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Laaga Chunri Mein Daag(AR) NOTE-PG 150 19 (Page 9)

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Posted: 08 May 2008 at 7:20am | IP Logged

Originally posted by dmg123

hey
i just couldnt resist...i had to read ur ff
i also read bhool bhuliya n thought that i should read this
it is great!!
love the way u write
i love the way u talk about the relationships between ppl
its so good
...i wonder who is knocking?
is it ridhimma?
i hope so!!
well i hope u update soon
cant wait!!
n again awesome job

thanksssssss alot for your compliment.........i'm glad u liked it............Smile & its not riddhima........



Edited by pinky_5 - 08 May 2008 at 7:21am
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Posted: 08 May 2008 at 7:22am | IP Logged

Originally posted by heyy_babyy

Your FF is very interesting...Plz continue soon!!!

thankssssss.......i'll post the next part tomorrow............Smile

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Posted: 08 May 2008 at 7:25am | IP Logged

Originally posted by desi_angel101

Hey Pinky! I really wanna applaud u for picking such a bold n different
concept i'm really impressed! Its only been one part n i'm already completely
hooked. The best part about the whole thing was ridz dreaming about her
prince charming and not letting anyone touch her until he came for her...
when she said ke even if woh mujhse sirf ek raat ke liye pyar kare i was like
awww poor girl... hmm i'm wondering if that's hinting towards something
coming up in the story? Cuz that wud b pretty interesting! N when she kept
talking about her armaan n everything that was a really good part as well.
Do continue really soon i can't wait!

thanksssssssss for your lovely comment........i'm glad u liked it..........i'll update tomorrow.......Smile

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Posted: 08 May 2008 at 7:41am | IP Logged
Hey Pinky
Congrats on ur new FF
Excellent concept sooo plz cont. sooooooon Wink
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Posted: 09 May 2008 at 5:58am | IP Logged

