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Posted: 21 August 2007 at 11:05pm | IP Logged

hey guys im going to make a fanfic on Afreen,Kabir and Azaan soo hope you guys like it... and if you do tell me Tongue thanks in advance hehe p.s. it'll be in urdu and englishSmile

Starts off..... Afreen and Kabir's wedding night.... Afreen" Kabir humain chor ka kabhi nah jahna, hum app ka begaar nahi rahsakthay" Kabir" Afreen app humari zindagi main hamesha ho aur humain kuch nahi hoga Allah pay bahrowsa rakoo"  Afreen" Kabir app theek kah raha ho, App is chand ko dekh raha ho??? aaj chand humaain kuch kahna chahatha hain!!Kabir" Is chand meri chand sai kya kahna chay raha hai?Afreen" yeh kahna chahatha hai ka hum kabhi ek dosray sai alaag kabhi na ho, aur yeh humari duwaa hain" next morning Kabir, Afreen, Muzzar and evryone eating breakfast phoopi with her big mouth had to be rude..Phoopi" Afreen beta kya huwa hai? aisay kahna ko kyun dekh rahi ho? achcha ab hum samaj gaya ka app na kabhi zindagi main aisa lazeez kahna dekha nahi hoga aur kabhi kaaya nahi hoga hain na?Muzzar" Phoopi app subha subha aisi baat kar rahi ho app ko suit nahi kartha app tu itni meethi ho aur aaj itni karwi baathay kyun kar raha ho??  phoopi gets mad and leaves...everyone starts laughing and enjoying their breakfast... Kabir very smartly tells Afreen to set next to him and eat and she does shyly... kabir tries holding afeens hand but she shyly gives him her dupatta and he holds it and realizes it's her dupatta and gets upset and leaves...Afreen" Kabir suno suno na Kabir... Sorry humain aisa nahi karna chaiya.."she sweetly smiles Kabir" aisay nahi maanoga mujhe kuch aur chaiya" he smiles and tries giving afreen a hug when Azaan enters Azzan" Opps sorry Kabir Bhai maina app dono ko disturb kardiya" kabir tells Azaan its okay and ask whats the matter Azaan..Azaan" Kabhir Bhai aaj ek cricket ke match hain tu maina socha ka app humaira saath dekho gay?" Kabir" Main aur cricket ke match miss karoo yeh kabhi hosaktha hain Azaan??? Chalo chalthay hai... Afreen app ko koi atriaaz tu nahi hai??Afreen" Balah humain kyun atriaaz hoga kabir app Azaan ka saath jao aur bahot mazaa karna....." A smiling afreen leaves the room when her cell phone starts to ring she answers it Afreen" Salaam? Jii App Koun? Kis sai Baat Karni hai app ko? ji main he afreen hoon!! Jiii!!!!! ..... KABIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Yah Allah main Kabir ko kaisa bachoon??? Then she thinks of calling his cell but no answer she then thinks of calling Azaan, Azaan hears his cell ringing so he looks at it and see's that its Afreen Azaan" Yeh Afreen bhi na kabir bahi koi humara saath waqt bethanaya nahi daygi"  he switchs his phone off.... Afreen is worried to why Azaan did that so she thinks " Yah Allah humain koi rastha dekao... Main Muzzar ko phone lagathi hoo"Muzzar" Salam Afreen bhabhi kya huwa hain app kabhir Bhai ko miss kar rahi hoo???Muzzar starts to laugh and afreen is like about to cry she finaly cuts in Afreen" Muzzar app log ghar ajao aur yahi pay cricket dekh layna... Muzzar Kabir ke jaan ko kathrah hai" Muzzar" Bhabhi yeh app kya kah rahi ho???? mujhe kuch samaj nahi ah raha hain?  Afreen tells Muzzar about the caller and Muzzar gets worried... He goes to find where Azaan and Kabir are.. Epi ends

hope you like it



Edited by brownpride - 21 August 2007 at 11:30pm

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ThE_kHan07

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Posted: 21 August 2007 at 11:18pm | IP Logged
too little to read yaar!
make it a lil bigger? Smile

lramanujam

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Posted: 22 August 2007 at 7:51am | IP Logged
Nice story.Yeah make the font a little bigger .Also light colours are tough to read.Please continue soon.

