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Posted: 27 March 2008 at 2:17pm | IP Logged
hey sorry for the delay.. but am going to post the 2nd part in a while..

Thx for the positive replies... it really encouraged me to go on.. hope u like the 2nd part.

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Armaan falls onto his knees… cryin. Holds his head in his hands then slowly looks up.. his face is covered in blood.
A: Riddhima….. Riddhima…
    Yeh kya ho raha hain, Riddhima? Kyon ho raha hain? Yeh hum kahan aa
    gaye. Ab yeh dard nahi saha jata….


Tears are rolling down frm his eyes continuously. His eyes suddenly fall on the kadaa. He picks it up. He remembers the time he gave it to Ridz. Remembers the pledge he took. He starts to cry uncontrollably…

His hand is now bleedin even worse, but he doesn't notice the pain or the bld. The pain in his heart is too extreme to notice anything else.

Next Scene
Riddhima runs down sanjeevni's corridor. She goes to the fire exit stairs.. drops onto her knees at the landing. Tears are running down her face.
She slowly touches the wrist where the kadaa was. She remembers the time when Armaan gave it to her. Starts to cry uncontrollably…
R: Kyun Armaan?? Kyun?I hate u armaan… I hate u…


Next Scene
Anji: Sis Lovely aapne Armaan ko dekha hain?
Sis Lovely: Nahi Dr Anjali. Lekin Dr Rahul ko dekha hain chalega..
Anji rolls her eyes: pata nahi yeh Armaan bhi kahan chala jata hain.

In locker room—
Muskaan & Rahool arguing as usual.
Anji enters: You guys..stop it now. Kya hamesha ladten rehten hon.
Rahool: Main kahan ladta hun.. yeh hi hamesha bak bak karti rehti hain.
Muski: Main…Main.. bak bak karti hun. Tu… Tu na…
Rahool: Kya.. hunnn main kya???
Muski: Tuchup ho ja warna…
Anji: hey hey hey.. stop it u guys (comes in between them)
        Accha tum logon ne Armaan ko kahi dekha kya.
Rahool: nahi (muskaan shying)
Anji: Main kabse usse doondth rahi hun. Pata nahi kahan hain.
Ridz walks in slwly .. in her thoughts.
Anji: Ridzzy… Ridzzy.. RIDZZY..
R comes out of her thoughts: haan Di?
Anji: are u ok?
R: haan di.. kya baat hain?
Anji: tumne armaan ko dekha .. starts to say something but Ridz is remembering the terrace scene.
Anji: Ridzzy.. whts wrong with u? aur yeh tumhare haath ko kya hua?
R: Kuch nahi choti se chot lag gayin. Nahi maine Armaan ko nahi dekha.
Walks to her locker
Anji: God ab mein kys karun.. mujhe Armaan ki help chahiye then mere naye patient ko leker. Usne similar care pehle handle kiya hain.

R opens her locker… she cannt find Armaan's letter written in bld. Starts to search frantically… then she remembers it had dropped frm her hand. Searches under the benches cant find it.
R to all: tum mein se kisi ne koi paper dekha yahan pe gira hua.
Muski: haan yahan ek paper ton tha.. mujhe lage phaltu ka hain ton dustbin
             Mein dal diya.

R goes to the dustbin in the corner… starts to look like crazy. All staring at Ridz
Anji: Ridzzy tum yeh kya kar rahi hon..
R: woh letter..
Muski: important tha kya… oh god sorry riddhima..
R finds it in bin its all crumbled… opens it.
Anji: Kya hain yeh..
R: kuch nahi bas kuch patient notes… goes to her locker quickly..
All get paged & leave except Ridz.
Ridz takes the letter to the changing room.. opens it.. slowly toches it with her hand.. hugs it to her chest.. leans on the wall behind her.. slowly slides down to the floor.. tears are runnin down her face..

Next Part..
Armaan walkin down Sanjeevni's corrider.. hand bleedin… everyone starin at him

Plz comments... they are really appreciated.. both appreciation and criticisim welcomed.. thnk u



Edited by kesha2412 - 27 March 2008 at 3:17pm

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Posted: 27 March 2008 at 3:34pm | IP Logged
wonder whats going to happen next.......update soon Big smile Clap Clap

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Posted: 27 March 2008 at 3:39pm | IP Logged
Update soon. Nice part.

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Posted: 27 March 2008 at 5:29pm | IP Logged

PART 3

 

Armaan walkin down the corridor… hand still bleedin..

All the ward boys, nurses and patients r starin at him.. but he doesn't notice. ..

He crosses Sis Padma..

Sis P: Armaan kaise ho tum?

Armaan keeps walkin

Sis P suddenly notices Armaan's bleedin hand.

Sis P: Armaan.. Armaaan..

A comes out of his thoughts: oh.. Sister Padma.. kasi hain aap?

Sis P: Armaan tumhare haath se kitna khoon beh raha hain. kya hua? dikhao mujhe main dressin kar deti hun.

 A suddenly looks at his hand and for the first time realises tht heis bleedin

Sis P: Armaan bleedin ko rokna hoga. lagta hain stitches lene padenge

Sis P (at reception): Sis Lovely Dr Keerti ko page kariye .. jaldi

Sis L: Haan (notices A's hand) Dr Armaan.. yeh kya hua? Are bhagwaan kitna khoon beh raha hain.

A slowly gettin disoriented.. He is lossin bld quickly..

Sis P to sis L: jaldi page kariye

Anji comes there: Armaan.. God yeh kya hua?

Armaan loosin conciousness slowly.. startin to sway.

Sis P: pata nahi lekin khoon rokna bahut zaroori hain.

Anji: haan.. Armaan..

Aarmaan loses conciousness n is abt to fall when 2 ward boys grab him. Stretcher is called. Armaan taken to casulty.

 

NEXT PART

Armaan gets critical....

 

Sorry its a short update.. got to go now.. will update tom. hope u like it till now.

 



Edited by kesha2412 - 27 March 2008 at 6:00pm

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Posted: 28 March 2008 at 1:46am | IP Logged
wooow......tht was great........atleast now shell realize tht she was wrong..plz continue soon.
luv ur ff
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Posted: 28 March 2008 at 2:49am | IP Logged
awesum..i hope sumthng lyk thz happened in dmg..even armaan gettng critical is b8r den ar fightng...do cont..do pm me wen th next part is updated.... Smile

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Posted: 28 March 2008 at 6:05am | IP Logged
wow yaar i vh jst read ur prts it ws awesom yaar now armaan yaar main aise nahi dekh sakti why ridz doi ths yaar nd armaan gt critical nooooooooooooo plz cont soooooooooon
waitng fr ur prt
luv yachna

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