Originally posted by gidha

Hey Pinky
Congrats on ur new FF
Excellent concept sooo plz cont. sooooooon Wink

thankssss for your comment.............Smile

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Posted: 09 May 2008 at 5:59am | IP Logged
RECAP:
           Ridz dreams are introduced.Mallik family attended the sangeet ceremony of AA's marriage.Someone knocks at armaan's door late at night & he opens it frustrated.
PART-2:
           Armaan opens his rooms door.Atul enters his room quite nervous.
Ar: atul,tu itni raat ko mere kamre mein kyu aaya?????
At: armaan mujhe neend nahi aa rahi.....
Armaan looks at the time.Its 2 am.
Ar: raat ke do baje tujhe neend nahi aa rahi??????mujhe lagaa tha sangeet mein itna naachne ke baad tu ghar aakar turant so gaya hoga......
At: nahi armaan.......woh.......actually mujhe bahut darr lag raha hai......
Ar: darr!!!kis baat ka??????
At: woh kal meri shaadi hai na........kal anjie hamesha ke liye angel bankar meri life mein aa jayegi.....agar koi gadbad ho gayi toh........
Ar: kaisi gadbad?????
At: agar woh mujhse naraaz ho gayi......ya phir agar usne mujhe chod diya........ya phir usne mere plants ko phek diya to mein kya karunga??????
Ar: relax champ......anjie aisa kuch nahi karegi......hum sab ek doosre ko internship ke dino se jaante hai.......tum log 2 saal se saath ho.....woh tumhe bahut achche se pehchaanti hai.....
At: par agar koi gadbad ho gayi toh......main toh rahul bhaiya ke paas jaa raha tha thodi tips lene woh kya haina is maamle mein unhe bahut experience hai par main muskaan bhabhi ko disturb nahi karna chahta tha isliye tere paas aa gaya.........
Ar: champ......mere bhai.......mere dost.......raat ke do baj gaye hai.....please mujhe maaf kar aur mujhe so ne de.....shaadi teri hai meri nahi........
At: chal aaj raat main bhi tere saath sota hu......
Ar(shocked): sheeeee champ......tu mera bada bhai hoke aisi gandi baat karta hai......tu ek aur raat anjie ka intzaar nahi kar sakta????apne chote bhai ki izzat ka toh khayaal kar.....
At(hitting is head): tu pagal ho gaya hai kya???????mera woh matlab nahi tha......dekh kal se anjie ghar mein aa jayegi toh main apne kamre mein rahuga.toh maine socha aaj aakhri raat kyu na tere kamre main so jaaoo.Hum dono ko company mil jaayegi.......aur tujhse thodi baat bhi karlunga......you know kal se mera saara time sirf anjie ka........
Ar: please tujhe yahan so na hai toh so par main koi baat nahi karna chahta.....mujhe bahut zyaada neend aa rahi hai....
At: theek hai chal so jaate hai......par mujhe sirf ek sawaal ka jawaab de......
Ar: kya????
At: tu shaadi kyu nahi karna chahta????
Ar: achchaa toh mom ne tujhe yahan bheja hai......kyu raat ke 2 baje tu mujhe pakka raha hai????
At: main tera bada bhai hu na????to tu mujhe nahi bataayega??kya tu kissi se pyaar karta hai????
Ar: nahi champ aisi koi baat nahi......main shaadi tab tak nahi karooga jab tak sahi ladki nahi milti.......
At: sahi ladki????
Ar: haan jo mujhse pyaar kare aur jisse main pyaar karoo.
At: kaisi ladki chahiye tujhe??????
Ar(going in his dreamland): Jo thodi nadaan aur thodi shaitaan ho.
Jo thodi khatee aur thodi meethi baatein kare.
Jiske paas bhale paise na ho par itna pyaar ho jiska koi mol nahi.
Mini skirt wali nahi par itne kapde pehne ki is ghar ki izzat ko apne aanchal main dhank sakein.
Aisa rang ho uska ki baaki sab uske rang mein bas bhang jaaye.
Thodi sharmili aankhein aur lal-gulabi honth ho uske.
Aur sabse zaroori jo is ghar ko ek bandhan main baandh sakein.Mujhe ghar jodnewali chahiye,ghar todnewaali nahi.
Atul was trying to imagine this girl.
At: arrey aisi ladki mujhe mil jaaye toh main anjie se shaadi hi na karu.
Armaan started laughing at this.
Ar: champ agar anjie ne yeh baat sun li toh teri shaadi hone se pehle hi toot jaayegi.
At: nahi main toh bas aise hi bol raha tha.Anjie bhi bahut achchi hai aur hum dono ek doosre se pyaar karte hai.Aur waise bhi aaj ke zamaane main aisi ladki ho hi nahi sakti.Aur agar ho bhi toh tujh aise ullu ke patthe ko nahi mil sakti.
Ar: mujhe yakeen hai ki woh kahi toh hai.Usse dekhte hi dil mein se ek awaaz aayegi ki 'bas!!yahi toh hai woh'.Kahi na kahi,kabhi na kabhi hum kahi toh milenge.
At the same time Ridz is dancing in the club in her usual jolly mood but she feels something strange within her as if god has just put a new soul in her body for someone special.
NEXT MORNING:
Wedding preparations are going on in full swing in the mallik & gupta house.The wedding ceremony will take place at night 9 pm.According to the pandit that mahurat is very shubh.He tells this mahurat comes only once in 100 years & people are very lucky to marry in this mahurat.Just putting mangalsutra or sindoor identifies the couple as husband-wife & such couples are very lucky.
Everyone is sleepin at riddhimas house except her.Although last night's dance was very tiring there were 2 reasons due to which she couldnt sleep.One reason was her so-called birthday or rather in other words the day when before 18 years shehnaaz bi had bought her to this place which she now believes her home & second reason the strange feeling that entered her body last night due to some divine powers.This strange feeling still rested in her body & she doesnt know what it means.The only thing about this feeling which she could make out is that at that time someone called her,someone to whom she belongs,someone waiting for her.On her birthday she always keeps thinking about what would've happened if shenaaz bi wouldnt have taken her?????would she die???the 2nd question in her mind would be why did her parents just leave her like this.Was it her mother or father who left her like this.She always searched for answers which she knew she would never get.Just then shehnaaz bi enters.
Bi: riddhi beta.....
R(coming out of thoughts): jee bi...
Bi: Happy Birthday......
R(hugging): thanksssss bi.......meri gift???
Bi(smiling): aaj main apne taraf se tujhe kuch nahi doongi......
R(confused): matlab????
Bi hands her a chain with some antic locket.The locket seemed to be years old but the chain was new gold chain.
Bi: yeh locket tumari amanat hai aur aaj tujhe main yeh lauta rahi hu.
R: kya matlab????
Bi: jab 18 saal pehle maine tujhe raste mein paaya tha tab yeh locket tere haath main tha.Shayad jo tujhe chod gaya usne yeh locket tere paas rakha hoga.Shayad yeh tere pariwaar main se kissi ka hoga.Maine socha tha jab tu badi ho jaayegi yeh locket ek chain main daalkar tujhe de dungi.Agar tu yahaan se nikalkar apne pariwaar ko dhoondhna chahiye to yeh teri madad karegi.
R: par main yahaan se nahi jaanaa chahti.Nahi dhoondhna chahti us pariwaar ko jo beech raaste mujhe chodkar chala gaya.nahi jaanna chahti main unki majboori jinki majboori ne mujhe itna majboor kar diya ki main apni pehchaan se anjaan rahi.Mere liye aap hi meri maa ho aur yahan ki saari ladkiya meri behen.Bas yahi mera pariwaar hai.
B: phir bhi beta isse apne paas rakhna.Kya pata shayad teri taqdeer badal jaaye.
R: theek hai bi.
She wears the chain.