Edited by lramanujam - 22 August 2007 at 7:51am

goldie_ever

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Posted: 22 August 2007 at 11:09am | IP Logged
really enjoyed read it
pls cont soon Smile

brownpride

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Posted: 22 August 2007 at 9:35pm | IP Logged

Thanks everyone for showing me much love and here goes..
Recap: Kabir and Afreen have a romantic conversation, Phoopi starts things with Afreen and Azaan wants to take kabir to a cricket match... Afreen gets a call from some guy and we find out Kabir's life is in danger.... Afreen calls up Muzzar...Afreen" Muzzar app log ghar ajao aur yahi pay cricket dekh layna... Muzzar Kabir ke jaan ko kathrah hai" Muzzar" Bhabhi yeh app kya kah rahi ho???? mujhe kuch samaj nahi ah raha hain? Afeen" Muzzar yeh waqt samaj nay ka nahi magaar Kabir ko bachanay ke waqt hain" Muzzar" Bhabhi Kabir Bhai ko kuch nahi hoga yeh ek bhai ka vaada hain aur bhabhi ek deevar ka" Afreen" Allah karay ka Kabir ko kuch na ho yeh humari duwa hai".. Muzzar hangs the phoen up and starts to go and find Kabir and Azaan... He see's Azaan and Kabir and calls out to them but they don't hear him..Kabir"Azaan, Muzzar kahaan hain? who abhi thak ayaa kyun nahi? zaaraa dekh ka anna ka who theek tho hain!!Azaan" Theek hain Kabir bhai main dekh ka athaa hoon app yehi rookyaa" Azaan leaves to look for Muzzar but doesn't get too far when Muzzar reaches them  Azzan" Dekho Kabir bhai jisa app mujhe doond naay kaliya ka rahay thay who yehi agaya.." Azaan starts to laugh and Kabir just gives him this like watever look... Muzaar" Kabir bhai main kuch maang saktha hoon?" Kabir just looks at Muzzar as if he was joking Kabir" Muzzar kya app muzaak tu nahi kar raha hoo? agaar nahi tu phir maangoo maina kabhi app logo ko inkaar kiya jho aaj karooga?"  Muzaar looks at Kabir lovingly and shyly asks  Muzzar" Kabir bhai kya hum ghar paar match nahi dekh sakthaay? agar app ko atriazz na ho tho hum bhabi ko saath main cricket ke match dekhaan.. unko bhi achcha lagay ga?" Kabir looks like as if Muzzar said what was in his heart.. on the side Azaan looks like he was hit in the stomach...  Kabir" Muzzar yeh achanak Afreen kaha sai agayi?magaar app ka kyaal naak hain kyun burkudaar Azaan miyaan?? app ka kya kyaal hain?"  Azaan" Kabir bhai jo app ko munasaab samaajiya whohi hum karangaay..... mujhe lagthaa hain ka Muzzar theek ka raha hain" Azaan slightly smiling to make Kabir happy agrees.. Muzzar thinks to himself that he should call Afreen to let her know... So he tells Kabir and Azaan he'll bring the car Muzzar"  Salaam Afreen bhabhi maina kabir bhai aur Azaan bhai ko ghar anaye kaliya raazei kar liya hain.. Ab Kabir bhai ke jaan ko kuch nahi hoga Allah paay barowsa rakoo hum ghar poonch ke baat karagaa Khudha Hafiz" Afreen" Walikum AsSalaam Muzzar shookur hain ka app loog ghar anaye kaliya raazei hogaay ab Kabir ko kuch nahi ho saktha... Theek hain hum intezaare kar rahaan hain app loogon ke anaay ka... Allah Hafiz" " Ya Allah app naa humari duwa sunli ka Kabir ko kuch na ho... Ameen Sumameen" Azaan, Kabir and Muzzar come home and phoopi is at the door Phoopi" App log itni jaldi wapaas aygaay ho? kyun cricket ke match achi nahi thi kya?? ka hum itni buri tareeka sai haar raha thay? Muzzar" Phoopijaan app bhi na