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Hina’sAddictiveLast Pt21(Barsaat !)pg140 (Page 32)

hinz Viewbie

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Posted: 11 May 2008 at 5:58pm | IP Logged

Part 6 :


Tum mujhse sach me naraaz ho? Anjali asks in a I can't believe it tone

Atul thinks I can't do this to my Anjali and melts right away and lifts his hand to hold hers

Then he thinks of the bhai log's threat and is very sure they must be watching him and has no choice but to be strong and pretend furious

Anjali goes

Atul,idhar dekho!

Meri aankho me dekh kar kaho ki tum mujhse kitna naraaz ho

The gang outside giggle to see Atul in big trouble

Muskaan goes

Kya yaar Anjali, anhko me kya dekhegi uske

Hamara dar dikhaye dega aur kya

Ha ,Pyaar ya gussa to rehne hi de

Says Rahul

Armaan goes

Champ, aaj tuney hamari laaj nahi rakhi to dekh

Mai tujhe chodunga nahi

Riddhima goes Armaan!

Wo pehle se hi itni mushkil me hai,aur tum sab

Rahul goes

Chup chup!

Atul kuch bola

Atul looks into Anjali's anxious and fearful eyes and goes


Ha ,Atul?

Tumhe mere gussa honey se ya tumse naraaz honey se kuch farak padta hai?

Anjali goes


Aisa kyu pooch rahe ho?

Atul ,of course mujhe farak padta hai

Atul looks so helpless and thinks this is the maximum he cud stretch it but also fears the threat

and says with determination of not giving in


Mai gussa hoo tumse Anjali!

Bohot gussa hoo! trying to convince himself more than her

Tumne ek to mera saath na dekey apne papa ka saath diya

Aur tum mujhe manane bhi nahi ayi!

Ulta tumne is baat ko itna lightly le liya !

The quad go in sync

Sahi jaa rahaa hai yaar ye to!

Anjali goes

Lekin Atul, it was just a stupid game

Isliye maine isko itna importance nahi diya

Aur tum to…..

And she looks into his eyes to find her lost love

Tum to mujhse pyaar kartey ho na?

To pyaar me sauda nahi! she says dranatically

Atul looks at her in a weird way with funny music in the background
while Anjali looks down and looks teary

He looks around to check if the gangsters are watching

The four try to hide,before he catches them spying and in the whole chaos

Muskaan falls flat on her face

The others drag her out of the scene to be unnoticed

And then Atul thinks

I do feel bad to see u crying Anjali but

I'm loving this pretend thing already

Anjali tum kya se kya ban gayi! 

Meri tarah filmi baatein  bhi karney lagi ho

Chal Atul isey aur attitude dikha

Aur ab to isey mai aur bhi sataoonga

Armaan back to spying looks at Atul's face and goes

Lagta hai champ ko akhir maza aney hi laga hai is khel ka

Ab usey dominate karney se koi rok nahi sakta!

Good going my friend!

Riddhima hits him and goes

Bas Armaan,lets stop this prank now

Dekho to di kitni udaas hai aur lagta hai ro bhi rahi hai

Rahul interrupts and goes

Arey Riddheema,abhi to asli mazaa ayega

Don't worry,Atul Anjali ko zyada time tak udaas nahi dekh sakta

Bas kuch aur din,phir wohi back to normal

Anjali agey agey and Atul unkey peechey peechey!

Muskaan picks herself up from the floor and  with hair and clothes in a mess goes

Kya hua?

Anjali ne manaya Atul ko?

They shut her up and push her to the back to sort herself out

Atul tries to gather all the courage he can and goes

Anjali,is baar tumhe mujhe manana hoga

Aur ek aur baat,mai itni asani ne nahi maanne wala!

And runs out before he cries his heart out

Anjali sits there sobbing

She thinks how could Atul make a such a hill out of mole

And wonders what made him change his attitude to her

But then also thinks that she needs to get him back in her life as soon as poss

'coz she knows she loves him so much that it hurts to see him annoyed with her

Atul sees the gang waiting outside and pretending to look elsewhere and goes

Maine keh diya Anjali se!

And starts crying like a baby

Armaan goes

Abey champ,yaar tujhe to khush hona chahiye

Muskaan goes

Woi to!

Humne kaha tha na ki Anjali tujh se kitna pyaar karti hai aur tujhe zaroor manayegi!

Atul goes


And reaches out to Rahul's collar and says

Tum log mujhe kaise ghatiya ideas detey ho!

Waha Anjali itna udaaas ho gayi,mere jhootey gussey se

Mujh se uska rona aur nahi dekha jaata yaar,mai jaa raha hoo usko sab sach bataney and turns back to the locker room

Armaan grabs his shirt with the others grabbing some part of him go



Shubhankar sees them pulling Atul and joins in without knowing anything about why they're actually pulling him

Rahul feels Shubh's hand around his waist and goes


All leave Atul and go quiet

Shubh goes

Guys!Carry on

Mujhe laga aap logo ko meri madad ki zaroorart hai isliye maine bhi help kardi

All look shocked and give a How dumb cud u get? look

Shubh then goes ,waise aap log Dr.Atul ko kheech kyu rahe they?

They go wo sir!

