogo ko mere vajah se detention center jana pada wahan tumhri

halat jante hue bhi mai waha nahi aa paya sorr...(naina puts her finger on his lips )
...

n : sir aap abhi puri tarahse theak nahi hai aur doctorne aapo jyada baat karnese

mana kiya hai rt...

r :ye tumhe kisne bataya

n :bhaya ne aapki bekhbhalki zimmedari mujhe di hai.

r :oh

n :ye legiye tablets..

r :tum rakhdo me lelunga..

n :aapko mere samne lena hoga..

r :maine kahana me leluga...

naina is still standing there wuth tablets in one hand and water in other..

r :to tum nahi mano gi..

he takes the tablet

n :to mai aub chalti hoon good night sir..

r :good night nainaaaaaa

naina gives him a braod smile as he called her naina... and leaves from there
end of part 6
............................................................ ............................................................ ...
hey friends so kaisa laga aapko aaj ka update
eagerly waiting for ur comment
love
ashu

The following 2 member(s) liked the above post:

rajveernainalovMilleegarg

sweta2005 IF-Sizzlerz
sweta2005
sweta2005

Joined: 13 November 2005
Posts: 18908

Posted: 10 May 2008 at 3:46am | IP Logged
awesome too good very nice waiting for next asap.
fanatic 21 Goldie
fanatic 21
fanatic 21

Joined: 12 June 2007
Posts: 1856

Posted: 10 May 2008 at 3:47am | IP Logged
both d parts wer fabulous.....loved rn n naina n navin convo......also suriji n all d cadets n dos dialouges wer very nice......

Go to top

Related Topics

  Topics Author Replies Views Last Post
~But It Rained~ (AR/KaSh FF)(Updated Pg 19 Part 7)

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 20 21

Author: Wrackspurt   Replies: 164   Views: 23423

Wrackspurt 164 23423 18 July 2011 at 8:32pm by fri42911
MINI AR FF BY HOOK OR CROOK last part...

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 75 76

Author: chahatmalhotra   Replies: 603   Views: 114214

chahatmalhotra 603 114214 16 June 2011 at 4:19am by -Prithi-
-Birthday Calendar- Updated 6/22 -

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 43 44

Author: Dark Love   Replies: 347   Views: 29525

Dark Love 347 29525 04 April 2011 at 4:33am by pluviophile.
If it was meant to be-(Update 2/10/10pg107)

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 107 108

Author: Neha_S   Replies: 860   Views: 100681

Neha_S 860 100681 13 October 2010 at 5:24am by zooni.blue
~ DharkanHoTum(AR FF)Last Part updated Pg61

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 68 69

Author: itstheclimb   Replies: 546   Views: 31701

itstheclimb 546 31701 22 April 2010 at 8:23am by Riddss

Forum Quick Jump

Forum Category / Channels
Forums

Fan Fictions Topic Index

Disclaimer: All Logos and Pictures of various Channels, Shows, Artistes, Media Houses, Companies, Brands etc. belong to their respective owners, and are used to merely visually identify the Channels, Shows, Companies, Brands, etc. to the viewer. Incase of any issue please contact the webmaster.

Popular Channels :
Star Plus | Zee TV | Sony TV | Colors TV | SAB TV | Life OK

Quick Links :
Top 100 TV Celebrities | Top 100 Bollywood Celebs | About Us | Contact Us | Advertise | Forum Index