kama kaa baat ko kahaa sai kahaa laykaar jathi hoo... Aisi koi baat nahi hum na sucha ka Kabir bhai ke nahei nahei shaadi huwi hain tu Afreen bhabhi ko bhi saath cricket ke match dekhayaah"  a smiling Muzzar just leaves a fuming Phoopi who looks like she's ready to kill Muzzar Kabir" Phoopijaan Muzzar ke baat ko buraa maat manaa who abhi bachaa hain aur waisi koi baat nahi thi"  Kaabir and Azaan leave and Phoopi is left alone by the door Phoopi" Uss Afreen ka kuch karna paragaay warna yeh bachaay haath sai niqal jayaanga"  Kabir goes to his bedroom and sees a pretty Afreen right by the window... Kabir" Aaj waqt ko thum jaane do aaj chand ko hum main  kareeb sai dekh na do... Afreen aaj app kuch zayaada kubsoorat laag rahi ho...." Afreen" App bhi na.. baat kahaa sai kahaa lay jatha ho... Kabir app vadaa karo ka app hum sai kabhi door nahi jaogay... Ka app ko hum hamesha aise dekha" Kabir" Afreen aaj app ko kya huwa hain aisi baat kyun kar rahi hoo? Magaar mujhe maloom hain ka app humsai kitna pyaar karthaay ho... aur main vadaa kartha hoon ka app sai kabhi door nahi jaongaa..." Kabir and Afeen look into eachothers eyes and the song plays in the backround "  Jhonka huwa ka aaj bhi zulfaan uratha hoga na tera dupataa aaj bhi tere saar saa sarkaa tha hoga naaaaaaah baloon main  tera aaj bhi  phool tu koi sajdaa hoga na..... Kabir moves close to Afreen and kisses her forehead, then cheeks and then slowly slowly towards her lips when Afreen shyly turns away and covers her face as if she were hiding herself from Kabir... taandi hawaayein raato ko tuch ko thakiya dathi hogi na chand ke tandaak kwaboon main tujko lajathy hogi na suraaj ke kirnaa subhaa ke tari needaay urathi hogi na.... kabir  then goes closer to Afreen and holds her tight towards him and kisses her neck and then......(we all know what happens) Mera kyaalo main sanaam kud sai baatein karthi hogi na main dekh tha hoon chup chupke tum ko mehsoos  karthi hoogi naaah jhonka juwa ka aaj bhi zulfaa urtha hoga na.. The next morning Afreen wakes up with a smile and looks at Kabir Afreen" Aaj main hamesha hamesha kaliya app ki hogi Kabir app na humain puri duniyaa day di ek hi jhonke main sub kuch badaal gaya Ya Allah hum main aisa Kabir ke saath Uthaaye rakna aisa ek dun na ho jub who humare saath na ho yeh humeri duwa hain Ameen SuMameen"   Azaan and the rest of the family are waiting for Kabir and Afreen for nashtha ( breakfast) when Muzzar takes up the oppurtunity to make jokes!  Muzzar " Ammi main soch raha hoon ka lagaay haath humari bhi shaadi hojaya kya kyaal hai? everyone starts to laugh Ammi" Muzzar pehle humna Azaan ke shaadi karni hain phir Naz aur phir akaar main app ke"  everyone starts to laugh and have masty at the dinning table..... Finally Afreen and Kabir come down K:A" Salaam Abbu Salaam Ammi"  they sit to eat when everyone is done they decide to discuss some important things when Afreen" Ammi, Abbu kya main appna Ghar ja sakthi hoon unko dekhoon ka who theek hain.. "  The parents agree and epi ends their

sorry if its long and hope the size is better



Edited by brownpride - 22 August 2007 at 11:04pm

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i think that people don't like my fanfic Cry Cry then i won't write anymore Cry

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