Atul ki ek problem hai

Shubh goes to Rahul in his ear

Mujhe batado,mai kisi ko bhi nahi batoonga

Mai shayad aap logo ke koi kaam ajaoo?

Akhir mai and loosens his collar

All go in a sync

Aap senior doctor jo hai!

Shubh looks surprised and goes

Ha,aap log ko kaise pata chala mai ye kehney wala tha?

All give him a Oh plzzzzz look

And Rahul goes


Aap chaliye mere sath,mai aapko batata hoo kya kissa hai Atul ka !

And takes him away

Armaan goes to Atul

Chal ,ab ye rona dhona chod aur yaha se nikalley!

Atul goes nahi!

Mai kahi nahi jaoonga!

Mai Anjali ko sach bata ke hi rahoonga!

Armaan goes

Dekh champ!

Tujhe bike chalani seekhni hai ki nahi?

Atul forgets everything momentarily and goes excitedly

Ha yaar!

Aur aaj to Rahul mujhe mera pehla lesson bhi deney wala hai

Tu to pata nahi kaha busy hai aaj kal

Muskaan and Riddhima smile at that

And Armaan goes

Rahul bhi thik thaak bike chala hi leta yaar champ

Aaj mai aur Rahul dono tujhe bike chalani sikhayengey

Phir tu ekdam perfect champ ban jayega!

Atul now completely forgets about Anjali crying and dreams of himself riding a bike with Anjali behind,holding him tight

He gets all bikerous!

Armaan goes

Chal ,ab tu ja Keerti ma'm nurse station par tera wait kar rahi hogi

Atul still dreamy and not knowing that he just got played leaves from there

Armaan ,Muskaan and Riddhima go the locker room to complete their job

Anjali sits there with moist eyes,thinking of how to make it upto Atul

Riddhima runs to her and goes

Di!Aap ro kyu rahi hai?

Atul ne kuch kaha?

Muskaan goes

Ha,yaar lagta hai wo nahi mana

Armaan goes

Forget it Anjie,tum itna kyu upset ho rahi ho,itni choti si baat pe

Arey wo champ hai ,wo champ jo tumhare gusse se darta hai

Wo kya gussa hoga tumse ?

Dekhna abhi thodi der me ajayega,tumse baat karne

Rahul joins back the troop and says his part


Atul ko tumne kya kaha?

Wo bohot gusse me lag raha tha,abhi maine usey corridor me kisi nurse pe bhadaktey hue dekha!

Anjali goes Kya?

Atul ne nurse ko bhi gussa dikhaya?

All go

Matlab,tumne usey manaya nahi?

Anjali goes


I need your help

Atul is baar sach me bohot naraaz hai mujhse

Mujhe to dar hai uska ye gussa kahi uski sweet si image na kharaab karde Sanjeevani me

I'm telling u guys

He's not behaving like himself

Ajeeb si gussa honey ki shakal bana raha tha

Aur usne ye bhi kaha ke…..

They go kya?

As if they have no clue

Anjali goes

Usne mujhse kaha ki wo tab tak naraaz rahega jab tak mai usey nahi manati

They all go in a monotonous tone with  innocent faces


Hey all
I hope u liked this super loooooooooong part
I just cudn't stop typing lol!
I will get in some AR scenes in the next update
I know u must be missing them
But I just wanted to give AA all the attention they require
With a hint of RM ,KS and NL and parts of AR too to keep u going
Anyways,hope the epi makes us happy tomorrow,and I'm sure it will

See u all soon
Plz comment and give me your views on this part
And lemme know who u want more of now
Take care
Love you all

Edited by hinanaziri - 12 May 2008 at 3:05am

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hinz Viewbie

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Posted: 11 May 2008 at 6:06pm | IP Logged

Sorry I cudn't reply to all who've commented
So just wanted to say a big thank you to all for replying and I will soon reply individually when I get the time
Good night and sweet dreams

Edited by hinanaziri - 11 May 2008 at 6:07pm
addicted2ksg IF-Dazzler

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Posts: 2564

Posted: 11 May 2008 at 8:24pm | IP Logged
oh my gosh hina di!!!! that was such a loooong part!!! but i luvd every bit of it!! it was awesome!!
meow23 IF-Rockerz

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Posts: 7825

Posted: 11 May 2008 at 9:30pm | IP Logged
really likd d part 222222222222222222222222 gudddddddddddd.@ least d fake anger wrkd now.heheheheh
contd sonnnnnnnnnn
Jodubai Goldie

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Posts: 1936

Posted: 11 May 2008 at 10:32pm | IP Logged
Hello Hina di, wonderful part....I know it was a long part, but I was so engrossed in reading, that I thought, arrey such a short update...sorry...totally agree with you, AA should get complete justice....however will be waiting for AR scenes, also put in some RM as well please...thanks....take care....
nidha1983 IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 1:22am | IP Logged
reallya nice one please update it soon
123abc123 IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 1:25am | IP Logged
ok jus catched up wiv ur like last 3 parts
n wot cn i say luvin it
really nce scenes betweeen al of dem
its great im luvin it as usual
updte sooon
moda.vintage Goldie

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Posted: 12 May 2008 at 1:49am | IP Logged
wow hina di that was hilarious

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