EVENING TIME:
AT MALLIK HOUSE:
K: oh my god shubhankar.......bahar ka mausam dekha?????lagta hai jaise bahut bada toofaan aane wala hai.....
Shu: haan aur news channel main bhi yahin dikha rahe hain....kuch der main mausam bahut bigad ne waala hai....aur atul ki shaadi bhi toh hai....
K: ek kaam karte hai hum abhi nikaljaate hai.Shashank ka bhi phone aaya tha.Usne kaha bahar mausam bigadne se pehle hum hall pahunch jaaye.Thoda time udhar baithenge aur mahurat ke nikalte hi hum shaadi karwaa denge.Unhone kaha hai jis hall main shaadi ho rahi hai uske paas ka poora hotel unhone pehle se book kar rakha hai.Unhone socha ki shaadi raat ko ho rahi hai toh ho sakta hai sabko waapas ghar pahunchte kaafi raat ho jaaye isliye saare guest ke liye kamre book karliye hai taaki woh raat ko udhar hi rook sakein aur subah chale jaaye;aur atul-anjie ke liye ek honeymoon suit ka kamra bhi decorate karwaaya hai.
Shu: yeh achchaa kiya unhone.......kisse pata tha mausam itna bigadne waala hai.Iska matlab humme bas jaldi se wahaan pahunch na hai phir mausam ki fikar nahi....raat ko waapas nahi aana......Main bachchoon ko keh deta hu nikalne ki tayaari karein.

AT THE WEDDING HALL:
Shashank is eagerly waiting for the baraat to come.Anjie is getting ready & was unusually quite throughout the day.She was just blushing as people teased her.Then a girl comes in running & saying 'baraat aa gayi'.Anjie was shocked.
An(speaking for 1st time): itni jaldi?????shaadi toh 9 baje haina???aur abhi toh sirf saat baje hai.aur main abhi tak puri tarah se tayaar bhi nahi hui....
The girl: aapne news channel nahi dekha kya???bahaar mausam bahut kharaab ho raha hai.Bahut tez baarish bhi thodi der mein hone wali hai aur bahut bada toofan aanewala hai isliye ladkewale jaldi aa gaye.Fikar mat kariye shaadi toh 9 baje hi hogi........
An(little depressed): Oh.....
Everyone left the room to recieve the baraat.Atul's eyes were only searching for anjie.Armaan noticed this & was laughing.He wanted to do something for him.Then he got the idea.He whispered in atul's ears & atul smiled.
At: thanks armaan tu mera sachchaa bhai hai.......
Ar(confused): to kya ab tak sautela tha?????
At(laughing): nahi par mujhe koi aur line mil nahi rahi thi......
Armaan laughs & they both get up.They try to sneak in anjies room.Everyone on the way kept asking them where were they going & they kept replying'bathroom'.Atul finally found anjies room.Armaan waited out as guard while atul went to anjie.
An(shocked): atul tum yahaan kya kar rahe ho?????kissi ne dekh liya toh.....
At: dont worry mujhe kissi ne nahi dekha aur main bas ek baar tumhe dekhna chahta tha.....par tum itni udaas kyu ho????
An(hugging): mujhe darr lag raha hai.....
At: kis baat ka?????
An: mujhe abhi pata chala ki bahar toofan aanewala hai....
At: toh????main toh pahunch gaya.....
An: haan par aise toofan main humari shaadi ho rahi hai.....kya yeh sahi baat hai????
At: tum jaanti ho aaj ka mahurat kitna shubh hai......isse achchaa samay shaadi ke liye humme kabhi nahi milta....Aur phir tum yeh socho ki humari shaadi is toofaan ke saamne hogi.Hum itne bade toofaan ka saamna saath karenge is bandhan ke liye.Hum keh sakenge ki humare pyaar ne bhi kissi toofaan ka saamna kiya.....
An(smiling): thanks atul......main bahut lucky hu ki meri shaadi tumse ho rahi hai.....
At: main bhi.....
Armaan comes in.
Ar: sorry to interupt you par mujhe abhi sanjeevani jaana hai.....
At & An: kya????
PRECAP: AR meet for the first time & fall in love.
Okay this is 2nd part I know its not interesting but next part will definately be interesting because AR will meet & their love story will begin.Plzzzzzzzz leave comments for this part........Criticism is also accepted but plzzzzzz do comment.......


Edited by pinky_5 - 09 May 2008 at 6:03am

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hey great part!!!!
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do continue soon..!
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